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Tere haath.. - 10th July 2006, 01:37 PM

Tere haath muje aane wale kal ki zamee lagte hain,
isi liye umeedon ki lakeeren khinchti rehti hun inpar..!
Mausam k rang badal jate hain jab chhuti hun inheN..!
Aur umeed ki halki baarishon se zehan mai,
khaabo ki khushbueN uthne lagti hain...!

Khaab is zamee par...haqiqat k phuloN k,
khaab apni raahon k apni manziloN k..,
khaab apne paloN k, apne kisso k , silsiloN k..,

Magr fir bhi jab tum puchte ho aksar mujhse,
k esa kya hai mere in haatho mai?
mai itna hi keh pati hun..."kuch nahi"..

Ye lafz kambakht.., har baar mujhe is zamee k daayre se chhote
lagte hain!!


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Hi Komal ji - 10th July 2006, 06:59 PM

HI ............. kesi ho aap

aaj phir aapne apne kelaam se dil chura liye aap ki likhvat ko selaam kerta ke peta nehi keha se aap derd aur mahobatt ko naye lafzo mey ked kar leti ho aaj tak mey ye samj hi nehi paaya ha mager likhe wale ka ehsaas aur aur usne jis masumiyat se likha hai vo jaan leta hu aap ka likha ye kelaam fir ek baar dil ko chu geya haath tho humne bhi taama tha kisi ka per wo dega de geya .................. dil itna kuch sah chuka hai ke ab koi umeed nehi mene kuch galt tho nehi likh diya............ aur likha ho tho jerur betana taki agli baar eshi koi galti na ho


fir bhi kuch kahena chahuga ager aap gujrati padh sako tho

Kahe che nayan malta nayan sharmai jase.........
Dil malta Dil harkhai jase............
Zindgi che tho prem kari Jo Jo............
Mrutyu shu che jivta jivta samjai jase........ { & thats true }


aap ko kesha lega ye padh kar jerur betana ager na padh sako tho kisi se iska matlab puch lena fir betana ok ...........

bye take care of ur self aap uhi likhti rahe yehi duwa karta hu ......

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11th July 2006, 12:11 PM

Hi Komal,

Bahut acha likha hai tumne... its a different sort of mood...and very well written... keep penning down ur thoughts... it makes for wonderful reading...

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hi - 15th July 2006, 02:07 PM

Sumonly ji

bahot bahot shukriya aapka!..har ehsaas k kai rang hote hain....vo hume kab chu jate hain khabar taq nahi lagti...agar in rangon ko shabd kaid kar paaye to kavita jeewan si lagti hai..!

Aapne yuhi kafi kuch keh diya tarif mai, ye bhi ek baat hai k..
nazar se hi hasin nazare hote hain...aur samajh aa jaye vahi ishare hote hain!

ye gujrati lines bahot khub hain aur sach bhi!...padh k kuch aur lines yaad aayi!

muhobatt mai nahi hai farq jine aur marne ka
usi ko dekh k jite hain, jis kaafir se dum nikle!

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hi - 15th July 2006, 02:14 PM

HI rohin....


Thanks so much... .........thoda sa confusing raha hai flow na...par kuch bate achi lagti hai yun hi lik dene mai.

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18th July 2006, 03:47 PM

Tere haath muje aane wale kal ki zamee lagte hain,
isi liye umeedon ki lakeeren khinchti rehti hun inpar..!
Mausam k rang badal jate hain jab chhuti hun inheN..!
Aur umeed ki halki baarishon se zehan mai,
khaabo ki khushbueN uthne lagti hain...!

Khaab is zamee par...haqiqat k phuloN k,
khaab apni raahon k apni manziloN k..,
khaab apne paloN k, apne kisso k , silsiloN k..,

Magr fir bhi jab tum puchte ho aksar mujhse,
k esa kya hai mere in haatho mai?
mai itna hi keh pati hun..."kuch nahi"..

Ye lafz kambakht.., har baar mujhe is zamee k daayre se chhote
lagte hain!!

Nice one......

Komal,

This one is quite different form ur usual style of writing.... Mood bhi alag hai aur expression bhi... but its really nice....ek baar me to samajh nahi aaya but dhyaan se padha to bahut accha laga....


Magr fir bhi jab tum puchte ho aksar mujhse,
k esa kya hai mere in haatho mai?
mai itna hi keh pati hun..."kuch nahi"..


yeh expression mujhe jaane kyun bahut hi accha laga... really liked this

Sooo... doo keep writing like this....humaari daad to aapke sath hi hai....take care


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19th July 2006, 11:16 AM

Hi Pulkit...

thanks...so much!!

Tumhe jo lines achi lagi...muje bhi vo lines achi lagi...!
Han..thoda alag hai...usual se...shayad is liye k..tried 2 write it as a prose..and just kept it that way..did not add any extra elements.
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