*~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~*

Taish · *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* - 26th June 2006, 07:47 PM

Ek baar fir se bazm ko is nacheez ghayal ka aadaabb.ek baar fir se pesh hun aapki bazm me mehfil sajane ko.bas haataal humse bahut khafa hain.aur zindagi humse naarzz fir v majbur tha kalam chalane ko.so aa gaya ek aur ghayal klaam ke saath.isi umeed me ki aapko pasand aayega.

To pesh hai ek aur GHAYAL kalaam............

[COLOR=red]wafa nahi,hume thodi si bewafaai chahiye,, aapke sung chand lamhon ki tahaai chahiye,, aapki yaadon ke sahare jeete hain hum,, par zinda rehne ko hume judaai chahiye,, tu jo muskura sake jee bhar ke yahaan,, so humari palkon pe hume eulaai chahiye.............

bas thodi si bewafaai chahiye....................

Hume mohabbat,unhe ikraah*hai,
Ye dil bas unki kadam-gaah** hai.

*chiddh **ghoomne ki jagah.

Muzrim hoon main,is khudaai* ka,
Itna ishq karna agar gunaah hai.

*duniya

Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

Ab dhadkan ruke v arsa ho gaya,
Par aaj v dil ko teri chaah hai.

Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai
ghayal

KunaaL · **Re: *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* -** 27th June 2006, 02:25 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by ghayal_shayar

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

Mere Bete

Bohat khoob .. bohat umda likhne lage ho .... is sher ne to bas gazab dha hi diya ... par phir tumhe kehna chahunga .. jo tumhari shayri maiN shuru se dekhne ko mila hai ... ki gazal shuru to bohat theekhe andaaz main hoti hai .. par khatham hote hote imapct ghat-ta jata hai .. yahaN bhi wahi hua .. last ke sher ne zara nirash kiya ... par khushi hui ki tum bohat aage badh chuke ho .. jo apne aap maiN achivement hai ek ..

khuda tumhe tarakki de

aapka apna

Kunal

Taish · 27th June 2006, 07:54 PM

mere bhai,mere guru,mere dost,aur mere sabse azeez,ab kya kahun,aapki daad humare liye kitna maayne rakhti hai bata v nahi sakta main.haan bas ye jaroor kahunga bahut akeli lagti hai zindagi bin tere mere bhai.ahcha laga tujhe dekh kar.umeed hai ki jald hi baat hogi.aur bhai agar sab theek ho jata ,to shayar na ban jata.abhi bas ghayal hun.kosish kar raha hun ki shayar ban jaun,aapki dua se.dekhte hain ki kitne saal lagte hain hume.bas mere bhai yunhi saath rehna mere.aur kuch nahi chahiye hume.

Aman_rahi · 29th June 2006, 06:06 PM

LUCKY BROTHER......

Kalaam kaabil-e-taarif hai..........bahut khoob............aacha laga tumhe yun gehraaion aur lehze mein likhta dekh.............

khush raho.............

akelijaan · 29th June 2006, 07:00 PM

Ab dhadkan ruke v arsa ho gaya,
Par aaj v dil ko teri chaah hai.

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

kya baat hai ghayal ji..wow
bahut acha laga aapko padhkar yeh do sher bahut ache lage.

manoj kureel · **Re: *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* -** 1st July 2006, 10:18 AM

Hume mohabbat,unhe ikraah*hai,
Ye dil bas unki kadam-gaah** hai.

BAHOOT KHOOB..>!!!KYA AAGAZ KIYA HAI..>!!!

Muzrim hoon main,is khudaai* ka,
Itna ishq karna agar gunaah hai.

WAH...!!!

Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

WAQAI...BILKOOL SAHI FARMAYA HAI JANAB AAPNE...

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

WAH....

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

WAQAI..WAH..WAH... HAI...!!
ghayal saheb..is baar to aapne sach mein hi ghayal kar dia....bahooot sundar gazal kahi hai.....meri dil se nikli daad kuboool kijiye....
-MANOJ

Taish · 3rd July 2006, 07:36 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Aman_rahi
LUCKY BROTHER......

Kalaam kaabil-e-taarif hai..........bahut khoob............aacha laga tumhe yun gehraaion aur lehze mein likhta dekh.............

khush raho.............

bhaiya aap!!!!!

sach me ek sukhad anubhav hai ye.aakhir aap mere guru ho likhne me.aapse bahut kuch seekha hai.aur aaj jab aapne sabashi di,to dil baag baag ho gaya.bas bhaiya itna hi kahunga ki kabhi kabhi yunhi hume sudharne aa jaya karo aap.aapki kami bahut khalti hai hume.

Taish · 3rd July 2006, 07:39 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by akelijaan
Ab dhadkan ruke v arsa ho gaya,
Par aaj v dil ko teri chaah hai.

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

kya baat hai ghayal ji..wow
bahut acha laga aapko padhkar yeh do sher bahut ache lage.

bahut khushi hui hume jaan kar ki aapko humara likha pasand aaya.par ek baat kehna chahunga bura mat maaniyega.par akeli mat raha kijiye.jo log akele hote hain duniya se bahut chott khate rehte hain.umeed hai aap samjhengi.

Taish · **Re: Re: *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* -** 3rd July 2006, 07:44 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by manoj kureel
Hume mohabbat,unhe ikraah*hai,
Ye dil bas unki kadam-gaah** hai.

BAHOOT KHOOB..>!!!KYA AAGAZ KIYA HAI..>!!!

Muzrim hoon main,is khudaai* ka,
Itna ishq karna agar gunaah hai.

WAH...!!!

Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

WAQAI...BILKOOL SAHI FARMAYA HAI JANAB AAPNE...

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

WAH....

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

WAQAI..WAH..WAH... HAI...!!
ghayal saheb..is baar to aapne sach mein hi ghayal kar dia....bahooot sundar gazal kahi hai.....meri dil se nikli daad kuboool kijiye....
-MANOJ

manoj bhaiya aapki daad bahut maayne rakhti hai humare liye.bas pehli baar laga ki ab main likhna seekhne laga hun.maafi chahunga ki samay ke karan aapko padh nahi paa raha.par guzarish yahi karunga ki yunhi is nacheez ki mehfilon me kabhi kabhar shirkat kar liye kijiye.

chaahat · **Re: *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* -** 5th July 2006, 01:54 AM

Ghayal ji..

Yahan se guzar rahi thi.. lekin aapki is nazm ko padh bina kuch kahe aaj jaaya nahi gaya.......... shabd hi nahi hain mere paas... aise lagta hai aaine ke saamne aa ke khadi ho gayi hun......

Originally posted by ghayal_shayar

wafa nahi,hume thodi si bewafaai chahiye,, aapke sung chand lamhon ki tahaai chahiye,, aapki yaadon ke sahare jeete hain hum,, par zinda rehne ko hume judaai chahiye,, tu jo muskura sake jee bhar ke yahaan,, so humari palkon pe hume eulaai chahiye.............

Bewafaai To nahi.. hume Thodi wafa hi milli hai..
Haan unke sang chand lamhon ki judaai bhi milli hai..
Hum bhi jeeTe hain unhi ki yaadon ke saaye me..
Aur zinda rehne ko dekho.. judaai bhi milli hai..
Bewafaai To nahi.. hume Thodi wafa hi milli hai..

bas thodi si bewafaai chahiye....................

Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

Ab dhadkan ruke v arsa ho gaya,
Par aaj v dil ko teri chaah hai.

Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

Kaanton aur phoolon ki khushboo se bhari hai..
Haan yehi ishq ki raah hai...

Bewafa naam to duniya ne banaaya..
Ishq ka doosra naam hi wafa hai..

In aankhon ko... tere daras ki aah hai..
Mujhe sirf Tujhe paane ki chaah hai....

Saawan bhi aa ke roz mud jata hai aankhon se..
yeh to ghar sirf aapka hi janaab hai..

Dard bayaan kiya hai ghaayal ne... zindagi keh di chaahat ki...
na waah kahenge.. na taareef karenge..
dil se nikalti bas ek aah hai...

~Priya

Rubeena Parveen · 5th July 2006, 11:40 AM

bahut hi khubsurat aghaz

wafa nahi,hume thodi si bewafaai chahiye,, aapke sung chand lamhon ki tahaai chahiye,, aapki yaadon ke sahare jeete hain hum,, par zinda rehne ko hume judaai chahiye,, tu jo muskura sake jee bhar ke yahaan,, so humari palkon pe hume eulaai chahiye.............

apki rachna sahi main dil ko chu lene wali he itna darad itni tadap apne sabit kar diya ki ap sahi main ek ghayal shayar hain magar kahin na kahin iska credit usko bhi jata he jisne apko ghayal kiya he

toooooooooooo goooooooooood
Hume mohabbat,unhe ikraah*hai,
Ye dil bas unki kadam-gaah** hai.

nice one
Muzrim hoon main,is khudaai* ka,
Itna ishq karna agar gunaah hai.

reality
Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

wahhhhhhhhhhh
Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

ye sher mujhe sabse zyada achha laga bahut hi pyara aur jazbati sher he ye tooooooooooo goooooooooooood
Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

wonderful
Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,

keep writing
take care
bye
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

Taish · **Re: Re: *~*HuMe MoHaBbAt UnHe,IkRaAh HaI*~* -** 5th July 2006, 02:18 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by chaahat123
Ghayal ji..

Yahan se guzar rahi thi.. lekin aapki is nazm ko padh bina kuch kahe aaj jaaya nahi gaya.......... shabd hi nahi hain mere paas... aise lagta hai aaine ke saamne aa ke khadi ho gayi hun......

Originally posted by ghayal_shayar

wafa nahi,hume thodi si bewafaai chahiye,, aapke sung chand lamhon ki tahaai chahiye,, aapki yaadon ke sahare jeete hain hum,, par zinda rehne ko hume judaai chahiye,, tu jo muskura sake jee bhar ke yahaan,, so humari palkon pe hume eulaai chahiye.............

Bewafaai To nahi.. hume Thodi wafa hi milli hai..
Haan unke sang chand lamhon ki judaai bhi milli hai..
Hum bhi jeeTe hain unhi ki yaadon ke saaye me..
Aur zinda rehne ko dekho.. judaai bhi milli hai..
Bewafaai To nahi.. hume Thodi wafa hi milli hai..

bas thodi si bewafaai chahiye....................

Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

Ab dhadkan ruke v arsa ho gaya,
Par aaj v dil ko teri chaah hai.

Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

Kaanton aur phoolon ki khushboo se bhari hai..
Haan yehi ishq ki raah hai...

Bewafa naam to duniya ne banaaya..
Ishq ka doosra naam hi wafa hai..

In aankhon ko... tere daras ki aah hai..
Mujhe sirf Tujhe paane ki chaah hai....

Saawan bhi aa ke roz mud jata hai aankhon se..
yeh to ghar sirf aapka hi janaab hai..

Dard bayaan kiya hai ghaayal ne... zindagi keh di chaahat ki...
na waah kahenge.. na taareef karenge..
dil se nikalti bas ek aah hai...

~Priya

priya ji bahut dino baad aana hua aapka humari mehfil me.aur kya kahen,aapki baaton ne kaafi purani yaadon ko aaj taaza kar diya.bahut kuch bayaan kar diya aapne apni chand panktiyon se.apna haal dil hi saaf kar diya.behad khudhi hui itna ahcha jawaab paa kar hume.khuda se bas yahi guzarish karunga.ki aapko bas thodi si hi nahi balki duniya bhar ki wafa mil jaye.

reena · 5th July 2006, 02:19 PM

Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

very well written. bahut dinon baad kuch aisa padha jisse kisi ki yaad aayee
thanks for refreshing my memories and emotions
reena

Taish · 5th July 2006, 02:22 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rubeena Parveen
bahut hi khubsurat aghaz

wafa nahi,hume thodi si bewafaai chahiye,, aapke sung chand lamhon ki tahaai chahiye,, aapki yaadon ke sahare jeete hain hum,, par zinda rehne ko hume judaai chahiye,, tu jo muskura sake jee bhar ke yahaan,, so humari palkon pe hume eulaai chahiye.............

apki rachna sahi main dil ko chu lene wali he itna darad itni tadap apne sabit kar diya ki ap sahi main ek ghayal shayar hain magar kahin na kahin iska credit usko bhi jata he jisne apko ghayal kiya he

toooooooooooo goooooooooood
Hume mohabbat,unhe ikraah*hai,
Ye dil bas unki kadam-gaah** hai.

nice one
Muzrim hoon main,is khudaai* ka,
Itna ishq karna agar gunaah hai.

reality
Kadam-kadam pe chubhte kaante,
Shayad yahi hoti ishq ki raah hai.

wahhhhhhhhhhh
Mat kaho koi,ki wo bewafa hai,
Se sach nahi,bas ek afwaah hai.

ye sher mujhe sabse zyada achha laga bahut hi pyara aur jazbati sher he ye tooooooooooo goooooooooooood
Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

wonderful
Dard jab apna bayaan karta “ghayal”,

keep writing
take care
bye
Bazm kehti hume,waah!waah!hai

rubeena ji aapne shayad is nacheez ki bahut jyada hi tareef kar di,hum to shayad iske kaabil v nahi.ye to bas aapke dekhne ka nazariya hai jo aapko ye kalaam itni pasand aayi.guzarish bas yahi rahegi ki aage v yunhi humari mehfil ki raunak aap badhati rahiyega.

Taish · 5th July 2006, 02:26 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by reena
Ashkon ka sawan aata naino me,
Jab tu aankhon me leti panaah hai.

very well written. bahut dinon baad kuch aisa padha jisse kisi ki yaad aayee
thanks for refreshing my memories and emotions
reena

shukriya reena ji.ahcha laga aapko padhte dekh kar.umeed hai aap aage v yunhi padhti rahengi hume.