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30th November 2005, 07:58 PM
zyada accha nahi likh pati hoon ........ per koshish karti hoon likhne ki..... plz padiyega or batayiyega kaisa likkha hai.... koi galti ho to batayiyega.... mein sikhna chahti hoon......
jab jab khud ko "TANHA" payaa tera "SAATH" apne paas paya jab jab "DIL" mein umangein jaagi teri "CHAHAT" ko dil mein basaya jab jab ye "BAAHEIN" failaayin tujhe apne "AAGOSH" mein paya jitna "DURR" hua tu mujhse utna tujhe "KAREEB" paya bekhabar tu mujhse "AAJ" bhi hai per... "DIL"l mein teri "CHAHAT" aaj bhi hai teri "CHAHAT" mein is hadd se guzar jaayeinge gar "MAUT" bhi aayegi.. to us se bhi ladd jaayeinge na aaye "YAKEEN" to aazmaa ke dekh lena "HIMMAT" ho to mere "PYAR" ko mita ke dikhana jitne bhi ho "DURR" tujhe "PAAS" nazar aayenge teri "CHAHT" pakar aise "SANVAR" jaayeinge chor "DUNIYA" ko tere "DIL" mein bas jayeinge..... jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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1st December 2005, 11:23 AM
jab jab khud ko "TANHA" payaa
tera "SAATH" apne paas paya jab jab "DIL" mein umangein jaagi teri "CHAHAT" ko dil mein basaya Hmmmmmmmm.....Nice words...! jab jab ye "BAAHEIN" failaayin tujhe apne "AAGOSH" mein paya jitna "DURR" hua tu mujhse utna tujhe "KAREEB" paya Beautifulll...! bekhabar tu mujhse "AAJ" bhi hai per... "DIL"l mein teri "CHAHAT" aaj bhi hai teri "CHAHAT" mein is hadd se guzar jaayeinge gar "MAUT" bhi aayegi.. to us se bhi ladd jaayeinge Nice words...! na aaye "YAKEEN" to aazmaa ke dekh lena "HIMMAT" ho to mere "PYAR" ko mita ke dikhana jitne bhi ho "DURR" tujhe "PAAS" nazar aayenge teri "CHAHT" pakar aise "SANVAR" jaayeinge chor "DUNIYA" ko tere "DIL" mein bas jayeinge..... Nice words....! Dear ShWeta, Bahut hi pyaara likha hai tumne is baar bhi.. padhkar bahut accha laga...Aise hi likhti raho....! Ek baat kahoon...The way u write certain words in Quotes and in Caps... breaks the flow... u cant read it as a poem...they act as speed-breakers...This is what i felt....hope u wont mind it...! Do keep writing... TC....! Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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1st December 2005, 12:10 PM
hmmmmmmmmmmmmm bahut khoob
wo chahat hamesha tum hogi ab to chahna hi reh gaya hai zindagi main na jane yeh chahat kab puri hogi |
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1st December 2005, 02:54 PM
Good One Shweta Dear..........keep posting acha likha hai tumne.......
Meri Zindagi Ko Koi Hunar De Main Tanha Hun Humsafar De Banalun Jise Main ZIndagi APni Ae Khuda MUjhko AIsa Sanam De |
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1st December 2005, 05:59 PM
hey Pulkit,
tumhne isay padaa mujhe pasand aaya, aage si apni is galti ka dhyaan rakhoongi...... or doston ki baaton ko mind nahi karte... aate rehna . u hin padate rehna or galtiyaan sudhaarna... jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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mehul,
thanx for coming here jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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1st December 2005, 06:02 PM
thanx Sandhya...
aati rehna jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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