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$**KIWEN**$..my first poem..
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$**KIWEN**$..my first poem.. - 27th August 2011, 11:37 AM

kiwen hassdi dass main sajjna?
Jado bandshaa de dhaagean ne
see mere bull lae..

Kiwe rondi dass main sajjna?
Jado hanjuan de ghare mere
pehlan hi c dull gae..

Kiwen haan kardi dass main sajjna?
Jado parwarish te khooni rishtean DE
c mull pae,

kiwen naa kardi dass main sajjna ?,
jado dil de darr mere
tere aagaaz lai c khull gae

kiwen kbooldi tera pyar main sajjna?
Jado bandshaa DE hneere ch c bhol mere rull gae..
Kiwen?kiwen?
frndz this my first poem..je koi kami peshi hoi tan jaroor dasyo..

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28th August 2011, 03:01 PM

Lovely poem. Thank you for sharing jio.
   
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16th September 2011, 08:01 PM

nice work. thanks for sharing........................................


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17th September 2011, 11:25 AM

Fantastic effort Ravinder ji.... Wajan hai tuhadi kalam wich... bas likhdey jao


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6th October 2011, 12:53 AM

very good......bahut badia

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Good work raj ... Keep it on.....
   
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19th October 2011, 06:22 PM

Bahut hi shaandaar.... te khaas taur te eh sattar....

Kiwen haan kardi dass main sajjna?
Jado parwarish te khooni rishtean DE
c mull pae,

Es da level poori nazm naloN wakh si.... Agli waar poori nazm hi es level di likhna... Agg hai tuhadi kalam wich wich .. es nu hor bhakhao...


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15th November 2011, 09:13 PM

Good work ji bhut vadiya e
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