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5th July 2008, 03:44 AM
kab is dil meiN tamanna-e-jaawedani thi
humne mager kabhi taqdeer ki na mani thi
(jaawedani = Hameshgi)
Gerdesh-e-mudam se nikle bhi hum bar ha
Baaes-e-tameer hum ne na paii, na pani thi
(Gerdesh-e-mudam = musalsal banwar meiN) , (Bar ha = Bar Bar)
tum se bicher ke kabhi , na hon ge gham zada
baare zeest ke , dil meiN humne yahi thani thi
(Baare Zeest ke = Zindagi ke baare meiN)
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
(Aabro = izzat , shohrat, shan o shokat)
Dast-o-pa ko junbish nahin per chashm meiN tha dum
tassawur hai hayat , wagerna jan hamari jani thi
(Dast-o-pa = Haath Paaon) (juNbish = Herkat)
(Tassawur = Khayal ) (chashm = aankh )
Aapki Raae ka intezaar rahe ga ...
Mujeeb
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5th July 2008, 05:48 AM
Hi Mujeeb
aate hi aapki es ghazal per nazar padhi ...
puri ki puri ghazal to mah shah allah bahut aachi hai
tum se bicher ke kabhi , na hon ge gham zada
baare zeest ke , dil meiN humne yahi thani thi
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
lekin yeh lines bas mann ko chuu c gayii
so keep writing
take care
mandeep
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5th July 2008, 02:43 PM
Jo Tu Chahe Vo Tera Ho,
Roshan Raaten Aur Khubsurat Savera Ho,
Jaari Rakhenge Hum Duaao Ka Silsila,
Kaamyab Har Manzil Par Dost Mera Ho,
Nice One There.......bahut Khoobsurat Ghazal Hai.....
Zainy
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5th July 2008, 04:53 PM
mujeeb BHaa'ii:
asalaam-o-alaikum
aapki Ghazal naZar nawaaz hu'ii.. aur sach maaniYe aik beHteriN koShiSh rahii.. aSh'aar tou dil-fareb raheN... duaa hay aap YuuNhi ees safar meiN aage baRhte raheN... daad hi daad .. !!
YuuNhi bazm ki waunaq afzA'ii karte rahiyeNgaa.. KhUSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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5th July 2008, 10:58 PM
nice sharing
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6th July 2008, 12:07 AM
very nice thanxxxxxx 4r sharing
New friends are like POEMS..
but old friends are like ALPHABETS...
donot forget ur old friends,
because, u always need ALPHABETS to read POEMS..
S@N@ KH@N
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6th July 2008, 11:53 AM
bahut umda likha hai !
tareef Qabool ki jaye!
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6th July 2008, 03:18 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by eyesflicker
kab is dil meiN tamanna-e-jaawedani thi
humne mager kabhi taqdeer ki na mani thi
(jaawedani = Hameshgi)
Gerdesh-e-mudam se nikle bhi hum bar ha
Baaes-e-tameer hum ne na paii, na pani thi
(Gerdesh-e-mudam = musalsal banwar meiN) , (Bar ha = Bar Bar)
tum se bicher ke kabhi , na hon ge gham zada
baare zeest ke , dil meiN humne yahi thani thi
(Baare Zeest ke = Zindagi ke baare meiN)
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
(Aabro = izzat , shohrat, shan o shokat)
Dast-o-pa ko junbish nahin per chashm meiN tha dum
tassawur hai hayat , wagerna jan hamari jani thi
(Dast-o-pa = Haath Paaon) (juNbish = Herkat)
(Tassawur = Khayal ) (chashm = aankh )
Aapki Raae ka intezaar rahe ga ...
Mujeeb
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mujeeb ji achi koshish rahi aapki khaas tor per ye sher bohat acha laga ..........
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
umeed hai jald hi shayri main acha muqaam hasil karenge likhte rahiye
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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6th July 2008, 05:05 PM
bahut khuub mujeeb bhai,bahut acchi lagi apki gazhal,naye ahsaas,bahut khuub kaha likhte rahe.....baagi
ibadat bhi khuda hai,bagavat bhi khuda hai
khuda baagi kahi hai,kahi baagi khuda hai.
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25th July 2008, 01:52 AM
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Originally Posted by mann_chand
Hi Mujeeb
aate hi aapki es ghazal per nazar padhi ...
puri ki puri ghazal to mah shah allah bahut aachi hai
tum se bicher ke kabhi , na hon ge gham zada
baare zeest ke , dil meiN humne yahi thani thi
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
lekin yeh lines bas mann ko chuu c gayii
so keep writing
take care
mandeep
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Thanx Mandeep ,
aapko apni ghazal per dekha to behad khushi howi , younhi saath dete rahiye , meri koshish rahe gi ke kuch na kuch likhta rahoN
Khush raho
duago
Mujeeb
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25th July 2008, 12:14 PM
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
yeh sher bahut khub raha!
Bahut accha likhte ho tum......thodi urdu zara ismein jyada ho gayi mujh jaiso ke liye...............
Baaes-e-tameer ...iska matlab kya haiN....................
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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5th August 2008, 04:43 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Mujeeb
kab is dil meiN tamanna-e-jaawedani thi
humne mager kabhi taqdeer ki na mani thi
(jaawedani = Hameshgi)
Gerdesh-e-mudam se nikle bhi hum bar ha
Baaes-e-tameer hum ne na paii, na pani thi
(Gerdesh-e-mudam = musalsal banwar meiN) , (Bar ha = Bar Bar)
tum se bicher ke kabhi , na hon ge gham zada
baare zeest ke , dil meiN humne yahi thani thi
(Baare Zeest ke = Zindagi ke baare meiN)
Guzarish woh humse ker raha tha , najaaNe kiyon
wafa to woh ker na saka , shayad Aabro nibhani thi
(Aabro = izzat , shohrat, shan o shokat)
Dast-o-pa ko junbish nahin per chashm meiN tha dum
tassawur hai hayat , wagerna jan hamari jani thi
(Dast-o-pa = Haath Paaon) (juNbish = Herkat)
(Tassawur = Khayal ) (chashm = aankh )
Aapki Raae ka intezaar rahe ga ...
Mujeeb
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ufffff....... bahut mashakat karni padi es gazal ko padne ke liye....2-3 baar padkar to aisa laga ki sar ke opper se nikal gaye.....etni mushkil urdu...allah....bhai bahut accha kiya jo aapne saath mein meanings bata diye....warna main roz padti aur preshaan hokar chali jati ki kaya likha hai....etni mushkil urdu samjani mere bas ki baat nahi hai
ab jab gazal samaj mein aa gaye hai to sach mein bahut accha lag raha hai...bahut acche ahsaas haiN....dua hai yoon hi likhte rahiye.....aur haan etni acchi urdu likhne ke liye......REPS ++++
aapki baaji
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