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Raat Bher Rahi .... - 10th June 2008, 01:56 AM
Aslam u alaikum ,

kaisy hain app sab dosto ...ajj phir mehfil ke pesh-e-khdmat apna likha kuch kalam pesh kerna chahta hon , mujhe maloom hai ke mein Soraj ki roshni main ik chota sa diya roshan kerne ki bewaqoofi ker raha hon ... mager phir bhi tasali-e-dil ke liye app azeem shayron ke dermiyan pesh ker raha hon .


muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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10th June 2008, 02:37 AM
bahot khoob......wakay acchi ghazal hai.....



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10th June 2008, 01:03 PM
Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

dil ko behlane ke liye akshar yahin socha jaata hain .....

bahut khoob mujeeb.....

yeh ghazal bhi bahut khoob rahin......yunhi likhte raho..

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10th June 2008, 01:12 PM
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bahot khoob......wakay acchi ghazal hai.....


Aslam u alaikum ,

Mohterma ...


mujh nacheez ki koshish per waqt dene ka behad shukriya mujhe acha laga app ko yahan dekh ker , or us se bhi zyada khushi howi ...keh app ko mera kalam acha laga ...

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Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

dil ko behlane ke liye akshar yahin socha jaata hain .....

bahut khoob mujeeb.....

yeh ghazal bhi bahut khoob rahin......yunhi likhte raho..

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Aslam u alaikum ,


Sahi kaha baji akhir dil ko bhi to behlana hota hai ....Waqt dene ka behad shukriya ... ajj mere to waare nihaare ho gae app ko apni ghazal per jawab dete howe dekh ker ...younhi saath dete rahiye ...


koshish kerta raho ga likhne ki

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10th June 2008, 03:12 PM
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Aslam u alaikum ,

kaisy hain app sab dosto ...ajj phir mehfil ke pesh-e-khdmat apna likha kuch kalam pesh kerna chahta hon , mujhe maloom hai ke mein Soraj ki roshni main ik chota sa diya roshan kerne ki bewaqoofi ker raha hon ... mager phir bhi tasali-e-dil ke liye app azeem shayron ke dermiyan pesh ker raha hon .


muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

waah! waah!

yuu.n hi likhate rahe.n.... ek achchhi koshish par daad qubool keejiye....
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10th June 2008, 05:35 PM
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bahut khoob - 11th June 2008, 12:10 AM
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muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi
waah bahut khoob
le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi
sahi kaha kabhi kabhi intezaar bhi bahut maza deta hai
shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi
is sher ki to baat hi alag hai
alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi
kabhi kabhi har aahat kush ehsaas dilati hai
Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi
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Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi
sahi kaha kisi ko bhul kar bhi nahi bhulaya ja sakta
karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi
khuch ummiden zindegi ke liye bahut zarori hain

Mujeeb sahab aapki gazlo ki ab kya tareef ki jaye Alfaaz kam padh jatey hain aapki tareef ke liye aapka yeh kalaam bahut khubsoorat laga meri daad hazir hai

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subhan allaha - 21st June 2008, 11:06 PM
bahut khubsurat kalam likha hai aapne,

aap hi ke kalam ke beej se nikal ke daad hazir hai

zindagi ne der tak sath diya fir ruuth gayi
tere ane ki raah par nazar mere, umr bhar rahi

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Aslam u alaikum ,

kaisy hain app sab dosto ...ajj phir mehfil ke pesh-e-khdmat apna likha kuch kalam pesh kerna chahta hon , mujhe maloom hai ke mein Soraj ki roshni main ik chota sa diya roshan kerne ki bewaqoofi ker raha hon ... mager phir bhi tasali-e-dil ke liye app azeem shayron ke dermiyan pesh ker raha hon .


muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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aaj hum aapke har kalaam par tawwajjo de rahe hain

yeh kalaam wah kya kahoon main
shayd mere lafz itni taqat nahi rakhte ki aap ke is kalaam
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aaj hum aapke har kalaam par tawwajjo de rahe hain

yeh kalaam wah kya kahoon main
shayd mere lafz itni taqat nahi rakhte ki aap ke is kalaam
ki tareef kar saken
sabhi sher umda hain


Arre tishna sahab , app ka shukriya kese ada kero.n ??? mujh nacheez ke kalam per waqt innayat kerne ka behad shukriya ... mere kalam itni bhi tareef ke hamil nahi the jitni appne tareef ker daali ... behad shukriya is nawazish ka

younhi saath dete rehna ...Khush rahien hamesha

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Aslam u alaikum ,

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muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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mujeeb bhai....wah kaya khoob likha hai aapne....har sher kabiley tareef hai

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

mere dil ki baat aapki kalam se.....

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

tanha raato.n ka hisaab bahut lamba hai bhai...

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

dil bhalane ko gahlib khayal accha hai....


yoon hi likhtey raho aur mahfil ki jaaN bane raho....!


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Mujeeb bhaaii, behad mushil raadeef ko aap ne behad aasani ke saath nibhaaya hai... saadagiii ke saath bayaan huye yeh aap ke yeh ehsaas achchhe lage... sabhi sher achchhe lage... aur khaas kar yeh sher....


Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

waah! waah!

yuu.n hi likhate rahe.n.... ek achchhi koshish par daad qubool keejiye....

moHteram mayanK saheb ,

jab meN ne yeh ghazal likhi thi tab mujhe na to radeef ka pata tha aur na hi Qaafia ka . ab bhi kuch khaas e'lm nahieN hai is baare meN mager ab in baatoN se thoRa sa waaqif zaroor ho gya hoN


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Aslam u alaikum ,

kaisy hain app sab dosto ...ajj phir mehfil ke pesh-e-khdmat apna likha kuch kalam pesh kerna chahta hon , mujhe maloom hai ke mein Soraj ki roshni main ik chota sa diya roshan kerne ki bewaqoofi ker raha hon ... mager phir bhi tasali-e-dil ke liye app azeem shayron ke dermiyan pesh ker raha hon .


muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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daad humaari taraf se bhi hai !

Qabool farmaayeiN !

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Mujeeb Sahib

Purasar Ghazal Pesh Kii AaPne!! Pad kar BahuT accha leGa... Alfaaz Kam hai .. Tareef ke Liye!

Daad Qabool Kare!

ChalTa Hoon.....

AaP Ka DosT
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Dear Mujeeb....aaj aik baar phir tumhari yeh gazal padi...acchalga padna phir se...!


tumhari baaji

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Waaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...... kya baat hai

Is ghazal ki tareef na karun to be-adbi hogee... aur tareef karnaa chahun to alfaazon ke intekhaab me maat khaa jaaunga.... behad asardaar ghazal hai Mujeeb bhai... Meri jaanib se daad ka nazraaana peshe aqeeedat hai.... Likhte raheN.

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Shaad...
   
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Bahut bahut khoob mujeeb sahab.....itni tadap,itni tapish......laga ek pyasi rooh us allah se subah ki dua kar rhi hai.........ek aisa jajba hai apki shayri me.n jise baya.n krna mere liye to namumkin hai.......Khuda ki mehar aap par yunhi bani rahe.....khuda hafiz
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ek behtareen ghazal par ..

daad humaari taraf se bhi hai !

Qabool farmaayeiN !
Hazoor appse bahut kuch seekhna hai , daad ke saath saath rahnumaii ka talabgaar
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Mujeeb Sahib

Purasar Ghazal Pesh Kii AaPne!! Pad kar BahuT accha leGa... Alfaaz Kam hai .. Tareef ke Liye!

Daad Qabool Kare!
bahut bahut shukriyah .

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Dear Mujeeb....aaj aik baar phir tumhari yeh gazal padi...acchalga padna phir se...!


tumhari baaji
Baaji , yeh ghazal to na Thehrii albata ahsaas appko passand aaye haiN shayad , acha laga , aainda bhi koshish karoNga ke kuch aHsaas bhara mager ghazal ki soorat mai pesh karoN
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Waaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...... kya baat hai

Is ghazal ki tareef na karun to be-adbi hogee... aur tareef karnaa chahun to alfaazon ke intekhaab me maat khaa jaaunga.... behad asardaar ghazal hai Mujeeb bhai... Meri jaanib se daad ka nazraaana peshe aqeeedat hai.... Likhte raheN.

Shaad...
Shaad saHb ! teh dil se appki daad ko qabool kiya , youNhi saath banaey rakheiN


Aadaab !

yeh app sabka baRhapan hai ke meri Hosla afzai ki , nahi to yeh ghazal is laiq nahi hai ke tareef ki jaaey kiyoN yeh ghazal hi nahi hai jaisa mai ne mayank saHb ko bataya ke jab is lafzoN ko joR raha tha tab na to mujhy radeef ka pata tha or na hi qaafia ka or jab pata chala to ab kuch likh hi nahi sakta kiyoN ke maiN apne app se jeet nahi paata lafzoN ke intekhaab mai radeef qaafia ko darust karny mai or na jaany kon kon si jang laRni paRti hai . or opper se dosry kaam kaaj keh fursat hi nahi milti , mager ab aik kavish app sab ke saamny bahut jald pesh karoNga .

aik dafa phir app sab ka teh dil se shukriyah. youN hi apna pyar apna saath banaiye rakhiye , or koshish kijiye jahaN ishlaH ho sakti hai ker dijiye takeH mujhy kuch or bhi seekhny ko mily
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Aadaab !

mager ab aik kavish app sab ke saamny bahut jald pesh karoNga .
Zehnaseeb mujeeb sahab....salon guzar gaye aapko padhe....besabri se aapke kalaam ka intezaar hai hum sab ko.....



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Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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waah, - 18th June 2013, 05:29 PM
din bhar yeh ghazal padta raha main
khumari iski dimag par, raat bhar rahi


QUOTE=Mujeeb;292209]Aslam u alaikum ,

kaisy hain app sab dosto ...ajj phir mehfil ke pesh-e-khdmat apna likha kuch kalam pesh kerna chahta hon , mujhe maloom hai ke mein Soraj ki roshni main ik chota sa diya roshan kerne ki bewaqoofi ker raha hon ... mager phir bhi tasali-e-dil ke liye app azeem shayron ke dermiyan pesh ker raha hon .


muntazir tere jawab ki main, raat bher rahi
udaasi ! chai mere angan pe ,raat bher rahi

le ker koi paigham Qasid aata ho ga
dekhti rasta meri nigah , raat bher rahi

shabnam se bheeg raha tha Gulshan
os girti meri ankhon se ,raat bher rahi

alam-e-tanhai mein tha jab sannata
tadpati ik aahat mujhe , raat bher rahi

Halat-e-bebasi mein jab tujko pukara
Goonjti wohi awaz , raat bher rahi

Woh bewafa nahi , bhool gaya ho shayad
Zuban per yehi baat ,raat bher rahi

karke roshni teri raah mein , Rab Kasam
jalati main apna ashyana , raat bher rahi

mujhe app ki raaey ka intazar rahy ga
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nice feelings and thought...keep it up.....


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waah bahaut hi khoob qalaam kaha Mujeeb ji .... ehsaas aur bayaan donon khoobsurat hain ... soz ka ehsaas jo ismein nihaan hai wo bahaut sundar laga
   
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