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1st July 2010, 02:50 PM
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Sab kehtae hain zindagi,zinda dili hai Main hamaesha dard kae barae main likha kerti hoon Kiyoonkae log kehtae hain main paeda hi dard kae liyae hoyee hoon phir aaj main nae soacha sab ki tareh main bhi kuch zindagi kae husn ko niharoan to aaj main nae apni tarz sae aleg kuch likhnae ki koshish ki hai Shayed ae chichora sa bhi lagae magar main apnae dil ki hi batoan ko shayri manti hoon Ghazal Jahan Zindagi hai Wahan,dilkashi hai Hain hoantoan pae naghmae Laboan per hansi hai Kae chehrae pae chayee Ajab taazgi hai Gungunanae lagi ab Meri khamoshi hai Hain alfaaz taerae Meri shayri hai Rahoan main bhi shadaan yehi laazmi hai Rawaan aur dawaan si Nayee raushni hai Bani aek taqhat teri aashiqhi hai Meri shaam bhi RAZ Bani,surmayee hai Razia Yasmeen RAZ |
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1st July 2010, 03:32 PM
i didn't read and I will not comment, as I haven't seen u commenting on other poem .........!!
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1st July 2010, 06:24 PM
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wats d matter, i do comment wenever i get time i feel pleasure doing it but i agree sometimes(as i am away from home)i just see them but it is not that i don't respond for everyone,i read everyone, never at all sorry for if i have done wrong and hurt anybody sorry once again razia |
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1st July 2010, 06:44 PM
Beautiful work Yasmeen.........par tumne aisa q kaha ke "Shayed ae chichora sa bhi lagae" Itne khoobsurat kalam ko itna cheaply present mat kiya karo, warna jhagda ho jayega.
You are a terrfic poet and I love reading you. Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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1st July 2010, 06:52 PM
Dhero daad kubuul kijiye Razia jee...
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2nd July 2010, 12:23 AM
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Khush raho dost tum to apni batoan sae ghayel ker daetae ho Main kahan,itni bulund-paya shayera hoon bus dil ki batoan sae safhae siyaah ker liya kerti hoon Bus zara dil apna kaha manta rahae aur maeri manzil mujh sae khareeb samjho apna khiyaal rakhna Razia |
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2nd July 2010, 12:27 AM
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thank you for reading me and appreciating me I often read everyone but due to some problems i never get time to send reviews as i am away from home i have lots more problems but you know i have the ability to create good things among my bad times too just one more month then i will be free to do anything so tel all my shayer friends not to get angry on me for this reason, i love reading them all thanks razia |
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7th July 2010, 08:10 PM
waah!
yasmeen je, bahut khoobsoorat gazal! hain alfaaz tere meri shaayree hai... bahut sundar! App to small behr kee expert ho! Arun BeKhabar |
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