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Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi
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Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi - 8th April 2005, 05:03 PM

Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi
Kul humnai maiyaat main shehnayee dekhi

Bhool gaye hain sabhi wafa ke mAyne
Chahat main chopee khudgarzee ki intehayee dekhi

Mohobbat se bada gunaah koi nahin suna tha
Zindagi main chupee maut ki parchayee dekhi

Dosti ke usoolon ki kasmain khatee thay loog
Peeth main chubhtay khanjar ki gehrayee dekhi

Milte bicharte hain loog is karvaan main “Vaaiz”
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Good one - 8th April 2005, 07:34 PM

Good one vaaiz

Bas Yahi kahungi

Bahut Acchi Rachna Aaj humney hay Dekhi
Aapki Rachna mein ek Gehrai hay Dekhi


Keep writing ..Sada kush Rahiye


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8th April 2005, 09:40 PM

Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi
Kul humnai maiyaat main shehnayee dekhi

Bhool gaye hain sabhi wafa ke mAyne
Chahat main chopee khudgarzee ki intehayee dekhi

Mohobbat se bada gunaah koi nahin suna tha
Zindagi main chupee maut ki parchayee dekhi

Dosti ke usoolon ki kasmain khatee thay loog
Peeth main chubhtay khanjar ki gehrayee dekhi

Milte bicharte hain loog is karvaan main “Vaaiz”
Apnoo main gairoon see ashnayee dekhi
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Wonderful............... what you have written dear? It's really a touchable, what a thought..... very well said, I like this composition, Humhari daad kububl karna aur aaise hi likhte rehna.....

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9th April 2005, 01:08 PM

Bahut Khoob Vaaiz saahab...bahut khoob...aapki ye Ghazal waakai bahut pasand aayi ...badi badi baatoN se bhari per bilkul dil me utarne laayak....

Dosti ke usoolon ki kasmain khatee thay loog
Peeth main chubhtay khanjar ki gehrayee dekhi


Or is sher ka to jawaab hi nahi...

YooNhi likhte rahiyega.

Chaand


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Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.

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9th April 2005, 04:04 PM

Hi Vaaiz Ji,

Behud khoobsurti se bewafai ki gehraiyo ko chhua hai aapne is kalaam mein. Itne behtereen kalaam ke liye humari daad qabool kare aur umeed hai aapse aise hi aur nayaab kalaam parhne ko milenge.


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Re: Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi - 9th April 2005, 11:47 PM

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Rishtoon main bahut see gehrayee dekhi
Kul humnai maiyaat main shehnayee dekhi

Bhool gaye hain sabhi wafa ke mAyne
Chahat main chopee khudgarzee ki intehayee dekhi

Mohobbat se bada gunaah koi nahin suna tha
Zindagi main chupee maut ki parchayee dekhi

Dosti ke usoolon ki kasmain khatee thay loog
Peeth main chubhtay khanjar ki gehrayee dekhi

Milte bicharte hain loog is karvaan main “Vaaiz”
Apnoo main gairoon see ashnayee dekhi
Bahout acha likha hai aapne...Likhte rahiye!

Amanush...



Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai

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11th April 2005, 09:03 AM

Sukanya ji,

aap ki sarahana ka dhanyawaad. Aacha laga yeh jaan kar ki aap ko yeh lachna pasand aaye.

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11th April 2005, 09:05 AM

Parul ji,

Likhne main sirf doo baaton ki zaroorat hoti hai. Jasbaat aur akshar. Bhagwaan ne kuch kuch dono hi diye hain jisse jasbaat ko ammli jama pehnaya hai. Shukriya aap ki zarra-nawazi ka...

Aate rahiyega

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11th April 2005, 09:08 AM

Chaand saheb,

Aap ki zarra-nawazi ka shukriya. Chooti se koshish ki hai kuch likhne ke. Aap logon ki nazreen-inayat hai jo hum aaise koish karne ka hausla kar lete hain...

Keep Comming..

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11th April 2005, 09:11 AM

Salim saheb aur amanush ji,

Bahiut bahut shukriya aap ki hausla-afzayee ka. kuch likhne ka hausla tabhi hota hai jub aap jaise kadardaano se aaise koshish ki liye sarahana milte hai...

Keep comming!!!
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