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Na khuda mila, na mila yaar....
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Na khuda mila, na mila yaar.... - 31st March 2010, 01:09 AM

SDC ki mehfil mein sab ko slaam.dosto aaj tak aap sab se bahut pyar or duaeiN milti aa rehi heiN mujhe.bahut bahut shukria.agay bhi yuN hii aap sab mujh pe karm karte raheiN yeh gujarish hai.peshay khidmat hai ek nai gazal.umeed hai aap ko pasand aaygi.lekin jaisi bhi lagay apne vichar jaroor share kareiN.


Dhoond raha huN usay le hathoN meiN chirag
mila na mujhko kabhi jo milne k baad.

s'b aisay hua yuN kuch hua hii nahi
s'b aisay tuta yuN toot-te heiN khwaab.[ dreams]

ghungru utaar liay the usne jaane se pehle
pehchhan letay varna uske kadmo ki taap.

ik bijli giri thii yahaN sadioN pehle
tabhi tou lagi hai har tarf hii aag.

g'r maloom hota,na milegi manzil humko
karte naa kabhi hum yuN waqt khraab.

vo teri aankhoN se behta hua nasha
reh reh kar yaad aata hai tera shbaab.

teri zulfoN ko s'rhaatay rehay jab hum
nahi bhulegi kabhi vo hasiiN raat.

ek zindgi thi kuch kaam na aa saki
na khuda hii mila "seep"na mila yaar.

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31st March 2010, 02:00 AM

Rajinder saheb ..aapne saaf saaf likha hai ke jaise bhi ho, apne vichaar deiN...isiliye aapse kuch arz karna chahti huuN...pehle hi keh deti huuN..PLZZ dont mind ..

Yeh ghazal kaise huyi? isme na aapne radeef maintain kiya hai , na koi kafiya..?

chalo maan liya ke yeh ghair muraddif ghazal hai, tou bhi jo aapne kafiye ke alfaaz select kiye haiN, woh ek dusre se rhyme nahi kar rahe....

ho sakta hai main ghalat huun..

khair ,meri ek request hai aapse,...post karne se pehle kisi senior member ki raey le liya kareiN,....


per haan yeh jo bhi hai, ehsaas acche lage mujhe..


yeh 2 sher bohat acche haiN...

s'b aisay hua yuN kuch hua hii nahi
s'b aisay tuta yuN toot-te heiN khwaab.[ dreams]

ik bijli giri thii yahaN sadioN pehle
tabhi tou lagi hai har tarf hii aag.




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Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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31st March 2010, 05:17 AM

Zainy ji aap ki opinion ka swagat hai.haan galti yeh hui k isay hindi kavita k forum mein post karna chahiay tha.
   
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31st March 2010, 11:42 AM

koshish acchi hai par kamiyoon ke sath..............koshish jari rakhen.............khuda bhi milega aur sanam bhi............


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Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !!
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6th April 2010, 12:34 PM

Rajinder Jee bura na maniye par aap plz pehle..............s'b/g'r/s'rhaatay is tarah ke code word na istemaal kiya kijiye aapka kalam padhne ki koshish ki par beech me in words me atak kar badi frustration hui.



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