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Koi to ho - 18th October 2008, 04:23 PM

Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:

Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho
Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to ho

Kahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho
Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho

Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage
Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho

Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila
Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho

Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre
Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho

Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain
Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho

Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen
Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho

Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai
Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho

Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho


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Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:

Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho
Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to ho

Kahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho
Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho

Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage
Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho

Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila
Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho

Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre
Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho

Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain
Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho

Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen
Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho

Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai
Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho

Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho
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22nd October 2008, 08:16 PM

bahut khoob!! aapkee ghazleN bataatee hai keh aap is fan ke ahl e ilm haiN.

aise hee apnee ghazloN se roo ba roo karvaate rahiyegaa

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bohat khoob........ likhte rahiye....


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24th October 2008, 06:07 PM

fezan saaHeb:

aadaab arz hai!!

apki yeh Ghazal be-had pasand aa'ii.. aSh'aar bahot Khuub lageN .. ummid kartaa huuN aap bahot jald bazm mein apnii ek aur nayii tazaah Ghazal ek aur naye Shaayaraanaa naam ko saath haaZir hoNge..


KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

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bahut khoob!! aapkee ghazleN bataatee hai keh aap is fan ke ahl e ilm haiN.

aise hee apnee ghazloN se roo ba roo karvaate rahiyegaa

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fezan saaHeb:

aadaab arz hai!!

apki yeh Ghazal be-had pasand aa'ii.. aSh'aar bahot Khuub lageN .. ummid kartaa huuN aap bahot jald bazm mein apnii ek aur nayii tazaah Ghazal ek aur naye Shaayaraanaa naam ko saath haaZir hoNge..


KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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Bahot bahot shukriya Dhaval bhai
Ghazal apko pasand ayi apki mohabbat hai....................
phir haazir hunga..............
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22nd November 2008, 10:23 AM

masha allaah fezan saahib !

beintihaaN khoosoorat ghazal hai !

itne mushkil radeef pe Qaafiaa milana aasaan baat naa thii ...

tamaam Qaaide Qaanoon ki paaband aapki ye ghazak juzbaat se bharpoor hai , mujhe har sher apne aap meiN ek daastaaN laga !

aapka zurf har maaayne meiN Qaabil e taareef hai !

maalik aapko aur Qaifiyat taQseem kare !

daad Qabool kii jaaye !


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Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:

Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho
Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to ho

Kahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho
Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho

Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage
Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho

Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila
Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho

Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre
Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho

Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain
Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho

Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen
Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho

Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai
Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho

Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho
fezan bhaaii

behad hi umda gazal likhii hai aapne.... wakai main ek kathin rediff per gazal ko anjaam diya hai aapne..... dil se merii daad kabool farmaiyega
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very nice .......
keep writing...
Koi to bata de yeh shab hai ya Sahar..
Mujhe nahi hain apni hi khabar...
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aplogon ki mohabbat sath rahi to aur likhne ki koshish karenge
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masha allaah fezan saahib !

beintihaaN khoosoorat ghazal hai !

itne mushkil radeef pe Qaafiaa milana aasaan baat naa thii ...

tamaam Qaaide Qaanoon ki paaband aapki ye ghazak juzbaat se bharpoor hai , mujhe har sher apne aap meiN ek daastaaN laga !

aapka zurf har maaayne meiN Qaabil e taareef hai !

maalik aapko aur Qaifiyat taQseem kare !

daad Qabool kii jaaye !
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fezan bhaaii

behad hi umda gazal likhii hai aapne.... wakai main ek kathin rediff per gazal ko anjaam diya hai aapne..... dil se merii daad kabool farmaiyega
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22nd November 2008, 09:28 PM

"Sawal jisse bhi karta hun,chup hi rehta hai,
jafa ke shehr me.n hazir jawab,koi to ho"

kya baat hai fezan bhai!!!
Bahut umda!
Jabardast!
Ek ek ehsaas is kadar dil ko chho gaya jaise mera apna dard hi bol raha ho. . . .
Sach me.n janaab,aisi baarish agar aap karte rahe toh hum to beh hi jayenge. . . .
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kya baat hai fezan bhai!!!
Bahut umda!
Jabardast!
Ek ek ehsaas is kadar dil ko chho gaya jaise mera apna dard hi bol raha ho. . . .
Sach me.n janaab,aisi baarish agar aap karte rahe toh hum to beh hi jayenge. . . .
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Fezan Bhai.....wakai mein aapne bahut accha likha hai, aap manjhe hue shayar lagte haiN, kisi ke id se aapko idea mil gaya kaya baat hai, acche shayar ki yehi to khaasiyat hoti hai.....bahut khoob

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fezan jee,

aap ki yeh Ghazal, maine dekhi to thee, lekina aj tak paDhne ka mauqa haasil nahii huaa.. aaj paDha to to ta'ajuub bhi huaa aur behad khushii bhii.. aapne waqa'ii ek mushkil me.n zameen me.n khuub-suurat Ghazal pesh kiya hai... matle se maqta tak har sher pasand aaya.. yuu.n hi likhte rahe.n

mere jaanib se daad-o-mubaaraqbaad haazir hai...

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fezan jee,

aap ki yeh Ghazal, maine dekhi to thee, lekina aj tak paDhne ka mauqa haasil nahii huaa.. aaj paDha to to ta'ajuub bhi huaa aur behad khushii bhii.. aapne waqa'ii ek mushkil me.n zameen me.n khuub-suurat Ghazal pesh kiya hai... matle se maqta tak har sher pasand aaya.. yuu.n hi likhte rahe.n

mere jaanib se daad-o-mubaaraqbaad haazir hai...

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Daad aur Izzatafzai ke liye bahot bahot

shukrguzar hun... ..................

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AAj Paheli baar aap ki koi ghazal padhi hai. ( Ghazal Comp. wali ghazal ko chhod kar)

.. har sher bahot hee khoobsurat hai...

Ab bhala Itni acchi ghazal ko kharab kahne wala kaun hoga???

Aise hee likhte rahiye ...

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Fezanji

AAj Paheli baar aap ki koi ghazal padhi hai. ( Ghazal Comp. wali ghazal ko chhod kar)

.. har sher bahot hee khoobsurat hai...

Ab bhala Itni acchi ghazal ko kharab kahne wala kaun hoga???

Aise hee likhte rahiye ...

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Izzatafzai aur qadrdani ke liye shukriya

Jab khud ek ghazal hi doosri ghazal ki taarif kare to isse badhkar taariif ho hi

nahin sakti..........

Khush rahiye aur likhti rahiye.....

Apka dost

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Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:

Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho
Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to ho

Kahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho
Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho

Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage
Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho

Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila
Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho

Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre
Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho

Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain
Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho

Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen
Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho

Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai
Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho

Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho

beautiful.....................!
aap se aur kya kahu...bahot hi khubsurat ghazal hai aap ki
thnx 4 sharing
keep writing
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beautiful.....................!
aap se aur kya kahu...bahot hi khubsurat ghazal hai aap ki
thnx 4 sharing
keep writing
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Praneeta jii

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waise aaapki Ghazal Comp wali Ghazal bhi kuchh kam achhi nahin hai
keep it up

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Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:

Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho
Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to ho

Kahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho
Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho

Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage
Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho

Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila
Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho

Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre
Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho

Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain
Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho

Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen
Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho

Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai
Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho

Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho
Kya baat hai , maza aa gaya padh kar
bahut hi umda likha hai aapne


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kya baat hai , maza aa gaya padh kar
bahut hi umda likha hai aapne
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Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
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Jaan Nikaal Di Aapne Mere dost...Bht Bht Bht Khoob Likha ...
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