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खो गया हूँ शहर की रफ्तार में - 20th March 2018, 11:30 PM

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खो गया हूँ शहर की रफ़्तार में
दिल मगर अब भी है धौलाधार* में
(एक पर्वत श्रृंखला का नाम)

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अब वो नुक्कड़ भी नहीं पहचानता
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उस गली में फिर कहाँ जाना हुआ
दिल जहाँ टूटा था पहले प्यार में

यूं हकीकत खाब पर भारी पड़ी
हम उलझ कर रह गए घर बार में।

घूम आते थे हम अक़्सर मॉल पर,
अब कहाँ वो बात है इतवार में

मुस्कुराने में अभी कुछ देर है
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लौट कर आया तो घर भी रो पड़ा
है बहुत सीलन हर इक दीवार में

यूँ न हाँ में हाँ मिलाया कर मेरी,
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22nd March 2018, 11:19 AM

wah wah wah..

eh sher bohut pasand aya...

यूं हकीकत खाब पर भारी पड़ी
हम उलझ कर रह गए घर बार में।

Mubarak ho

keep writing..
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22nd March 2018, 02:01 PM

शुक्रिया जनाब। ।


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wah wah wah..

Eh sher bohut pasand aya...

यूं हकीकत खाब पर भारी पड़ी
हम उलझ कर रह गए घर बार में।

mubarak ho

keep writing..
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5th April 2018, 12:30 AM

Nakul bhaii

Namaste

Bahot waqt baad aapki koii tehreer bazm mein dekhi.. Khushii huii... Ghazal ke baare mein main kyaa kahun.. Aik bhee sher aisaa nahi ki jo pasand na aayen..padhne waale ke seedhe dil me utarti huii hai aapki yeh ghazal... Ye sacchaii hai jo aapne bayaan kii hai.. Mujhe behad pasand aayiin aapki ye Ghazal.. Mere dil se daad o mubaaraqbaad qabul farmaayen...

Khush rahen... Apnaa khayaal rakhen

Duaaon ke saath ijaazat

Aapka
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शुक्रिया धवल जी ।


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nakul bhaii

namaste

bahot waqt baad aapki koii tehreer bazm mein dekhi.. Khushii huii... Ghazal ke baare mein main kyaa kahun.. Aik bhee sher aisaa nahi ki jo pasand na aayen..padhne waale ke seedhe dil me utarti huii hai aapki yeh ghazal... Ye sacchaii hai jo aapne bayaan kii hai.. Mujhe behad pasand aayiin aapki ye ghazal.. Mere dil se daad o mubaaraqbaad qabul farmaayen...

Khush rahen... Apnaa khayaal rakhen

duaaon ke saath ijaazat

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