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manav jeevan ya kah sakte hai mera jeevan -
24th May 2004, 12:41 PM
meri ye rachanaa un logoin ko samrpit hai jo apne hi pariwaar ke logo se thukraaye huye hai.woh log jinke liye in logoin ne apna saara jeevan de daala unhone jeevan ki antim ghadhiyoin me unko kya diya ? ek bebas majboor jindagi ,jo auroin ki dayaa par guzar hoti ho . unko apni jeevan bhar ki tapasaya ka kya yahi fal milna chahiye tha ???
maanav jeevan kyaa teraa hai yahi arth sab kuch sahnaa ant mein ho jaata hai vyarth jiski khaatir har dukh jhelaa haste haste usne hare k rista toda antim path mein Us jeevan ko bojh samjh ke kyun fenka hai Jis jeevan ne use banaya hai samarath. Antim path mein saaya bhi to saath nahi hai Jeete to hai par jeene meein koi baat nahi hai Hamne jab koi bhed kiya na tere jeevan se Tujhe paalne mein kabhi rakhi na koi shart. Ham ye jeevan dhote hai rokar ke ab yun Sochte hai jeete hai aakhir ab ham kyun Kaise bhule unhein jise khoon se seecha haai usne hi is antim path ka kiya anarath. sakhiiiiiiiii with ........ शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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24th May 2004, 03:25 PM
Sakhi ji,
manav jeevan ko le ke apane jo apana vichar kavita ke roop mein prastut kiya hai. bahut hi sundar hai.. bahut gahari pakad hai aapki..likhati rahiye. Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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Bahut achchha likha hai aapne |
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Bahut achchha likha hai aapne -
24th May 2004, 06:15 PM
Sakhi ji bahut achchha or sochne laayak likha hai aapne...Mai aapki is rachna or soch ke liye aapka dhanyawaad karta hooN...
Dhanyawaad. Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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Re: manav jeevan ya kah sakte hai mera jeevan -
24th May 2004, 11:26 PM
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woh din yaad aa gaya..... jab hum sathh thhae or yah ghum oothhane waale bhi humaare sathh thhae..... ek ek chahera... nahi bhul paati hu maie..... aaj 2 rupiae ko taras rahe hai woh.... kabhi aisa wakt aaya hoga jab bachhon ko oonhone apni hasiyat se oopar ka khilona bhi le diya hoga jo bahot jaldi toot bhi gaya hoga ya bacha oos se oob bhi gaya hoga... aaj kya haalat ho gayi oonki....... bhagwaan oonhe saanti de...... jab tak oonki saanse hai. tumhari di |
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25th May 2004, 03:10 AM
meri sakhi,
bahut hi dard bhari nazm likhi hai tumne.. lekin dekha jaaye to ek ek shabd sach hai aur kuch nahi..... "Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum.. Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.." ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ |
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25th May 2004, 01:48 PM
akant ji manav jeevan par pakad to aksar bhut logo ki hoti hai.bas meine shayad bayaan karne ko woh shabad dhundh liye jo chahiye they.
thanx apko pasand aai meri ye rachana.koshihs to yahi hai ki likhti rahun aap jaise logo ka hoshla chaiye bas. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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25th May 2004, 01:57 PM
chaand ji apka dhanayawaad kubul hai mujhe.mere liye yun iski koi jarurart nahi hai kyun ki apne meri rachana ko pada aur samjha aur reply ke kabil jana .
thanx for every thing sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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25th May 2004, 02:03 PM
pyaari di
apne such kaha hai sab.woh maa baap jinhone sab kuch kiya bacho ke liye unko last mein gum mila bas. mein kya karu isi vichaar ne sab likhne par majboor kiya.unki haalat dekhke me pareshaan ho gai thi bhut. di apne to dekha tha na woh unke face par dard jo sab kuch byaan kar raha tha. sakhi with love pyaaaari chahat kaisi ho i m happy u r with me here. thanx meri rachana pasand aai tumko. sakhi with love शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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25th May 2004, 02:45 PM
sakhi
aap ne jo baat kahi hai, voh agar technikiyaat se hath ker dekhen to bohat hi haqiqi baat hai. aap ke lehje ki sachchaayee her cheez per haavi hai. voh parveen shakir ne kya khoob kaha hai "MEIN KAISE KEH DOON MUJHE CHOR DIYA HAI US NE BAAT TO SACH HAI MAGAR BAAT HAI RUSWAAYEE KI" Wishing you all the best musharrafhusain |
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26th May 2004, 08:17 AM
Meri gudiyaa...
itti choti see aur batein itti badi badi...bahut hee sanjiida topic ko leke tumne likha hai...hai na kitna sach...aur itna kadwaa sach...shukriya ki tumne sabka dhyaan iss or kendrit kiya hai... maanav jeevan kyaa teraa hai yahi arth sab kuch sahnaa ant mein ho jaata hai vyarth jiski khaatir har dukh jhelaa haste haste usne hare k rista toda antim path mein Us jeevan ko bojh samjh ke kyun fenka hai Jis jeevan ne use banaya hai samarath. Antim path mein saaya bhi to saath nahi hai Jeete to hai par jeene meein koi baat nahi hai Hamne jab koi bhed kiya na tere jeevan se Tujhe paalne mein kabhi rakhi na koi shart. Ham ye jeevan dhote hai rokar ke ab yun Sochte hai jeete hai aakhir ab ham kyun Kaise bhule unhein jise khoon se seecha haai usne hi is antim path ka kiya anarath. wakai bahut saralta se yeh gehraayi kee baat keh gayin tum...bhagwaan tumhein hamesha aisee hee soch dein... tumhari aapa (with mithi)  gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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HI -
26th May 2004, 12:36 PM
HI SAKHI JEE
BHUT DARD BHARA LIKHA HAI AAP NE....VISAY AAP KE YEH RACHNA HUM KAR SATEK UTARTE HAI.......ANYWAYZ BHUT AACHEE RACHNA HAI AAP KE...SADA HASTE RAHO....KHUSH RAHO...... KUCH DINO PHALAY YEH RACHNA PADHE THE....AAP SE SHARE KARNA CHAUNGA....... JISAY CHAHA THA WO MIL TO GAYA HAI MAGAR AAB DIL MEIN SANNATA PADA HAI LIFAFA BAND KARKE RAKH CHUKA HOON MAGAR DIL AUR KUCH BHI CHATA HAI HUMAY MANJUR JHUTI HAI UMEEDAY MAGAR AAB JINDGI MEIN KYA BACCHA HAI NA MUMKEEN HAI THAMNA AANSUNOON KA RUKAY PANI KO RASTA MIL GAYA HAI SABHI ZAKHAMON KE TANKAY KHOOL GAYA HAI HUMAY HASNAA BHUT MANGAHA PADA HAI...... SORRY 4 ANY MISTAKE BYE GOD BLESS U ARVIND Love Is God. Love is worship. Love is Everything...... |
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26th May 2004, 04:21 PM
aadmi aadmi ko kya dega
jo bhi dega wahi khuda dega zindagi ko kareeb se dekho iska chehra tumhe rula dega Sakhi...zindagi ka ek roop ye bhi hai....jo ki ek kadwa sach hai. sach log insaaniyat se kitna ghabrate hain jinhe paala hai aaj wo kandha dene se bhi katrate hain. sakhi bahut hi dard bhari poem hai..lekin jiss saralta se tumne ek sacahi byan ki hai....wo tareef ke kabil hai...sada khush raho yahi dua hai. take care tadap uthoon bhi toh zalim teri duhayi na doon (NM) |
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26th May 2004, 08:51 PM
Hey....shakhiii.....
 ....hmmm chaloo maan liye bhai tum badhii ho gayii hoo....sachiii..ab iss baat par koyii behas nahi hogii..sorry badii der se reply kar rahe hai....par kyaa kare...tumne tao pata hai na mai bass yuu hii hu... achha ab jate hai apna khayal rakhna..aur meri taraf se apne pariipakVa soch tak pahuchne k liye..shuBkamnaye.......ek mitrr sa Sanju! muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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28th May 2004, 01:11 PM
Sakhii Jii,
BehtariiN likhaa hai!! Bahut achhe zajbaat haiN aap ke..Bahut khushi huyi padh kar aur uss se jyada khushi huyi yah jaankar ki yah aap ne likhaa hai.. Bahut hi achhe khayaalaat haiN .. Bahut hi kam umra mai bahut hi samjahdaari walii baat yahaan par likhaa hai.. Kaassh sab koyi yah baat samjah paate...Likhti rahoo.. MayanK |
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5th June 2004, 01:58 PM
mushi bhai
"MEIN KAISE KEH DOON MUJHE CHOR DIYA HAI US NE BAAT TO SACH HAI MAGAR BAAT HAI RUSWAAYEE KI" sher bhut acha laga.apne meri baat par gour kiya isse badi kya baat hogi. yahn aane ka shukriya bhiya. sakhi pyaari aapa kya karti jab woh manjar dil se nikl nahi raha tha to in words me likh kar thoda halka kiya dil ko.bhut dukh hai us life me aapa sach. meri soch bas yaisi hi hai jo chubhta hai wohi likhti hun kyun ki wohi soch hai meri. sakhi mithi ke saath शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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5th June 2004, 02:03 PM
arvind ji
JISAY CHAHA THA WO MIL TO GAYA HAI MAGAR AAB DIL MEIN SANNATA PADA HAI LIFAFA BAND KARKE RAKH CHUKA HOON MAGAR DIL AUR KUCH BHI CHATA HAI HUMAY MANJUR JHUTI HAI UMEEDAY MAGAR AAB JINDGI MEIN KYA BACCHA HAI NA MUMKEEN HAI THAMNA AANSUNOON KA RUKAY PANI KO RASTA MIL GAYA HAI SABHI ZAKHAMON KE TANKAY KHOOL GAYA HAI HUMAY HASNAA BHUT MANGAHA PADA HAI...... acha likha hai but dard klyun hai yahn ?? sada hasne ka aur khush rahne ka to khuda jaane bas koshish karte hai sachaai ke saath ji le. sakhi roop sach kaha jindagi ko jitna karib se dekhne ki koshish karoge utna hi dard nazara aayega. thanx for coming here. roops ye to hai jinke liye jaan tak dene ki parwaah nahi hoti wohi saath tak nahi deta hai to kitna dukh hota hai hai na. thanx sakhiiii with love शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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5th June 2004, 02:07 PM
hi sakha
ab to jaan gaye na ham bhi ..... chalo ham jante to hai hi apne sakha ki aadat koi baat nahi. thnax yahn aake meri baat ko samjhne ke liye. sakhi with hallo mayank ji kaise ho thanx yahn aake meri rachana ko samjhne ke liyemeri ye rachana aap sabhi logo ne samjhi ye bhut badi baat hai aur shyad kuch logo ka gum kam ho jaye ye ummed hai. sakhi with शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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6th June 2004, 09:08 PM
Hi Sakhi jee.
chalo aap ko aacha to laga.....dil mein dard bhara hoo to kya nazar aayega...samje aap... aap kise ho....bye Love Is God. Love is worship. Love is Everything...... |
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6th June 2004, 11:48 PM
hi sakhii sorry bhut deer se reply kar rahi hoo
aapne yeh nazam aik bhut ki gehre topic pe likhi hai and it makes life quiet clear. bhut dard hai aapki shayri mai bhut loog aise hai ke jeeva ke anth mai unke apno mai se koi bi unke saath nahi hota. keep on writing bye |
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10th June 2004, 01:37 PM
hi arvind ji me thik hi hun .
aap batao ??? apne thik kaha hai dil me dard ho to dard hi to nazar aayega na. is dard ko kahin batne ki koshish hi to yahn ham sab karte hai naa. sakhi with smile शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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10th June 2004, 01:46 PM
sorry ki koi baat nahi hai romana ji
aap yahn aai aur is topic par goar kiya ye hi bhut hai mere liye. apne sahi kaha kai logoin ko apne log hi chod dete hai . koi bhi unke saath nahi hota hai jab ki unko kisi ki sabse jayada jarurat hoti hai. par woh lacxhar ban jaate hai kuch nahi kar sakte. jo log unko chodke jaate hai woh log yaisa kyun nahi samjhte ki kabhi unke saath bhi yaisa ho sakta hai. kash woh log unka gum samjhe. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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