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~*itne sitam na kiijiye...*~ -
7th June 2015, 11:54 AM
Itane sitam na kiijiye sahmaa huaa hoon main, Apne chaman ka phool ek murjhaa huaa hoon main.. Gumnaamiyon ne mujhko mitaa daala thaa magar, Koiii kah rahaa tha aaj ke dekhaa huaa hoon main.. Mujhko nahii khabar ke kahaan ab miloongaa main, Alfaaz pe ik nazm ke bikhraa huaa hoon main. Aye neend rab ka waastaa hai laut jaa waapas, Is waqt uskii yaad me khoyaa huaa hoon main.. Aye baade-sabaa* tum jo uske shahr ko jaanaa, Kah denaa ke ab sookh ke kaantaa huaa hoon main.. Aa jaaun abhii dauD ke gir jaaun kadam pe , Bas ek anaa* k waaste thahraa huaa hoon main.. Shaad.... Baade- sabaa - morning breeze Anaa- ego , proud, dignity, self respect. |
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7th June 2015, 12:26 PM
Waaaahh!! bahut khoob kalaam hua hai shaad jii..jitna ishq utna hee dard..kamaal ke ehsaas..yoon to sabhi ashaar dil par chhap chhoD gaye...par ye kuch sher bahut bahut khoob rahe..
Mujhko nahii khabar ke kahaan ab miloongaa main, Lafzon pe apnii nazm ke bikhraa huaa hoon main. Aye neend rab ka waastaa hai laut jaa waapas, Is waqt uskii yaad me khoyaa huaa hoon main.. Aur ye ek sher hakikat ke bahut kareeb..apni hee khami bade pyaar se pesh ki hai aapne.. Aa jaaun abhii dauD ke gir jaaun kadam pe , Bas ek anaa* k waaste thahraa huaa hoon main.. Bahut sari daad aur duayein..aapke kalaam par likhte rahein.. shaad rahein... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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7th June 2015, 05:10 PM
Shoiab bhai ko mera salaam.....its feel very nice to read u......inspiring...charismatic.... energetic...and full of emotions.....liked it as always.....yun hee likhte rahiye...aur Sdc kee shaan badate rahiye......
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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7th June 2015, 08:59 PM
Shad bhai bahut rumani ghazal likhi aapne..makta bahut lasand aya.
Dheron daad...Sanjay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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7th June 2015, 09:25 PM
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aapki inaayat aur mehrbaanii jo mere kalaa pe haasil huii hai main tahe dil se aapkaa ehsaanmand ho gayaa hoon....... aur intekhaabii sher kii jaanib se aapkaa tahe dil se mashkoor hoon...... aur aakhri sher waqai mere dil ke bhii behad kareeb hai..... insaan chahtaa to bahut hai ke saare bandhan tod ke dil ka gubar nikaal de....... lekin uski majbuuriyaan use rok leti hain...... ummeed karta hoon aage bhi aapka saath aur khuloos haasil hotaa rahegaa...... aapna khayal rakhiyegaa... khush rahiye Shaad...... |
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8th June 2015, 07:45 AM
Behad nayab gazal kahi Sameer bhai.....behad umdah....waaaah...yooN to har sher lajawab hai....magar is sher pe khas daad dena chahunga...
Gumnaamiyon ne mujhko mitaa daala thaa magar, Koiii kah rahaa tha aaj ke dekhaa huaa hoon main.. Daad kubul farmaiyega Aapka apna Bhushan Bhushan Joshi |
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8th June 2015, 10:02 AM
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bahut bahut shukriyaa aapka Aru bhai...... padhne ke liye, pasand karne ke liye aur apnii daad se nawaazne ke liye..... tahe dil se shukrguzaar hoon aapka.... aate rahen Shaad.... |
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8th June 2015, 11:12 AM
wah shaad bhai bahut khoob aapka likha hamesha hi pasand aata hai is baar bhi dil ke kreeb raha
likhte rahen duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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8th June 2015, 08:55 PM
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8th June 2015, 09:16 PM
Wow Shaad
Khoobsurat nazm.Zindagi ki gehri kahani si.keep it up. take care |
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8th June 2015, 10:04 PM
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Bahut khoob ehsaasat huye hai Shaad bhai aur beher ki baarikyon ka bhi bahut hadd tak dhaayan rakha hai aapne...yeh ek sher dil ko teer ki tarah aar paar kar gaya..Behad umdaa mere bhai yunhi hi mashaallah nagmon se is mehfil ko nawaazte rahiYeGaa Mujhko nahii khabar ke kahaan ab miloongaa main, Lafzon pe apnii nazm ke bikhraa huaa hoon main. Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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10th June 2015, 09:35 AM
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inaayaton se mamnoon hoon aapkaa bhushan saahab..... aapne kalaam ko padhaa aur saraaha ye meri khsuhnaseebii hai aage bhi aapki aamad ke intezaar me rahungaa..... aate rahiyegaa.... Shaad....... |
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11th June 2015, 11:41 AM
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13th June 2015, 10:16 AM
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aatii rahiyegaa regular pahle ki hi tarah..... duaa me yaad rakhiyegaa Shaad...... |
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15th June 2015, 01:11 PM
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16th June 2015, 02:30 PM
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wahhhhhhhhhhh Shaad bhai......simply superb  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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16th June 2015, 02:30 PM
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wahhhhhhhhhhh Shaad bhai......simply superb .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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16th June 2015, 04:03 PM
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bahut khushi huii ye jaankar ke aapko ye adnaa si koshish pasand aayee... aatii rahiyegaa Shaad... |
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17th June 2015, 11:09 AM
Gumnaamiyon ne mujhko mitaa daala thaa magar, Koiii kah rahaa tha aaj ke dekhaa huaa hoon main.. waah Shaad Bhai bahut khub ye sher dil ko chuuu gaya or apki puri gazal behad khubsurat or roohani mehsus huyi.. aap m sach m haqiqat ko alfaazo m pirone ka ek alag hi hunar hai.. ise banaye rakhe or yu hi likhte rahe.. kush rahe.. Dua hai humari.. mujhe Lafzo ne maar dala hai...nm |
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17th June 2015, 12:03 PM
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taabaah saahab aapkaa replyy padh kar dil ko itnaa sukoon haasil ho rahaa hai ke main bayaan nahi kar saktaa..... aapne jis sher ka zikr kiyaa hai, asal me wo sher khud mere dil ke behad kareeb rahaa hai... aur yaqeen maniyegaa ye poori ghazal bas isi ek sher ke liye maine bana daalii hai..... kyunki is ghazal ka sabse pahla sher bhi yahii huaa thaa...... aisaa lag rahaaa hai ke aapne dil ke taaron ko chuu liyaa ho... aur gahraai me utar koi motee churaa laaen ho.... bahut bahut shukriyaa aapkaa aur beshumaar inaayaten huiin hain aapki mujh par.... aate rahiyeegaa khush rahiye Shaad.... |
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17th June 2015, 08:49 PM
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mujhe Lafzo ne maar dala hai...nm |
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18th June 2015, 12:21 PM
Ek aur pur asar, munfarid kalaam keliye dil se daad huzoor.
Yeh teen ash'aar khaas pasand aaye. Mujhko nahii khabar ke kahaan ab miloongaa main, Lafzon pe apnii nazm ke bikhraa huaa hoon main. Aye baade-sabaa* tum jo uske shahr ko jaanaa, Kah denaa ke ab sookh ke kaantaa huaa hoon main.. Aa jaaun abhii dauD ke gir jaaun kadam pe , Bas ek anaa* k waaste thahraa huaa hoon main.. Yunhi likhte raheiN. **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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21st June 2015, 10:48 AM
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21st June 2015, 10:50 AM
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aapkii inaayaten sar aankhon par mere bhai............... aapne jin aashaar par khaas tavajjoh dii hai us jaanib se main aapkaa lakh lakh shukrguzaar hoon.... aate rahiyegaa.... Shaad.... |
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21st June 2015, 01:55 PM
Shoaib,
Bahut hi umda kalaam pesh kiya hai tumne... bahut hi accha laga padhkar! Aye neend rab ka waastaa hai laut jaa waapas, Is waqt uskii yaad me khoyaa huaa hoon main.. Aye baade-sabaa* tum jo uske shahr ko jaanaa, Kah denaa ke ab sookh ke kaantaa huaa hoon main.. Yeh sher khaaskar bahut pasand aaya mujhe... yun hi likhte raho, khayal rakho! Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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22nd June 2015, 09:18 AM
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bahut khushi ho rahi hai sahi maayne me aaj aapko yahan dekh kar... aate rahiyegaa...... shaad..... |
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23rd June 2015, 08:59 PM
Shaad...aapka kalaam padh sach maaniye behad khoobsurat hai..khas taur se yeh sher.
Mujhko nahii khabar ke kahaan ab miloongaa main, Lafzon pe apnii nazm ke bikhraa huaa hoon main. Aye neend rab ka waastaa hai laut jaa waapas, Is waqt uskii yaad me khoyaa huaa hoon main.. Aise hi likhte rahiye. |
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24th June 2015, 11:41 AM
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sach kahun to aaaj bazm me aapko maujood dekh kar main bataa nahii saktaa ke mujhe kitnee khushii mil rahee hai.... aaj yaqeen huaa ke shaayad maine kuch acchaa likha hogaa tabhi aap ko yahan tak le aane me kaamyaab hua hoon... khush rahiye... aate rahiye.......... shaad.... |
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25th June 2015, 10:14 AM
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waaaaahhh! ... aap ny behad umdah ghazal se ru-ba-ru karwaya hai... tamaam ashaar bohat khoob haiN... daad haazir hy.... likhte rahiye salamat rahiye tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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29th June 2015, 06:29 PM
Waah waah!
Facebook par padha tha isiliye laga ki sdc par bhi pada hai aur mubarakbaad hi nahi di itna acha likhne ke liye. Muafi chahungi. Kitni tareef karun? Apki tareef matlab suuraj ko diya dikhana. Mazaa aa gaya itna hi kahungi. Sarika |
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30th June 2015, 10:37 AM
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Hassan saahab aadaab.... aapne khaak lafzon ki jo pazeeraai farmaaii hai usse behad mamnoon hoon aapkaa..... tashreef laate rahiyegaa Shukriyaa Shaad..... |
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21st July 2015, 10:02 AM
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aapki inaayaton ka tahe dil se main ehtaraam karta hoon Sarikaa jii.. behad khushhnaseebi merii jo aapne hame is laayaq smajah aur kalaam par aapki aamad huii.. aatii rahiyegaa aur apnaa khayaa rakhiye Shaad..... |
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7th September 2015, 03:15 PM
dilnasheen ghazal sameer shad saheb
daad qubool kijiye |
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8th September 2015, 12:17 PM
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