On Valentine Day

[Chaand]

Ye Mann aasmaan ko chhuna chaahta hai
Or mai ud nahi paata,
Mai jalta hooN parindoN se aksar
Kaash… mai pakshi ho paata,

Ek umr hui seekhte-seekhte
Per abtak samajh nahi paaya,
Mai kyoN chhuna chaahta hooN aasmaan
Jabki jameeN ka bhi theek se ho na paaya,

Mujhe wo aasmaan me chamekte
Taare bahut bhaate haiN,
Mai chhuna chaahta hooN unko to untak
Mere haath nahi pahuNch paate haiN,

Wo jo meri priyasi hai
Mujhse badi aashaaeiN lagaae baithi hai,
Mai uske dupatte ke kinaare sajaane ko
Ye sitaare nahi laa paata,

Log kehte haiN gar duniyaa me aaye ho
To Kaamyaab hokar bhi dikhaao,
Mai aksar sochta hooN ke. phir Sharmindgi keisi
Gar mai aadmi hi rehta hooN usper kaamyaab na jod paata hooN,

Mujhe Budhh bahut bhaate haiN
Mai Mahaavir sa Nanga hona chaahta hooN,
Per mujhme him.mat nahi apna nangapan dikhaane ki
Mai Krishn ko apna valentine banana chaahta hooN....

Chaand

i like the thought , but there is no flow in the poem , keep writing

[Chaand]

Shukriya Manas ji...aapko mere vichaar pasand aaye.

haaN mai theek se likh nahi paata hooN (technically kamiyaaN hoti hai meri rachnaooN me )...mai jaanta hooN...phir bhi koshish rahegi...mai aage kuchh behtar flow ke saath likh sakhooN

Shukriya aapne sujhavoN ke liye.

Chaand