Ungliya'n thakti nahi'n

[fezan]

Sab Dosto’n ko merasalaam………………………………Kuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi “likhte likhte aap logo’n ki ungliya’n nahi’n thakti” …………..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher hai………phir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye……….. jinh’ne mai’n aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hu’n ………….
mulaheza farmaye’n…………………………



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliya’n thakti nahi’n
tairti rehti hai’n har dam machhliya’n thakti nahi’n

saKhtiyo’n ko jhelti hai’n rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
pao’n chahe thak bhi jaye’n jutiya’n thakti nahi’n

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hai’n yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiya’n thakti nahi’n

TanTanaTan –TanTanaTan bajti rehti hai’n sada
Bajte-bajte mandiro’n ki ghanTiya’n thakti nahi’n

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

dana-dana leke jati hai’n ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiya’n thakti nahi’n

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

[zidd]

Originally Posted by fezan

Sab Dosto’n ko merasalaam………………………………Kuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi “likhte likhte aap logo’n ki ungliya’n nahi’n thakti” …………..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher hai………phir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye……….. jinh’ne mai’n aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hu’n ………….
mulaheza farmaye’n…………………………



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliya’n thakti nahi’n
tairti rehti hai’n har dam machhliya’n thakti nahi’n

saKhtiyo’n ko jhelti hai’n rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
pao’n chahe thak bhi jaye’n jutiya’n thakti nahi’n

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hai’n yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiya’n thakti nahi’n

TanTanaTan –TanTanaTan bajti rehti hai’n sada
Bajte-bajte mandiro’n ki ghanTiya’n thakti nahi’n

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

dana-dana leke jati hai’n ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiya’n thakti nahi’n

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

wah ,fezan sahab.........wakai bahut accha sher likha hai apne........
daad kabool kijiye........

regards

[kwahish]

Originally Posted by fezan

Sab Dosto’n ko merasalaam………………………………Kuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi “likhte likhte aap logo’n ki ungliya’n nahi’n thakti” …………..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher hai………phir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye……….. jinh’ne mai’n aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hu’n ………….
mulaheza farmaye’n…………………………



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliya’n thakti nahi’n
tairti rehti hai’n har dam machhliya’n thakti nahi’n

saKhtiyo’n ko jhelti hai’n rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
pao’n chahe thak bhi jaye’n jutiya’n thakti nahi’n

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hai’n yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiya’n thakti nahi’n

TanTanaTan –TanTanaTan bajti rehti hai’n sada
Bajte-bajte mandiro’n ki ghanTiya’n thakti nahi’n

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

dana-dana leke jati hai’n ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiya’n thakti nahi’n

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

Faizan Sahab Aadaab.........

Mudat baad aapko padhne ka maukha mila hai........ Behad khushi mehsus hui aapki Gazal padhker...
Bahut hi khoobsurat aur pur kashish ahsaas hai aapki is gazal ke sabhi sher achche lage
but is sher mein aap ne ladkiyoN ke saath jyadti ki hai, shayad isliye yeh sher pasand nahi aaya..

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

Baqi sabhi sheroN per dil se daad kabool kijiye....

Aate rahiye...
Bazm ko roshan karte rahiye..
Khuda Hafez..

[Praneeta]

bahot khub........................kya jawab diya hai aapne
achcha laga padh kar

Regards

[fezan]

Originally Posted by zidd

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

wah ,fezan sahab.........wakai bahut accha sher likha hai apne........
daad kabool kijiye........

regards

Daad ke liye bahot bahot shukriya Zidd ji

khush rahiye

Fezan

[zainy]

amha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n




dan dana dan, tan tana tan...hahaha.....:: ))...bohat hi musical ghazal likhi hai aapne fezan saheb.....

aakhri 2 sher zyada acche lage mujhe..

yuhi likhte rahiye...

[naresh_mehra110]

Fezan ji....Aadaab.....Main kiya kahu is ghazal ke baare mai....aapne kuch kehne ke liye chhoda hi nahi......bahut khub likha hai aapne...har sher...lajawaab kar diya sach mai.....aise hi likhte rahiye....

yeh sher toh mujhe khaas pasand aaya......

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

tahe dil se daad....kabul kijiye....

khush rahiye....
duaaon ke saath....

[Hassan]

Fezan Jii,,

Very nice....

I like your composition a lot....

Keep writing,,

Take care,,

GOD BLESS YOU,,

[fezan]

Originally Posted by kwahish

Faizan Sahab Aadaab.........

Mudat baad aapko padhne ka maukha mila hai........ Behad khushi mehsus hui aapki Gazal padhker...
Bahut hi khoobsurat aur pur kashish ahsaas hai aapki is gazal ke sabhi sher achche lage
but is sher mein aap ne ladkiyoN ke saath jyadti ki hai, shayad isliye yeh sher pasand nahi aaya..

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

Baqi sabhi sheroN per dil se daad kabool kijiye....

Aate rahiye...
Bazm ko roshan karte rahiye..
Khuda Hafez..

Khwahish Sahab Adab

Kaise hain aap

Daad ke liye behad shukrguzar hun aur der se jawab dene ke liye mazrat bhi chahta hun.....................................
jahan tak is sher ta talluq hai, ye sher sirf kamsin ladkiyon ke liye kaha gaya lai......................
kyonki ladkiyan to 10 saal se lekar.......... 40-45 saal tak ki ho sakti hain (WO bhi apne ko ladki kahelwana hi pasand karti hain)..........

lekin ye sher maine sirf 15-16 saal tak ki ladkiyon ke liye kaha hai........isliye isse badi ladkiyon ko bura manne ki koi zururat nahin hai....................

Khush rahiye

Khuda Haafiz

Fezan

[vikramjethi]

Originally Posted by fezan

Sab Doston ko merasalaamKuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi likhte likhte aap logon ki ungliyan nahin thakti ..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher haiphir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye.. jinhne main aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hun .
mulaheza farmayen



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliyan thakti nahin
tairti rehti hain har dam machhliyan thakti nahin

saKhtiyon ko jhelti hain rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
paon chahe thak bhi jayen jutiyan thakti nahin

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hain yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiyan thakti nahin

TanTanaTan TanTanaTan bajti rehti hain sada
Bajte-bajte mandiron ki ghanTiyan thakti nahin

kamsini ki shoKhiyon mein kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiyan thakti nahin

dana-dana leke jati hain ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiyan thakti nahin

lamha-lamha do dilon ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiyan thakti nahin

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hain meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliyan thakti nahin

Fezan saheb,

Aapko pdhne ka mauka pehli martba mila hai, achha laga pdh kar...

Vikram Jethi

[fezan]

Originally Posted by Praneeta

bahot khub........................kya jawab diya hai aapne
achcha laga padh kar

Regards

Parineeta jii

Zarranawazi ke liye shukriya........................................

Aise hi sath deti rahiye...

Duaon ke sath

Apka Dost

Fezan

[kabir_shayer]

bohot khoob
likhte rahiye
main naya naya shayar hoon kuch hint miljaye to maza aajayega

[noor_noor]

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n


kya baat hai Fezan sahab bhut hi khoob daad hazir hai janaab qubool farmaaiye



aslam

[rajinderseep]

this is ammazing
wow
just wonderfull

[hasrat]

Originally Posted by fezan

Sab Dosto’n ko merasalaam………………………………Kuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi “likhte likhte aap logo’n ki ungliya’n nahi’n thakti” …………..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher hai………phir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye……….. jinh’ne mai’n aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hu’n ………….
mulaheza farmaye’n…………………………



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliya’n thakti nahi’n
tairti rehti hai’n har dam machhliya’n thakti nahi’n

saKhtiyo’n ko jhelti hai’n rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
pao’n chahe thak bhi jaye’n jutiya’n thakti nahi’n

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hai’n yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiya’n thakti nahi’n

TanTanaTan –TanTanaTan bajti rehti hai’n sada
Bajte-bajte mandiro’n ki ghanTiya’n thakti nahi’n

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

dana-dana leke jati hai’n ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiya’n thakti nahi’n

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

deri ke liye gustakhi chahte hai par kya kare or kya kahe.................. hame aapki ye gazal bahut hi khubsurat lagi, kis andaaz se aapne isse likha, isme padhne me mujhe bahut khushi hui aapne kitni aasani se sabke dard ko bayan bhi kar diya ........................................... or aapki tarif likhte likhte mere hath thake nahi ........................

[fezan]

Originally Posted by zainy

amha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n




dan dana dan, tan tana tan...hahaha.....:: ))...bohat hi musical ghazal likhi hai aapne fezan saheb.....

aakhri 2 sher zyada acche lage mujhe..

yuhi likhte rahiye...

Mohtarma Zainy Sahiba..................zarranawazi ke liye tahe dil se shukrguzaar hun.................

Aise hi sath deti rahiye........................

Duaon ke sath

Apka dost

Fezan

[fezan]

Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110

Fezan ji....Aadaab.....Main kiya kahu is ghazal ke baare mai....aapne kuch kehne ke liye chhoda hi nahi......bahut khub likha hai aapne...har sher...lajawaab kar diya sach mai.....aise hi likhte rahiye....

yeh sher toh mujhe khaas pasand aaya......

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri

likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

tahe dil se daad....kabul kijiye....

khush rahiye....

duaaon ke saath....

Naresh bhai.............Aadab

Aap ki is mohabbat aur qadrdani ka shukriya ada karne ke liye mere paas alfaaz nahin hain....... tahe dil se apka mamnoon aur shukr guzaar hun.....................

Aise hi hausla afzaai karte rahiye..................

Khush rahiye..............

Dua go

Apka dost

Fezan

[ISHK EK IBADAT]

Originally Posted by fezan

Sab Dosto’n ko merasalaam………………………………Kuchh din pehle ek thread par kisi sathi ne ek baat kahi thi “likhte likhte aap logo’n ki ungliya’n nahi’n thakti” …………..Is baat par maine ek sher kaha tha jo ki is ghazal ka akhiri sher hai………phir kuchh aur sher bhi ho gaye……….. jinh’ne mai’n aaj apke samne pesh kar raha hu’n ………….
mulaheza farmaye’n…………………………



uDte-uDte pyari-pyari titliya’n thakti nahi’n
tairti rehti hai’n har dam machhliya’n thakti nahi’n

saKhtiyo’n ko jhelti hai’n rasta-rasta gaam-gaam
pao’n chahe thak bhi jaye’n jutiya’n thakti nahi’n

har andheri raat ko roshan bana deti hai’n yeh
jagmagate-jagmagate battiya’n thakti nahi’n

TanTanaTan –TanTanaTan bajti rehti hai’n sada
Bajte-bajte mandiro’n ki ghanTiya’n thakti nahi’n

kamsini ki shoKhiyo’n mei’n kho gayee sharm-o-haya
khilkhilate- khilkhilate laDkiya’n thakti nahi’n

dana-dana leke jati hai’n ye manzil ki taraf
chhoTi- chhoTi nanhi-nanhi chintiiya’n thakti nahi’n

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n

paDhte-paDhte log thak jate hai’n meri shayri
likhte-likhte phir bhi meri ungliya’n thakti nahi’n

fezan bhai
radhe radhe

maine pahli baar apko pada hai bahut anand aaya dil se daad hazir hai

[fezan]

Originally Posted by Hassan

Fezan Jii,,

Very nice....

I like your composition a lot....

Keep writing,,

Take care,,

GOD BLESS YOU,,

Thanks a lot Hassan ji,

Aise hi hausla badhate rahiye...........

apna khayal rakhiye....

Apka dost

Fezan

[fezan]

Originally Posted by kabir_shayer

bohot khoob
likhte rahiye
main naya naya shayar hoon kuch hint miljaye to maza aajayega

Thanks a lot Kabir sahab..............sabhi ek din naye hote hain...

Khush rahiye...

[fezan]

Originally Posted by noor_noor

lamha-lamha do dilo’n ke faasle miTte gaye
dooriyo'n ke baad ab nazdikiya’n thakti nahi’n


kya baat hai Fezan sahab bhut hi khoob daad hazir hai janaab qubool farmaaiye



aslam

Aslam bhai...bahot shukriya...

Jeete rahiye...

[sajid_ghayel]

Subhan_allah Fezan saheb jis bandish me aapne yeh kalam likha hai uska jawab nahi...........really loved it.

rep++++

[fezan]

Originally Posted by hasrat

deri ke liye gustakhi chahte hai par kya kare or kya kahe.................. hame aapki ye gazal bahut hi khubsurat lagi, kis andaaz se aapne isse likha, isme padhne me mujhe bahut khushi hui aapne kitni aasani se sabke dard ko bayan bhi kar diya ........................................... or aapki tarif likhte likhte mere hath thake nahi ........................

Hasrat ji,

Der se aana koi gustakhi nahin, har ek ki apni masrufiyaat hoti haiN...........Apki mohabbat aur itni taarif ke liye maiN tahe dil se shukrguzaar huN

apna khayal rakhiye....

Apka dost

Fezan

[fezan]

Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel

Subhan_allah Fezan saheb jis bandish me aapne yeh kalam likha hai uska jawab nahi...........really loved it.

rep++++

Bahot bahot shukriya Sajid sahab,

apna khayal rakhiye....

Apka dost

Fezan