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Badalte RANG...... - 21st October 2004, 04:21 PM

Introduction :- Doston…. Kal udas ji ki kahani khatam hui ek bade hi dukhmay end ke sath… dekha jaye to pata nahi ki who end tha bhi ki nahi… kayi sawal dil main aaj bhi uth rahe hai … ki kya pari theek ho payegi…. Kya wo apni poori life ji payegi … ya uske bachho main apne aakhiri din khushi se kategi… khair jo bhi hai… kahani khatam ho chuki hai… bas dua hai ki agar wakai main kahin pari hai to who jaldi se theek ho jaye…. Khair aaj main yahan apni kahani post kar raha hun …udas ji ki kahani ki wajah se apni kahani rok rakhi thi …. Khair waqt aa gaya hai ki aap logon se share karoo ise …. Bohat si kahani apni dairy main aaj tak band kar chukka hun main… ye bhi unhi main se ek hai… aaj aapke samne rakh raha hun … kahani poori tarah se kalpnik hai… aur kuch jindgi ke hisso ko jod tod ke maine is ek kahani ka roop diya hai … ye kahani arjun aur meghna ki …. Sach aur jhoot ki …. Do tarfa cheron ki …. Umeed hai aap sab log pasand karenge …. Aur sath denege mera kahani ke har kadam pe ……..



Badalte rang …..

Arjun school ki 12 class main padta tha… aaj uske bord ka result aana tha .. subah jaldi hi arjun school pahuch gaya aur…intzaar kar raha tha results ke lagne ka …. List lagi aur arjun apni result ko badi bechaini se dekhne chala gaya ….aur bada hi khush hua ki who pas ho chukka tha … 45 % marks ke sath … par bada hi khush ho gaya tha wo… jaldi se ghar pahuncha maa ko bataya … maa maa main pass ho gaya hun ! maa badi khush hui … kisi ko parwah nahi thi kitne marks aaye arjun ka pass ho jana hi gharwalo ke liye kafi tha …. Arjun bada khush tha ki ab collage jayega … aur collage ka lutf uthaega … sapno main tha … ki school ki kasi life se azzadi mil gayi thi use… par abhi us sabme waqt tha … arjun ke pas 15 din the chutti ke … arjun delhi ke moti bagh ilake main rehta tha… uske mama faridabad main rehte the … arjun ne in chuttiyon main apne mama ke yahan jane ka faisla kiya … uske mama bohat hi ameer the aur unki apni kothi thi wahan … sham ko hi usne unse bat ki aur wahan jane ke liye tayar ho gaya … apni bike uthayi aur nikal diya apne ghar se sham ko 4 baje … arjun ko tez driving ka bada shauk tha … 6 baje apne mama keg ha rpahunch gaya tha who … arjun bohat hi khoobsoorat aur morden ladka tha… uske khayal jitney simple the … utne hi unche the … dikhne main ek dum model jaisa … 6 foot hight liye hue tha… subah subah zym jana uska shauk tha … arjun pahuncha aur muh hath dho liye …. Thodi der apne cousins se bate ki… uske mama ki do ladkiyan thi… nitu aur shalini…. Nitu arjun ke barabar hi thi.. aur uski arjun se acchi khashi banti bhi thi… kaafi der tak baton ke bad arjun ko khane ke liye bulaya gaya ….

Arjun ne khana khaya aur son eke liye jane laga …. Darasal uske yahan aane ka ek maksad aur bhi tha … use cricket main achhi khasi dilchaspi thi… aur nahar singh stadium main acchi jan pehchan thi uske mama se …who wahan cricket bhi seekhna chahta tha … arjun son eke liye apne kamre main chala gaya… use neend late hi aati thi… raton ko jagna uski aadat thi… aaj bhi use neend nahi aa rahi thi… par yahan who karta bhi kya … gane sunne laga baith ke … yun hi reling pea a ke khada ho gaya … achanak ek ladki bhagte hue aayi aur theek uski khdki ke neeche aa ke patthar se takra ke gir gayi… arjun bhagta hua neeche gaya ladki jab tak uth chuki thi… aura age chali gayi thi… agla ghar usi ka tha … aur apne bhai ko marne ke liye uske peeche bhag rahi thi … ladki apne ghar main pahunch chuki thi aur darwaza laga rahi thi.. tabhi ek gadhi ki lihght ek pal ko us par padi … abhi arjun wahin khada tha … par arjun to us ladki ko dekhta hi reh gaya … use aisa laga … jaise aisa chehra usne kabhi nahi dekha ho… ladki ne gate band kiya aur andar chali gayi… is bat se bekhauf ki koi uske chehre ki ek jhalak apne dimag main utar chukka hai … arjun bhi laut ke upar aa gaya… neetu aayi aur poocha bhai kya hua … use mana karte hue apne kamre main aa gaya … aur late gaya … apne bister pe .. sona chahta tha … par uski aankhon main neend nahi bas wo pal hi ghoom raha tha ,,,, arjun khud hairan tha ki ye kya hua… uth ke khidki pe aaya aur uske ghar ki taraf dekhne laga … kafi der bad arjun ko neend aayi… subah utha aur sabse pehle uth kar seedha khidki pe gaya … par koi dikhayi na diya wahan … arjun thoda nirash tha … par jaise hi paltne laga eka ek uski nazar samne park par gayi… dekha to koi ladki ek chote se ladke ke sath jogging kar rahi thi.. arjun ko laga use jana chaiye ,,, neetu ko uthaya aur use bhi apne sath chalne ko kaha … neetu tayar ho gayi… arjun park main pahuncha to wakai main ye wahi ladki thi jise usne raat main dekha tha … subah subah bina tayar hue hi who itni khoobsoorat lag rahi thi… ki mano arjun to use dekhta hi reh gaya …usne neetu se poocha ki ye koun hai … neetu boli ye log yahan naye aayen hai .. use bhi nahi maloom tha ye koun hai… arjun bas kaise bhi jan lena chahta tha akhir iska naam kya hai… nitu samajh gayi thi bat kya hai… khair wo chali gayi apne ghar … arjun aur neetu bhi aa gaye … arjun us roz kahin nahi gaya … agle din phir wahi park … par koi bat na bani aur bina kisi bat ke hi dono apne ghar laut gaye… 11 baje arjun stadium jane ko nikla … bike thi uske pas … jaise hi bike usne nikali bahar nitu ko bye kar raha tha … samne dekha nahi… achanak ek aawaz aayi … dhayan se challaiye plz…! Arjun ne aage dekha … arre ye to wahi thi … wahi uska unsuljha chehra … arjun dekhta sa reh gaya .. par bola … aap dekh ke chaliye… ladki kuch na boli … arjun peche gaya aur pooch liya aap yahi agle makan main rehti hai na … usne bola han main aage hi rehti hun… arjun ne socha na jane kab mile naam pooch hi lun .. apna hath aage badate hue bola …. ARJUN ..! usne ek bar ko arjun ko dekha … phir boli … MEGHNA…I m meghna aur chal di……arjun khada hi reh gaya ….!


isi ke sath main apni kahani ke pehle bhag ko yahin rok raha hun ,,,, aapke views ka intzaar rahega ....plz jaroor apne resp dijiyega taki main aap logon ke beech bana rahun ....

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21st October 2004, 05:18 PM

kya kahein?????????????????

abhi to padhna shuru hi kiya tha aur mazaaa bhi aa raha tha ke tumne end bhi kar diya...........itna chota 1st part...mujhe to aise feel ho raha tha koi yash chopra ki movie ki starting ho rahi hain.......kuch jyada likhna chahiye tha na.........chalo koi baat nahin kal zara zyada likhna ..theek hain....
accha laga tumhara starting..bilkul hamari novels ki tarah.....ab chalu main .......kal 2nd part ka intezaar rahega...

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kya kahein?????????????????

abhi to padhna shuru hi kiya tha aur mazaaa bhi aa raha tha ke tumne end bhi kar diya...........itna chota 1st part...mujhe to aise feel ho raha tha koi yash chopra ki movie ki starting ho rahi hain.......kuch jyada likhna chahiye tha na.........chalo koi baat nahin kal zara zyada likhna ..theek hain....
accha laga tumhara starting..bilkul hamari novels ki tarah.....ab chalu main .......kal 2nd part ka intezaar rahega...

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hi - 22nd October 2004, 11:08 AM

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kunalji h r u aapne realy me bhaut hi achi kahani likhi hai ase lagta hai ki ye kisi arjun ki nahi balki aapki kud ki aapni khani ho sorry 4 that yadi aapko bura laga ho lekin mere man me padte padte ye hi khyal aaya tha so maine likha or khani ke baare me kya khu ase lag rha tha mano main usse pad nahi rhi hu balki haqiqat me dekh rhi hu bahut hi achi lagi ye khani ka phala bhag ab aap plz isse aage ki khani jald se jald likhe or humare dil me utte hue hazaro parshno ke uttr de or haa is bar plz khani puri lkhe or haa itni achi khni lkhne ke liye dil se humari daad kabul kijiye or ase hi likhte rhiyega
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HI Kunal,

Hmmm, bohot dilchasp story hai bhai. Start hi romance se ho rahi hai. Uff dekhte hai aage kya hota hai.

Waisay tumhari story se ab tak ye laga ke Arjun kaafi baar fail ho chuka hai school mein Kyu??? Uske maa baap itneeee relieved the uske borderline pass hone se Kidding.

Chaliye bhai, ek bohot hi acchhi shiruvaat aur agay bhi intezaar rahe ga.


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22nd October 2004, 06:51 PM

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kya kahun main bhi... pehle part main itna hi likh paya ... tumhe to maloom hai mere hathon main abhi pain kam nahi hua hai ... par abki maine kahani ko aage badaya hai ... umeed hai aapko aachi lagegi ... kahani main mod aa chuaka hai ..


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HI Kunal,

Hmmm, bohot dilchasp story hai bhai. Start hi romance se ho rahi hai. Uff dekhte hai aage kya hota hai.

Waisay tumhari story se ab tak ye laga ke Arjun kaafi baar fail ho chuka hai school mein Kyu??? Uske maa baap itneeee relieved the uske borderline pass hone se Kidding.

Chaliye bhai, ek bohot hi acchhi shiruvaat aur agay bhi intezaar rahe ga.
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aapka aana hi dilchasp hai ... bhai romance ka apona hi maja hai... par kahani ke kayi rang balki hai aabhi... lolzz bhai arjun padai main aisa hi tha ... u know .. aapne sahi pehchana .... bhai accha laga aap aaye ... aage post kar raha hun ...


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22nd October 2004, 07:01 PM

Badalte Rang (part -2)


arjun wapas ghar laut aaya aur kahin nahi gaya … uski aankhen khushi bayan jo kar rahi thi… koi andha bhi padh leta ki kitni khushiyan sajaye hue hai who apni un aankhon main…. Naam nahi mano use khuda ka pata chal gaya ho… na jane kitne hi panne bhar dale usne meghna likhte likhte … din main khana bhi nahi khaya usne… mami ne bulaya to keh diya tabiyat kharab hai,… aur apni khidki pe khada raha … ek note pad leke kuch likhne baitha … par kuch samajh hi nahi aaya ki likhe kya … kuch nahi meghna likhna hi shuru kar diya usne … ek panna bharta… phir phad ke phaink deta … gane suntan phir aake baith jata … aur phir uska naam likhna shuru …. Sham ho chali thi … har bar ki tarah phir arjun ne ek panna bhara aur phad ke phaink diya … aur niche se aawaz aayi … o mr … road tumhare ghar ka kuda dan nahi… arjun ne neeche dekha jhank ke .. are ye to meghna hai … meghna ne arjun ko dekha aur bade jor ki hanshi aur chali gayi… arjun bechara dekhta hi reh gaya … bhag ke neeche gaya aur sare kagaz phata phat wahan se hata diye … arjun to hawa main tha lekin… arjun upar phir aake wahin khada ho gaya … rat hui mami ne bulaya khane ko … arjun gaya aur khana khane baitha … neetu samajh gayi thi uski hansi ko … par use ye nahi maloom tha ki who khush hai kyun … khane ke bad neetu upar aayi aur poocha arjun se.. arjun ne poora din ka kissa keh sunaya use … aur ek badi thandi aah bhari …. Neetu ne use bohat kheencha … arjun bola … neetu chahe job hi kaho main nahi janta ki bat kya hai… par itna jaroor hai ki main uske samne but ban jata hun… na jane kyun … neetu ne socha aur boli bhaiya … aap to gaye … aapko us ladki se pyar ho hi gaya hai …arjun bola itni jaldi … neetu ne kaha is sabme time nahi lagta … neetu ne samjhaya arjun ko… arjun bechain ho gaya tha … neetu ki baton ne to use who ehsaas karwa diya jise duniya ki sabse khoobsoorat cheez kaha gaya hai…poori rat arjun so nahi paya ….khair subah phir wahi jogging aur uska aana … arjun bhi gaya … meghna use dekh kuch na kehti aur hans deti… neetu ne arjun ko vishwash dilaya ki wo aapke bare main jaroor sochti hai.. nahi to aap par hasti nahi yun…. Khair arjun ko aaj stadium jana hi pada … mama ji keh keg aye the … ki bad main na kehna bat nahi ki … arjun chal pada bike le ke …. Ghar se nikla par who udas tha … nazre kuch dhund rahi thi …, stadium gaya poora din beet gaya … sham ko nikla …stand pe pahuncha hi tha ki dekha meghna khadi hai… who darasal koi beauty course kar rahi thi isi liye subah jati sham ko lautti… par abhi… kuch pareshan thi… na jane aisa laga ki use kuch pareshani hai … arjun se raha na gaya kuch door jakar wapas laut aaya … aur dekha … darasal kuch ladke neha ko comment kar rahe the … arjun se raha na gaya … aur un ladko ke pas gaya aur bina kuch bole unme se jo bol raha tha … uske sir pe helmet de mara … meghna chaunk gayi thi ki achanak ye kaun aa gaya … par who khush thi arjun ko dekh kar … mano koi apna mil gaya ho … par ye kya doosre ladke ne arjun pe hockey se war kiya …. Arjun sambhal na paya hatha payi hui … par arjun akela kahan itne saro se nibat pata … buri tarah se lahu luhan kar diya unhone arjun ko .. behad khoobsoorat chehre pe khoon beh raha tha … arjun behosh ho chala … meghna ne turant police main phone kar diya tha …. Arjun ko hospital le jaya gaya … koi khas nahi par uske mathe pe hockey stick ki wajah se uska matha left side de fat gaya tha … baki sab to andooni chote thi … hath soojh gaye the … arjun ko ghar laya gaya … mama mami bade pareshan the … arjun ke papa kaam ke silsile se bahar hi rehte the so .. usne mama mami se mana kar diya ki uski maa ko kuch na bataye koi …. Who man gaye … meghna bhi abhi tak ghar nahi gayi thi … usne apne gahr phone kar diya tha jo hua aur bata diya ki sath wale ghar main hi hai who….arjun ne meghna ko dekha to apne choton ko bhool gaya … ek muskan thi uske chehre pe … bola meghna … meghna ki aankhon se ansoo nikal aaye … arjun se ye dekha nahi gaya … usne usse chup hone ke liye kaha … meghna bade dabe swar main boli ye sab meri wajah se hua na … arjun hansa .. uth nahi sakta tha par tab bhi uth ke meghna ke pas aaya aur bola … agar main ye sab nahi karta to koi aur karta …. Aur is waqt tum wahan hoti … ye sun ke meghna hasne lagi … aur arjun bhi… aur kuch der bad meghna ghar laut gayi apne ….bohat khush thi wo…. Subah subah hi meghna phir wapas aa gayi aaj who beuty class main nahi gayi… aur arjun se milne chali gayi …. Dono ke beech main baten hoti… dono haste … teen din beet gaye yun hi … arjun bhi theek hone laga tha … dressing bhi mathe se utar gayi thi uske … neetu ne usse kaha bhai … meghna tumhare karee baa gayi hai… use apne dil ki baat keh do… arjun ne khoob socha aur neetu ki bat man li …. Us din meghna aayi … aur roz ki tarah arjun aur wo baten karne lage…. Arjun usse bas itna hi keh paya ki kya mujhse dosti karogi… meghna ne yahi kaha ki friend to hum hai hi… aur tum mere sabse acche dost ho … yakeen nahi manoge … par koi ladka mera friend nahi…. Wakai meghna arjun ko bohat accha dost manne lagi thi … par na jane kabhi kabhi who kisi soch main pad jati thi…arjunn ko wahi bat naa jane kyun khatakne lagi.… usne neetu se kaha … yaar mujhe na jane aisa lagta hai ki meghna mujhse kuch chupati hai… mana main khali uska dost hun.. par tab bhi aisa lagta hai jaise who bohat apreshan hai… mera dil manne ko tayar nahi… ki who normall ladki hai.. agle din jab meghna aayi to poocha arjunn ne usse baton hi baton main… uski ye bat sunte hi meghna ko na jane kya laga … uski aankhon main aansoo a gaye … aur who wahan se bhagte bhagte chali gayi rote hue … arjun kuch soch hi nahi paya ki ye kya hua …. Din se rat ho gayi .. usne meghna ko dobara dekha nahi … do din aur beet gaye … kul mila ke 10 din ho gaye … khali 5 din hi the uske pas aur … ki who jan le akhir hua kya …. Kya kare kya kare kuch samajh nahi aa raha tha uske … par meghna ka ata pata hi nahi tha … arjun ne uske ghar jane ka soch liya … ki rat ko chupke se uske ghar jayega …. Rat hui aur who chal padha pipe ke raste upar chad gaya uske kamre ki taraf … thoda upar pahuncha hi tha ki … use rone ki aawaze aane lagi… khidki pe jab pahuncha to … uske paisron se jameen khishak gayi wahan ka nazara dekh ke … meghna joron se ro rahi thi… usne socha andar jaye… uske ansoo paunch de .. isse pehle wo andar jata… ek aadmi aurat uske kamre main ghuse … na jane us aadmi ne usse kya kaha … par aisa laga ki meghna uska virodh kar rahi hai… is par usne meghna ke do thappad aur laga diye … meghna ka ye hal usne kabhi nahi dekha tha … par achambhe wali bat tab hui jab usne … un dono aadmi aurat ke chehre dekhe … aurat to meghna ki mom thi … par who aadmi meghna kaa papa nahi… koi aur tha … par ye kya aur uski mom neb hi meghna ko char bat suna ke us aadmi ke gale lag kar us room se chali gayi…. Aur arjun kea ankh se aansoo hi behte rahe .. aur ek bar phir who suck khada reh gaya ……

baaki ki kahani baad main ……….. end of part 2

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upar ek line main meghna ki jagah neha name type ho gaya hai... plz use meghna hi padhe ... sorry for this mistake..

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kahani main twist.............. suspense bhi 2nd part se create kar diya...................
kaafi mazaa aa raha hain..................

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Bhaiya..

Sabse pehle to ek achi kahaani ko shuru karne ke liye dher si Shubkaamnaayein...

Par ek request main pehle hi kar dun... please aap Sonu Di (Udas) ki tarah ki apni kahaani ka end plz dukh mein mat karna.. yahan shayri.com pe jab bhi kabhi bhi kuch bhi padha hai.. humesha kahin na kahin dukh ka element zaroor hota hai...

To please aap koshish karna ki aapki kahani khushi khushi mein hi nikle.. chaliye woh to vakt ki bataayega.. aur aap bhi bata sakte ho "Writer Sahab" lol..

Arjun aur Meghna... Meghna ke baare mein jo abhi kuch last para mein aapne likha.. kaafi suspicious kind sound karta hai... aur jaanne ke liye aur bechain karta hai.. ki aakhir baat kya hai..

Acha acha main jaanti hun.. writers ko bada maza aata hai suspense banaane ka.. par itna bhi mat banaana.. ki suspense ke baare mein soch soch ke apni hi tabiyat kharaab kar lein.. lol

Novels mein agar suspense hota hai.. to tabhi ke tabhi saari book padh lete hain.. aur sab pata chal jata hai.. lekin aap is tarah bilkul thoda thoda sa likhoge aur aise mod pe la ke chodoge to kaise chalega??????

chalo chalo ab jaldi se next part mein bataana ki woh aadmi kaun tha??? aur Meghna ek normal ladki si kyun nahi hai as per Arjun's version...

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Hi Kunal,

Wow, what suspense!!! Bohot acchhe bhai. U've got me riveted 2 u're story now. Will b waitin 4 the rest. Post it soon.


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kunalji ab khani badi hi rochak hoti jarhi hai bas man kar rha hai ki padte hi rhe or jald se jald puri khani pad le ab aage kya hoga jald hi bhatana muje intzar rhega
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meri pagli sahiba ye koi parda nahi yahan jo ... comedy main time gujar dun,... agar abhi se kahani ko bore kar ke kheenchta rahunga to ise padhega koun.... samjhi budhu aane ke liye shukria...


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salim bhai

bohat bohat shukriya aap aaye ... aap dekhte jaiye aapko aapki kursi se bandh hi na diya to... shukriya response dene ke liye bhai


chandni ...
shukriya ... aaj thoda buzy tha to agla part bhej na saka ... kal dopehar ke baad aap agla part padh payenge ... aur umeed hai ki ye naya drama aapko behad asand aayega ...


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24th October 2004, 10:40 PM

[QUOTE]Originally posted by sacccha_pyar
[B]mausam....
meri pagli sahiba ye koi parda nahi yahan jo ... comedy main time gujar dun,... agar abhi se kahani ko bore kar ke kheenchta rahunga to ise padhega koun.... samjhi budhu aane ke liye shukria...

maine kab kaha ki kuch comedy karo...mere reply mein kya aisa kuch likha tha..............agar tumhe aisa laga to pagli main nahin..shayad tum ho..


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Are bhaiya.. khud hi kaha ki roz ek part likhunga.. lekin ab to do din ho chuke hain aapko yahan likhe hue?? reply to diya aapne par kahaani na aage badhaai..

chalo chalo jaldi jaldi likho aage..

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Kunaal bhaaii..

Bahoot achchhi suruaat ki hai.. Achchha laga padhkar.. dekhte haiN aage aap ki yah kahaani kya kya rang badalti hai. ƒΊ Umeed hai bahoot jald hi agala hissa padhne ko milega..

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26th October 2004, 08:02 PM

A re bhaiya.. maine kaha tha na ki jyada suspense mat rakhna... second part aapne 22 oct. ko post kiya.. aur aaj 26 oct khatam ho rahi hai.. abhi tak teesra part nazar nahi aaya????

jaanti hun aapke haath mein dard hai.. typing slow karte ho.. to main kaunsa serious hun.. main to bas aapki leg pullin kar rahi thi.. lol

Take care.. aur jab bhi time lage.. yahan ka next part likh dena..

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fikar nahin prii............jitni jyada deri utne jyada parts ek saath padhne ko milenge.............waise abhi kaha kunal yeh kahani likhnewala hain abhi to woh koi nayi kahani shuru kar raha hain humorous section main.......samajh gayi na
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mausam. priya , chandni , salim bhai ....

shukriya aap logon ka aap log mujhe padh rahe hai ... apna time nikal ke ... priya intzaar khatam hua ... darasal hath ka pain badh kaha tha ... aur hath mud gaya tha dobara se ... to prob badh gayi thi .... par ab sab theek hai .. priya intzaar ka apna maza hota hai par tumhe intzar karwaya sorry ... aap sab yun hi sath dena ....

mayank bhai ....

bohat bohat shukriya ... yahan aane ke liye aur shurwat main apne comment dene ke liye ... aapko dekhkar badi khushi hui ... sath dete rehna plz

aur is bar main kahani thodi jyada hi likh raha hun ... as par mausam comment thodi kasar to poori kar hi doun


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Badalte Rang (Part-3)




Par arjun ke pair wahin jam chuke the who jana chahta tha wapas … kyunki uski samajh hi nahi aaya tha ki ye ho kya raha hai …. Kya kare kya na kare samajh hi nahi aa raha tha uske … khair wo chah kar bhi andar nahi ja saka … aur wapas aa gaya … par use samajh nahi aaya ki us aadmi ne use kyun mara …. Sari rat arjun so nahi saka … par arjun yun chup nahi reh sakta tha … agle din who park gaya … aur shalini ko mila aur bola ki aaj mujhse aake milna din main … shalini mana nahi kar payi … dopehar ko arjun ke ghar gayi …. Arjun bhi tayar tha apne sawalo ke mala liye … use apne kamre main le gaya … aur bade dabe hue swar main poocha usse … meghna ! ek bat batao kmain akhir tumhare liye kuch hun ya nahi …. Kya wakai main tum mujhe apna dost manti ho … meghna ne jawab diya … boli sach to ye hai … ki mere pehle aur aakhiri dost tum hi ho …. Arjun ne poocha to batao ki kya bat hai … kal main tumhare ghar gaya tumse milne aur … jo maine kabhi nahi socha tha … wo sab wahan dekha … tumhara haal bhi … dekha maine … koun tha wo admi … meghna chup reh gayi thi …. Aur uske aansoo nikal aaye the … arjun ka hath pakda aur boli usse … aaj main tumhe sab bataoungi … par plz tum mujhe galat mat samajhna …. Meghna ne shuru kiya … boli … ki mere mom dad ne love marriage ki …. Bohat pyar tha pehle dono main … par meri mom bohat paise wale ghar ki hai … bat bat pe jhagde hote the mom & dad main … mere papa mujhse pyar karte hai par mujhe na jane kya kya suna dalte hai …. Mom ke chalte … maine apni mom se ek din kaha ki mom aap kyun sunti hai inka itna … aap kuch kehti kyun nahi .. meri mom ne mujhe bataya ki asal main … who shadi se pehle kisi aur se bhi pyar karti thi … aur shadi papa se kar li … par uska sath chor na payi … aur tere papa ko uske bare main kabhi pata na chale main is liye unse kuch nahi bolti … ki kahin who mujhe chor na den … kyunki who aadmi bhi shadi shuda hai … maine shadi ke bad usse nate tor liye the .. par tere papa ke khadush pane ki wajah se usse dobara main sambandh bana liye … tab uski mom ne meghna se kaha ki kya tum us aadmi se milna chahogi…. Maine han kar di … aur unse mili … unhone bohat pyar diya mujhe … mujhe acche lagne lage who …. To unhone papa ki gairhaziri main ghar aana shuru kar diya …. Muje nahi maloom tha ki aisa hoga … par wo acche the is liye maine kuch nahi kaha …. Ek din main mom ke office chali gayi … kuch kam tha … dekha mom ke office main koi aur aadmi tha … jiske sath mom kuch galat dhang se baithi thi… mujhse ye dekha na gaya … main ghar aa gayi … mom bhi mere peeche peeche ghar thi… unhone mujhe bataya ki who unka clint tha par main samajh gayi thi… maine unse ladai kar li …. Mom ne apna asli roop dikha diya … asal main who aadmi bhi shadi ke pehle ka nahi tha … meri mom ek wahiyat kisma ki aurat hai … aur unhe wasna ki hawas itni hai ki who ek aadmi se theek reh hi nahji sakti … unhe har roz naya aadmi chaiye …. Papa ko shayad iska sak tha isi liye unki roz zhagde hote the mom se …. Mujhe apne aap se nafrat ho gayi … main papa se kehti bhi to kya … maine bina jane apni mom ka sath de dala …. Baat yahin khatam nahi hui … who aadmi chahta hai main bhi uske sang samabandh banau …. Aur meri mom uska sath de rahi hai .. main roz kin halat se gujarti hun main janti hun … maine papa ke dar se roz unhe kisi na kisi tarah virodh karti hun … tab mujhe maar kha kar apne aapko bachana padta hai…. Par main kuch nahi kar sakti… kahan jaun kise kahun apni baten… who mudi arjun ki taraf … arjun ro raha tha par … uski aankhon main gussa tha ….

Meghna arjun ke pas aayi … aur boli arjun … tum pehle ladke mere dost , koi shaksha ho jise maine kuch bataya … hai apne bare main …. Tum hi batao kya main galat hun … kya maine kuch bura kiya … meri aankhon main meri hi maa ne dhooke ki mirchi dal di… arjun bola …. Dekho meghna jo hua wo sab tumse bhool main hua … tumhari maa ne jo kiya uski saza upar wala de dega unhe ….par han tumne apne papa ko na bata ke jaroor galat kiya hai… aur unke khilaf ja kar bhi… pehle tumhe unse bat karni chaiye thi… khair jo bhi huan ,,, koi bat nahi… main tumhare sath hun aur humesha rahunga ….
Dono meghna ki aankhen chamak gayi ansuon se … aur who arjun ke gale lag ke rone lagi … arjun ne uske aansoo ponche aur bola ki yun na ro … arjun tumhari jindgi main aa gaya hai ab … tumhe kuch na hoga … meghna khush ho gayi … dono bahar aa gaye … meghna aur usne khana khaya …. Phir arjun use chorne aaya … meghna ne arjun se poocha ki kab milega phir… arjun ne kaha … jab dil na lage yaad kar lena … main hazir ho jaunga … aur tumhari mom se bhi nibat lounga …. Meghna hans padi … arjun bhi…

Arjun wapas aa gaya … bohat khush tha lekin itna khush … use laga tha jo who chahta hai use mil gaya …. Par use ek bat ki chinta thi ki kahin dobara se uski maa prob na kare … uski ye prob bhi solve ho gayi … meghna ke papa wapas aa gaye …. Meghna ne phone pe bataya … arjun ab itminan se tha … par usko ek chinta aaj khaye ja rahi thi … uske pas khali teen din hi bache hai… kaise milega iske bad ussse … aur to aur usne abhi tak usse apne pyar ka izhar bhi nahi kiya ….
Arjun ki bekrari badti hi ja rahi thi par kare to kya kare …. Agle din socha ki use batayega … subah hui … meghna usse pehle hi uske ghar aa gayi … arjun khush ho gaya … isse pehle kuch kehta … meghna ne kaha arjun tumse kuch kehna hai … thodi pareshan thi… arjunn ne usse poocha .. kya hua … to rone lagi … arjun ghabra gaya … use pani pilaya aur poocha … boli mom & dad talak le rahe hai … unme jhagda ho gaya hai … aur dad ne court main case dal diya hai … dono alag rahenge … mom aligarh main aur dad kolkata main… unhone apna transfer wahan karwa liya hai … jab tak faisla nahi hoga main mom ke sath aligarh main rahungi …. Bad main court main mai bataoungi mujhe kahan rehna hai … aur dad kol chale gaye hai … mom aligarh … aur main bhi parso ja rahi hun … aligarh … aur rone lagi … arjun ko to shock lag gaya tha …. Par parso use bhi jana tha ,,,… kya kare kuch kahe ya nahi use kuch samajh nahi aa raha tha… who pehle se hi tention main thi … aur uski mushkil badhana nahi chahta tha who … usne meghna ko chup karaya aur haste hue kaha… koi bat nahi … accha hai mujhe maloom hai tumhare papa jeetenge aur tum wahin rahogi unke sath… tuhara futre to bright hai … aur do teen joke suna ke hansa diya use … neetu ye sab dekh rahi thi … aur apne bhai pe faqra mehsoos ho raha tha … agle din meghna arjun ko shopping ke liye kaha … arjun ne meghna ke kapde khareedwaye … aur ek watch gift main di … aur khoob masti ki …. Arjun bhool jana chahta tha sab … arjun ne use ghar chora… aur wapas aa gaya… par kal akhiri din tha uski khushi ka … 12.30 ki train thi … meghna ki … aur meghna ko staion chorne bhi use hi jana tha … arjun ne khana khaya … aur apne kamre main aa gaya … aur rone laga … neetu peeche se aayi aur boli bhai … mujhe faqra hai tum par … par bhai tumne usse pyar kiya … theek hai use pa nahi sakte … pata to kar lo ki kya tumse pyar karti hai wo …. Arjun ne neetu se kaha ki who use nahi keh sakta … kahin aur prob na ho jaye …. Neetu ne koshish ki par mana nahi who … neetu chali gayi haar ke …

Subah hui …. Aur arjun ne meghna ko phone kiya aur bola chalo tayar ho jao …. Main tumhe chor ke apne ghar nikal jaounga … meghna tayar hoke aa gayi .. saman auto main rakhwa ke ek naukar ko bhej diya … aur use bike pe bitha ke chal diya … station pahunche … train waqt pe thi … ½ hour tha par baki… arjun ukhda ukhda tha … meghna ne jan lia udas hai who … aur boli … dekho hum dono ki dosti kabhi kam nahi ho sakti … tum mere pehle aur aakhiri dost ho … jiske sath maine itna waqt gujara …. Itni baten batayi … jisne mujhe sambhala … arjun khamosh tha … khamosh hi raha … train ka time ho gaya … arjun ne use bitha diya saman rakh ke wapas aaya … meghna gate tak chorne aayi… meghna ne arjun ko kaha ki who jaye … arjun ne kaha kahan jaoun … meri manjil mujhse door ja rahi hai … meghna chonk padi … boli matlab .,… arjun ne keh hi diya … ki main tumse pyar karta hun…. Tumhare sapne hai mere pas … jab se tumhe nahi janta tab se… meghna khadi ki khadi reh gayi … train chal di … meghna bas itna keh payi… MAIN TUMHARI MANJIL NAHI ARJUN… aur arjun ki aankhen num ho gayi… meghna usse door hoti gayi … train jati dekhta raha who ….aur ek bar phir arjun suck khada reh gaya …

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HI Kunal,

Bhai yeh Shalini Kaun hai??? I know i know its meghna. Hai, writer sahab aap se phir galti se mistake ho gayi rite???

Wakayi chotey, bohot hi acchhi lagi aapki kahani, Hmmmm, to phir pyar mein judaiii. Hai.... Kya kahe. Aur meghna ki mom, what a b****(Censored lekin bas yehi dimaag me aaya)

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Bhai yeh Shalini Kaun hai??? I know i know its meghna. Hai, writer sahab aap se phir galti se mistake ho gayi rite???

Wakayi chotey, bohot hi acchhi lagi aapki kahani, Hmmmm, to phir pyar mein judaiii. Hai.... Kya kahe. Aur meghna ki mom, what a b****(Censored lekin bas yehi dimaag me aaya)

Chaliye, lage rahiye aur hum bhi bekaraari se agle part ka intezaar karega.
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phir galti ho hi gayi mujhe maloom tha ... yaar darasala office main itne phone aate hai ... shalini ek comp main reception pe hai .. arre uska phone aaya tha... pichli baar neha ka aa gaya tha ... tabhi main kahani likhte samay main kisi se bat nahi karta ... .. chalo shukriya aapne meri kahani pasand ki ... jald hi milunga aapke samne naya part lekar ... galtiyon ke liye mafi mang chuka hun pehle hi .... aapka shukriya


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HI - 4th November 2004, 02:00 AM

Hey Nice story, I must say its really a good one, so when are you coming up with " Bagal Ka Ghar........" part 2. All the readers of Shayri.com, would be waiting for your Part 2

Anyways, what i have figured out of you words is that, it is a reall story and is related to you, pls answer me at

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Hey Nice story, I must say its really a good one, so when are you coming up with " Bagal Ka Ghar........" part 2. All the readers of Shayri.com, would be waiting for your Part 2

Anyways, what i have figured out of you words is that, it is a reall story and is related to you, pls answer me at

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jo kahani aapne padhi bagal ka ghar uske aage ke part isi post main aage ke pages main hai fursat ho to padh lijiyega .......

well aapne meri kahani ka nam mujhe pehle bata diya hota to wahi rakhta main ... jisme dost khush ho usme hum bhi khush ....par shukriya kahani pe aake apne comment dene ke liye ... aapka shukrgujar hun main ....

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bhai padh li aapki ab tak ki kahani .. .... bohat pasnad aayi aapki kahani ... ke teeno part .... main ek bat commen hai ... ki har bar arjun bechara khada hi reh jata hai ... sahi waqt pe end kar dete hai ap kahani ko ... aage ki kahani ka intzaar rahega ... umeed hai arjun aur meghna phir se milenge .... dekhe aage kya hota hai


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doston... phir se hazir hun aage ki kahani liye .... raj bhai shukriya .. yahan shirkat karne ke liye ... aman bhai aapka bhi .. aur intzaar ab khatam hai.. agla hissa de raha hun ... aapke samne aata rahunga yahi dua hai ... pichle dino mashroofiyat itni rahi ki yaad hi nahi raha ... ki mene kayi dilon ko bandh ke rakha hai ... khair aapko aage ye shiyat na ho iski poori kosish karounga .....


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train ja chuki thi… par abhi tak arjun wahin khada tha jahan tha… uske aankhen ek aur bas dekhti hi ja rahi thi …. Pair peeche mudne ko tayar hi na the … ab tak uski aankhen bhar chuki thi … izhar kiya bhi to kab … jab judai ho chuki thi.. chupata raha jise pichle kayi dino se .. himmat na kar paya kehne ki .. aur kaha bhi tab jab who chali gayi … arjun ne apne ko pakka kiya aur wapas chal diya … raste bhai uski aankhon ke aansoo nahi rooke … ghar pahuncha … maa intzaar main hi thi poocha kahan tha re tu … kitni der pehle nikla par ab raha hai tu… arjun ne dabe swar main jawab diya ki meghna ko chorne gaya tha … maa ne poocha ye meghna koun hai … arjun ne kuch na kaha .. aur chup chap chala gaya wahan se … maa ko uski baat khatki … dheere se uske kamre main gayi aur poocha .. kya bat hai … bada pareshan dikhayi de raha hai … arjun ke ansoo maa ke samne ruk nap aye … aur usne sari kahani keh sunayi unhe … maa bhi chonk padi thi ki unka seedha sa budhuu ram kitne bado jaisi bate kar raha hai … par unhone samjhaya arjun ko ki dekho … ye tumhari umra main har kisi ke sath hota hai .. abhi bhool jao sab aur … aage ki padai dekho… maa janti thi ki who baichain hai par koi chara na tha … arjun neb hi maa ki bat man li … aur collage main admission le liya … andar se arjun ghutta raha kayi din .. par usne ab halat se samjhota kar liya tha … thoda khush bhi rehne laga tha … collage main sab use pasand karte the … kyunki ab arjun who skool wala adhna sa ladka nahi raha tha .. aaj ek samajhdar aur shant kism ka ladka tha … arjun bhi collage main bada khush rehta .. kyunki usne kafi socha .. aur koi rasta na mila … akhir koi jariya hi nahi tha .. ki meghna ka pata lagaye par ye sab na munkin sa lagta tha … ek sal beet gaya … arjun ne kafi acche marks se ba 1st yrs clear kiya … phir se chuttiyon ke din aa gaye … par abke usne mama ke yahan na jane ki sochi .. kyunki kuch ghav aaj bhi taja the … dil par jinhe shayad bharna bohat mushkil tha … kafi din beete par chuttiyon ke last ke dino main usse raha na gaya .. kyunki khwab aaj bhi wahin the … socha kya pata uska koi pata hi chal jaye … usne socha ki last ke din jaounga … aur gaya bhi par meghna ke bare main koi ata pata na chala .. sivay iske ki uske dad ne who kothi bech di hai .. aur kolkata main rehte ho wo … kahan ye maloom nahi … neetu ne bhai ko samjhaya ki bhai .. ab kuch nahi bacha … who to ek fiza thi ajo chali gayi .. ab kis jahan ki ronak hai koi nahi jnata sivay uske … arjun wapas laut aaya … aur poori rat usne socha … aur faisla kiya ki who sab kuch bhool jayega … kyunki koi ehsaas tak nahi tha uske pas uske pyar ka .. han dosti ki rah pe humesha use yaad karega … aur uske pyar main jiye un palo ko apne dil main kahin dafna dega … khush rahega .. kyunki janta tha sab usse bohat pyar karte hai …. Arjun tayar tha aane wali jindgi ke liye ….

Collage khule aur collage pahuncha wo … uske pichle sale k dost bana tha … aniket… halanki dost to kayi bane par aniket ke sath who khud ko bohat safe aur comfortable mehsoos karta tha … kyunki aniket ek bohat hi nek dil aur shant kism ka ladka tha … aur who bhi arjun ki bohat care karta tha .. janta tha uske bare main sab kuch … aur use samjhata bhi tha … arjun neb hi acche marks se pass kit hi 1st yrs… aaj collage ka pehla din tha .. aur din tha fresher ki ragging ka… arjun bada hi exited tha … kyunki use bhi aaj mauka tha ki kisi ki kheench tan kare wo … kafi freasher aaye sabko class main kuch na kuch sunaya … itne main ek ladki class main aayi … shayad late ho chuki thi is liye dar rahi thi … arjun akela tha aaj aur aniket nahi tha uske sath … arjun ne phir bhi koi mauka nahi chora … us ladki ko ek ladki ne seat di thi doosre desk pe …. Arjun utha .. doston ke beech se aage aaya … aur us ladki ke pas jake bola … khade ho jaiye … ladki sehmi si khadi ho gayi … arjun ne kadak aawaj main poocha … late kaise aayi class main?? Usne kaha dekhiye aaj thoda traffic tha aur ghar se late ho gayi thi nikalne main … aur koi bus bhi nahi mili is liye main late ho gayi … usne bade ghabrate hue kaha … arjun ne kaha to car se aati car nahi thi to scooter lo apna… who boli abhi scooty leni hai … paise milte hi le lungi .. who bola iske paise bhi kya tumhe main dounga …cheekhte hue … chalo pair chuo senior ke .. kya karti bechari … use pair chune pade .. arjun ne poocha ,… itni der se bat kar rahi ho … itna bhi nahi seekha kii kisi ko nam batana bohat jaroori hai ,… ya tumhare naam pe ban laga hai saans lete hue boli wo … ji KAVITA… baith jao kal se time pe aana … aur arjun jake seat pe baith gaya apni … kavita dekhti rahi use … badi teekhi nazron se … na jane kya samajhta hai apne aapko .. senior hai to kya aise karega … ladkiyon se bat karne ki tameez nahi ise .. sochti rahi man hi man main … collage khatam hua … par kavita ki gussa khatam na hui … sab log ghar chale gaye …

agle din arjun roz ki tarah collage jaldi pahunch gaya … collage ki seediyon pe baith aniket ka intzaar kar raha tha … tabhi anket aata dikhayi diya door se .. uske sath main ek ladki thi .. jab pas aaye to arjun ne dekha ladki koi aur nahi kavita hi thi … arjun ne socha arre yaar ye ghabrayi ladki aniket ke sath kaise … ate hi poocha usse.. aniket kaisa hai bhai … gale mila … aur poocha ye darpok ladki tere sath main kya kar rahi hai … aniket ne bataya .. kavita uski behan hai … arjun ke to hosh hi ud gaye.. aniket bola yaar kal kisi ne kavita ko bada pareshan kiya hai … usse jara nibatna hai … aniket kya bolta isse pehle kavita boli .. bhaiya rehne do .. hota hai … collage ke pehle din main ye sab … aapke sath bhi hua hoga na … arjun ki sans wapas aayi .. teeno class ki aur chal diye … agla lecture free tha arjun aur kavita ka … par aniket ko attend karma tha kisi aur sir ka lecture … so arjun aur kavita .. canteen chale gaye .. arjun ne kavita ko thanx bola … ki usne uski dosti main ladai ko bacha liya … kavita neb hi mauka nahi chora .. ek dum se boli chalo pair chuo … aur dono hans pade … joron se … arjun ne kavita se kaha ki kya who uski dost banegi … aur dono main dosti ho gayi .. din beetne lage … aur collage ka dosra sal bhi beet gaya … aur kavita ka pehla sal … arjun aur kavita ke dosti bhi ab ek pakki ho chuki thi .. kavita samajhne lagi thi use acche se .. uske dil ko .. uski masoomiyat ko … ki wakai main who dil se ek bohat accha ladka hai … kavita ko kayi ladke chedte the , pareshan karte the … arjun unse kavita ke liye kayi bar ladta … collage ka akhiri sal bhi khatam hone ko aaya … akhiri papron ke dino main … sabhi ne plan banaya ki collage ka tour kahin jaye … jagah tay ki gayi … aur sab shimla chal diye .. teen din ke liye … rat ko sab ne khoob mauj masti ki aur apne apne tenton main kamron main chale gaye .. wahan kuch ladke jo pehle se kavita.. ko pareshan karte the .. unhone kavita ko uske room se utha liya .. aur sunsan jagah pe le jake jabardasti karne lage … ittifaqan arjun aur aniket rat ko sair ke liye nikle the … unhone cheeke suni to chal diye us aur … dekha ki collage ke badmash ladke kavita se jabar dasti kar rahe hai … hatha payi ho jati hai sab bhag jate hai .. par ek ladke ke sir pe patthar mar deta hai .. arjun ke sir pe khoon sawar tha .. usne kabhi aisi baton ki kalpna bhi nahi ki thi ki koi un kabita se jabardasti karega … use mar hi dalta wo par aniket aur kavita ne rok liya .. un ladkon ko police ke hawale kar diya gaya … sab log delhi wapas aa gaye … papron main phir se arjun ne kamal dikhaya… aur final yrs bhi pass kar liya … idhar kavita neb hi 2nd yrs paas kar liya … par alam kuch aur hi tha .. who din rat kuch sochti thi … uske khayalon pe arjun cha gaya tha … use lagne laga tha ki who arjun se pyar karne lagi hai.. aur isi kashmakash main ek din arjun ko phone kar deti hai … ki use usse milna hai … collage main na mil pane ke karan ab uski yaad use satati hai.. arjun ne kaha ek dost ko yaad karma itna accha nahi ,,, par kavita ne kaha use usse milna hai .. arjun ne kaha theek hai .. aur usse milne ka time mukkarar hua .. collage ke bahar sham ko …

arjun pahunch gaya .. theek time pe .. par kavita collage se nahi nikli …socha chali gayi intzaar karke … kyuni who late ho chukka tha … jaise hi palta uske peeche khadi thi kavita … ek dum alag dhang se, aasmani sari pehne … saji dhaji .. jaise usse milne pehli bar aayi .. arjun to hans padha .. ki jeans ke alawa aaj tak kisi aur dress main na dikhne wali ladki yun saaree main nazar aayegi .. khair … kavita ne kaha chalo pas hi ek restuarent hai wahan chalte hai .. aur bike ke peeche baith gayi woh… dinner kiya dono ne aur phir ghar ko chal diye … arjun ne kavita ko ghar pe chora aur jaise hi chalne laga … kavita ne kaha suno ! … arjun ne kaha han … kavita boli janna nahi chahoge ki maine aaj tumhe specially kyun bulaya … arjun bola hana pata hai mujhe mujhse milna tha is liye … kavita boli nahi .. darasal bat to kehna chahti thi bohat der se .. par himmat nahi hui … arjun ne poocha kya bat hai … kavita ne kaha darasal meri manjil ab mera ghar nahi … tumhara ghar hai .. main tumse pyar karne lagi hun …aur tumse shadi bhi karma chahti hun … arjun bas sunta raha … par uski aankhon ke samne phir wahi picture aa gayi … jab usne meghna ko chora tha … aur aaj wo ja raha hai …aur koi uske liye deewana hai … kavita ne kaha soch ke bata dena … par mujhe tumhari han chaiye … aur keh kar sharmati hui andar chali gayi … aur arjun aaj ek bar phir khada reh gaya … usko bojhil hota dekh… !


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end of part 4 .....


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Hi Kunal,
see I was the fst eprson to read your Part-4, i was desperatly waiting for this, but yar pls itna intazaar karana thik nahi hai, pls come soon with the next part

The twist have brought a nice change in the story.The way we thought it would come out, its entierly different.


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hi - 15th November 2004, 11:25 AM

hi kunalji kafi dino ke baad aapne khani ko aage bhdya hai lekin bhut hi acha likha hai aapne hume to lagta hai ki arjun ko kavita ka pyar manlena chye kuki ye jada mhatv nahi rhakta ki hum kisse pyar karte hai balki ye jada mhatav rhakta hai ki humse kon pyar karta hai or kavita arjun se sche dil se pyart karti hai use aapni pichli yaado ko bhula kae aaj me jina chye kyo shi kga na aage ki khani jald hi likhna hum sabko intzar rhega
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hi kunal..............
bahut dino baad yaha aana hua.........dono parts aaj sath main padeh.........kab 4th part khatam hua pata hi nahin chala..aise laga kash tumne jyada likha hota...............sachmein bahut accha laga kahani padhke......tumhari kahani ka 4th part padhke "dil to pagal hain "se ek dialogue yaad aa gaya.......""" tum buri nahin hi woh bahut bura hain....woh kisi ek ko dusre se pyar karvata hain..par woh kisi dusre ko us ek se pyar nahin karvata""""kuch aise hi tha woh dialogue...thik se likh nahin payi...bahut accha laga padhke............jaldi se 5th part likho tumne vaada kiya tha harroz ek part post karoge......

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Pyare Kunal,

Chalo shukr hai tumne agey to likha. Bhai, humne to umeed hi chhor di thi ke is janam mein is kahani ka ant parhne ko milega Wakayi mein bohot interesting developments. Hai, kis kashmakash mein phas gaya hai arjun bechara!!! Chaliye agey ki kahani ka intezaar rahega. Tumhe sirf ek din ki muhallat hai samjhay.


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15th November 2004, 07:35 PM

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WE WANT PART 4 .. abe yaar saari likh daal na ek baar mein patience naam ki cheez nahi hai...waise asar hai tumhari kahani mein...batao sapne mere par raat ko inme arjun aur meghna aate hai...

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[b]nidhi ji ....[/b

shukriya ... tumne sabse pehle aake mujhe reply kiya ... bohat khushi hui ki meri kareeb ki ladki mere kahanni ke bhi sabse kareeb hai (means delhi ki hi ho na tum ) lolzzzzzzzz.... dekha maine abki jyada intzar nahi karwaya ... khair twist jab tak kahani main na ho... padhne wale ko bandh na sako to... koi faida nahi likhne ka ... hai na ... chalo dekhte hai aage kya hota hai ... kalam kis aur chalti hai ...

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bohat khushi hui aapko yahan dekh ke ... arjun kavita ke pyar ka kya karta hai dekh lijjiye khud ... kahani aage bada raha hun .. janta hun halka sa late hun ... pehle ki tarah nahi ....


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meri dost ... sach har kadam pe sath ho tum ... koi gham nahi ... aur sach woh dialouge tumne khoob yaad dilaya ... scean yaad aa gaya ... kaise karishma kapoor aasman main pathar phainkti hai ,... ki khuda ko mar sake ... shukriya


salim bhai ....

sach bhai maja aa gaya aapko dekh ke ... thoda late hua par jyada nahi ... waqt mohlat nahi deta kabhi .,.. kabhi tabiuyat ... to kabhi servar... . arjun ki kashma kash ka kya hota haim ... pad lijiye huzoor ...

mast bhaiya ....

aap aaye na bas mere sare arman poore ho gaye ... aapka intzaar maine wakai khoob kiya .. par ab aankhon ko chain hai ... bhai ek sath likh to doun .. par wahi waqt ka mohtaz hun ... aapko to sab maloom hai ....kahani aage bada raha hun ... umeed hai aapko pasand aayegi ....

aur aman bhai ....

mere dono bade bhai ek hi sur main hai .. to bhai mast bhai ko jo jawab diya padh lena ... aapke liye bhi wahi hai ....


shukriya ap sabhi ka ... sath chaiye bina uske kuch nahi ....

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doston aaj phir hazir hun ... jaisa ki sabne likha ki kahani ko jaldi jaldi aage badhauN to abki maine jyada intzar nahi karaya ... aur kuch jo late hua ... utna hi jyada likh ke apni is bhool kii kshama mangta hun aapse ... aap sabhi ka shukriya .. yahan tak sath aane ke liye ... aur umeed karounga ki aage bhi aap sath dete rahenge yun hi .... Kunal



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kavita andar ja chuki thi … aur arjun ab bhi bahar khada tha … uske pair jaam the … kuch soch hi nahi pa raha tha wo … azeeb se kayi sawalon ko dil main liye … arjun apne ghar ko lautne laga …. Ghar pahunch gaya … par ise chain kahan tha … jise usne bohat accha dost mana tha … 2 sal jiske sath main gujare … aaj ek naye riste se bandhne ko tayar tha … par kaise apna le wo use jiske bare main usne kabhi socha tak nahi tha … upar se uske pakke aur ek matra dost ki behan … kya sochega wo.. jab pata chalega use … jabki uske dil main aisa kuch nahi tha… khair usne faisla kiya ki wo kavita ko samjhayega … aur sari bate anket ko bata dega … bas yahi kash-ma-kash main rat bhar nahi so paya wo … subah hui .. ek aur savera … arjun tayar ho gaya aniket ke ghar jane ke liye ki sabse pehle who aniket ko batayega ye sab … jaldi jaldi nastha kr ke wo nikal liya apne dost ke ghar … kavita collage ja rahi thi … raste main mili par arjun ne bat nahi ki … aniket bhi tayar ho raha tha to arjun ko thoda intzaar karma pada… arjun ne usse kahin bahar chalne ko kaha … aniket samajh nahi pa raha tha .. ki aaj itni jaldi kaise aa gaya arjun ..

khair dono nikal pade … aniket ne poocha bhi kya bat hai … aaj itni jaldi aur hum ja kahan rahe hai … usne bola baus itna bata sakta hun ki hum collage ja rahe hai … baki wahin bataounga … collage pahunche dono … aur arjun ne gate pe bike roki apni … aniket ne poocha bata ab .. kya bat hai … arjun ne bolna shuru kiya … dost aani aaj tujhe main pichle teen salon se janta hun … aur ye wahi gate hai jahan tu mujhe pehli bar mila tha … tu janta hai mere bare main har bat mera ateet mera kal mera aaj… aaur aj main tujhe ek aur sacchai se wakif karane aaya hun … bas sab kuch kehne se pehle ye jaroor kahunga .. ki jo kuch bhi hai usme mera koi kasoor nahi … aur jiske sath hai uska bhi koi kasoor nahi … aniket bola kaisi bat kar raha hai bata saaf saaf sab … mera dil baitha jar aha hai … arjun bola mere dost .. main nahi janta ki behan ka pyar kaisa hota hai .. kyunki meri koi sagi behan nahi par han main samajhta jaroor hun .. ki behan ko koi takleef ho to bhai se rehna mushkil hota hai … pata hai kal mujhe kavita ne milne ke liye bulaya tha .. main khud nahi janta tha bat kya hai .. aur jab bat ko jana to mera jeena mushkil ho gaya … kyunki teri behan mujhse pyar karti hai … aur mujhse shadi bhi karma chahti hai … main nahi janta ki kyun par han ek bat jaroor janta hun .. ki usne mujhse bas ek attraction hai .. aur main chahta hun .. kit u samjhaye use .. isse pehle ye bat tere pas kisi galat roop main pahunchti … maine theek samjha tujhe batana .. ab tu chahe jo samjhe … main bura nahi manuga … aniket ek tak arjun ko dekhta raha .. kuch der bad bola … bhai mere gale jaa .. sach tune aaj mujhe bata ke bohat sahi kiya … warna ho sakta hai kal main dhoke main aake .. apna dost kho deta .. aur arjun ko gale se laga liya …

arjun ne rahat ki sans lee .. use laga ki musibat hal ho gayi … aniket ne kaha chal hum abhi kavita se bat karenge .. arjun tayar ho gaya … dono collage main gaye … aur kavita ko canteen main bula liya … aniket ne kavita se seedha poocha … kyunki dono bhai behan hum umra the to unme koi bat nahi chupti thi .. aniket bola .. kavita kya sach hai tum arjun se pyar karti ho … kavita ne han main sir hila diya … aniket ne kaha to bhool jao use .. kyunki main aur arjun dono jante hai ye sirf attraction hai aur kuch nahi …. Kavita ko ye bat bohat buri lagi … aur rote hue seedha ghar chali aayi who … aniket ne arjun ko thanx kaha aur … dono bhi ghar pahunch gaye … aniket ne kavita ko samjhane ki phir koshish ki .. par wo jaise kuch sunna hi nahi chahti thi … aur usne aniket ko bataya ki wo arjun ke alawa kisi aur ki nahi ho sakti … aniket ne keh diya ki who tumse pyar nahi karta … par who kuch manne ko tayar na thi … bat uske ghar min bhi pata chal gayi … maa baap ne kavita se bohat kuch kaha … tang aake kavta ne arjun ko phone kiya … aur seedha poocha usse ki wo usse shadi karega ya nahi … usne mana kar diya … to usne keh diya ki han mujhe nahi chahte na … kisi aur ko chahte ho na … arjun ne kaha nahi aisa nahi par mujhe tumse shadi nahi kar sakta .. mujhse shadi kart um khush nahi rahogi … aur phone rakh diya … kavita badi pareshan thi … aur usne khana peena chor diya .. mom dad ne khoob samjhaya par … kavita ko samjha na paye .. kavita kuch sunna hi nahi chahti thi .. din ba din uski tabiyat kharab hoti ja rahi thi .. uska bp low rehne laga .. aur un hi do hafte beet gaye … par kavita ki halat main koi farq nahi tha .. bas din bhar roti rehti thi … uski ye halat uske ghar walon se na dekhi gayi ,… aur aniket neb hi mom dad ko samjhaya … ki hume iski shadi usse kar deni hi chaiye .,.. warna uski aisi hi halat bigadte rahe to wakai hum kavita ko kho denge … mom dad man gaye … aur aniket ko arjun ko samjhane ke liye kaha …aur aniket chal diya arjun ke ghar agle din … arjun ne bade khatir se apne dost ko ghar main bithaya … don one kafi der tak gapshap ki .. par aniket kuch keh hi nahi pa raha tha … tabhi arjun ne poocha .. yar kavita kaisi hai .. wakai use miss kar raha hun … aur bohat din se uska koi ata pata nahi .. job hi hua uska matlab ye nahi main uska dost nahi … ye sun kar aniket ki aankh main aansoo aa gaye …

apne dost ki aisi halat dekh usse raha na … aur poocha to aniket ne kaha .. yaar main tere bare main sab janta hun .. meghna ko gaye 3 sal ho chuke hai … aur uska koi ata pata nahi … mere dost kavita tere bagair nahi jee sakti .. wo beemar rehne lagi hai .. aur na khati ha na peti hai .. aur sahi kahun to mujhe bhi uske liye tujhsa accha ladka kahin nahi milega … arjun kya kehta .. uljhan main fans gaya tha .. anket bola yaar dosti ka haq samajh le ya .. main tere hath jodta hun .. meri behan ko bacha le mere dost … arjun kuch nahi keh paya .. uski aankh bhi bhar chuki thi … anket bola .. bata meri behan main bhi koi kami hai kya … arjun ne kaha chal chalte hai uske pas … baki bat wahin karenge .. arjun aur aniket ghar aa gaye .. aniket arjun ko seedha .. kavita ke kamre main le gaya … jahan kavita so rahi thi … arjun ne use dekha .. aur wakai uski aankh bhar aayi … usne uska naam liya … bola KAVITA .. ek aawaz main uth gayi who .. arjun ke dekh ke ro padi .. arjun uske pas gaya … aur bola … aise shadi karogi kya mujhse … is halat main … kavita hans padi … aur arjun se boli .. main tumse bohat pyar karti hun sach .. aur kisi ke bare main nahi soch sakti main … arjun ne kaha aur kisi ke bare main socha to mera kya hoga … use uthaya .. khana khilaya … kavita ke mom dad bohat khush the … arjun ne kavita se kaha .. par mera ek ateet hai … batana chahta hun tumhe … kavita ne kaha han batao … par aniket ne ishare se mana kar diya … aur arjun ne keh diya ki … kuch nahi … aise hi tumhe jhatka de raha tha … kavita ke mom dad bohat khush the … arjun ne unse kaha ..aap jald se jald meri maa se bat kar le …. Aur shadi pakki kare .. jaisa hoga unse bat kijiye main raji hun …

agle hi din kavita ke mom & dad arjun ke ghar pahunch gaye … arjun ne maa ko bata diya tha … maa bhi khush thi … aur arjun ka rishta kavita ke sath pakka kar diya jata hai … ek hafte bad sagai ki tareekh nikalti hai … aur 4 maheene bad shadi ki … arjun bhi khush rehne lagta hai … aur kavita ke pair to jameen pe rehte hi kahan the … sagai ki tayari shuru ho jati hai … aur 1 hafte bad bono ki sagai aniket ke ghar main ho jati hai …

khushi ka mauka tha … arjun ke doston ne usse party ke liye kaha … arjun ne kaha theek hai ghar pea a jana party de dounga … par sab log dance party chahte the .,… sabhi ne kaha theek hai party sab mil ke karte hai … aur ek disco main party book ho jati hai … sabhi waqt se pahunch jate hai .. 25 ladke ladkiya arjun aur aniket .. kavita ko arjun se jyada milne ko mana tha is liye … use dance party ke liye mana kar diya gaya … party shuru hui kafi dair tak dost log nachte rahe .. arjun ne bhi khoob enjoy kiya ,,,… achanak .. wahan ek aur kuch shor sa hua … sab log wahan ikhatte the .. koi ladki jyada sharab pee ke gir gayi thi .. aur uske sir pe chot bhi aayi thi .. sab us aur gaye … arjun bhi aage aage tha … uski aadat jot hi madad karne ki … aur jaise hi kareeb pahuncha … to uske hosh ud gaye … ladki koi aur nahi meghna thi .. jo sharab ke nashe main nachte nachte gir gayi … aniket ne poocha arjun se kya hua aa ke utha use … arjun ne use uthaya aur ek dost ki car main bitha hospital le aaye … aniket ne poocha usse .. ki arjun itne pareshan kyun ho … usne bataya use ki .. ye meghna hai …. Aniket bhi yun hi sadme main ho gaya … tabhi doctor aaye jo … meghna ke test kar rahe the …doctor ne bataya ki ladki drugs aur drink itna karne lagi hai ki uske chest pe eefact shuru hone laga hai … arjun ki phir khada ka khada reh gaya ,,,…. Aur ek bar uski aankh se ansoo beh nikle ……


doston isi ke sath kahani phir ek bar yahin pe rokta hun ….. aage ki kahani jald hi samne laounga .

aur han .. agar kuch jagah kuch galti reh gayi ho to .. muafi chahunga aapse ... janta hun ;... ki galti kisi se bhi ho sakti hai .... aapka sath bana rahe umeed karta hun

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Post Fantastic - 20th November 2004, 08:24 PM

Yar tumhari story to har week ek naye mor pe khatam hoti hai, iska anjaam to pata hi nahi lag raha ki kya hoga, we cannot even predict it

Fantastic i must say, really too good. I have never ever read a story like this.

I was the fst person to read part-5 also, lets see kitne aur part hain iske

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Mere bhai....

bahut tadpaya is story ke liye.... chalooo aacha twist diya hai story mein aur haan vo pyar ka izhaar aur wafa-e-dosti bhi aachi lagi.....

ab aage dekhtein hai kya hota hai.....

shayad itna intezaar na karna pade.....

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