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palak pae utrae azab likhkhoon - 2nd June 2010, 08:45 AM

Ghazal

palak pae utrae azab likhkhoon
Main apnae dil ki kitab likhkhoon

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Her aek jalta hai her kisi sae
Hai kaun,jal ker kabab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Jo dil ko khaboo main rakhkhae herdum
Usi ko main,kammyab likhkhoon

Nahin hai ae RAZ piyaar jag main
Main piyaar ko bhi surab likhkhoon

Razia Yasmeen RAZ
   
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2nd June 2010, 09:02 AM

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Ghazal

palak pae utrae azab likhkhoon
Main apnae dil ki kitab likhkhoon

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Her aek jalta hai her kisi sae
Hai kaun,jal ker kabab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Jo dil ko khaboo main rakhkhae herdum
Usi ko main,kammyab likhkhoon

Nahin hai ae RAZ piyaar jag main
Main piyaar ko bhi surab likhkhoon

Razia Yasmeen RAZ

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

aapne bahut acha kaha hai,

maien aapko pahle bhi padha hai
its really nice to read u again
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2nd June 2010, 09:35 AM

Aapki Yeh koshish qaabile taarif rahi.....main shaayad aapko pehli baar padh raha hu.....aapne bahut bahut accha likha hai.....ab se har baar padhne ki iichha jaga di aapne.....

iss sheyr ka khayal toh bahut hi gehraai tak le jata hai....

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

dil se daad hazir hai.... khush rahen...

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

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Subhan_allah Mohatarma jawab nahi aapki is peshkash ka, apne aap me kitne sawaal liye huye hai yeh aapki Ghazal aapke har sawaal ne sochne par majboor kar diya.....aur jis khoobsurti se aapne lafzo ko piroya hai bas kamaal hai jee........kamaal.

Aap aur likhe aur khoob likhe bohat kuch seekhna hai aapki khoobsurat shayri se.........yeh sher bohat pasindida rahe..

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Waise matle ke pehle misre me ek lafz hai azab use aap aazab likhe padhne walo ko aasani hogi.......Allah aapki kalam ko aur khoobsurti bakshe AAMEEN


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2nd June 2010, 02:26 PM

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Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

aapne bahut acha kaha hai,

maien aapko pahle bhi padha hai
its really nice to read u again
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jo daekhae mujhko bhi aasman main

kae jis ki batoan main meettapun hai
kae jaesae misri rakhi zabaan main

kae ahani hai hamari fitrat
nahin likha hai kabhi dhuwan main

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hello - 2nd June 2010, 02:37 PM

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Subhan_allah Mohatarma jawab nahi aapki is peshkash ka, apne aap me kitne sawaal liye huye hai yeh aapki Ghazal aapke har sawaal ne sochne par majboor kar diya.....aur jis khoobsurti se aapne lafzo ko piroya hai bas kamaal hai jee........kamaal.

Aap aur likhe aur khoob likhe bohat kuch seekhna hai aapki khoobsurat shayri se.........yeh sher bohat pasindida rahe..

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Waise matle ke pehle misre me ek lafz hai azab use aap aazab likhe padhne walo ko aasani hogi.......Allah aapki kalam ko aur khoobsurti bakshe AAMEEN
tum nae tteek likha
ae baat main nae bhi socha tha ,mujhae azaab hi likhna tha magar bae khiyali main azab keh gayee

mujhae khushi hai kae maeri ghazlaen tumhaen achchilageen,himmat -afzayee ka shukriya

likhna meri hai aadat
likhnae sae mujhko rughbat

her baat hai pahaeli
her lafz ek kahawat

maeri ghazal makan hai
ashaar hain sajawat

tum nae mujhae saraha
hai ae bhi ek inayat

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hello - 2nd June 2010, 03:08 PM

hello

naresh
ghazal wahi hai,jo dil ko bhayae
khushi wahi hai,jo dil pae chayae

chubhaya kertae hain log khanjer
jo dard dil ka sada badhayae

jo dil pae likha hoa hai ae RAZ
nahin mita hai.kabhi mitayae

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Aapki Yeh koshish qaabile taarif rahi.....main shaayad aapko pehli baar padh raha hu.....aapne bahut bahut accha likha hai.....ab se har baar padhne ki iichha jaga di aapne.....

iss sheyr ka khayal toh bahut hi gehraai tak le jata hai....

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

dil se daad hazir hai.... khush rahen...

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....
   
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Razia jee:

Aadaab!

kaise hai.n aap? aapki yeh Khoobsoorat si Ghazal aaj subHa hi maine paRh li thii... aik arse baad baad aapko paRh rahaa huuN... aapki koShiSho.n ko paRhnaa Shuruaat ke dino.n se hi mujhe bahot pasand haii .. ees baar bhee koShiSh bahot Khoob rahii... yuuNhi liKhate rahe.n aage bhee!

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Aadaab!

aapki yeh gazal behad achchi lagi sabhi sher achche hai per..... last ke 3 sher behad umdaa rahe .... dil se daad kabool kijiye......

Likhate rhaiye
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Razia jeee,

bahut ki khoobsuraat ghazal pesh ki hain aapne hmaesha ki tarah .... simply beautiful ...

aate rahe ... mehfil ko roshan kartey rahe

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MASHALLAH !! Bohat hi khoobsurat ehsaas haiN Razia jee....................




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Ghazal

palak pae utrae azab likhkhoon
Main apnae dil ki kitab likhkhoon

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Her aek jalta hai her kisi sae
Hai kaun,jal ker kabab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Jo dil ko khaboo main rakhkhae herdum
Usi ko main,kammyab likhkhoon

Nahin hai ae RAZ piyaar jag main
Main piyaar ko bhi surab likhkhoon

Razia Yasmeen RAZ
ji its too real & nice creation..................



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Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
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3rd June 2010, 01:37 PM

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Ghazal

palak pae utrae azab likhkhoon
Main apnae dil ki kitab likhkhoon

Her aek khanae main hai kharabi
Main kis ka khana,kharab likhkhoon

Her aek jalta hai her kisi sae
Hai kaun,jal ker kabab likhkhoon

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

Jo dil ko khaboo main rakhkhae herdum
Usi ko main,kammyab likhkhoon

Nahin hai ae RAZ piyaar jag main
Main piyaar ko bhi surab likhkhoon

Razia Yasmeen RAZ
Razia ji,

bahot ache khyaal hai...yunhi likhte rahiye..god bless..yeh sher acha laga mujhe

Faqaer lagti hai sari duniya
Main kisko aakhir nawab likhkhoon

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