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"Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera dil nahi hota" -
25th July 2006, 10:39 AM
Namaskar Dosto
mai ajj phir appke samakash ek rachna lekar ayye hu. app sab ki housla-afjaei ki vajhe se hi, phir se yeh kosish kar paye hu. mujhe umeed hai ki app sab ka saath mujhe yu hi milta raheyga.
“Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera nadaan dil nahi hota,
To mere mahboob ke hattho mai bhi pathar nahi hota,
Agar ishq humney ek be-waffa se kiya nahi hota,
To ashko ka dariya aankho se bahaya nahi hota,
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Bhalla paaya hai kahi kisi ne ishq ki manzil ko,
Banzaro ka to kahi koi tikana hi nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
Be-waffi ka jahar pilaya hai mujhe mere mahboob ne,
Ab kaise kahu mai ki appno ke hattho mai jahar nahi hota,
‘Sunita’ Jis dil mai namey mohabat nahi hota,
kasam kudha ki us dil mai kudha bhi nahi hota”
appki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Re: "Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera dil nahi hota" -
25th July 2006, 11:23 AM
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Originally posted by sunita virender
Namaskar Dosto
mai ajj phir appke samakash ek rachna lekar ayye hu. app sab ki housla-afjaei ki vajhe se hi, phir se yeh kosish kar paye hu. mujhe umeed hai ki app sab ka saath mujhe yu hi milta raheyga.
“Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera nadaan dil nahi hota,
To mere mahboob ke hattho mai bhi pathar nahi hota,
Agar ishq humney ek be-waffa se kiya nahi hota,
To ashko ka dariya aankho se bahaya nahi hota,
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Bhalla paaya hai kahi kisi ne ishq ki manzil ko,
Banzaro ka to kahi koi tikana hi nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
Be-waffi ka jahar pilaya hai mujhe mere mahboob ne,
Ab kaise kahu mai ki appno ke hattho mai jahar nahi hota,
‘Sunita’ Jis dil mai namey mohabat nahi hota,
kasam kudha ki us dil mai kudha bhi nahi hota”
appki dost
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sunita ji
namaskar
kaise kahe.n aapse ki aapne kya cheez likhi hai.
such m\poochiye to main shawado. me bayan nahi kar sakta
ek chot khaye dil ka sara dard aapne kagaj par utar diya hai.
sach aap jo bhee likhti hai. seedhe dil me utar jata hai.
meri to bar bar ise padne ki iksha ho rahi hai. or haan. main ise apni dairy me note kar raha hoon. bura mat maniyega
dilip
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Re: Re: "Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera dil nahi hota" -
25th July 2006, 12:24 PM
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Originally posted by dilip200
sunita ji
namaskar
kaise kahe.n aapse ki aapne kya cheez likhi hai.
such m\poochiye to main shawado. me bayan nahi kar sakta
ek chot khaye dil ka sara dard aapne kagaj par utar diya hai.
sach aap jo bhee likhti hai. seedhe dil me utar jata hai.
meri to bar bar ise padne ki iksha ho rahi hai. or haan. main ise apni dairy me note kar raha hoon. bura mat maniyega
dilip
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dilip ji
appko meri likhi gazal etne acchi laggi ki app note karna chahtey hai, its my pleasure. ki muj na-cheez ka likha bhi koi etna pasand karta hai. mai tahe-dil se appki shukar-gujar hu ki app routine mai mujhe padtey hai. aur umeed hai ki aggey bhi app yu hi attey raheygey.
appki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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25th July 2006, 01:02 PM
Sunita ji ...............Namaskaar.
Aapki tehreer paRhee.Khayaal bohat achche lage.Waqe'i aap achcha likhti hain.Agar thRi si improvement aap apni shaayari mein kar len to aap mein ek naamcheen shaayara ban.ne ki qaabiliyat hai.If you don't mind I want to highlite some points.
Maslan-
sabse baRi baat aapko qaafiye ka dhyaan rakhnaa chaahiye.
e.g.
log toot jaate hain ek ghar banaane mein
tum taras naheen khaate bastiyaan jalaane mein
iss shai'r mein banaane aur jalaane ek hi qaafiye tahat hain.
Haan radeef aapki ghazal mein theek hai i.e. naheen hota.
Ek aur baRi baat ke aapko zabaan ka bhi dhyaan rakhnaa chaahiye.e.g. zindgi not jindgi
ghazal not gajal
naazuq not najuk
bas kuchh chhoti chhoti baaten hain.Ummeed karta hoon ke aapne bura naheen mana hoga. main aapka likha pasand karta hoon, issliye isse aur behtar dekhna chaahta hoon.
your well wisher
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25th July 2006, 01:32 PM
HELO SUNITA JI...
HAM AAJ JALDI ME THE....LEKIN SOCHA JAATE JAATE AAPKI RACHNA PAD TO LE...CHAHE JAWAAB BAAD ME DENGE...LEKIN RACHNA ITNI PASAND AAYI KI JAWAB DIYE BINA JAYA NAHI GAYA TO LOL ME BHI KUCHH ARZ KARU...IS BEWAFA MEHBOOB K UPER :
DIL KUCH TO BOL KI TERA GAM KYA HAI ?
ISHK GAR AZAD HAI TO GILA KYA HAI ?
HAZUM--E-GAM NE YE EHSAS TAK MITA DALA
ZINDGI KYA HAI AUR MAUT KYA HAI ?
NAKAAMIYA TO ISHQ KA MUKADDAR HAI...
TERI DAASTA ME FIR NAYA KYA HAI...?
SUNITA JI YE HAM AAPKE LIYE NAHI KEH RAHA...APKE DIL KO SAMJHANE KA EK TAREEKA SAMAJH LIJIYE...AGAR BURA LAGE TO MAAF KARNA...
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25th July 2006, 05:20 PM
bahut khoob kaha sunita
2 sher to bahut hee achee aur sachhe lage
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
bahut khoobsoorta hai
Anil
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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25th July 2006, 05:38 PM
bahut sundar sunita ji,bahut pyari rachna.yeh ashaar to haqeeqat ke bahut kareeb.
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Be-waffi ka jahar pilaya hai mujhe mere mahboob ne,
Ab kaise kahu mai ki appno ke hattho mai jahar nahi hota
daad kabool kijiye.likhte rahiye yunhin
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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bhut khub -
25th July 2006, 05:39 PM
sunita ji appki gazal ki tareef bhee karounga or nahi bhee.....tareef is liye ki appne bhut khubsurti se apne jajbaton ko shabdon ka libaas pehnaia hai......har share behtreen hai.....nahi is liye kiyon ki abhi gazal ke nazriye se bhut c khamia hai is main......jo appko dheere dheere pata chalti rahaingi......raj.......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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26th July 2006, 09:40 AM
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Originally posted by pankaj neer
Sunita ji ...............Namaskaar.
Aapki tehreer paRhee.Khayaal bohat achche lage.Waqe'i aap achcha likhti hain.Agar thRi si improvement aap apni shaayari mein kar len to aap mein ek naamcheen shaayara ban.ne ki qaabiliyat hai.If you don't mind I want to highlite some points.
Maslan-
sabse baRi baat aapko qaafiye ka dhyaan rakhnaa chaahiye.
e.g.
log toot jaate hain ek ghar banaane mein
tum taras naheen khaate bastiyaan jalaane mein
iss shai'r mein banaane aur jalaane ek hi qaafiye tahat hain.
Haan radeef aapki ghazal mein theek hai i.e. naheen hota.
Ek aur baRi baat ke aapko zabaan ka bhi dhyaan rakhnaa chaahiye.e.g. zindgi not jindgi
ghazal not gajal
naazuq not najuk
bas kuchh chhoti chhoti baaten hain.Ummeed karta hoon ke aapne bura naheen mana hoga. main aapka likha pasand karta hoon, issliye isse aur behtar dekhna chaahta hoon.
your well wisher
pankaj neer
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Pankaj ji
namaskar !
appki suggestions maine paddi, accha lagga appney mujhe meri kamiya batai. mai dhayan rakhugi. aur appyu hi aatey raheyga meri post par.
Thanks
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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26th July 2006, 09:43 AM
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Originally posted by gam-e-lashkar
HELO SUNITA JI...
HAM AAJ JALDI ME THE....LEKIN SOCHA JAATE JAATE AAPKI RACHNA PAD TO LE...CHAHE JAWAAB BAAD ME DENGE...LEKIN RACHNA ITNI PASAND AAYI KI JAWAB DIYE BINA JAYA NAHI GAYA TO LOL ME BHI KUCHH ARZ KARU...IS BEWAFA MEHBOOB K UPER :
DIL KUCH TO BOL KI TERA GAM KYA HAI ?
ISHK GAR AZAD HAI TO GILA KYA HAI ?
HAZUM--E-GAM NE YE EHSAS TAK MITA DALA
ZINDGI KYA HAI AUR MAUT KYA HAI ?
NAKAAMIYA TO ISHQ KA MUKADDAR HAI...
TERI DAASTA ME FIR NAYA KYA HAI...?
SUNITA JI YE HAM AAPKE LIYE NAHI KEH RAHA...APKE DIL KO SAMJHANE KA EK TAREEKA SAMAJH LIJIYE...AGAR BURA LAGE TO MAAF KARNA...
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dear lashkar sahiba
appne meri rachna pasand ki yeh pad kar bahut accha lagga. aur appney valueable time se kuch samey nikala, shukriya. aur ha appka shayer mujhe bahut accha lagga. yu attey rahna.
appki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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26th July 2006, 09:50 AM
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Originally posted by masoomshayer
bahut khoob kaha sunita
2 sher to bahut hee achee aur sachhe lage
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
bahut khoobsoorta hai
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hello anil
app meri post par ayye bahut bahut shukriya. aur appney meri rachna ko pasand kiya, es se mujhe aur housla milta hai. ki mai es se bhi kuch badiya likhu. app jaise dosto ka saath raha to mai jaroor aur accha likhney mai safal rahugi.
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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26th July 2006, 09:55 AM
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Originally posted by akelijaan
bahut sundar sunita ji,bahut pyari rachna.yeh ashaar to haqeeqat ke bahut kareeb.
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Be-waffi ka jahar pilaya hai mujhe mere mahboob ne,
Ab kaise kahu mai ki appno ke hattho mai jahar nahi hota
daad kabool kijiye.likhte rahiye yunhin
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pyari jaan ji
appney meri rachna ko etne se padda aur saraha bhi. accha lagga appka msg padkar. appki daad sar annkho par. aur ha kosish karti rahugi likhney ki.
aur ek baat app ki jaan akeli kyu hai. hum sab dost appke saath hai. meri post par anne ke liye shukriya, yu hi attey rahna.
appki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Re: bhut khub -
26th July 2006, 09:58 AM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
sunita ji appki gazal ki tareef bhee karounga or nahi bhee.....tareef is liye ki appne bhut khubsurti se apne jajbaton ko shabdon ka libaas pehnaia hai......har share behtreen hai.....nahi is liye kiyon ki abhi gazal ke nazriye se bhut c khamia hai is main......jo appko dheere dheere pata chalti rahaingi......raj.......
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hello raj ji
app jaise shayer meri post par aaye to meri kushnaseebi hai. aur appney meri post pasand ki saath mai mujhe suggestion bhi di hai. pasand karney ke liye appka shukriya aur appki suggestions ka mai khayal rakhugi. yu hi attey rahna aur mujhe suggest karety rahna.
appki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Re: "Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera dil nahi hota" -
26th July 2006, 10:04 AM
Quote:
Originally posted by sunita virender
Namaskar Dosto
mai ajj phir appke samakash ek rachna lekar ayye hu. app sab ki housla-afjaei ki vajhe se hi, phir se yeh kosish kar paye hu. mujhe umeed hai ki app sab ka saath mujhe yu hi milta raheyga.
“Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera nadaan dil nahi hota,
To mere mahboob ke hattho mai bhi pathar nahi hota,
Agar ishq humney ek be-waffa se kiya nahi hota,
To ashko ka dariya aankho se bahaya nahi hota,
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Bhalla paaya hai kahi kisi ne ishq ki manzil ko,
Banzaro ka to kahi koi tikana hi nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
Be-waffi ka jahar pilaya hai mujhe mere mahboob ne,
Ab kaise kahu mai ki appno ke hattho mai jahar nahi hota,
‘Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
appki dost
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hallo sunita
shayad meine aaj 1st baar apko pada acha gahrai mein likha hai apne pasdke acha laga.
par dard hai isliye dard ko mahsoos kar sakti hun is rachana mein.
yuhi dard-e-byaan karti rahiye...
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
ache lage ye sher.
asakhi with love
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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hi -
26th July 2006, 11:54 AM
bahut khoob likhte rahiye sunita ji
yunhi koshish jaari rakhiye
regards
manu
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26th July 2006, 02:05 PM
hallo sunita
shayad meine aaj 1st baar apko pada acha gahrai mein likha hai apne pasdke acha laga.
par dard hai isliye dard ko mahsoos kar sakti hun is rachana mein.
yuhi dard-e-byaan karti rahiye...
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
ache lage ye sher.
asakhi with love
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Pyari sakhi
appne mujhe phele baar padda hai aur mai umeed karti hu ki app ab mujhe baar baar padey. appney meri likha pasand kiya mere liye kushi ki baat hai. appka PM bhi maine padda, accha lagga. yu hi meri post par aate rahna.
appki didi
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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Re: hi -
26th July 2006, 02:07 PM
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bahut khoob likhte rahiye sunita ji
yunhi koshish jaari rakhiye
regards
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hello manu ji
app meri post par aaye, bahut kushi hue appko jaha dekh kar. maine appke PM bhi padey hai. mai appki suggestion par jaroor amal karugi. aur app yu hi aatey rahna.
Thanks alot
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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26th July 2006, 07:26 PM
sunita ji maafi chahti hoon sabhse baad mai reply kar rahi hoon kya kau
dard-e-dil ka haal sabh ko sunaya nahi jata,
khushiya to door rahi
gam-e-mehfil mai bhi hamse abh aya nahi jata,
matt samjhna ki aap ko bhool gaye hum,
dosto ko marte dum takk bhoolaya nahi jata,
bas dard bohat jeada hai jo hum sai aya nahi jata.
par socha ki ek baar aap sabh ko pad loo shayad kuch dard-e-dil ki dawaa aap ne mehfil mai banaa rakhi ho aur aate hi aapka messeg mila bohat acha laga ye jaan kar ki aap humko yaad to karti hai.aapki ghazal padi mann ko kuch tassali mili warna hamare haalat to kuch aise hai ki.........
dard jab hudd sai guzarta hai to gaya nahi jata,
kya rog hai dil ko ye sabhko samjhaya nahi jata,
likhne baithti hoon magar dard ko gazal banaya nahi jata,
gehre hai itne zakham ki sehlaya nahi jata,
ek sahara aap ka hi hai,
warna khud sai to marham lagaya nahi jata.
Sheeshy sa najuk agar mera nadaan dil nahi hota,
To mere mahboob ke hattho mai bhi pathar nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
Pyar se hi banta hai ghar ek mandir ki tarah,
Jaha rahtey ho bewaffa woh makaan ghar nahi hota,
waise to aapke sabhi sheyar ache hai par ye kuch gazale to meri zindagi c lagti hai aap ka bohat bohat chukriya ki aapne itni peyari gazal likhi .
waise aaj kal mai shayri.com par kam aati hoon issi liye apne bohat saare dosto ki gazlon ko padna miss kar deti hoon aur reply bhi nahi kar pati ziski wajah sai shayed bohat saare dosto ko mujhse gila hai par mai apne sabh dosto sai haath jod kar maafi mangna chahti hoon .
na karna koi gila humse dosto
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hum sehte rahe uski berukhi hardum
wo ek shikwa bhi hamara jarr nahi paye,
yu to zindagi bhi hai mout sai bhadtar par,
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26th July 2006, 09:33 PM
Agar ishq humney ek be-waffa se kiya nahi hota,
To ashko ka dariya aankho se bahaya nahi hota,
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
kya baat hai....bahut khoob...
Hi Sunita,
Bahut khoobsurat likha hai aapne... really liked this one... aise hi likhti rahiye...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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27th July 2006, 09:22 AM
hello kirti
tumara reply pad kar majja aa jatta hai, etne pyar se aur etne acchi shayri mai jawaab deti ho. pad kar lagta hi nahi ki pad rahey hai, aisa lagta hai ki jaise tum samney beth kar batta rahi ho. busy hone ke bawjood tumney mujhe padda aur etna pyara sa jawaab diya. uskey liye tumara bahut bahut shukriya. samey nikal kar attey rahna accha lagta hai tumey dekh kar.
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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27th July 2006, 09:29 AM
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Originally posted by Pulkit_gupta
Agar ishq humney ek be-waffa se kiya nahi hota,
To ashko ka dariya aankho se bahaya nahi hota,
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
kya baat hai....bahut khoob...
Hi Sunita,
Bahut khoobsurat likha hai aapne... really liked this one... aise hi likhti rahiye...
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Pulkit ji Namaskar !
ajj app ko jaha appni post par dekh kar dil kush ho gaya. appka meri post par anne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya, aur meri shayri ko appney saraha, yeh appki badaei hai. kyuki app jaise shayro ke samney to yeh kuch bhi nahi. phir bhi appney meri housla afjaei ki mai tahe-dil se appki shukargujar hu. app yu hi meri post par attey rahna. es se mujhe himmat milti raheygi.
Thanks alot.
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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27th July 2006, 03:23 PM
bohat khoob sunita j..yun to aajkal lkhna aur padhna chod dya hai shayri ko,par aapki padhkar phir se purana sa ehsaas hua...aakhiri sher to kamaal ka hai...
"sanam" chahe zindagi se bas itna
aik mutthi main kaid kar loon,
yeh aasman hai jitna!"
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27th July 2006, 06:36 PM
sunita ji shukriya bol kar begana matt banaiye hum to aap ko apna sabse kareebi dost mante hai aur aap hai ki bas abhi takk thanx wagaira ke hi chakkro mai ghoom rahi hai plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz ye word ainda sai use matt kijiyega.
dosti mai to huqk jatatey hai thanx nahi kehtey. plz bura matt maniyega maine to wohi kaha jo mujhe feel hua .
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28th July 2006, 10:40 AM
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Originally posted by red_ruchika
bohat khoob sunita j..yun to aajkal lkhna aur padhna chod dya hai shayri ko,par aapki padhkar phir se purana sa ehsaas hua...aakhiri sher to kamaal ka hai...
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Hello Ruchika
app appney keemati samey se kuch pal nikal kar meri post par aaye, mujhe padda aur saraha. mujhe kushi hue ki meri shayri mai kuch aisa hai ki kisi ke puraney ahsaas jaag jaye. pls es site ko chodo mat. app logo ke jahe se hi to hum hai. umeed karti hu ki app yu aate raheygi.
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Re: plz -
28th July 2006, 10:43 AM
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Originally posted by kirti dil say
sunita ji shukriya bol kar begana matt banaiye hum to aap ko apna sabse kareebi dost mante hai aur aap hai ki bas abhi takk thanx wagaira ke hi chakkro mai ghoom rahi hai plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz ye word ainda sai use matt kijiyega.
dosti mai to huqk jatatey hai thanx nahi kehtey. plz bura matt maniyega maine to wohi kaha jo mujhe feel hua .
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Pyari Kirti
areeeee maine tumey begana kaha kiya, tum to meri appni ho. tum to meri shayri aur mere bahut kareeb ho. ab nahi kahugi thanks.
kush ho ab.
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th July 2006, 01:42 PM
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
waah! waah!
Sunita jee,
Yeh 2 sher achcheh lage.. yuuN hee likhti RahiYe.. yuuN hee koshish jaari rakhiYe.. kaamiyaabi zaroor milegii....
MayanK
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28th July 2006, 01:59 PM
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Originally posted by Anjana Rahi
Agar kuad se jayada yakeen uspar kiya nahi hota,
To be-waffai ka jahar bhi humney piya nahi hota,
Kahi to ek nazar mai hi ho jatta hai pyar,
Kahi umr bhar saath rah kar bhi nahi hota,
waah! waah!
Sunita jee,
Yeh 2 sher achcheh lage.. yuuN hee likhti RahiYe.. yuuN hee koshish jaari rakhiYe.. kaamiyaabi zaroor milegii....
MayanK
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Mayank Ji
kaya batau appko, appke yeh do lafz "waah! waah!" mere liye bahut hai. enko pad kar mujhe jo kushi milli hai na, mai batta nahi sakti appko. kab se appke hi itnjaar mai thi, par appney aatey aatey bahut der kar di. ab mai na-umeed se ho gaye thi. par aapney aakar bujti hue shamma ko phir se jalla diya. mujhe appni har post par appka itnjaar rahta hai. app bas meri phele post par hi ayye thy. ab doosri baar ayye ho. dono baar ka alag alag tajuraba raha. mujhe yeh dono tajurbey hamesha yaad raheygey.
mujhe sarahney ke liye bahut bahut shukriya. yu hi aatey rahna.
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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