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Love Taaveez uske naam ke - 29th October 2010, 07:25 PM

Taaveez uske naam ke

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main


jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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29th October 2010, 07:27 PM

wah waah waaah......bahut khub lamha !!!
accha likha hai tumne ishq se bharpur bhi hai ......waise to bahut kuch kahna tha par kabhi kabhi kuch na kahna hi theek hota hai .......

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Lamha ji....adaab..kaise haiN aap?....shayari Ishq meiN mujhe aaye ek arsa hi ho gaya....mera GharoNda toh shayri-e-dard hi raha hai....lekin aaj yahaaN aaker mujhe niraash nahi hona pada.....kitni Khobbsoorat tehreer se nawaza hai aapne lamha ji.....
jo topic aapne liya hai usey apne shabdoN se itna nikhara hai ke dil ko chhoo sa gaya....umeed hai aisi rachnaayeiN our bhi padne ko mileNgii...

aapki peshkash meiN..Matle ne dil ko baaNd ke rakh diya hai........mazboor kerta hai poori intekhaab ko aankhoN se utara jaaye...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad wasool paaiyega.....


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29th October 2010, 11:16 PM

Well...zara busy huuN aajkal isiliye Sdc ko waqt nahi de paa rahi huuN,

per aapne khaas dawat di hai apni ghazal per kuch kehne ki tou chali aayi..

ehsaas khoobsurat haiN lamha,per ghazal ki techniques me kayi jagah gadbad nazar aayi mujhe, aap tou ghazal ki techniques se acchi tarah se waqif haiN, kayi baar Gtm me bhi hissa liya hai aapne, phir ye ghaltiyaN kaise ho gayi aapse..

3rd sher me aur maqte me kafiye ki gadbad hai....

5th sher me.."taanti" ka meaning...???

khair in choti moti ghaltiyoN ko nazar andaaz kar deiN tou, on the whole ghazal bohat acchi hai...

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main



Yeh sher la jawaab hai..yuhi likhti rahiye...........




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Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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Taaveez uske naam ke


daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main

aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main

jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main

"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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30th October 2010, 08:31 AM

Lamha Ji .. Namaste !

Aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe ... sabhi ashaar ki saadgi aur maasumiyat ko aakhir tak barqaraar rakhne ki koshish acchi lagi mujhe ... kuch sher mujhe behad pasand aayen ... khaas kar matlaa bahut asardaar laga mujhe ....


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30th October 2010, 09:52 AM

Beautiful work Lamha Jee.....well no doubt it was too fast pased enjoyed it, please work on Zainy Jee advised.

Thank U


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Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...

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Taaveez uske naam ke


daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main

aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main

jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main

"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main

aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

Lamhaa Bahut khubsurat......!!! Bahut acha likha hai tumne.......!!! Ye kuch sher mere dil ke kareeb rahe....!!! Aise hi likhti raha karo....!!! Dil se dhero daad hazir haii......!!! Khush raho......!!!

Waise itne din se kahan gaayab thi...... Aate hi kamaal kar diyaa.....!!!


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Taaveez uske naam ke

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main


jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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off late you have been doing very good poetry lamha...........

ye bhi tumhare kalam se nikli acchi tehriro me shamil hai.......
kahi kahi kuch lafz colloquial hai.......chaadar taanna ' kaha tojaa sakta hai magar shayad apke situation me nahi....

lekin in general tumhe itni choti umr me jo adaigi ka knowledge aur talent hai...thats unsurpassed on sdc.

good work but ofcourse you will do better....ye to agaazh hai.......

lage raho lamha sahiba........
   
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welldone lamha jee
radhe radhe

ye dono sher bahut khoob lage likhti rahen dil se daad
duaon ke saath

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


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WAh Wah ..

Kya Khoob Likha Hai... Lamha...


   
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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main



Lamha Dear,

Its very lovely to read you,
after a long time....

Boht khoobsorat peshakash hai janab,
wese to tamaam ki tamaam ghazal
ache khiyalaat se saji hai,
lekin quoted shair kuch ziyada hi
pasand aaya,

Youhni apne ache ache alfazooN
se ru-ba-ru karaatay rahiye ga,

DuaooN k saath ijaazat,


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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN...
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Taaveez uske naam ke

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main


jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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Good one Lamha..................................
nicely written


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Lamha jee aadaab.

A poem full of feelings and emotions...

Keep moving forward. Non stop and always.

Keep up the spirit - always.


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lamha ji namaste,

kaisi haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hongi..aapki ghazal to achi bann padi hai. jo zainy ji ne aur zidd bhai ne kaha wohi mera bhi kehna hai..

aage aur bhi acha likho..khush aur aabaad raho..god bless u

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wah waah waaah......bahut khub lamha !!!
accha likha hai tumne ishq se bharpur bhi hai ......waise to bahut kuch kahna tha par kabhi kabhi kuch na kahna hi theek hota hai .......

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izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya dear... aapko meri ye koshish pasand aayi, meri mehnat safal hui... aapne kuch bhi naa keh kar bhi sab kuch keh diya... kabhi kabhi apne ehsaas kisi ke dil tak pahuchane ke liye lafzon ki zaroorat nahi rehti... tahe dil se aap ka shukriya.... khush rahiye...


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izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya dear... aapko meri ye koshish pasand aayi, meri mehnat safal hui... aapne kuch bhi naa keh kar bhi sab kuch keh diya... kabhi kabhi apne ehsaas kisi ke dil tak pahuchane ke liye lafzon ki zaroorat nahi rehti... tahe dil se aap ka shukriya.... khush rahiye...
hmmmmmmmmm...aapko pata hai jab insaan ke paas kahne ko koi shabd nahi hote to iska matlab hota hai k wo aapse kuch sach kahna chahta hai par kah nahi pa raha hai...kahenge jarur kahenge aapse nahi kahenge to kisse kahenge....hmmmmmmmm


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Dear Lahma, tumne bulaya aur hum chale aaye......


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


aise hi ahsaas hote haiN jab hum kisi ko bahut pyar karte haiN aur us se juda hone ka dar har pal rahta hai...bahut acchi tarah se tumne es ahsaas ko bayaaN kiya hai. accha laga tumhe padna


duaoN ke saath
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Taaveez uske naam ke


daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main

aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main

jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main

"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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Lamha ji....adaab..kaise haiN aap?....shayari Ishq meiN mujhe aaye ek arsa hi ho gaya....mera GharoNda toh shayri-e-dard hi raha hai....lekin aaj yahaaN aaker mujhe niraash nahi hona pada.....kitni Khobbsoorat tehreer se nawaza hai aapne lamha ji.....
jo topic aapne liya hai usey apne shabdoN se itna nikhara hai ke dil ko chhoo sa gaya....umeed hai aisi rachnaayeiN our bhi padne ko mileNgii...

aapki peshkash meiN..Matle ne dil ko baaNd ke rakh diya hai........mazboor kerta hai poori intekhaab ko aankhoN se utara jaaye...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad wasool paaiyega.....


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mai tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu ke aapne apne shayri-e-dard ke gharonde ko chhod kar muj naacheez ke liye yaha ka rukh kiya...aapne apne khubsoorat lafzon se mere is adnaa se kalaam ko chaar chaand laga diye... aapne muje jo izzat bakshi hai uske liye bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... aate rahiye...khush rahiye...


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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
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Lamha ji,

Bahul Achcha khyal aur umda byani hai,

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Well...zara busy huuN aajkal isiliye Sdc ko waqt nahi de paa rahi huuN,

per aapne khaas dawat di hai apni ghazal per kuch kehne ki tou chali aayi..

ehsaas khoobsurat haiN lamha,per ghazal ki techniques me kayi jagah gadbad nazar aayi mujhe, aap tou ghazal ki techniques se acchi tarah se waqif haiN, kayi baar Gtm me bhi hissa liya hai aapne, phir ye ghaltiyaN kaise ho gayi aapse..

3rd sher me aur maqte me kafiye ki gadbad hai....

5th sher me.."taanti" ka meaning...???

khair in choti moti ghaltiyoN ko nazar andaaz kar deiN tou, on the whole ghazal bohat acchi hai...

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
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Yeh sher la jawaab hai..yuhi likhti rahiye...........
Zainy,

bahut bahut shukriya aapka ke aapne apna kimati waqt mere is adnaa se kalaam ko diya... kabhi kabhi ehsaas techniques pe bhari pad jate hai... muje ilm hai techniques ka , koshish karungi ki agli baar aapki umeedon pe khari utar saku.... izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya Zainy.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye.... khush rahiye....


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aadab mahutrama ,,

takhir ke liye mazrath ,, alfaz jab ahesasath ke samundar me gotazan hon ,,to aise hi natije aijad hote hai.N ,,,

ap jaisi sukhan shinas kiss dad ki mahutaj to nahi phir bhi rasman " ,, dad behad o hisab ,, is pur-lutf o puracar takhleeq ke liye dad o mubarak baad ki mustahiq hain .. allah apko khush rakhe ..


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Harash ji,
mai tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu ke aapne apne shayri-e-dard ke gharonde ko chhod kar muj naacheez ke liye yaha ka rukh kiya...aapne apne khubsoorat lafzon se mere is adnaa se kalaam ko chaar chaand laga diye... aapne muje jo izzat bakshi hai uske liye bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... aate rahiye...khush rahiye...
Shukriyana adaaygii bahoot achhi rahi...socha aapke iss qalaam per dii gayii tippani par ek nazer daali jaaye toh paya aapne kaafi der baad apni qalam ko majboor kiya kutchh likhne ko.. ...lekin jo bhi likha uske liye yahi kahooNga ke hamaare lafzoN se nahiN aapko tehreer me bahoot kutchh chhipa hai jo reader samajh sakta hai.....apne sahi farmaya ek jagah..ke ahsaasoN ke aage..technicalities kai baar pheeki paRh jaati haiN.....
Aapki iss Ghazal ka matla hi mujhe kheench ker dubara iss mehfil me le aya....

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


sach kahooN toh rashq hone laga hai ......kitna dumm hai isme...is sher ke bhaaNvoN me...our .kai baar socha iss per kutchh likhoN......isi matle ko kai mukhtalif lafz diye hamne....inhi linoN ko kai martaba naya jaama pehnaya...ek toh yuN raha...

Dekha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
Aahat uske qadmoN ki pehchaanti hun main

or

Dekha nahiN hai tujhko magar jaanti hooN maiN
Aahat Tere qadmoN ki pehchaanti hooN maiN

isse anyatha na leiN..bas yuNhi likh diye.....bahoot hi oomda bhaav liye hue aapka tmaam qalaam baar baar padne ko jee chaha....
our yaqeenan aane waale waqt meiN aap shayri.com per aapke funn ka koi saani na hoga.....likhte rahiyega....God bless you


Khuda aapko apni parchhaiyoN me rakhe..


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Taaveez uske naam ke

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main


jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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Mashallah... wo qayamat hi hogi beshaq jab aap aise nazmon ke saath us anjaane ke saath honge... kuch to zaban ki talkhi kuch andaze bayaan hi ghayal karne me shumaar hain.. baharhaal kalaam ki baat kahen to bakamaal hain iska har ek sher kisi ek sher ki tareef karke poori ghazal ka lutf nahi bigaadna chahta... bas ek guzaridh hai ki yoon hi behtareen kalaamon ke saath aati raha karen... khush rahen. dhero duaaon ke saath ijazat

shaad...


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Lamha Ji .. Namaste !

Aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe ... sabhi ashaar ki saadgi aur maasumiyat ko aakhir tak barqaraar rakhne ki koshish acchi lagi mujhe ... kuch sher mujhe behad pasand aayen ... khaas kar matlaa bahut asardaar laga mujhe ....

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Tahe Dil Se Daad Hazir hai ...

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Beautiful work Lamha Jee.....well no doubt it was too fast pased enjoyed it, please work on Zainy Jee advised.

Thank U

Sajid,

thank u soooooo much..... i sure will work on that... aap yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... khush rahiye....


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aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

Lamhaa Bahut khubsurat......!!! Bahut acha likha hai tumne.......!!! Ye kuch sher mere dil ke kareeb rahe....!!! Aise hi likhti raha karo....!!! Dil se dhero daad hazir haii......!!! Khush raho......!!!

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off late you have been doing very good poetry lamha...........

ye bhi tumhare kalam se nikli acchi tehriro me shamil hai.......
kahi kahi kuch lafz colloquial hai.......chaadar taanna ' kaha tojaa sakta hai magar shayad apke situation me nahi....

lekin in general tumhe itni choti umr me jo adaigi ka knowledge aur talent hai...thats unsurpassed on sdc.

good work but ofcourse you will do better....ye to agaazh hai.......

lage raho lamha sahiba........
Zidd ji,
aapke comments milna mere liye bahut badi baat hai... mere khayaal se sdc pe aapko shayri ki jitni knowledge hai utni to kisi ko bhi nahi... aapne meri is koshish ko sarahne laayak samjha, i m honoured.... shukriya.... shukriya.... shukriya.....
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Taaveez uske naam ke

daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main


Wah kya baat hai.... Kabhi khusi kabhi gam ke Jaya ki tarah


aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main


umdaah sher..ishQ ki gehrai nazar aa rahi hai mohtarama


jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main


Zamaane Ka dar as usual har couple ki tarah... wah bhai yeh bhi bahut khoob rahi..


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main





mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main


Wah kya baat hai.... subhan allah !! arz kiya hai...

tammano ka yeh daur bas yuh hi guzar jaaye..
naam aaye uska aur yeh waqt yuh hi guzar jaaye..!!



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jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
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Taaveez uske naam ke


daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main

aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main

jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main

"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main


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welldone lamha jee
radhe radhe

ye dono sher bahut khoob lage likhti rahen dil se daad
duaon ke saath

aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
Rajinder ji,
Radhe Radhe....

tahe dil se shukra guzaar hu ke aapne meri is koshish ko saraha... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye.... khush rahiye....


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WAh Wah ..

Kya Khoob Likha Hai... Lamha...
Aadi,

shukriya.... bahut bahut shukriya... aapne apna kimati waqt mere is kalaam ko diya, shukriya.... aate rahiye... khush rahiye....


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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main


Lamha Dear,

Its very lovely to read you,
after a long time....

Boht khoobsorat peshakash hai janab,
wese to tamaam ki tamaam ghazal
ache khiyalaat se saji hai,
lekin quoted shair kuch ziyada hi
pasand aaya,

Youhni apne ache ache alfazooN
se ru-ba-ru karaatay rahiye ga,

DuaooN k saath ijaazat,
Hassan,
izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya.... aap jaise pyaare doston ka saath yuhi bana raha to aisi koshishein karne ki gustakhi karti rahungi ... tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu ... yuhi apna saath aur Duaen muj par banaye rakhiye... khush rahiye....


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Good one Lamha..................................
nicely written


Mayoos ji,

yaha aane ka aur meri is koshish ko sarahne ka bahut bahut shukriya... yuhi saath dete rahiye... khush rahiye....


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Lamha jee aadaab.

A poem full of feelings and emotions...

Keep moving forward. Non stop and always.

Keep up the spirit - always.
Mann,

thanx a lot dear... meri is koshish ko pasand karne ka shukriya... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye... aate rahiye.... khush rahiye....


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lamha ji namaste,

kaisi haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hongi..aapki ghazal to achi bann padi hai. jo zainy ji ne aur zidd bhai ne kaha wohi mera bhi kehna hai..

aage aur bhi acha likho..khush aur aabaad raho..god bless u

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
Pradhyuman ,
aapki Dua se mai bilkul thik hu... shukriya...
meri is ghazal ko sarahne ke liye tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu... yakeenan aap sab doston ki kahi gayi baaton pe zaroor gaur karke aur zayada achcha likhne ki puri koshish karungi... aap yuhi saath dete rahiyega... Allah aapko bhi hamesha khush rakhe... aameen


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Dear Lahma, tumne bulaya aur hum chale aaye......


aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main

aise hi ahsaas hote haiN jab hum kisi ko bahut pyar karte haiN aur us se juda hone ka dar har pal rahta hai...bahut acchi tarah se tumne es ahsaas ko bayaaN kiya hai. accha laga tumhe padna


duaoN ke saath
diii
Diiiiiii,
aapne yaha aakar mera hausla hi nahi meri izzat bhi badhayi hai... tahe dil se shukra guzaar hu... aapne bilkul thik kaha diiii ke agar kisi se sachcha pyaar ho to us se bichdne ka darr har pal satata hai ... aapko ye ehsaas pasand aaye, meri mehnat safal hui... yuhi apna pyaar , saath aur Duaen muj par banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye... muskurate rahiye....


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