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Arrow Wo tumko sadaa dete hain.... - 14th November 2010, 12:18 AM

सियाह रातों के सितारे अक्सर जो दिखाई देते हैं,
हाले-दिल बयां करते हैं हमारा भी पूछ लेते हैं.

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

कभी खाक हुइ मयस्सर कभी कतरा नसीबे-जां के,
वो माझी भी ना मिले,जो सफ़ीने पार लगा देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.





Siyaah raato.N ke sitaare aksar jo dikhaaii dete hai.N,
haale-dil bayaa.N karate hain hamara bhii poochh lete hai.N.

Hai kyaa yahii ki,unkii yaado.n mein hii khoe baiThe rahe.N,
mayakadaa nahii door bahut,chalo wahii.n ki raah lete hai.N.

Ho chuke hai.N arse bhii bahut yaraane-mahfile-aadaab ke,
wo bhii hame bhuul chuke honge hum bhii unhe bhulaa dete hai.N.

Kabhii khaak hui mayassar kabhii kataraa naseebe-jaa.N ke,
wo maajhii bhii naa mile, jo safeene paar lagaa dete hai.N.

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.

Goyaa koii nahii.n hai 'shaad' uske paas,ab tumhaare jaisaa,
ye gumaa.n naa karanaa fir bhii ki wo tumko sadaa dete hai.N.




Shaad...


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Siyaah raato.N ke sitaare aksar jo dikhaaii dete hai.N,
haale-dil bayaa.N karate hain hamara bhii poochh lete hai.N.

Hai kyaa yahii ki,unkii yaado.n mein hii khoe baiThe rahe.N,
mayakadaa nahii door bahut,chalo wahii.n ki raah lete hai.N.

Ho chuke hai.N arse bhii bahut yaraane-mahfile-aadaab ke,
wo bhii hame bhuul chuke honge hum bhii unhe bhulaa dete hai.N.

Kabhii khaak hui mayassar kabhii kataraa naseebe-jaa.N ke,
wo maajhii bhii naa mile, jo safeene paar lagaa dete hai.N.

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.

Goyaa koii nahii.n hai 'shaad' uske paas,ab tumhaare jaisaa,
ye gumaa.n naa karanaa fir bhii ki wo tumko sadaa dete hai.N.


Shaad...

kya kaheN shaad saheb?
daad bhi kya deN is qalaam par aapko?
kyuNki jitna bhi ham kaheNge vo kam hi rahega....maza aa gaya padh kar, excellent...shayad ye word bhi kam hai...
aapne bahut kamaal ka likha hai...


'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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14th November 2010, 03:38 AM

Aadaab, Sameer Bhaayi...!

Aarambh main aapki yaha ghazal hamari samajh maiN nahiN aa rahi thi...! Iss alag dhaNg main likhe gaye kalaam paDhne ko kam milte heiN, aap ne acchi mehnat ki aur hameiN pasand aayi...!

Khayaal aur bayaani bahut khuub rahe...!

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Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.


Quoted sher hamaara pasandida hai...!

Aise hi likhte raheiN aur hameiN seekhaate raheiN...!

Take very good care of yourself, ok...?

With blessings



Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai

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Shaad Ji ... Aadaab !

Tehreer ke sabhi ashaar acche lage mujhe ... mushkil sahab ki tarhaa mujhe aapka yeh sher bahut pasand aaya ....

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.


Tahe dil se daad hazir hai ...

aise hi umdaa khayaloN ke saath aate rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath ...




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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shaad bhai
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bahut khoob....dil se daad.......sabhi ashar khoob rahe...likhte rahen mehfil ki raunak badhaate rahen
duaon ke saath


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सियाह रातों के सितारे अक्सर जो दिखाई देते हैं,
हाले-दिल बयां करते हैं हमारा भी पूछ लेते हैं.

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

कभी खाक हुइ मयस्सर कभी कतरा नसीबे-जां के,
वो माझी भी ना मिले,जो सफ़ीने पार लगा देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.




Siyaah raato.N ke sitaare aksar jo dikhaaii dete hai.N,
haale-dil bayaa.N karate hain hamara bhii poochh lete hai.N.

Hai kyaa yahii ki,unkii yaado.n mein hii khoe baiThe rahe.N,
mayakadaa nahii door bahut,chalo wahii.n ki raah lete hai.N.

Ho chuke hai.N arse bhii bahut yaraane-mahfile-aadaab ke,
wo bhii hame bhuul chuke honge hum bhii unhe bhulaa dete hai.N.

Kabhii khaak hui mayassar kabhii kataraa naseebe-jaa.N ke,
wo maajhii bhii naa mile, jo safeene paar lagaa dete hai.N.

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.

Goyaa koii nahii.n hai 'shaad' uske paas,ab tumhaare jaisaa,
ye gumaa.n naa karanaa fir bhii ki wo tumko sadaa dete hai.N.



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aap ne is ghazal me ghazab dhaayaa hai dil ke taaron ko jhanjhanaa gayee
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Bohat khoob mere bhai.......yeh tanziya keh lo ya diljala keh lo sher bohat khoob raha.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

lekin chend bato ka khayaal rakhna zaruri hai mere bhai.......agar majboori bahr ki hai to koi baat nahi lekin agar bebahr ghazal likhi hai to koshish karein ke bahr me.......isse yeh baat hogi ke gair zaruri lafz khud ba khud nikal jayege aur ghazal ki khoobsurti me chaar chaand lag jayege.

Yaha agar aap USKE lafz par gaur kare to yeh lafz poore misre ko bemaza kar raha hai......agar USKI ya usse bhi behtar UNKI hota to behtar hota qke dusre sher me aap ne yahi lafz istemaal kiya hai.......bada ajeeb hota hai jab koi shayer ghazal me kisi ko AAP se fauran TU se mukhatib kare......ya to har jagah TU ho ya har jagah AAP ho. Ek guzarish aur hai aap jo bhi likhe usey waqt dein use baar baar padhe usme sudhaar kare. Aisi mamuli galtiyaa.N to yaqeenan hum sab ke sath hoti hai.

रगों मे उसके

For Eg. TU aur AAP

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.





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kya kaheN shaad saheb?
daad bhi kya deN is qalaam par aapko?
kyuNki jitna bhi ham kaheNge vo kam hi rahega....maza aa gaya padh kar, excellent...shayad ye word bhi kam hai...
aapne bahut kamaal ka likha hai...
Mohtaram janaab VIkram saahab ko shaad ka aadaab, sabe pahle to behad shukrguzaar hoon jo aap yahan pe tashreef laaye aur apne haseen andaze bayaan se kalaam ko nai rooh di hai... aap kuch na kahen koi daad na dein manzoor. par aapka yahan aana hame waqt dena hi zahe-naseeb hai.. arzmand hoon ki yoonhi tashreef laaya karen.. saath dete rahen.
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Aadaab, Sameer Bhaayi...!

Aarambh main aapki yaha ghazal hamari samajh maiN nahiN aa rahi thi...! Iss alag dhaNg main likhe gaye kalaam paDhne ko kam milte heiN, aap ne acchi mehnat ki aur hameiN pasand aayi...!

Khayaal aur bayaani bahut khuub rahe...!




Quoted sher hamaara pasandida hai...!

Aise hi likhte raheiN aur hameiN seekhaate raheiN...!

Take very good care of yourself, ok...?

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danny saahab ko shaad ka aadaab...maafi chahte hain jo samajhane me thodi takleef hui lekin agar aapko ehsaas pasand aaye hain to hum aapke shukar guzaar hain... ama hum kya sikha sakte hain aapko aap to wese bhi ustadon ke ustaad hain. aur bas duaae-talab karte rahiega ki bande ki kalam me bhi aap jaisa hunar aa jaae kisi roz... saath dete rahiega, duaaon ka arzmand..
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Shaad Ji ... Aadaab !

Tehreer ke sabhi ashaar acche lage mujhe ... mushkil sahab ki tarhaa mujhe aapka yeh sher bahut pasand aaya ....

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.


Tahe dil se daad hazir hai ...

aise hi umdaa khayaloN ke saath aate rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...

duaaon ke saath ...


bahot bahot shukriya naresh bhai... aapko pasand aaya hamara likhana aur aap yahan aaye yahi sabse badi khush naseebi hai hamare liye.. bas yoonhi hamesha saath nibhate rahen..
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shaad bhai
radhe radhe

bahut khoob....dil se daad.......sabhi ashar khoob rahe...likhte rahen mehfil ki raunak badhaate rahen
duaon ke saath

rajender bhai.. kais hain aap??

jab jab bhi aap yahan pe aate hain to behad khushi hoti hai aur sach maniye aapka hame padhna aur hame pasand karna hamare liye bahot badi khush naseebi hai... aapko accha lagta hai yahi hamare liye sabse badi daad wali baat hai.. baharhaal shukriya ek bvaar fir se... aate rahiega.
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Sameer Bhai,

Hamesha ki tarah boht hi aala darjay ki
ghazal pesh ki hai, aap ne....

Hur aik shair doosre per bhaari hai....

Aise hi mehfil roshan karte rahiye,

DuaooN k saath ijaazat,


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bahot khoob saahab
aap ne is ghazal me ghazab dhaayaa hai dil ke taaron ko jhanjhanaa gayee
masood hassaas

masood saahab ko hamara aadab arz ho...shukriya huzoor jo hamara kalaam aapko lutf dene ka zariya bana.. aapko accha laga aur aapne apni baat rakhi. isse badi baat aur kya hogi hamare liye..bas guzarish hai ki yoonhi saath dete rahen..
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Bohat khoob mere bhai.......yeh tanziya keh lo ya diljala keh lo sher bohat khoob raha.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

lekin chend bato ka khayaal rakhna zaruri hai mere bhai.......agar majboori bahr ki hai to koi baat nahi lekin agar bebahr ghazal likhi hai to koshish karein ke bahr me.......isse yeh baat hogi ke gair zaruri lafz khud ba khud nikal jayege aur ghazal ki khoobsurti me chaar chaand lag jayege.

Yaha agar aap USKE lafz par gaur kare to yeh lafz poore misre ko bemaza kar raha hai......agar USKI ya usse bhi behtar UNKI hota to behtar hota qke dusre sher me aap ne yahi lafz istemaal kiya hai.......bada ajeeb hota hai jab koi shayer ghazal me kisi ko AAP se fauran TU se mukhatib kare......ya to har jagah TU ho ya har jagah AAP ho. Ek guzarish aur hai aap jo bhi likhe usey waqt dein use baar baar padhe usme sudhaar kare. Aisi mamuli galtiyaa.N to yaqeenan hum sab ke sath hoti hai.

रगों मे उसके

For Eg. TU aur AAP

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.




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sach kahen to sari post me jitne hi replies aaye hon, sabse zyada attractive hame aapka hi reply nazar aaya hai.. aapne kalaam ko itna gaur se itni bareeki se padha hai ki minute si khaamiyaan bhi aapko nazar aa gain hain.. main tahe dil se shukar guzaar hoon aapka.... khair agar technical aspect se dekha jae to yaqinan main galat hoon aur tasleem hai apna gunaah, sar aankhon pe hain hame aapka ilzaam..

main ye nahi kahunga ki janabujh kar maine aisa likha hai, naah... aisa nahi hai.. insaan jab soch ke paron pe sawaar hoke kuch likhta hai to use nazar nahi aata hai ki log kya sochnege.. use bas ye dikhta hai ki dil ke jazbaaton ke saath kotaahi naa ho..

wese sch kahun toaaindah ke liye bhi aapne hame aagah kar diya hai ki use badi bareeki se jaanch loon kai bar fir post karunga... warna jo galtiyaan hamari aankhon se bach gain wo yahan ke ainy nazar wale ustaadon ki aankhon se kabhi na bachengi.... hehehe

khair galtiyaan to hoti hi hain aur hum unhi se seekhte bhi hain...

lekin agar aap dhyaan dein to aisa hum apni zindgi me bhi kya karte hain.. agar humne apni mahbuba ko aap kahkar nawaza hai to kabhi kabhar tu, ya tupe bhi utar aate hain... khaskar ke mahol aur jazbaaon ke hisaanb se hamri baten bhi badalti rahti hain...

aap dekhenge ki last ke pahle ke sheron me shayr ki majburi jhalak rahi hai kuch sheron me bebasi aur khaaskar ke last ke do sheron me shayar tanziya ho gaya hai.. yoon mano ki apne ghamon se haar man gaya ho, isliye ho sakta hai tanz me usne unhe .. unki ki jagah uski ho gaya ho... baharhaal ye baton ki baten hain.. raha sawaal kalaam ka to hum bhi vaada karte hain hi aage se aapko kabhi shiqayat ka mauka na dein.. shukriya ek baar fir se

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aapki ghazal bahut pasand aayi hame sahab.....

apka maqta khas taur behad paand aaya

daad haazir hai qabool kijiye

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Sameer Bhai,

Hamesha ki tarah boht hi aala darjay ki
ghazal pesh ki hai, aap ne....

Hur aik shair doosre per bhaari hai....

Aise hi mehfil roshan karte rahiye,

DuaooN k saath ijaazat,


aapka behad shukriya hassan bhai..aapki nazar ki baat hai bhai warna ye nacheez to ek adna sa khidmatgaar hai bas... aapne pasand kiya hamari khush naseebi hai. yoon hi saath dete rahen... aate rahen.
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सियाह रातों के सितारे अक्सर जो दिखाई देते हैं,
हाले-दिल बयां करते हैं हमारा भी पूछ लेते हैं.

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

कभी खाक हुइ मयस्सर कभी कतरा नसीबे-जां के,
वो माझी भी ना मिले,जो सफ़ीने पार लगा देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.

Shaad...

Shaad,

bahut khoob ! aapke ehsaas dil chhuu gaye aur andaaz-e-bayaan bahut kamaal raha... baar baar padha aapka ye kalaam,par har baar kuch naya sa laga... is behtarin tehreer pe dil se daad hazir hai... yuhi likhte rahiye.... khush rahiye...


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सियाह रातों के सितारे अक्सर जो दिखाई देते हैं,
हाले-दिल बयां करते हैं हमारा भी पूछ लेते हैं.

है क्या यही कि,उनकी यादों में ही खोए बैठे रहें,
मयकदा नही दूर बहुत,चलो वहीं कि राह लेते हैं.

हो चुके हैं अर्से भी बहुत याराने-मह्फ़िले-आदाब के,
वो भी हमे भूल चुके होंगे हुम भी उन्हे भुला देते हैं.

कभी खाक हुइ मयस्सर कभी कतरा नसीबे-जां के,
वो माझी भी ना मिले,जो सफ़ीने पार लगा देते हैं.

हम ज़हर की मनिन्द सही,रगों मे उसके बह्ते रहें,
हर ज़ख्म से याद हमारी आए बस इतनी दुआ देते हैं.

ग़ोया कोई नहीं है 'शाद'उसके पास,अब तुम्हारे जैसा,
ये गुमां ना करना फ़िर भी कि वो तुम्को सदा देते हैं.





Siyaah raato.N ke sitaare aksar jo dikhaaii dete hai.N,
haale-dil bayaa.N karate hain hamara bhii poochh lete hai.N.

Hai kyaa yahii ki,unkii yaado.n mein hii khoe baiThe rahe.N,
mayakadaa nahii door bahut,chalo wahii.n ki raah lete hai.N.

Ho chuke hai.N arse bhii bahut yaraane-mahfile-aadaab ke,
wo bhii hame bhuul chuke honge hum bhii unhe bhulaa dete hai.N.

Kabhii khaak hui mayassar kabhii kataraa naseebe-jaa.N ke,
wo maajhii bhii naa mile, jo safeene paar lagaa dete hai.N.

Ham zahar kii manind sahii,rago.n me usake bahte rahe.N,
har zakhm se yaad hamaarii aae bas itanii duaa dete hai.N.

Goyaa koii nahii.n hai 'shaad' uske paas,ab tumhaare jaisaa,
ye gumaa.n naa karanaa fir bhii ki wo tumko sadaa dete hai.N.




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bahut khoob ! aapke ehsaas dil chhuu gaye aur andaaz-e-bayaan bahut kamaal raha... baar baar padha aapka ye kalaam,par har baar kuch naya sa laga... is behtarin tehreer pe dil se daad hazir hai... yuhi likhte rahiye.... khush rahiye...

lamhaa jee aap tashreef laain aur hame pasand bhi kiyaa isse zyada khush naseebi aur kya hogi hamaare liye.. aapko ehsaason se rubaroo kara sake yahi bahot tha hame..aapne bar baar padha hame baar baar sukoon pahucha... daad dene ke liye dheron shukriya... yoon hi saath banaae rakhen.. khush rahen.
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bahut khoob
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waah!waah!waah!
Raziya saahiba aap tashreef laain yahi zahe-naseeb shaad ko.. aapne pasand kiya khushkismati hamari.. aapko nacheez ka likha hua kuch bhi acchaa lage isse badhkar khushi aur kya hogi humko... bas guzaarish hai ki yoonhi saath detee rahen.. aapka dost

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