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29th October 2010, 07:25 PM
Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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29th October 2010, 07:27 PM
wah waah waaah......bahut khub lamha !!!
accha likha hai tumne ishq se bharpur bhi hai ......waise to bahut kuch kahna tha par kabhi kabhi kuch na kahna hi theek hota hai .......
aapka.....
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Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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2nd November 2010, 06:52 PM
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wah waah waaah......bahut khub lamha !!!
accha likha hai tumne ishq se bharpur bhi hai ......waise to bahut kuch kahna tha par kabhi kabhi kuch na kahna hi theek hota hai .......
aapka.....
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izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya dear... aapko meri ye koshish pasand aayi, meri mehnat safal hui... aapne kuch bhi naa keh kar bhi sab kuch keh diya... kabhi kabhi apne ehsaas kisi ke dil tak pahuchane ke liye lafzon ki zaroorat nahi rehti... tahe dil se aap ka shukriya.... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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2nd November 2010, 10:25 PM
hmmmmmmmmm...aapko pata hai jab insaan ke paas kahne ko koi shabd nahi hote to iska matlab hota hai k wo aapse kuch sach kahna chahta hai par kah nahi pa raha hai...kahenge jarur kahenge aapse nahi kahenge to kisse kahenge....hmmmmmmmm
Na tha main to khuda tha, kuch na hota to khuda hota?
mitaya mujh ko hone ne, na hota main to kya hota !! (NM)
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2nd November 2010, 10:45 PM
Dear Lahma, tumne bulaya aur hum chale aaye......
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
aise hi ahsaas hote haiN jab hum kisi ko bahut pyar karte haiN aur us se juda hone ka dar har pal rahta hai...bahut acchi tarah se tumne es ahsaas ko bayaaN kiya hai. accha laga tumhe padna
duaoN ke saath
diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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11th November 2010, 07:53 PM
Diiiiiii,
aapne yaha aakar mera hausla hi nahi meri izzat bhi badhayi hai... tahe dil se shukra guzaar hu... aapne bilkul thik kaha diiii ke agar kisi se sachcha pyaar ho to us se bichdne ka darr har pal satata hai ... aapko ye ehsaas pasand aaye, meri mehnat safal hui... yuhi apna pyaar , saath aur Duaen muj par banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye... muskurate rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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14th November 2010, 03:03 PM
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Ji .. Very Nice ...................................
Radhika
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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17th November 2010, 08:10 PM
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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Ji .. Very Nice ...................................
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Radhika ji,
aapka bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi aati rahiye.... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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29th October 2010, 08:00 PM
Lamha ji....adaab..kaise haiN aap?....shayari Ishq meiN mujhe aaye ek arsa hi ho gaya....mera GharoNda toh shayri-e-dard hi raha hai....lekin aaj yahaaN aaker mujhe niraash nahi hona pada.....kitni Khobbsoorat tehreer se nawaza hai aapne lamha ji.....
jo topic aapne liya hai usey apne shabdoN se itna nikhara hai ke dil ko chhoo sa gaya....umeed hai aisi rachnaayeiN our bhi padne ko mileNgii...
aapki peshkash meiN..Matle ne dil ko baaNd ke rakh diya hai........mazboor kerta hai poori intekhaab ko aankhoN se utara jaaye...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad wasool paaiyega.....
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3rd November 2010, 07:08 PM
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Lamha ji....adaab..kaise haiN aap?....shayari Ishq meiN mujhe aaye ek arsa hi ho gaya....mera GharoNda toh shayri-e-dard hi raha hai....lekin aaj yahaaN aaker mujhe niraash nahi hona pada.....kitni Khobbsoorat tehreer se nawaza hai aapne lamha ji.....
jo topic aapne liya hai usey apne shabdoN se itna nikhara hai ke dil ko chhoo sa gaya....umeed hai aisi rachnaayeiN our bhi padne ko mileNgii...
aapki peshkash meiN..Matle ne dil ko baaNd ke rakh diya hai........mazboor kerta hai poori intekhaab ko aankhoN se utara jaaye...merii jaanib se dhairoN daad wasool paaiyega.....
Harash
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Harash ji,
mai tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu ke aapne apne shayri-e-dard ke gharonde ko chhod kar muj naacheez ke liye yaha ka rukh kiya...aapne apne khubsoorat lafzon se mere is adnaa se kalaam ko chaar chaand laga diye... aapne muje jo izzat bakshi hai uske liye bahut bahut shukriya.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... aate rahiye...khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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6th November 2010, 05:22 PM
Shukriyana adaaygii bahoot achhi rahi...socha aapke iss qalaam per dii gayii tippani par ek nazer daali jaaye toh paya aapne kaafi der baad apni qalam ko majboor kiya kutchh likhne ko.. ...lekin jo bhi likha uske liye yahi kahooNga ke hamaare lafzoN se nahiN aapko tehreer me bahoot kutchh chhipa hai jo reader samajh sakta hai.....apne sahi farmaya ek jagah..ke ahsaasoN ke aage..technicalities kai baar pheeki paRh jaati haiN.....
Aapki iss Ghazal ka matla hi mujhe kheench ker dubara iss mehfil me le aya....
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
sach kahooN toh rashq hone laga hai ......kitna dumm hai isme...is sher ke bhaaNvoN me...our .kai baar socha iss per kutchh likhoN......isi matle ko kai mukhtalif lafz diye hamne....inhi linoN ko kai martaba naya jaama pehnaya...ek toh yuN raha...
Dekha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
Aahat uske qadmoN ki pehchaanti hun main
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Dekha nahiN hai tujhko magar jaanti hooN maiN
Aahat Tere qadmoN ki pehchaanti hooN maiN
isse anyatha na leiN..bas yuNhi likh diye.....bahoot hi oomda bhaav liye hue aapka tmaam qalaam baar baar padne ko jee chaha....
our yaqeenan aane waale waqt meiN aap shayri.com per aapke funn ka koi saani na hoga.....likhte rahiyega....God bless you
Khuda aapko apni parchhaiyoN me rakhe..
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17th November 2010, 07:50 PM
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Shukriyana adaaygii bahoot achhi rahi...socha aapke iss qalaam per dii gayii tippani par ek nazer daali jaaye toh paya aapne kaafi der baad apni qalam ko majboor kiya kutchh likhne ko.. ...lekin jo bhi likha uske liye yahi kahooNga ke hamaare lafzoN se nahiN aapko tehreer me bahoot kutchh chhipa hai jo reader samajh sakta hai.....apne sahi farmaya ek jagah..ke ahsaasoN ke aage..technicalities kai baar pheeki paRh jaati haiN.....
Aapki iss Ghazal ka matla hi mujhe kheench ker dubara iss mehfil me le aya....
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
sach kahooN toh rashq hone laga hai ......kitna dumm hai isme...is sher ke bhaaNvoN me...our .kai baar socha iss per kutchh likhoN......isi matle ko kai mukhtalif lafz diye hamne....inhi linoN ko kai martaba naya jaama pehnaya...ek toh yuN raha...
Dekha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
Aahat uske qadmoN ki pehchaanti hun main
or
Dekha nahiN hai tujhko magar jaanti hooN maiN
Aahat Tere qadmoN ki pehchaanti hooN maiN
isse anyatha na leiN..bas yuNhi likh diye.....bahoot hi oomda bhaav liye hue aapka tmaam qalaam baar baar padne ko jee chaha....
our yaqeenan aane waale waqt meiN aap shayri.com per aapke funn ka koi saani na hoga.....likhte rahiyega....God bless you
Khuda aapko apni parchhaiyoN me rakhe..
Harash
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mai aapka jitna bhi shukriya adaa karu utna hi kam hai..... aapne yakeenan is naacheez ko bahut zayada izzat bakshi hai... aap ka yaha dobara aana mere liye khushi ka sabab hai... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... hamesha khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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29th October 2010, 11:16 PM
Well...zara busy huuN aajkal isiliye Sdc ko waqt nahi de paa rahi huuN,
per aapne khaas dawat di hai apni ghazal per kuch kehne ki tou chali aayi..
ehsaas khoobsurat haiN lamha,per ghazal ki techniques me kayi jagah gadbad nazar aayi mujhe, aap tou ghazal ki techniques se acchi tarah se waqif haiN, kayi baar Gtm me bhi hissa liya hai aapne, phir ye ghaltiyaN kaise ho gayi aapse..
3rd sher me aur maqte me kafiye ki gadbad hai....
5th sher me.."taanti" ka meaning...???
khair in choti moti ghaltiyoN ko nazar andaaz kar deiN tou, on the whole ghazal bohat acchi hai...
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
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Yeh sher la jawaab hai..yuhi likhti rahiye...........
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4th November 2010, 06:41 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 05:00 AM
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Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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Lamha jii aapki ghazal nazar nawaaz huii matle se laikar maqte tak bhut hi khoob aashaaroN se nawaaza hai aapne, khaas kar ke malta yaqeenan bhut hi khoob raha aur teesra sher javeez wala bhi bhut hi khoob raha, sar se pa tak ghazal bhut aur bhut hi khoob, is dilkash takhleeq ke liyn aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai with reps ++++ qubool keejiye
aslam
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behta dariya hu.n mujhy haath se choo kar daikho
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30th October 2010, 08:31 AM
Lamha Ji .. Namaste !
Aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe ... sabhi ashaar ki saadgi aur maasumiyat ko aakhir tak barqaraar rakhne ki koshish acchi lagi mujhe ... kuch sher mujhe behad pasand aayen ... khaas kar matlaa bahut asardaar laga mujhe ....
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
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Tahe Dil Se Daad Hazir hai ...
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aise hi likhti rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...
duaaon ke saath ....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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9th November 2010, 06:59 PM
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Lamha Ji .. Namaste !
Aapki Ghazal ke ehsaas bahut khoobsurat lage mujhe ... sabhi ashaar ki saadgi aur maasumiyat ko aakhir tak barqaraar rakhne ki koshish acchi lagi mujhe ... kuch sher mujhe behad pasand aayen ... khaas kar matlaa bahut asardaar laga mujhe ....
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
Tahe Dil Se Daad Hazir hai ...
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aise hi likhti rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen ...
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Naresh ji,
aapne muj naacheez ki adnaa si tehreer ko saraha uske liye mai tahe dil se aapki shukra-guzaar hu... aapne hamesha hi mera saath nibhaya hai... bas yuhi apna saath aur apni Dua'en mujpar banaye rakhiyega... rep + ka bhi bahut bahut shukriya... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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8th November 2010, 07:39 PM
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Lamha jii aapki ghazal nazar nawaaz huii matle se laikar maqte tak bhut hi khoob aashaaroN se nawaaza hai aapne, khaas kar ke malta yaqeenan bhut hi khoob raha aur teesra sher javeez wala bhi bhut hi khoob raha, sar se pa tak ghazal bhut aur bhut hi khoob, is dilkash takhleeq ke liyn aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai with reps ++++ qubool keejiye
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Aslam,
izzat afzai ka bahut bahut shukriya... ye to aap jaise doston ki nawazish hai ke mai kuch likhne ke kaabil ban saki hu...... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... rep ke liye bhi bahut bahut shukriya... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 09:52 AM
Beautiful work Lamha Jee.....well no doubt it was too fast pased enjoyed it, please work on Zainy Jee advised.
Thank U
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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9th November 2010, 07:01 PM
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Beautiful work Lamha Jee.....well no doubt it was too fast pased enjoyed it, please work on Zainy Jee advised.
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Sajid,
thank u soooooo much..... i sure will work on that... aap yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 10:23 AM
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Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Lamhaa Bahut khubsurat......!!! Bahut acha likha hai tumne.......!!! Ye kuch sher mere dil ke kareeb rahe....!!! Aise hi likhti raha karo....!!! Dil se dhero daad hazir haii......!!! Khush raho......!!!
Waise itne din se kahan gaayab thi...... Aate hi kamaal kar diyaa.....!!!
Tumhari dost
Kavita
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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9th November 2010, 07:04 PM
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daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Lamhaa Bahut khubsurat......!!! Bahut acha likha hai tumne.......!!! Ye kuch sher mere dil ke kareeb rahe....!!! Aise hi likhti raha karo....!!! Dil se dhero daad hazir haii......!!! Khush raho......!!!
Waise itne din se kahan gaayab thi...... Aate hi kamaal kar diyaa.....!!!
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Kavita,
tumhe yaha dekh kar bahut bahut khushi hui... tumhare comments aur daad mere sar-aankho par... tumhe to maloom hi tha na ke mai kaha thi...... meri is koshish ko pasand karne ke liye tahe dil se shukra-guzaar hu... yuhi saath deti rehna.... khush raho... hamesha muskurati raho....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 11:37 AM
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Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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off late you have been doing very good poetry lamha...........
ye bhi tumhare kalam se nikli acchi tehriro me shamil hai.......
kahi kahi kuch lafz colloquial hai.......chaadar taanna ' kaha tojaa sakta hai magar shayad apke situation me nahi....
lekin in general tumhe itni choti umr me jo adaigi ka knowledge aur talent hai...thats unsurpassed on sdc.
good work but ofcourse you will do better....ye to agaazh hai.......
lage raho lamha sahiba........
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9th November 2010, 07:11 PM
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off late you have been doing very good poetry lamha...........
ye bhi tumhare kalam se nikli acchi tehriro me shamil hai.......
kahi kahi kuch lafz colloquial hai.......chaadar taanna ' kaha tojaa sakta hai magar shayad apke situation me nahi....
lekin in general tumhe itni choti umr me jo adaigi ka knowledge aur talent hai...thats unsurpassed on sdc.
good work but ofcourse you will do better....ye to agaazh hai.......
lage raho lamha sahiba........
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Zidd ji,
aapke comments milna mere liye bahut badi baat hai... mere khayaal se sdc pe aapko shayri ki jitni knowledge hai utni to kisi ko bhi nahi... aapne meri is koshish ko sarahne laayak samjha, i m honoured.... shukriya.... shukriya.... shukriya.....
mai puri koshish karungi ke aapki umeedon pe khari utar saku...
bas yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 01:00 PM
welldone lamha jee
radhe radhe
ye dono sher bahut khoob lage likhti rahen dil se daad
duaon ke saath
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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11th November 2010, 07:36 PM
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welldone lamha jee
radhe radhe
ye dono sher bahut khoob lage likhti rahen dil se daad
duaon ke saath
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
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Rajinder ji,
Radhe Radhe....
tahe dil se shukra guzaar hu ke aapne meri is koshish ko saraha... aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 09:42 PM
WAh Wah ..
Kya Khoob Likha Hai... Lamha...
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11th November 2010, 07:38 PM
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WAh Wah ..
Kya Khoob Likha Hai... Lamha...
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Aadi,
shukriya.... bahut bahut shukriya... aapne apna kimati waqt mere is kalaam ko diya, shukriya.... aate rahiye... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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30th October 2010, 09:55 PM
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Lamha Dear,
Its very lovely to read you,
after a long time....
Boht khoobsorat peshakash hai janab,
wese to tamaam ki tamaam ghazal
ache khiyalaat se saji hai,
lekin quoted shair kuch ziyada hi
pasand aaya,
Youhni apne ache ache alfazooN
se ru-ba-ru karaatay rahiye ga,
DuaooN k saath ijaazat,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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11th November 2010, 07:41 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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30th October 2010, 10:07 PM
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Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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Good one Lamha..................................
nicely written
ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं
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30th October 2010, 11:25 PM
Lamha jee aadaab.
A poem full of feelings and emotions...
Keep moving forward. Non stop and always.
Keep up the spirit - always.
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11th November 2010, 07:45 PM
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Lamha jee aadaab.
A poem full of feelings and emotions...
Keep moving forward. Non stop and always.
Keep up the spirit - always.
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Mann,
thanx a lot dear... meri is koshish ko pasand karne ka shukriya... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiye... aate rahiye.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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11th November 2010, 07:43 PM
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Good one Lamha..................................
nicely written
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Mayoos ji,
yaha aane ka aur meri is koshish ko sarahne ka bahut bahut shukriya... yuhi saath dete rahiye... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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31st October 2010, 11:23 AM
lamha ji namaste,
kaisi haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hongi..aapki ghazal to achi bann padi hai. jo zainy ji ne aur zidd bhai ne kaha wohi mera bhi kehna hai..
aage aur bhi acha likho..khush aur aabaad raho..god bless u
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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11th November 2010, 07:49 PM
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lamha ji namaste,
kaisi haiN aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hongi..aapki ghazal to achi bann padi hai. jo zainy ji ne aur zidd bhai ne kaha wohi mera bhi kehna hai..
aage aur bhi acha likho..khush aur aabaad raho..god bless u
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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Pradhyuman ,
aapki Dua se mai bilkul thik hu... shukriya...
meri is ghazal ko sarahne ke liye tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu... yakeenan aap sab doston ki kahi gayi baaton pe zaroor gaur karke aur zayada achcha likhne ki puri koshish karungi... aap yuhi saath dete rahiyega... Allah aapko bhi hamesha khush rakhe... aameen
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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3rd November 2010, 04:08 AM
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Taaveez uske naam ke
daikha nahi hai usko magar jaanti hun main
qadmoN ki aahatoN se pehchaanti hun main
aa aa ke basta rehta hai khwaaboN mai wo mere
shamil hai meri zaat mai haan maanti hun main
jab mil rahenge hum tum, kya vasl e qayamat hogi
un aamatoN ke darr se pareshaan si hun main
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
mujh mai usi ka aks phaila hai chaar soo
chaadar ab uski yaad ki lo taanti hun main
"Lamha" wo keh raha hai deewani ho gayiN kya?
Keh do ke khud mai shamil teri jaan si hun main
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aadaab
bahot khoob bahot hi khoob mashallah subhaanallaah
kalaam bhi umdah hai khayaalaat me bhi farzaanagee ka uncur nomaayaan hai ehsaasaat ne sardee ki dhoop ki tarah dheere dheere jazbaat ka lebaadah orhaa aor talaatum ki kaifiyat paidaa kardee
tahe dil se daad haazir hai
masood hassaas
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11th November 2010, 07:57 PM
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aadaab
bahot khoob bahot hi khoob mashallah subhaanallaah
kalaam bhi umdah hai khayaalaat me bhi farzaanagee ka uncur nomaayaan hai ehsaasaat ne sardee ki dhoop ki tarah dheere dheere jazbaat ka lebaadah orhaa aor talaatum ki kaifiyat paidaa kardee
tahe dil se daad haazir hai
masood hassaas
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Hassas ji, aadaab....
aapne apne pyaare pyaare lafzon se mere is kalaam ko aur bhi zayada haseen bana diya... in ehsaason ko samajhne aur sarahne ke liye tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu... aapne yaha aakar muj naa-cheez ko izzat bakshi hai...aapki daad mere sar-aankho par... yuhi saath dete rahiyega...khush rahiye...
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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4th November 2010, 10:32 AM
aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Lamha ji,
Bahul Achcha khyal aur umda byani hai,
Anaarhi
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11th November 2010, 07:58 PM
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aisa na ho ke mil kar mujhse juda ho wo
taaveez uske naam ke ab baandhti hun main
Lamha ji,
Bahul Achcha khyal aur umda byani hai,
Anaarhi
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Anaarhi ji,
bahut bahut shukriya ... yuhi saath dete rahiye.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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