êbaarat-e-aSHqiya

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

Mast sahab ke huqm ki tameel karte huee ye sher bazm ko nazar kar raha hoon.... lafz Mausam ko dhyaan me rakhte hue....


koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa,
jis din hamaarii aankh se baarish nahee hotee........!!

Shaad.....

Wah bhai behad khoob, aapke is sher ne dil ko chuu liyaa...

koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa,
jis din hamaarii aankh se baarish nahee hotee........!!

dekhne ko yun to nazaare hai aur bhi kitne,
tere sivaa dil mein koi khwaaish nahee hotee.........!!

[Hassan]

Originally Posted by mast

Bahut khoob sher hua hai Hassan bhai, umeed hai jald hi aapki ghazal bhi sunne ko mileGii..dua Go

bohat bohat shukriyaa Mast bhai..

jee insha Allah .. zaroor jald hi hazri hooN ga meHfil meiN

[Madhu 14]

Lafz mausam par ek khyaal pesh hai..

Vo mausam ki jaise badalta hai pal pal
magar dil ko bhate hain sab rang uske..

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by Madhu 14

Lafz mausam par ek khyaal pesh hai..

Vo mausam ki jaise badalta hai pal pal
magar dil ko bhate hain sab rang uske..

Bahut khoob Madhu, kitni gehri baat keh gayi aap is sher mein...mazaa aa gaya padh kar. Isi ke aage koshish ki hai maine..gustaakhi maauf

khwaab hai ki palkein jhapakte nahiN haiN
yunhi aate jaate hai sab rang uske..

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by mast

Bahut khoob Madhu, kitni gehri baat keh gayi aap is sher mein...mazaa aa gaya padh kar. Isi ke aage koshish ki hai maine..gustaakhi maauf

khwaab hai ki palkein jhapakte nahiN haiN
yunhi aate jaate hai sab rang uske..

Shukraguzar hoon aapki inayton ke liye mast ji...aur
waaaah kya khoob ehsason ko lafz de diye aapne....
Bahut khoob..

[Madhu 14]

Lafz mausam pe 3 ya 4 sher hee aaye hain bas aap sab se guzarish hai ki apne khyalon ko pankh dein aur ebarat e ashqiya me shirkat karein.....

Mast jee agla lafz se rubruu karayein mahfil ko....

[bhushan]

Sukhe pttoN ki barisho ka mausam badlega
Surkh badloN se guzarishoN ka mausam badlega
Kudrat tarsati hai tuzhe boond boond ko magar
Tere housale k age udasi ka mausam badlega

Bhushan Joshi

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by Madhu 14

Lafz mausam pe 3 ya 4 sher hee aaye hain bas aap sab se guzarish hai ki apne khyalon ko pankh dein aur ebarat e ashqiya me shirkat karein.....

Mast jee agla lafz se rubruu karayein mahfil ko....

Madhu ji - aane dijiye isi lafz par kuch aur doston ki peshkash aur phir naya alfaaz bhi diyaa jaayegaa

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by bhushan

Sukhe pttoN ki barisho ka mausam badlega
Surkh badloN se guzarishoN ka mausam badlega
Kudrat tarsati hai tuzhe boond boond ko magar
Tere housale k age udasi ka mausam badlega

Bhushan Joshi

Bahut khoob Bhushan ji, kya baat kahi hai Wah Wah !!

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by mast

Madhu ji - aane dijiye isi lafz par kuch aur doston ki peshkash aur phir naya alfaaz bhi diyaa jaayegaa

Behtar hai janaab....................

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by bhushan

Sukhe pttoN ki barisho ka mausam badlega
Surkh badloN se guzarishoN ka mausam badlega
Kudrat tarsati hai tuzhe boond boond ko magar
Tere housale k age udasi ka mausam badlega

Bhushan Joshi

Waaah..bahut khoob khyaal pesh kiya bhushan ji......
.
aate rahiye.....

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by bhushan

Sukhe pttoN ki barisho ka mausam badlega
Surkh badloN se guzarishoN ka mausam badlega
Kudrat tarsati hai tuzhe boond boond ko magar
Tere housale k age udasi ka mausam badlega

Bhushan Joshi

waahh kyaa baat hai bhushan bhai............ bahut khoob.....

[sameer'shaad']

lafz Mausam pe ek she arz hai.......


ek mausam zindagee kaa aapke sang kyaa huaa,
baaad uske saare mausam aapkii yaadon ke they...

Shaad....

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

lafz Mausam pe ek she arz hai.......


ek mausam zindagee kaa aapke sang kyaa huaa,
baaad uske saare mausam aapkii yaadon ke they...

Shaad....

waaaaaaah! waah!....bahut hee khoob sher kaha hai shaad ji...

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by Madhu 14

waaaaaaah! waah!....bahut hee khoob sher kaha hai shaad ji...

inaayat mohtarmaa..........................

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

lafz Mausam pe ek she arz hai.......


ek mausam zindagee kaa aapke sang kyaa huaa,
baaad uske saare mausam aapkii yaadon ke they...

Shaad....

Bahut khoob sher hua hai bhai, daad qubool farmaye

[bhushan]

Originally Posted by mast

Bahut khoob Bhushan ji, kya baat kahi hai Wah Wah !!

Shukriya mast bhai......

Inayat banaye rakhiyega
Aapka apna
Bhushan

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by mast

Bahut khoob sher hua hai bhai, daad qubool farmaye

behad shukriyaa mast saahab......... inaayaten...

[bhushan]

Originally Posted by mast

Wah bhai behad khoob, aapke is sher ne dil ko chuu liyaa...

koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa,
jis din hamaarii aankh se baarish nahee hotee........!!

dekhne ko yun to nazaare hai aur bhi kitne,
tere sivaa dil mein koi khwaaish nahee hotee.........!!

Behad dilkash sher hue.N haiN aap dono hazrat ke........bhai waah....maza aa gaya

[bhushan]

Aaj ka sher

Kuch is tarah my Aap k bin rah gaya
Bin pankhud.ii k jaise koi phool rah gaya

Bhushan

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by bhushan

Aaj ka sher

Kuch is tarah my Aap k bin rah gaya
Bin pankhud.ii k jaise koi phool rah gaya

Bhushan

Bhai lagta hai aapne yeh sher of the day thread ke liye likhaa tha...

[Qasid]

Mausam lafz par ek koshish bazm ki nazar............

vo parbat vo mausam vo dilkash nazaare
vo baadal ke saaye vo lehron ke dhaare

vo jheelon ka paani vo raaton ke taare
abhi yaad mujhko hai saare ke saare

Muhabbat mein kab thi zubaan ki zaroorat
samajhte they hum tum nazar ke ishaare

yun dhalte the din justjuu mein tumhari
guzarti thi shaamein tumhare sahaare

kabhi to bataao mujhe aake jaanam
kahan kho gaye vo dilkash nazaare

nami si nighaahon mein hai ab bhi baaki
yun lagta hai koi mujhe phir pukaare


वो पर्बत वो मौसम वो दिलकश नज़ारे
वो बादल के साये वो लहरों के धारे

वो झीलों का पानी वो रातों के तारे
अभी याद मुझको है सारे के सारे

मुहब्बत में कब थी जुबां की ज़रुरत
समझते थे हम तुम नज़र के इशारे

यूँ ढलते थे दिन जुस्तजू में तुम्हारी
गुज़रती थी शामें तुम्हारे सहारे

कभी तो बताओ मुझे आके जानम
कहाँ खो गए वो दिलकश नज़ारे

नमी सी निग़ाहों में है अब भी बाकी
यूँ लगता है कोई मुझे फिर पुकारे

[Hamdam]

Bahut kalam pesh kiya ..mast bhai dil se daad..

Sanjay Sehgal

[bhushan]

Originally Posted by mast

Bhai lagta hai aapne yeh sher of the day thread ke liye likhaa tha...

Aapne bilkul theek samzha Mast bhai....muafi chahunga....

[bhushan]

Originally Posted by mast

Mausam lafz par ek koshish bazm ki nazar............

vo parbat vo mausam vo dilkash nazaare
vo baadal ke saaye vo lehron ke dhaare

vo jheelon ka paani vo raaton ke taare
abhi yaad mujhko hai saare ke saare

Muhabbat mein kab thi zubaan ki zaroorat
samajhte they hum tum nazar ke ishaare

yun dhalte the din justjuu mein tumhari
guzarti thi shaamein tumhare sahaare

kabhi to bataao mujhe aake jaanam
kahan kho gaye vo dilkash nazaare

nami si nighaahon mein hai ab bhi baaki
yun lagta hai koi mujhe phir pukaare


वो पर्बत वो मौसम वो दिलकश नज़ारे
वो बादल के साये वो लहरों के धारे

वो झीलों का पानी वो रातों के तारे
अभी याद मुझको है सारे के सारे

मुहब्बत में कब थी जुबां की ज़रुरत
समझते थे हम तुम नज़र के इशारे

यूँ ढलते थे दिन जुस्तजू में तुम्हारी
गुज़रती थी शामें तुम्हारे सहारे

कभी तो बताओ मुझे आके जानम
कहाँ खो गए वो दिलकश नज़ारे

नमी सी निग़ाहों में है अब भी बाकी
यूँ लगता है कोई मुझे फिर पुकारे

Bohot bohot khoob Mast bhai,

Kyaaa baat hai maza aa gaya

Daad kubul farmaiyega

Aapka apna
Bhushan

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by mast

Mausam lafz par ek koshish bazm ki nazar............

vo parbat vo mausam vo dilkash nazaare
vo baadal ke saaye vo lehron ke dhaare

vo jheelon ka paani vo raaton ke taare
abhi yaad mujhko hai saare ke saare

Muhabbat mein kab thi zubaan ki zaroorat
samajhte they hum tum nazar ke ishaare

yun dhalte the din justjuu mein tumhari
guzarti thi shaamein tumhare sahaare

kabhi to bataao mujhe aake jaanam
kahan kho gaye vo dilkash nazaare

nami si nighaahon mein hai ab bhi baaki
yun lagta hai koi mujhe phir pukaare


वो पर्बत वो मौसम वो दिलकश नज़ारे
वो बादल के साये वो लहरों के धारे

वो झीलों का पानी वो रातों के तारे
अभी याद मुझको है सारे के सारे

मुहब्बत में कब थी जुबां की ज़रुरत
समझते थे हम तुम नज़र के इशारे

यूँ ढलते थे दिन जुस्तजू में तुम्हारी
गुज़रती थी शामें तुम्हारे सहारे

कभी तो बताओ मुझे आके जानम
कहाँ खो गए वो दिलकश नज़ारे

नमी सी निग़ाहों में है अब भी बाकी
यूँ लगता है कोई मुझे फिर पुकारे

Lafz mausam ka itna khoobsoorat istemaal....waaah anu ji...superb....dil khush ho gaya padhkar...

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by mast

Mausam lafz par ek koshish bazm ki nazar............

vo parbat vo mausam vo dilkash nazaare
vo baadal ke saaye vo lehron ke dhaare

vo jheelon ka paani vo raaton ke taare
abhi yaad mujhko hai saare ke saare

Muhabbat mein kab thi zubaan ki zaroorat
samajhte they hum tum nazar ke ishaare

yun dhalte the din justjuu mein tumhari
guzarti thi shaamein tumhare sahaare

kabhi to bataao mujhe aake jaanam
kahan kho gaye vo dilkash nazaare

nami si nighaahon mein hai ab bhi baaki
yun lagta hai koi mujhe phir pukaare


वो पर्बत वो मौसम वो दिलकश नज़ारे
वो बादल के साये वो लहरों के धारे

वो झीलों का पानी वो रातों के तारे
अभी याद मुझको है सारे के सारे

मुहब्बत में कब थी जुबां की ज़रुरत
समझते थे हम तुम नज़र के इशारे

यूँ ढलते थे दिन जुस्तजू में तुम्हारी
गुज़रती थी शामें तुम्हारे सहारे

कभी तो बताओ मुझे आके जानम
कहाँ खो गए वो दिलकश नज़ारे

नमी सी निग़ाहों में है अब भी बाकी
यूँ लगता है कोई मुझे फिर पुकारे

ahhaaa ise kahte hain kalaam nahii kamaal huaa hais is baar Mast saahab.......

itnaa free flow kaalaam shaayad aapki kalam se pahlii baar niklaa hai..... fully behar mein bhai..... waahhhhhh mubaarak ho bhai. aapne apnii shayrii me ek nayaa milestone praapt kiya hai..... duaa kartaaa hoon zore kalam aur bhi badhe... auur aap isii tarah acchaaa acchaa kalaam likhte rahen....

meri jaanib se dheron daad bhaisaahab..... aur agar aap saamne hote to aj aappko gale laagaa letaa .....

khussh rahiye salaamat rahiye

unable to add resp..... but dioil se bahut saare REPS ADDED +++++

Shaad.....

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

ahhaaa ise kahte hain kalaam nahii kamaal huaa hais is baar Mast saahab.......

itnaa free flow kaalaam shaayad aapki kalam se pahlii baar niklaa hai..... fully behar mein bhai..... waahhhhhh mubaarak ho bhai. aapne apnii shayrii me ek nayaa milestone praapt kiya hai..... duaa kartaaa hoon zore kalam aur bhi badhe... auur aap isii tarah acchaaa acchaa kalaam likhte rahen....

meri jaanib se dheron daad bhaisaahab..... aur agar aap saamne hote to aj aappko gale laagaa letaa .....

khussh rahiye salaamat rahiye

unable to add resp..... but dioil se bahut saare REPS ADDED +++++

Shaad.....

Shaad bhai inaayat ka behad shukriyaa. Aap jaise umdaa shayar se agar itni daad mile to bas kya kahun, meri khud se bhi umeedein badh jaati hai. Aapki nawaazish par mashkoor hooN..

Yunhi saath dete rahiYeGaa

[Qasid]

Mehfil ko aage badhaate hai aur lete hai agla lafz,, jo hai 'Baarish'

Umeed hai aap sabki nazm/ghazal humhe jald hi padhne ko milegii

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by mast

Mehfil ko aage badhaate hai aur lete hai agla lafz,, jo hai 'Baarish'

Umeed hai aap sabki nazm/ghazal humhe jald hi padhne ko milegii

Kya baat hai anu ji..kya khoob lafz diya hai....yakeenan sabki peshkash bhi barish ki tarah roomani aur dilkash hogi....
all the best everyone..

[sameer'shaad']

ahle bazm ko nazar ek adnaa sa sher...

jab bhi dikhte hain baarishon me bheegte bachche,
to yaad aate hain kuch dost puraane mere...

Shaad.....

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

ahle bazm ko nazar ek adnaa sa sher...

jab bhi dikhte hain baarishon me bheegte bachche,
to yaad aate hain kuch dost puraane mere...

Shaad.....

Waaaah! Waaah!.....barish aur yadon ka rishta hee bahut gahra hai shaad... bahut khoob....

[Madhu 14]

Lafz barish par ek chhoti si koshish doston..


Muhabbat ke tarano si jo in kano me ghulti thi..
vo BARISH ab nahi hoti na ab badal darate hain.

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by Madhu 14

Lafz barish par ek chhoti si koshish doston..


Muhabbat ke tarano si jo in kano me ghulti thi..
vo BARISH ab nahi hoti na ab badal darate hain.

waahh waahhh kyaa khoob sher huaa hai..... ek dam dil se niklaaa huaa... bahut khoob

Shaad.....

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

waahh waahhh kyaa khoob sher huaa hai..... ek dam dil se niklaaa huaa... bahut khoob

Shaad.....

Shukriya shaad ji.. .............

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'

ahle bazm ko nazar ek adnaa sa sher...

jab bhi dikhte hain baarishon me bheegte bachche,
to yaad aate hain kuch dost puraane mere...

Shaad.....

Bahut Umdaa sher hua hai Bhai, bahut hi seedha bahut hi sachaa

[Qasid]

Originally Posted by Madhu 14

Lafz barish par ek chhoti si koshish doston..


Muhabbat ke tarano si jo in kano me ghulti thi..
vo BARISH ab nahi hoti na ab badal darate hain.

Jaanlewa sher hai saadgi se qatl-e-aam kar rahi hai aap....reham reham..itni haseen shayri mat kijiyee..

[Madhu 14]

Originally Posted by mast

Jaanlewa sher hai saadgi se qatl-e-aam kar rahi hai aap....reham reham..itni haseen shayri mat kijiyee..

tahedil se shukraguzar hoon aapki tawajjo ki mast ji........

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by mast

Bahut Umdaa sher hua hai Bhai, bahut hi seedha bahut hi sachaa

inaayat mohtaram.......................

[Qasid]

Lafz baarish par ek ghazal ki koshish aapki nazar....umeed hai aapko pasand aayegi. Is mein aagar kuch kami lage to bejhijhak bataiYeGaa

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kisi ka din nikaltaa hai humari raat hoti hai
kahin par dil tadaptaa hai kahin barsaat hoti hai

ye kyun aa.khir tadapta hai tumhari yaad mein saawan
ye kyun boondoN bhari saazish mein meri maat hoti hai

jawaan nagme hasee qisse yun ab honthon pe rehte hai
ye kyun har baat par aksar tumhari baat hoti hai

na tere ghar se ab mujhko vo qaatil chaand dikhta hai
na ab har raat taaron ki hasee baraat hoti hai

kahi main bheeg na jaaun isi chahat ki baarish mein
isi ik aarzoo mein khaak saari raat hoti hai


किसी का दिन निकलता है हमारी रात होती है
कहीं पर दिल तड़पता है कहीं बरसात होती है

ये क्यों आखिर तड़पता है तुम्हारी याद में सावन
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