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Originally Posted by nihar
mile kabhi gar nazar to meri nazar padhlena kabhi yunhi paas aake meri khabar padhlena
ehesaas hi hain mohabbat to mehsush karlo muje
mere jasbaat main chupa beshumar pyar padhlena
aapki muskaan to hain jaise koi khilta gulab
aapne gulistan me kabhi meri dagar padhlena
khush kismat main kaha itna jo tumhe pau
meri duao me naam aapna magar padhlena
bhari mehfil me bhi dekho main tanha hoon
meri gazal me hale-e-dil mera jigar padhlena
nahi muskil main itna sanam samajlo mujhe
bas ek khuli si kitab hain yeh Nihar padhlena
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Aapko ghayal ka aadaab,
Ahche ehsash haiN janaab, par doosra sher aur maqta dono nihaayat kamjor lage mujhe. Doosre aur teesre sher me aapne "hai" ko haiN likha hai, iska dhyaan rakheN dono me farq hai. aur "padhlena" nahin hoga, balki "padh lena" hoga, kyuNki dono do aag lafz haiN, umeed hai aage aapko aur v behtar padhne ko mlegaa, aur agar koi baat buri lage to maafi ka talabgaar rahuNgaa...!!
Aapka GHAYAL...!!