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Mera Bachpan - 24th September 2004, 04:25 PM

dosto kabhi kabhi apna bachpan kitna yaad aata hai...waise mera bachpan kuchh khas acchha nahi beeta lekin bachpan to bachpan hai..kuchh na kuchh to chanchalta, bholapan, thitholiya leker hi chalta hai apne saath aur ham kitne bhi bare ho jaye vo yade kabhi dil ko hasa jaati hai..aur thandi thandi hawao k saath thandi fuharo se bhi alingan karva deti hai..aisa hi kuchh likh rahi hu..jo mujhe yaad aata hai..

u pariyo ki tareh titli ban ghoomna
khaito ki mudero per
tere-medhe kadmo se
firoks ke kone pakar paker
titli ban kacchi mitti main nange pair ghoomna
vo sab yaad aata hai..

do chotiya kas kas k goothna..
maa ki lipistik muh per potna
moti si bindi mathe p saza ke..
saari ko lapete lapete..
moti si kajal ki dhaar laga k
pallu ko sir p odh ker.
matak matak k maa k saamne u aana
vo sab yaad aata hai..

aur

maa ka geet..sun meri lado..
saas begani..nanad..jithani..
sasura kanth lagana hai..
sasoo k ghar jana hai..
u hi ruuthna..aur khikhila k has dena..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

sakhiyo sang thitholi vo chutki..
vo gudgudi..vo shararat aur vo bhag jaana..
lakri k patle neeche taar ghuma kar
farsh pe ghoomna..
daadi k charkhe ko khali chalana..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

vo paapa ka god me uthana
rasgullo bhara dona thamana
rusi apni bitiya ko pyar se chooman,,,,manana
behna ki shikayat ....
vo school me kameejo per syahi ka failna..
vo sab bahut bahut yaad aata hai...

mujhe mera bachpan aaj bhi mere baccho
me lautTa nazer aata hai..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

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24th September 2004, 10:39 PM

Sunita Di..

Bahut acha aur bahut hi sundar likha aapne.. aapke bachpan ko padh ke mehsoos karke.. apne bachpan mein kho gayi thi main..

woh siyaahi giraana..woh sakhiyo se thithole.. woh ma ki tarah taiyaar hona.. woh sab ko chidaana.. woh papa se masti karna... sab..



bahut hi pyari pyari yaadein taaza karva di aapki is pyari si rachna ne...

~Pree


Meena di..
Kabhi to kuch kaha karo..
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25th September 2004, 09:47 AM

Udas ji...

Bachpan jeevan ka wo daur hai.. jab hume ghum ki oehchaan nahi hoti.. azaad panchhi jaise hote hain hum.. hume bhi bohat yaad aata hai ye bachpan.. recently R. K. Narayan ji ki kitaab 'Swami & Freinds' paRi.. ek ek kisse par apna bachpan yaad aaya.. agar mauka mile to ye kitaab zaroor paRna.. bachpan o baRi khoobi se lafzon me qaid kiya hai... waise hi jaise aapne is kalaam me kiya... Bohat khoob!

Bas.. paRte hue un logon ki yaad aa gayi, jinke bachpan ki yaadein shayad itni suhaani nahi..

Bohat achha likha hai aapne.. yunhi likhte rahiyega..


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25th September 2004, 10:18 AM

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sunita,

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meenu di...KASH TUM KUCHH BOL PAATI...HAI MERE BACHPAN NE BHI AAPKI JUBAAN NA KHOLI...

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25th September 2004, 10:21 AM

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Sunita Di..

Bahut acha aur bahut hi sundar likha aapne.. aapke bachpan ko padh ke mehsoos karke.. apne bachpan mein kho gayi thi main..

woh siyaahi giraana..woh sakhiyo se thithole.. woh ma ki tarah taiyaar hona.. woh sab ko chidaana.. woh papa se masti karna... sab..



bahut hi pyari pyari yaadein taaza karva di aapki is pyari si rachna ne...

~Pree


Meena di..
Kabhi to kuch kaha karo..
~Priii
PRIYA....LAGTA HAI MEENU DI TO AB GOONGI HO CHALI HAI..(MAAF KARNA)

Ha.n priya...ye bachpan bahut hi sunhere khawaab liye pyari yaade liye rehta hai...aur koi bhi ise nahi bhoolta....maana ki har daur ki do tasweer hoti hai...achhi bhi aur buri bhi...lekin fir bhi vo kehte hai na ki khushi ki roshni k aage gamo ka kalapan apne aap taar taar ho jata hai..bas yaha bhi vahi baat hai...ki meethi meethi yado k aage bachpan ki karvi baate chhup jaati hai..

ok bye...t/c.........urs-di.


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25th September 2004, 12:57 PM

Hi Udas ji,

Bas ab lagta hai meena didi ki tarah maun say kaam chalana parega. Waisay bohot hi pyaara likha hai.


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25th September 2004, 02:05 PM

hi udas ji...

kunal ka namaskar --^--

bachpan ..... woh daur jab sab kuch anjana hota hai... apna hota hai... koi fikra nahi... koi dar nahi... sab kuch ek aisi lehar ki tarah jo aasmaan chu lena chahti hai.... maa baap ka pyar ... bhai behan ke sath shararte.... padosi ko pareshan karna .... aur teacher se kabhi mar khana ... kabhi inaam pana... sach wakai main bachpan woh daur hai jindgi ka jisse jindgi shuru hoti hai... aur kabhi uski chap dil se nahi jati..... kash bachpan donara laut ta sab chahte hai... par kash...! par ye humare bas main kahan .... tabhi sunita ji aap anpne baccho main woh bachpan dekhti hai.... khair sunita ji aapne bohat acchi kosish ki hai yadon ke ek aise panne ko kholne ki... jo bas mohtaj hai aankh band karne ka... sab kuch nazron ke samne bas.... haha ehsaas se hi dil khush ho jata hai.... bohat khoob sunita di.... tareef nahi dounga aapko dua karounga ki aapke baccho main aap apna sara bachpan mehsoos kar sake... aur is kabil ho ki jo kami shayad aapne dekhi ho wo na dekhe ... insha allah khuda meri bat sun raha honge ....

ek kahani hai jo haqeeqat ki...
mera bachpan nam hai uska..
rakh ke gaya aanko pe sapne..
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
shararat ke nishan hai jo badan pe
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
maa ki gaud main jo beeta ...
mera bachpan naam hai uska...
jawani dehleez pe lake jisne chora
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
jo khatam hua nahi ab tak dil main...
mera bachpan nam hai uska ...

apna khayal rakhiyega sunita di


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25th September 2004, 02:34 PM

Hello Di…

Hai sachi main toh apne bachpan mein kho gayi aapki ye rachna padkar…kitne suhane din thhey wo…koi tension nahin kisi ki parvah nahin…apni ek alag hi dinuya thi.masti karte rehna…khel kood….idhar udhar daudte rehna..bilkul jaise aasman mein azaad panchhi ki tarah…

Sach maza aa gaya…fantastic emotions…nice writing = Sonu Di….means kamal hi kamal..tussi grt ho..


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Re: Mera Bachpan - 25th September 2004, 02:36 PM

hi udaas ji
aapki kavita ka title padhete hi sabse pehle jo jehan mein ek geet ubhara..."aaya hai mujhe phir yaad wo jaalim,,guzra jamana bachpan ka...haye re akele chod ke jana aur na aana bachpan ka..."(film:dever,lyricswrite:anand bakshi,,singer:mukesh)
bachpan kabhi nahin bhoolta,,kyunki.. bachpan har gam se begaana hota hai ..mujhe bahi kabhi kabhi apna bachpan yaad aa jata hai,,wo sharartein,wo cricket ki baal se gharon ke sheeshe todna..ladai-jhagde,,sab yaad aata hai,,aaj jindagi ki kashamkash mein wo suhaane din bahoot yaad aate hai..isiliye aksar peeche mud kar ham apne bachpan ko dekhte hai,dil chahata hai phir usi umar mein laut jaye,,magar jindagi ke safar mein U turn nahin hota...
khair.,.. aapne bahoot khoob likha hai,,,aapko padh kar mein bhi apne bachpan ke dinon mein kho gaya tha...mera bachpan yaad dilaane ke liye shukriya,,aur aapki nazm par meri daad kubool kijiye...isi khubsurati se likhte rahiye...bahoot khushi milti hai aapko padh kar...
khush rahiye..
dua karunga aapko apna bachpan ek baar phir mile
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27th September 2004, 09:57 AM

Afshan ji....aadaab...!!

bilkul sahi baat hai afshan ji bachpan to cheez hi aisi hai...ye vo daur hai...shayad har insaan ka...jo jab bhi yaad aata hai ki hotho pe muskurahat bikhair jaata hai...

aapne jo book k baare me bataya...uske liye bahut shukriya..lekin afsos ki meri routine responsibilities mujhe izazet nahi de paati ki main sahitye wagera me ruchi hone k bavzood bhi vaqt nahi de paati...

thanx aap ki daad tahe dil se kabool karti hu...mujhe jaan kar khushi hui ki aap ko ye mera bachpan pasand aaya...

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27th September 2004, 09:59 AM

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Hi Udas ji,

Bas ab lagta hai meena didi ki tarah maun say kaam chalana parega. Waisay bohot hi pyaara likha hai.
SALIM JI.....

SAB MAUN HO JAOGE TO MERA KYA HOGA..
KUCHH NA KAHOGE TO YE NA HAZAM HOGA..

KUCHH TO BOL DETE MAINE JAB POOCHHA
CHEHRA HI PAR LETI..GAR SAAMNE TUM HOTE..

anyways....thanx.........

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27th September 2004, 10:07 AM

Kunal ji...Namaskaar!!

ek kahani hai jo haqeeqat ki...
mera bachpan nam hai uska..
rakh ke gaya aanko pe sapne..
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
shararat ke nishan hai jo badan pe
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
maa ki gaud main jo beeta ...
mera bachpan naam hai uska...
jawani dehleez pe lake jisne chora
mera bachpan nam hai uska...
jo khatam hua nahi ab tak dil main...
mera bachpan nam hai uska ...

Ye bhi khoob likha aapne aur apne resp.main jo baate likhi vo bhi katra katra sahi hai...bas kunal ji ye daur hi aisa hai...ankhe band karo aur bachpan ka maja lo bina ticket..aur shayad her kisi ka bachpan kuchh na kucchh to khushi wale pal samaite hota hai...

ha.n jab insaan ka khud ka bachpan khatam ho jaata hai aur uske bacche ho to vo un me hi apne bachpan ki meethi yaade.n yaad karta hai aur un baccho me kai baar apna bachpan dhoondta hua kho jaata hai...kai baar zindgi me ye pal aate hai..jinhe maine yaha aap sab ke aage likha jisme yahi maksad tha ki log ise pare, apna bachpan yaad kare..aur KUCHH PAL K LIYE APNE DUKHO KO BHOOL JAAYE..IS ROZ KI BHAG DAUR KI ZINGI K DAMAN ME VARNA CHAND KALIYA HAI...VO BHI MURJHAI HUI.. bas yahi meri ek koshish thi...jab ki maine shabdo ko sahi sthan nahi diya...ek chhoti si koshish...aur tumara saath

thanx u hi hausla dete rehna...

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Udas Ji - 28th September 2004, 06:33 AM

Sunita Ji,
Aapnai bohot hi achhi nazm likhi hai.Abhi Jagjit Singh ki ghazal "Kagaz ki Kashti baarish ka Paani" sun rahi thi aur issai padkai laga jaisai sonai pai suhaga ho gaya.Dua hai yun hi likhti rahengi.
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Hello Di…

Hai sachi main toh apne bachpan mein kho gayi aapki ye rachna padkar…kitne suhane din thhey wo…koi tension nahin kisi ki parvah nahin…apni ek alag hi dinuya thi.masti karte rehna…khel kood….idhar udhar daudte rehna..bilkul jaise aasman mein azaad panchhi ki tarah…

Sach maza aa gaya…fantastic emotions…nice writing = Sonu Di….means kamal hi kamal..tussi grt ho..
Oye yaar roop inna vi rareef na kar jai main tareef to bojhil hoke tere kadma vich hi dig java.. yaar mainu sambhaal main ta garden garden hoi ja rahi ha...je tu mainu gr8 jo sadya hai..vai ki kara.n e khasma nu khanya...bachpan enj da hi honda hai....pulda hi nai...jado vi dekho chlya aaunda hai kade vi jithe bacche khedDe hon authe apna bachpan ta jaroor yaad aa hi janda hai...chal is nu par k tu khu hui...e hi ta mera maksad siga ki saare loki apne apne bachpan nu yaad kar lain..

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..mujhe bahi kabhi kabhi apna bachpan yaad aa jata hai,,wo sharartein,wo cricket ki baal se gharon ke sheeshe todna..ladai-jhagde,,sab yaad aata hai,,aaj jindagi ki kashamkash mein wo suhaane din bahoot yaad aate hai..isiliye aksar peeche mud kar ham apne bachpan ko dekhte hai,dil chahata hai phir usi umar mein laut jaye,,magar jindagi ke safar mein U turn nahin hota...
khair.,.. aapne bahoot khoob likha hai,,,aapko padh kar mein bhi apne bachpan ke dinon mein kho gaya tha...mera bachpan yaad dilaane ke liye shukriya,,aur aapki nazm par meri daad kubool kijiye...isi khubsurati se likhte rahiye...bahoot khushi milti hai aapko padh kar...
khush rahiye..
dua karunga aapko apna bachpan ek baar phir mile
-MANOJ
o bhai manoj...kya kare...yaar ab buddhe ho gai hai to yaad kar ke hi tassalli karenge na...ye kashmokash...ye uzdi si duniya ...mujhe tujhe hasne nahi deti...to ye ek hamare paas khushi ka pitara hai jise jab chahe khol k has lete hai...budhape ko bhi jaroorat hai bhai bachpan k haste-khailte palo ki....

thanx aapko ye pasand aaya....thanx..

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Sunita Ji,
Aapnai bohot hi achhi nazm likhi hai.Abhi Jagjit Singh ki ghazal "Kagaz ki Kashti baarish ka Paani" sun rahi thi aur issai padkai laga jaisai sonai pai suhaga ho gaya.Dua hai yun hi likhti rahengi.
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Thank you kavita ji...ki aapko sone p suhaga mil gaya...aise khushi k mahol mai aur khushi mil jaye vo bhi koi apni pasandida kalam to main samajh sakti hu ki aapko kitni khushi hui hogi...aapko ye rachna pasand aayi.....mujhe bahut khushi mili ye jaankar...aage bhi koshish karungi..

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28th September 2004, 04:10 PM

e lo...mainu te pher maza aa gaya..kinna sona likhya e tussi...


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28th September 2004, 04:33 PM

hmmmmm

maja aa gaya udas ji.... main to tinku minku chinku sabki yadon main kho gaya .... aur kunal ji ap ne bhi kya khoob likha hai maan gaye aap ko bhi... tabhi to aap mere fav ho

khayal rakhna aap log apna


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29th September 2004, 11:13 AM

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e lo...mainu te pher maza aa gaya..kinna sona likhya e tussi...
BACCHE EH HI TA.N MERA MAKSAD SEEGA...

THANX

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29th September 2004, 11:15 AM

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hmmmmm

maja aa gaya udas ji.... main to tinku minku chinku sabki yadon main kho gaya .... aur kunal ji ap ne bhi kya khoob likha hai maan gaye aap ko bhi... tabhi to aap mere fav ho

khayal rakhna aap log apna
OYE BHAI MAINU VI MAJA AA GAYA...BUS TUSI FAV. BANAYI RAKHO ASSI TUWANU ENJ HI HASAANDE RAVANGE...

OK BYE...UDAS


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Hi Udas - 29th September 2004, 12:29 PM

Hi Udas

Kaise hain Aap .Very beautifuly composed poem.Bahut pyare lafz hain................Apna bachpan Yaad aa gaya.Kal Aap hamare post par aaye thi Shukriya.

Sada Muskurate Rahiye
Issey Dua kay Sath


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vo paapa ka god me uthana
rasgullo bhara dona thamana
rusi apni bitiya ko pyar se chooman,,,,manana
behna ki shikayat ....
vo school me kameejo per syahi ka failna..
vo sab bahut bahut yaad aata hai...

Waise to jaldi aisa hota nahi hai par na jane q aapki is peshkash ne bada bhavuk kar diya............yaqeen janiye ek ek lafz tasweer bankar samne aata raha.

Very Good Loved it.

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dosto kabhi kabhi apna bachpan kitna yaad aata hai...waise mera bachpan kuchh khas acchha nahi beeta lekin bachpan to bachpan hai..kuchh na kuchh to chanchalta, bholapan, thitholiya leker hi chalta hai apne saath aur ham kitne bhi bare ho jaye vo yade kabhi dil ko hasa jaati hai..aur thandi thandi hawao k saath thandi fuharo se bhi alingan karva deti hai..aisa hi kuchh likh rahi hu..jo mujhe yaad aata hai..

u pariyo ki tareh titli ban ghoomna
khaito ki mudero per
tere-medhe kadmo se
firoks ke kone pakar paker
titli ban kacchi mitti main nange pair ghoomna
vo sab yaad aata hai..

do chotiya kas kas k goothna..
maa ki lipistik muh per potna
moti si bindi mathe p saza ke..
saari ko lapete lapete..
moti si kajal ki dhaar laga k
pallu ko sir p odh ker.
matak matak k maa k saamne u aana
vo sab yaad aata hai..

aur

maa ka geet..sun meri lado..
saas begani..nanad..jithani..
sasura kanth lagana hai..
sasoo k ghar jana hai..
u hi ruuthna..aur khikhila k has dena..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

sakhiyo sang thitholi vo chutki..
vo gudgudi..vo shararat aur vo bhag jaana..
lakri k patle neeche taar ghuma kar
farsh pe ghoomna..
daadi k charkhe ko khali chalana..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

vo paapa ka god me uthana
rasgullo bhara dona thamana
rusi apni bitiya ko pyar se chooman,,,,manana
behna ki shikayat ....
vo school me kameejo per syahi ka failna..
vo sab bahut bahut yaad aata hai...

mujhe mera bachpan aaj bhi mere baccho
me lautTa nazer aata hai..
vo sab yaad aata hai..

udas
Hi udas
Ae bachpun ka daur hi aesa hota jo aksar yaad ata hai aur jab bhi yaad ata hai dil ko baechaen ker hi jata
kaash
ae daur kabhi saath na chorta
magar zindagi hai behti rehti hai behti hi rehti hai
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