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Ek Dukh bhari kahani... - 23rd April 2006, 04:59 AM



Namaste Doston,

Meine shayri.com par bahut waqt bitaya hai... aur yahan par ek se ek unda lekhakon ko padha hai.. har lekhak ki apni ek khaas baat ek adaa... kissi ke likhavat mein saadgi to kissi ke likhne mein naveenta... kissi ke gehri soch... kissi ke mein pyaar to kissi ke mein dard... aur har ek ki soch ko padh kar dil wah wah kare bina nahi thakta.. meine yahan bahut kuch seekha hai.. aur sikhne ki koshish kar raha hoon... aur issi baat ki wajah se meine thoda likhna kam kar diya hai... kyunki itna kuch jo sikha hai... usko apni likhavat mein bandh kar pesh karna seekh raha hoon.... aaj jab mein apni koi purani post par jaata hoon.. to sochta hoon... uff... ache khase kalam ki dhajiya uda di... ya phir uff... yeh to mein aur bhi behtar likh sakta tha... magar us har kalam mein meine lekhak ki ek seedi chadhi hai... aur thodi khushi bhi hoti hai ki meri lekhi mein kuch sudhar aaya hai.... meine kitne hi form of wriitng ko seekha... aur samjha... haalaki meri kamzori hai ki mein baandh kar nahi likh sakta... mujhe lagta hai ki bus khayalon ko pankh de doon aur unhe udne doon... kaunsi soch n.jaane kahan le jaaye...


bus aaj phir se yunhi ek lekh pesh kar raha hoon... mein nahi jaanta yeh kaisa hai ... acha hai ki bura hai... magar bus kuch khayal hain....mujhe khushi hogi agar aap apni rai mujhe denge....

Chaliye pehle ek samma baand deta hoon....
mein filhaal uk mein rehta hoon... mere ghar ke piche ek aangan hai... yahan sardi achi hoti hai... to bahar bethne ka mauka nahi milta... aaj mausam bahut suhana tha... to yunhi mein wahan aangan mein raat ke samay leta hua tha aasman ko dekh raha tha... aur bus yunhi kuch zeham mein aa gaya....Chaand badalon mein beth mujhse luka chipi khel raha tha, Sitaron ka mela jagmagate hue aasman ko roshan kar raha tha.bus tabhi kuch likha....

Magar aap sab aage padhein usse pehle kuch kehna chahta hoon....

Pyaar ka ehsaas zindagi ka sabse khoobsurat ehsaas hai... pyaar ke bina zindagi adhuri hai... yeh khayal jo mein aap sab ke samaksh laya hoon woh seedhe aur saral hain samjhne ke liye... magar mehsoos karne ke liye bahut mushkil... yeh ehsaas to woh hi samjh sakta hai jisne zindagi mein kabhi na kabhi kissi na kissi se pyaar kiya ho... saccha pyaar... yeh lekh bhi mere kayi lekh ki tarah hi saada hai... magar agar isse padhte hue aap sab ki aankhein thodi bhi namm hui hon to mein shayad kamyab hua hoon aapko samjhane mein ki sache pyaar ka ehsaas kaisa hota hai...

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Aaj phir baadalon se Chaand nikla hai
Aur mera Chaand mujhse duur kahi.N hai

Aise hi Chaandni Raaton mein
Woh mujhse milne aaya karti thi
Sapno mein kho jaati thi duniya
Par Woh meri hi raah takti thi
Mein aata milne chipte chipate
Ek chaat se dusri kudte phankte
Woh bhi dabe paaon aaya karti
Sabki nazron se bachti bachati
Mere seene se woh lipat jaati
Mein baahon me usse samet leta
Ghanton Chaand ki Roshni mein
Ankhiyon mein hi baatein hoti
Jo hone lagti bhor woh chali jaati
Kal milne ka vaada kar chali jaati

Bujhti Shaam ko dariya ke kinaare
Aam ke ped ki dal par mein betha
Karta tha inteezar us ghadi ka
Ki kab woh milan ki bela aayegi
Aati thi woh milne chip-chipake
Ma ki nazron se bach-bachake
Lehrate hue chunar liye kheton mein
Woh aati daudte hue nange pawn liye
keh kar aayin hoon milne tumse
har ghadi jaane ki baat karti thi
bahut kuch tha paas uske kehne ko
mein sunta rehta uski bholi baaton ko
Kehkar chulhe par maa raah takti hai
daudti hui jaati unhi kheton ki orr

Phir aata jab bhi mela gawn mein
Tab sakhiyon sang milti thi
Chudiyon ki dukaan par
Rangeen Kaanch se dekhti thi
Paas bulata jo mein usko
Woh saheliyon ka bahana karti thi
Idhar se udhar karti rehti
Nazrein mili to ishaara karti
Dekh udas chehra mera
Woh sandesha bhijvati thi
Milegi woh raat ko chaje par
yeh vaada karke mujhe manati thi
Phir duur khadi muskurati thi
Dekh uski muskan dhadkan tez ho jaati thi

aise hi ek raat mein gaya tha milne
Usne sakhi saath sandesha boli thi
Mein aaya khush hokar milne usse
Woh ghabrate hue milne aayi thi
Aankhon mein uske aanson the
Saanson mein ek udaasi chayi thi
Seene se lagg ke woh gale
phut phut kar royi thi
bahut poochne par woh boli
agle mahine uski shaadi hai
Duur gawn se rishta aaya tha
Baapu ne zubaan de aayi thi
inkaar nahi kar paayi woh
Apni majboori mujhe batlayi thi

Dekh aanson uske chehre par
Meine bhi rona chaaha tha
yaad dilayein woh kasmein
jo usne mujhse kiya tha
rahegi sada woh khush
Vaada yaad usse dilaya tha
sar hila kar inkaar karke
woh seene se lipat aayi thi
Bhar aaya gala mera
par kaise yeh majboori thi
ro bhi nahi sakta tha mein
aise yeh kaise ghadi aayi thi
Kuch nahi kaha Kuch nahi poocha
aansoon pooch usko ruksat kiya

kuch roz pehle uski shaadi thi
Mujhe bhi wahan jaana tha
jahan leke jaani thi baarat
wahan baarat ko nivana tha
churake aankhiyan usse
kaise kaanti woh raat thi
dekh usse dussre ki hote
jaane kaise mujhpe beet aayi thi
chehre par muskaan liye
aankhon ki nami chupayi thi
rahe sada khush woh
yehi meine mannat maangi thi
ho jaayein saare aansoon mere
uski khushiyan hi maangi thi

Aise hi chaadni raat jab hua karti hai
mein jaata hoon wahin us chaje par
Jahan hum mila karte the
Chute-chupate hum mila karte the
Ghanto Chaand ko dekhta hoon
Tanhaiyon se baatein karta hoon
Woh ab kabhi nahi aayegi
Magar yaad har pal mujhe satayegi
Aankhein num hain us ehsaas se
Ki bus itni hi humari kahani thi
Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai

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23rd April 2006, 05:11 AM

Dear Rohin, HEARTFELT as this is! I could smile, laugh, feel shy, and also shed true tears on this post, I think this post is complete in some sense as it gives u the feeling of what all can happen if u truely love someone, how life changes, how things can happen...how love can give u goosebumps, can make u shy, can make u wonder....but hey! one thing i would like to add for sure, " think + as i always say" cuz luv and time does not wait for anyone....yea keeping the bichora in mind, thats always there, thats actually what shows u true luv and make u feel scare also of loosing someone, but u know the one who luv sacha, they actually never loose each other, for unka dil ek duje me dharkta hai. sunhere palon ko yaad kartey hi.....bas sab dukh dur ho jatey hai...ek duje ke saath bitaye pal kayi baar aankhain me timti-maatey bhi hai! par haan har aaansu ka matlab ye nahi ku vo dukh bhare hai...kuch aansu khushi ka ehssas bahut deeply karwa jaatey hai....someitmes we love each other so much - ki we can give and do anything for each other, dusre ko khush dekhne ke liye hum har dukh parr kar jatey hai......par when i n love we dont think like "I" and "U' But "US" thats makes love complete.


God Bless You and Grant you with your true Love thats all I can wish for at this time!

Luv ya
Priya


Akhihaan milaake chan'na paavi na Judayi Vey .......

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23rd April 2006, 05:44 AM

aslaamaleikuum, namaste and sat sri a kal to you

rohin jee,

bahut arsho baad kuuch padha jho dil koh choo gayaa ,, yeh kahani koi ajeeb shee nahee, shhayd janee pehchaanee shee laghe ,, askoh neh bhi unka kaam kar diyaa ,,,

kiya kahoon !! kuch bhi nahee !!!daad kabool kijiyegha



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Really, a sad love story...Rohin Bhai !

My laud to your magical pen...!



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Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai


Hello Rohin

Kayi din baad tumhara likha padha........bahut acha likha hay.....jyada kuch keh nahin paa rahi....bas yuun hi likhtey raho...

Take care
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23rd April 2006, 08:16 PM

Rohin....

this was beautiful.... I can feel this.... Isse zyada kucch nahi kahoonga...

I just wish that it doesnt happen to neone... kisi ka pyaar nahi chhinnaa chaahiye... magar humaare chaahne bhar se kya hota hai...

Keep writing.. be happy always...


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Dear Rohin, HEARTFELT as this is! I could smile, laugh, feel shy, and also shed true tears on this post, I think this post is complete in some sense as it gives u the feeling of what all can happen if u truely love someone, how life changes, how things can happen...how love can give u goosebumps, can make u shy, can make u wonder....but hey! one thing i would like to add for sure, " think + as i always say" cuz luv and time does not wait for anyone....yea keeping the bichora in mind, thats always there, thats actually what shows u true luv and make u feel scare also of loosing someone, but u know the one who luv sacha, they actually never loose each other, for unka dil ek duje me dharkta hai. sunhere palon ko yaad kartey hi.....bas sab dukh dur ho jatey hai...ek duje ke saath bitaye pal kayi baar aankhain me timti-maatey bhi hai! par haan har aaansu ka matlab ye nahi ku vo dukh bhare hai...kuch aansu khushi ka ehssas bahut deeply karwa jaatey hai....someitmes we love each other so much - ki we can give and do anything for each other, dusre ko khush dekhne ke liye hum har dukh parr kar jatey hai......par when i n love we dont think like "I" and "U' But "US" thats makes love complete.

God Bless You and Grant you with your true Love thats all I can wish for at this time!

Luv ya
Priya
Priya,

love is like i said a beautiful feeling... and sometimes love is not just abt smiles it is those hidden tears that we collect within ourselves.. to see a smile on our loves face... and that smile is worth millions... i might have made u cry a bit... but u know it was only to make way for all the happiness of the world to seep in...

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aslaamaleikuum, namaste and sat sri a kal to you

rohin jee,

bahut arsho baad kuuch padha jho dil koh choo gayaa ,, yeh kahani koi ajeeb shee nahee, shhayd janee pehchaanee shee laghe ,, askoh neh bhi unka kaam kar diyaa ,,,

kiya kahoon !! kuch bhi nahee !!!daad kabool kijiyegha

dua mein yaad kijiyegha
Deewana ji,

kissi ke dil ko chu paun yehi koshish hai meri... aapke dil ko chu saka... uske liye shukriya...

apna khayal rakhein

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Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

Hey Gulgulloo...

tumhari dil ki waadiyon se guzarti iss rachna mein se yeh chand lines bahut hee pasand aayin...it is a beautiful ehsaas to have loved and lost than to have no love whatsoever in your life...khush raho...meet your love


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Rohin ji
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Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

really very touching

Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai

ye sher man ko chu gaya

"Zaruri nahi ki zindagi main ek sahara ho
zaruri nahi jise tum chaho wo bhi tumhara ho
kuch kashitiyan to doob jaya karti hain
zaruri nahi ki har kashti ka kinara ho"

likhte rahiyega apke kalam ka intezar rahega
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Rohin ji
Aapko Namaskaar !!

Aapko parha, aapki kalam ko parha, aapke jazbaat parhey, aapke shabd parhey, aapki veena ke taar ko parha.....

Baat agar sirf aapki kalam aur shabdon ki karun tow aapne bahaut hee saadgi se woh likh daala hai jo har kisi ke bas ki nahin hai. Aapka ek-ek shabd unn palonn se baatein kar raha jin palonn ko aapne jiya hai. Aapke shabd part-dar-part kholtey hue seedhey wahan pahunchey hain jahan aapne itne badey dukh ko sambhaaley rakha hai. Aapke shabd kisi martbaan se nahin aapke dil se nikley hain. Ye yahi saabit karta hai ki aapka aur shabdon ka bahaut gehra rishta hai. Aap shabdon ke dhani hain.

Vyagtigat baat karun tow, Priya ji ne bahut wajandaar baat kahi hai ki "waqt aur Pyaar kisi ka intezaar nahin kartey". Yeh baat Kshat-pratishat sahi hai. Zeevan ko aage baraahiye kyonki zeevan ek bahaut khubsoorat se safar ka naam hai.

Rohin ji, mujhe aapke shabd bahaut pasand aaye.

Khayaal rakhiyega

aapka shubhchintak
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Really, a sad love story...Rohin Bhai !

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Danny bhai,

Sad that it seems... it is a reflection of a person in true love ...


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Hello Rohin

Kayi din baad tumhara likha padha........bahut acha likha hay.....jyada kuch keh nahin paa rahi....bas yuun hi likhtey raho...

Take care
Di
Sukanya Di,

thanks for reading... aap kuch keh na paayein... aisa n.jaane kya likha hai... magar aapko acha laga to thanks....

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Rohin....

this was beautiful.... I can feel this.... Isse zyada kucch nahi kahoonga...

I just wish that it doesnt happen to neone... kisi ka pyaar nahi chhinnaa chaahiye... magar humaare chaahne bhar se kya hota hai...

Keep writing.. be happy always...
Pulkit,

Well i wish the same...

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Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
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Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

Hey Gulgulloo...

tumhari dil ki waadiyon se guzarti iss rachna mein se yeh chand lines bahut hee pasand aayin...it is a beautiful ehsaas to have loved and lost than to have no love whatsoever in your life...khush raho...meet your love

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Thanks and you are very right...

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main abhi-abhi shayri.com ki member bani hu.aur aapne jo likha hai use padker aankho me aansoo aa gaye.kyonki pyaar hum bhi karte hai kisi se per use pane ki rah najar nahi aa rahi hai.likhna main bhi bahut kuch chahti hu per apna dard express karne ke liye shabd nahi mil rahe hai.anyways i pray to god that aap hamesha khush rahe.
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adab

Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

really very touching

Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai

ye sher man ko chu gaya

"Zaruri nahi ki zindagi main ek sahara ho
zaruri nahi jise tum chaho wo bhi tumhara ho
kuch kashitiyan to doob jaya karti hain
zaruri nahi ki har kashti ka kinara ho"

likhte rahiyega apke kalam ka intezar rahega
ok
T&C
bye
Rubeena Praveen,

Aapki yeh lines humesha yaad rakhunga.. thanks for sharing them... aur apna khayal rakhiyega...

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Mere Rohin,

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Aapko Namaskaar !!

Aapko parha, aapki kalam ko parha, aapke jazbaat parhey, aapke shabd parhey, aapki veena ke taar ko parha.....

Baat agar sirf aapki kalam aur shabdon ki karun tow aapne bahaut hee saadgi se woh likh daala hai jo har kisi ke bas ki nahin hai. Aapka ek-ek shabd unn palonn se baatein kar raha jin palonn ko aapne jiya hai. Aapke shabd part-dar-part kholtey hue seedhey wahan pahunchey hain jahan aapne itne badey dukh ko sambhaaley rakha hai. Aapke shabd kisi martbaan se nahin aapke dil se nikley hain. Ye yahi saabit karta hai ki aapka aur shabdon ka bahaut gehra rishta hai. Aap shabdon ke dhani hain.

Vyagtigat baat karun tow, Priya ji ne bahut wajandaar baat kahi hai ki "waqt aur Pyaar kisi ka intezaar nahin kartey". Yeh baat Kshat-pratishat sahi hai. Zeevan ko aage baraahiye kyonki zeevan ek bahaut khubsoorat se safar ka naam hai.

Rohin ji, mujhe aapke shabd bahaut pasand aaye.

Khayaal rakhiyega

aapka shubhchintak
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Vipin ji

Aapne samay nikal kar iss.. rachna ko itni gehrai se padha uske liye shukriya... mere liye kuch bhi likhne ke liye zaroori hai ki woh sab dil se nikle... bus yeh bhi aise hi ek koshish thi.... aur priya ki baaton se mein bhi sehmat hoon...

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Shrdha,

thanks for reading... i know what you wanted to say... and i will try and keep that in mind...

tc
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Tum ho gum ho ko chupaaye..
mai hun sar ko jhukaye....
tum bhi chup ho
mai bhi chup hu....kaun kise samjhaye...
ab duriyaaN itni hai jo....milna yahaN kal ho na ho........!

-frm Kal ho na HO.....

ye gaane ki ye panktiyaN zahen mai baj uthi...aur jab bhi is gane ki yaad aati hai...ankho mai...kuch ho jata hai...!

Zindagi mai ese mod ate hain jab bebasi k siva kuch bhi mehsoos nahi hota...ese hi kuch haalaat liye ye kahani...dil ko chu gayi...!
Un paloN ko mehsoos kar pana sab k bas ki baat nahi....sach kaha rohin tumne!

chaand, baadal...sitaare aasmaa
raat, baaarish, safar, raastaa...
yaadOn ka kya hai chali ati hai..
kabhi yakayak, to kabhi aahista aahista..!


i liked reading it rohin...
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Tum ho gum ho ko chupaaye..
mai hun sar ko jhukaye....
tum bhi chup ho
mai bhi chup hu....kaun kise samjhaye...
ab duriyaaN itni hai jo....milna yahaN kal ho na ho........!

-frm Kal ho na HO.....

ye gaane ki ye panktiyaN zahen mai baj uthi...aur jab bhi is gane ki yaad aati hai...ankho mai...kuch ho jata hai...!

Zindagi mai ese mod ate hain jab bebasi k siva kuch bhi mehsoos nahi hota...ese hi kuch haalaat liye ye kahani...dil ko chu gayi...!
Un paloN ko mehsoos kar pana sab k bas ki baat nahi....sach kaha rohin tumne!

chaand, baadal...sitaare aasmaa
raat, baaarish, safar, raastaa...
yaadOn ka kya hai chali ati hai..
kabhi yakayak, to kabhi aahista aahista..!


i liked reading it rohin...
tc
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Acha song hai... i like it too...
i am glad u liked reading it...

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Re: Ek Dukh bhari kahani... - 29th April 2006, 01:11 PM

Aankhein num hain us ehsaas se
Ki bus itni hi humari kahani thi
Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai


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don't know what to say... par tumne bahut achha likha hain, nice reading you. take care buddy.

   
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Aankhein num hain us ehsaas se
Ki bus itni hi humari kahani thi
Woh hai duur bahut duur mujhse
Magar dil mein ab bhi paas hai
Chaand ki tarah woh aasman mein
Mein dharti par uske chah mein

Uska saath paaney ki khwaish
ab Chaand ko chuney si lagti hai


dearest rohin,

don't know what to say... par tumne bahut achha likha hain, nice reading you. take care buddy.

Parul

I am really glad u liked it...

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tujhe paane ki khwaish chaand ko chunne si lagti hai....

Mera chaand to mere paas hai... magar umeed tera chaand tujhe mil jaye....


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namsate rohinji,
bahut hi khubsurat tarike se likha aapne. aur pura read kare bina raha hi nahi gaya bahut easy tarike se likh dala aapne apne pyar ke ehsas ko bus ek song yaad aagaya
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Tum bin jiya jaye kaise,
Kaise jiya jaye tum bin
Sadiyon se lambi hai ratein,
Sadiyon se lambe huye din
Aa jao lautkar tum ye dil keh raha hai
Aa jao lautkar tum ye dil keh raha ha

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namsate rohinji,
bahut hi khubsurat tarike se likha aapne. aur pura read kare bina raha hi nahi gaya bahut easy tarike se likh dala aapne apne pyar ke ehsas ko bus ek song yaad aagaya
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Tum bin jiya jaye kaise,
Kaise jiya jaye tum bin
Sadiyon se lambi hai ratein,
Sadiyon se lambe huye din
Aa jao lautkar tum ye dil keh raha hai
Aa jao lautkar tum ye dil keh raha ha

GOD BLESS YOU
Palu ji,

bahut khoobsurat geet hai... aapki wajah se maine bhi apni yeh racha padhi... socha na tha ki apne hi likhne pe koi ro sakta hai... magar mere aankhon mein aansoon aa gaye... shukriya aapka jo aapne isse padha...

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Rohin ji,
I liked the way you have written,simple with perfection.
I wish you meet your CHAAND again.

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