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Hi My Blog Readers,
Since the day i saw "Ghajini" of Aamir Khan, there was one shayri which just occupied my mind, to me it was like incomplete composition just like the incomplete romance of Sanjay Singhania of "Ghajini" and it was poking my creative mind continuosly. so i thought to complete this "Shayri" and here's what I wrote... Please have a look at it and let me know your reactions & comments on this attempt of mine

The Original Ghajini Shayari
"बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी......"

Original Roman Hindi Version
"bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi"


NOW................. MY VERSION OF THE POEM.....(FULL VERSION)

बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी

अब तोः बस सारी रात उसकी यादें आएगी,
हर गुज़रते पल में उसकी बातें आएगी,
उसकी शरारतें मेरे चेहरे मुस्कराहट लाएगी,
मेरी आँखें उसकी झील सी आंखों में डूब जायेगी,

उसकी बातें किसी मीठी धुन की तरह कानो में घुल जायेगी,
उसकी मासूम हँसी सुकूं की तरह दिल में उतर जायेगी,
मेरी साँसों में वो बनके खुशबु बस जायेगी,
मेरी नींद में भी ख्वाब बनके वो आएगी,

जो आया मोहोब्बत का पैगाम तोः यह ज़िन्दगी संवर जायेगी,
ज़िन्दगी के इस सफर को एक मंजिल मिल जायेगी,
अगर हुई रुसवाई तोः ज़िन्दगी कुछ ऐसी हो जायेगी,
जिंदा रहूँगा में पर ज़िन्दगी ख़तम हो जायेगी,

अब तोः खुदा जाने या मेरा साजन की मेरी मोहोब्बत क्या रंग लाएगी,
है उम्मीद की चाँद सितारों सी आसमान में मुकम्मल हो जायेगी,
जो हुई सच्ची तोः मोहोब्बत मेरी कुछ ऐसा असर कर जायेगी,
मेरी प्यार भरी "गुजारिशें" उन्हें कुबूल हो जायेगी.........

- नलिन


Roman Hindi Version of The Poem

bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi

ab toh bas saari raat uski yaadein aayegi,
har guzarte pal me uski hi baatein aayegi,
uski shararatein mere chehre pe muskurahat laayegi,
meri aankhein uski jheel si aankhon me doob jaayegi

uski baatein kisi meethi dhun ki tarah kano me ghul jaayegi,
uski masoom si hansi sukun ki tarah dil me utar jaayegi,
mere sanson me woh banke khushbu bas jaayegi,
meri neend me bhi khwab banke woh aayegi

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi,

ab toh khuda jaane ya mera sajan ki meri mohobbat kya rang layegi,
Hai ummed ke Chand aur sitaaron si aasman me mukammal ho jaayegi,
jo hui sacchi to mohobbat meri kuch aisa asar kar jaayegi,
Meri Pyar bhari "guzarishein" unhe kubool ho jaayegi........

Nalin The Lost Poet..



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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ab toh bas saari raat uski yaadein aayegi,
har guzarte pal me uski hi baatein aayegi,
uski shararatein mere chehre pe muskurahat laayegi,
meri aankhein uski jheel si aankhon me doob jaayegi
Nalin

yeh kya ho gaya hai tumhen..???? yeh rog bahot bura hai dost...... dur hee rahna us se.......

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uski baatein kisi meethi dhun ki tarah kano me ghul jaayegi,
uski masoom si hansi sukun ki tarah dil me utar jaayegi,
mere sanson me woh banke khushbu bas jaayegi,
meri neend me bhi khwab banke woh aayegi
wah wah.. kya baat hai.......

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jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi,
Khuda se duwa karungi ke tumhe.N tumhari manzil jaldi hee mil jaaye

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ab toh khuda jaane ya mera sajan ki meri mohobbat kya rang layegi,
Hai ummed ke Chand aur sitaaron si aasman me mukammal ho jaayegi,
jo hui sacchi to mohobbat meri kuch aisa asar kar jaayegi,
Meri Pyar bhari "guzarishein" unhe kubool ho jaayegi........
Inshallah...................

Bahot khoob likha hai nalin.... apni kalam ko rukne nahi dena........ yunhi likhte rahena..mahefil yunhi sajate rahna

khush raho....


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thanks purvi - 29th March 2009, 07:09 PM

yaar, purvi, tumne toh meri acchi taang khichi hai.............

ur pulling my leg yaar.....................

but i love ur comments.......
thank you



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Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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Nalin jii...............bahut accha likha hai aapne......


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Interesting ......................... achcha hua tumne 'GHAJINI' ke lyrics nhi likhe warna film ko 3.30 k bajae 4 ghanta jhelna padta is adhuri ghazal ko tumne bht hi khoobsurat tareeke se pura kia hai.........keep it up
   
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SUNITA JI, NAZEEN JI, IS TAREEF KE LIYE BHEHAD SHUKRIYA, BS AP LOGON KI DUA RAHI TOH YUN HI LIKHTA RAHUNGA..

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Interesting ......................... achcha hua tumne 'GHAJINI' ke lyrics nhi likhe warna film ko 3.30 k bajae 4 ghanta jhelna padta is adhuri ghazal ko tumne bht hi khoobsurat tareeke se pura kia hai.........keep it up



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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Hi My Blog Readers,
Since the day i saw "Ghajini" of Aamir Khan, there was one shayri which just occupied my mind, to me it was like incomplete composition just like the incomplete romance of Sanjay Singhania of "Ghajini" and it was poking my creative mind continuosly. so i thought to complete this "Shayri" and here's what I wrote... Please have a look at it and let me know your reactions & comments on this attempt of mine

The Original Ghajini Shayari
"बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी......"

Original Roman Hindi Version
"bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi"


NOW................. MY VERSION OF THE POEM.....(FULL VERSION)

बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी

अब तोः बस सारी रात उसकी यादें आएगी,
हर गुज़रते पल में उसकी बातें आएगी,
उसकी शरारतें मेरे चेहरे मुस्कराहट लाएगी,
मेरी आँखें उसकी झील सी आंखों में डूब जायेगी,

उसकी बातें किसी मीठी धुन की तरह कानो में घुल जायेगी,
उसकी मासूम हँसी सुकूं की तरह दिल में उतर जायेगी,
मेरी साँसों में वो बनके खुशबु बस जायेगी,
मेरी नींद में भी ख्वाब बनके वो आएगी,

जो आया मोहोब्बत का पैगाम तोः यह ज़िन्दगी संवर जायेगी,
ज़िन्दगी के इस सफर को एक मंजिल मिल जायेगी,
अगर हुई रुसवाई तोः ज़िन्दगी कुछ ऐसी हो जायेगी,
जिंदा रहूँगा में पर ज़िन्दगी ख़तम हो जायेगी,

अब तोः खुदा जाने या मेरा साजन की मेरी मोहोब्बत क्या रंग लाएगी,
है उम्मीद की चाँद सितारों सी आसमान में मुकम्मल हो जायेगी,
जो हुई सच्ची तोः मोहोब्बत मेरी कुछ ऐसा असर कर जायेगी,
मेरी प्यार भरी "गुजारिशें" उन्हें कुबूल हो जायेगी.........

- नलिन


Roman Hindi Version of The Poem

bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi

ab toh bas saari raat uski yaadein aayegi,
har guzarte pal me uski hi baatein aayegi,
uski shararatein mere chehre pe muskurahat laayegi,
meri aankhein uski jheel si aankhon me doob jaayegi

uski baatein kisi meethi dhun ki tarah kano me ghul jaayegi,
uski masoom si hansi sukun ki tarah dil me utar jaayegi,
mere sanson me woh banke khushbu bas jaayegi,
meri neend me bhi khwab banke woh aayegi

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi,

ab toh khuda jaane ya mera sajan ki meri mohobbat kya rang layegi,
Hai ummed ke Chand aur sitaaron si aasman me mukammal ho jaayegi,
jo hui sacchi to mohobbat meri kuch aisa asar kar jaayegi,
Meri Pyar bhari "guzarishein" unhe kubool ho jaayegi........

Nalin The Lost Poet..


bahut khoob dear................ab lagti hai mukammal ghazal....keep it up.................................


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@ Muskaan Ji
@ Lamha,

apne mere is prayaas to itna saraha, aur itni tareef kari, ap logon ka behand shukriya hai.......... bas isi tarah agar ap sabka pyaar milta raha toh, isi tarah apk khidmat me kuch na kuch pesh karte rahenge.........



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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Chaliye aacha hi hua naaz ji, agar me lyrics likha toh wakai me film lambi bhi ho jaati aur shayd flop bhi......... he he he h eh
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Interesting ......................... achcha hua tumne 'GHAJINI' ke lyrics nhi likhe warna film ko 3.30 k bajae 4 ghanta jhelna padta is adhuri ghazal ko tumne bht hi khoobsurat tareeke se pura kia hai.........keep it up



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe




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Bahut khoob likha hai aapne nalin jee, sach mein ab complete shayri huee hai.
Saare aashaar bahut acche hain.
Yun hee likhte rahiye.



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Aru ji bahut bahut shukriya.................is tareef ka....
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Bahut khoob likha hai aapne nalin jee, sach mein ab complete shayri huee hai.
Saare aashaar bahut acche hain.
Yun hee likhte rahiye.



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
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wow yeh to kamal hai .........

U know Amir Khan mera fav Hero

uske har adaa per Diya fidaa sachiMy Dream boy

yeh to aur kamal ki baat dost .........

aap is song ko itne khubsoorati se piroya ki kya kahooN
Hats off

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi


bahot gehra meaning hai iski ..............

khudaa aapki kalam ko Noor bakshe

humesha khus raho


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Hi My Blog Readers,
Since the day i saw "Ghajini" of Aamir Khan, there was one shayri which just occupied my mind, to me it was like incomplete composition just like the incomplete romance of Sanjay Singhania of "Ghajini" and it was poking my creative mind continuosly. so i thought to complete this "Shayri" and here's what I wrote... Please have a look at it and let me know your reactions & comments on this attempt of mine

The Original Ghajini Shayari
"बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी......"

Original Roman Hindi Version
"bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi"


NOW................. MY VERSION OF THE POEM.....(FULL VERSION)

बस एक हाँ के इंतज़ार में रात यूँ ही गुज़र जायेगी,
अब तोः बस उलझन है साथ मेरे नींद कहाँ आएगी,
सुबह की किरण न जाने कोनसा संदेश लाएगी,
रिमझिम सी गुनगुनायेगी या प्यास अधूरी रह जायेगी

अब तोः बस सारी रात उसकी यादें आएगी,
हर गुज़रते पल में उसकी बातें आएगी,
उसकी शरारतें मेरे चेहरे मुस्कराहट लाएगी,
मेरी आँखें उसकी झील सी आंखों में डूब जायेगी,

उसकी बातें किसी मीठी धुन की तरह कानो में घुल जायेगी,
उसकी मासूम हँसी सुकूं की तरह दिल में उतर जायेगी,
मेरी साँसों में वो बनके खुशबु बस जायेगी,
मेरी नींद में भी ख्वाब बनके वो आएगी,

जो आया मोहोब्बत का पैगाम तोः यह ज़िन्दगी संवर जायेगी,
ज़िन्दगी के इस सफर को एक मंजिल मिल जायेगी,
अगर हुई रुसवाई तोः ज़िन्दगी कुछ ऐसी हो जायेगी,
जिंदा रहूँगा में पर ज़िन्दगी ख़तम हो जायेगी,

अब तोः खुदा जाने या मेरा साजन की मेरी मोहोब्बत क्या रंग लाएगी,
है उम्मीद की चाँद सितारों सी आसमान में मुकम्मल हो जायेगी,
जो हुई सच्ची तोः मोहोब्बत मेरी कुछ ऐसा असर कर जायेगी,
मेरी प्यार भरी "गुजारिशें" उन्हें कुबूल हो जायेगी.........

- नलिन


Roman Hindi Version of The Poem

bas ab ek haan ke intezaar me raat yunhi guzar jaayegi,
ab toh bas uljhan hai saath mere neend kahan aayegi,
Subah ki kiran na jaane konsa sandesh laayegi,
rimjhim is gungunayegi ya pyaas adhuri reh jaayegi

ab toh bas saari raat uski yaadein aayegi,
har guzarte pal me uski hi baatein aayegi,
uski shararatein mere chehre pe muskurahat laayegi,
meri aankhein uski jheel si aankhon me doob jaayegi

uski baatein kisi meethi dhun ki tarah kano me ghul jaayegi,
uski masoom si hansi sukun ki tarah dil me utar jaayegi,
mere sanson me woh banke khushbu bas jaayegi,
meri neend me bhi khwab banke woh aayegi

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi,

ab toh khuda jaane ya mera sajan ki meri mohobbat kya rang layegi,
Hai ummed ke Chand aur sitaaron si aasman me mukammal ho jaayegi,
jo hui sacchi to mohobbat meri kuch aisa asar kar jaayegi,
Meri Pyar bhari "guzarishein" unhe kubool ho jaayegi........

Nalin The Lost Poet..
nalin ji,,
its wow sach main
bohot achi tarah se aap ne
is sher ko naya
mukaam diya hai..
keep it up


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Hey, Toh iska matlab aap aamir ki bahut badi fan hain, I also like him but apke jitna bada fan nahi hoon unka...................

aur ab is poem ko aapki tareef haasil ho gayi hai toh, im sure, is poem ke bhi bhagya khulne wale hain.................
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wow yeh to kamal hai .........

U know Amir Khan mera fav Hero

uske har adaa per Diya fidaa sachiMy Dream boy

yeh to aur kamal ki baat dost .........

aap is song ko itne khubsoorati se piroya ki kya kahooN
Hats off

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi

bahot gehra meaning hai iski ..............

khudaa aapki kalam ko Noor bakshe

humesha khus raho


Diya



Nalin

Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe




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rani ji, Thanks You So Much...............
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nalin ji,,
its wow sach main
bohot achi tarah se aap ne
is sher ko naya
mukaam diya hai..
keep it up



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe




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rani ji, Thanks You So Much...............
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THE MAGIC BEGINS @ THIS THREAD..................
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wow yeh to kamal hai .........

U know Amir Khan mera fav Hero

uske har adaa per Diya fidaa sachiMy Dream boy

yeh to aur kamal ki baat dost .........

aap is song ko itne khubsoorati se piroya ki kya kahooN
Hats off

jo aaya mohobbat ka paigam to yeh zindagi sawar jaayegi,
zindagi ke is safar ko ek manzil mil jaayegi,
agar hui ruswai toh zindagi kuch aisi ho jayegi,
zinda rahunga me par zindagi khatam ho jaayegi


bahot gehra meaning hai iski ..............

khudaa aapki kalam ko Noor bakshe

humesha khus raho


Diya



Nalin

Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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Rani Ji, ap kafi dino se SDC pe dikhi hi nahin.... kahan gayab hain ap???
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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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Kya baat hai Nalin jii.....

Bahut hi khubi se aapne puri raat ki kahani bayan kar dii superb thoughts..
and haan kitne sare khayal aaye hoge us waqt us shaks per jo sabah ka
besabri se intezar kar raha hai uski to tabiyat hi bayan ker dii aapne..

Bahut achcah laga aapka yeh Geet aur ahsaas ka sarmaya..
Likhate rahiye..
Khush rahiye...


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Bhai jaan, bahut bahut shukriya, jo apne meri is kavita ko padne ke liye apna keemati waqt diya, yeh baat toh ekdum sahi hai ki, us waqt aise aise khayal aate hain ki poochiye mat, khushi aur dard dono ka ehsaas agar ek saath lena hai toh, bas aise hi kisi ek lamhe ki zarurat hoti hai...........

tareef ke liye behad shukriya, bas apki dua rahi toh yunhi ehsason ko bayan karta rahunga.............
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Kya baat hai Nalin jii.....

Bahut hi khubi se aapne puri raat ki kahani bayan kar dii superb thoughts..
and haan kitne sare khayal aaye hoge us waqt us shaks per jo sabah ka
besabri se intezar kar raha hai uski to tabiyat hi bayan ker dii aapne..

Bahut achcah laga aapka yeh Geet aur ahsaas ka sarmaya..
Likhate rahiye..
Khush rahiye...



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Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
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