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Gulshan mayn tere hum bhi zara ...... -
23rd November 2011, 02:48 AM
Gulshan mayn tere hum bhi zara ghoom kay niklayn, In mast baharon mein zara jhoom kay niklayn! Har phool muskuraaye ,ithlaaye har kalee, Ithlaatee kaliyon ko zara choom kay niklayn! Hojaye jalwagar tu yahee dil kay hayn armaan, Armaan bhi zara ab dil-e-masoom kay nilkayn! Munsif se iltejaa-e-mulzim yahee aakhir, Haq mayn faislay Zara mazloom kay niklayn! Kartay rahay tum baytukee shaayree Ahmad Koshish kero ashaar sahee mafhoom kay niklayn! Aadaab saathiyo....mayn jaanta hoon meri is kavish mayn buhat see qaamiyaan hayn..ummeed hay kay aap sab saath dayngay isay sudhaahrnay mayn aur faraagh dili say tanqeed o tabsera karangay! Dar asal yay ghazal aur doosri kaavish jo maynay shayri_E_dard mayn post kee hay wo dono nay mujhay buhat confuse kiya . Dono kay ashaar ek saath aar rahay thay zehan mayn aur ashaar sahee jam nahee rahay thay. Phir koshish kee kee ek saath sabhi ashaar likh daaloon aur phir dekhoon kay isko do hisson mayn baant sakta hoon. yahi koshish ka nateejaa hay yay do ghazlayn bayshak qamiyon say bharee hayn. Ummeed hay aap sab imdad farmayayngay. Muntazir. .................................................. .................................................. Ahmad Hyderabadi |
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23rd November 2011, 11:22 AM
WAH!!...Behad khoobsurat aur dilkash ghazal hai.....
Sabhi ashaar behad pasand aaye hameiN... Aaj tou aapne mehfil loot li Ahmed sahab... Waqay dil khush hogaya...  Yuhi likhtay rahiye....... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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23rd November 2011, 11:54 AM
Hojaye jalwagar tu yahee dil kay hayn armaan, Armaan bhi zara ab dil-e-masoom kay nilkayn! Munsif se iltejaa-e-mulzim yahee aakhir, Haq mayn faislay Zara mazloom kay niklayn! Kartay rahay tum baytukee shaayree Ahmad Koshish kero ashaar sahee mafhoom kay niklayn! Subhanallah!!!! Janaab Ahmad Hyderabadi Saheb, Aadaab. Aapki mehfil mein pehli baar aamad hui aur yaqiinan aapki shayri mein wo kashish hai ki fir aate rehna pa.Dega! Rahi baat aapki is koshish ki, to Mashallah, nihayat hi khoobsoorat rahi aapki peshkash. Aapka mazmuun bahot pyaara hai, girah bhi aap achhi lagate haiN aur peshgi mein rawaani hai. Aapne qaafia bhi khoobsoorat chuna aur use nibhaya bhi bahot durust. Sirf ek guzarish hai ke behr mein, yaane wazan mein likhne ki koshish kareN. Chaar nahi aath chand lag jayeNge aapke kalaamoN ko. Ek umda kalaam ke liye dil se daad qubool kareN. DuaoN ke saath ijaazat Naadaan HumeN gunah bhi karne ko zindagi kam hai." -Anand Narayan Mulla. वो कौन है जिन्हें तौबा की मिल गई फुरसत, हमें गुनाह भी करने को ज़िंदगी कम है. -आनंद नारायण मुल्ला |
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23rd November 2011, 07:20 PM
Ahmad hyderabadi saheb bahot hi achha likha hai aapne ... padh ke majja aa gaya ... jab kabhi hum kuch achha padhte hain jo ek jahni satisfaction sa hota hai ... to wohi hua aapke share padh ke bhi, ek ek share napa tulla hua likha hai aapne ... I liked it ...
Please do share more !! ------------------------------------ Men may come , Men may go .. But i will go on forever ... :-) |
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26th November 2011, 05:23 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Badee masarrat huee aapki aamad par. Takheer e adaygee e shukr kay liye muafi talab hay. Dar asal nacheez bayhad masghool ho gaya tha.Daad wa paziraai ka bayhad shukria. Ilteja hay aap say yoonhee saath nibhaati rahayn. Mehfil mayn dakhila milay yahi badee baat hay, aap nay tou usay lootnay ka ilzaam le liya nacheez par. Bas oopar ka he baytuka shayr quote karna chahunga... Munsif say iletjaa e mulzim yahee aakhir, Haq mayn faislay zara mazloom kay niklayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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Mamnoon hayn ham aapkay |
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Mamnoon hayn ham aapkay -
26th November 2011, 05:44 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Khushaamdeed! Bayhad masarrat huee aap ko bazm e khaaksaar mayn paakar. Aapnay is nacheez ko apnay bayshqeemtee waqt wa islaah say nawaaza iskay liye pahlay Parwardigaar aur phir aapka bayhad mashkoor hoon. Aapki baat khaaksaar kay dil wa zahn dono ko choo gayee aur InshaAllah poori koshish keroonga ispay hameshaa amal karnay kee. Is bazm ki shaan(yaani SDC ki) aur apni haalat per ayk shayr arz hay..... Jo Bahr_e_ilm_e_behr mayn dooba, bay_ bahraa na raha Sarsabz o shadaab gulshan bana, wo sahra na rahaa! Ilteja hay aapsay yoonhi rahnumaai kartay rahayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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26th November 2011, 06:16 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Bayhad khuee aapko yahaan daykh. Aapki pasandeedgee wa nawzish e daad ka bayhad mashkoor hoon. Aao mutmaeen huay issay bada,eenaam kya ho sakta hay nacheez kay liyay. Dil ko thandak pahonchee aapka comment perh. Ilejaa hay aapsay yoonhi saath daytay rahayn. Duagoh Ahmad |
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27th November 2011, 07:14 AM
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Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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27th November 2011, 08:24 AM
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makkhaan ki tarah misre haiN likhte raheN |
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27th November 2011, 08:26 PM
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AchChhi Peshkash ... Mubaaraqbaad !!!  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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28th November 2011, 02:58 PM
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AHMAD Sahib.........! Boht Achi Lagi Aap Ki Ye Kawish........ Andaz-e-Bayaan BHi Pasand Aaya........ Dheron Daad Qabool Farmayen........ Yunhi Likhtay Rahen.....Khush Rahen Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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29th November 2011, 11:01 PM
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ek bht hi pyari gazal kahi hai aapne aursare diggajon ne jis tarah aapki lekhni ki tareef ki hai main to padh padh kar khush ho rahi hun....khubsurat khyaalon ko bht hi nipunta se aapne motiyon se shabdon me sath piroya hai iss maala me..... ek behad pyari peshkash rahi ye aapki..... yunhi likhte rahye aur khush rahiye..... Dard lafzon me pirona chahta hai.. |
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29th November 2011, 11:37 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Aapki aamad, pasandeedgee wa daad ka bayhad mashkoor hoon! ilteja hay aapsay yoon hee saath daytay rahiyega! Duagoh Ahmad |
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29th November 2011, 11:40 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Khushaamdeed! Masarrat huyee aapki aamad par aur sonay pay suhaga aapko pasand aayee dil baagh baagh hogaya! Bayhad shukriya aapka! Yoon hee saath daytay rahayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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29th November 2011, 11:42 PM
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Dil khush kar diya ap nay apni aamad say nawaz kar! banda aapki bayhad izzat wa qadr karta hay! Aur aapki aamad aur daad par dil ko thandak see padjaati hay! Yoon hee saath daytay rahayn yahi ilteja hay! Duagoh Ahmad |
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29th November 2011, 11:45 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Zahenaseeb!! bayhad mashkoor hoon aapki aamad , izzatafzaii aur nawazish ka! Ilteja hay aap say yoon hee saath daytay rahayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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29th November 2011, 11:51 PM
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Khushaamdeed! Aapko pahli baar is bazm mayn daykh badee khushee huyee! Aapki honslafzaai aur izzatafzaai ka bayhad shukrguzaar hoon! Aapkay id mayn aapnay teen ikkay "A" (triple aces) rakhay hayn..hamayn buhat acha laga yay andaaz. Yoon hee saath daytee rahayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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