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4th February 2013, 04:50 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by zidd
mujeeb sahab jab is sher par aap kasrat karenge to ye 2 points par khayaal rakhiyega
1] is meter me compulsory stoppage hai,
yani 221 1222 // par aapka lafz khatm ho jaana chahiye.koi ek lafz iske baad waale arkaan me carry nahi ho sakta..
221 1222 // 221 1222
hai aib hazaro po // ...........so galat.
har koi darinda sab // ................correct
( hasrat mohani sahab ne jaha stoppage hai meter ke last do arkaan repeat hone ke pahle, waha ek extra syllable ke istemaal ki possibilty rakhi hai. so agar aapka misra waisa ban raha ho to bhi istemaal kar sakte hai mohani sahab ki ijaad ke hisaab se....waise muamla ab tak controversial hai...agee aapki marzi hai ki mohani sahab ke exception ko maane ya na maane)
2] sher ke dusre misre ko pahle misre hi me shuru nahi kar sakte.
(arabic poetry me possible hai magar persian poetry me nahi hai...for unknown reasons urdu prosody me influence persian poetry ka hai for this purpose)
regards and all the best.
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Karriiii informations dii hain zidd saahab, mazaaa aa gaya.... Yaqeen maniye point No. 2 ke baare me maine kuch sunaa hi na tha ab tak.... bahot khushi hui jo aapne hamaare shaath ye baaten share kiin......
aate raheN... gyaan ka pitaara kholte raheN..................
Shaad... |
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