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29th July 2008, 10:51 AM
tamaam dostoN ko meraa salaam!!
nazm kahnaa mere liye teRhi kheer hai (yuN to ghazal meiN bhee :tees maar khaa: naheeN huN Smiley ) .. par is baar aik apaahij naujawaan se mulaaqaat huee jiskee Hauslaa dekhte hee bantaa thaa. so aik nazm uske naam!! apne mashwaroN se nawaaziyegaa!
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tiree daryaa dilii kaa shukriyaa sad_haa! magar ai dost!
apaahij huN to kyaa yeh hoNsalaa TooTaa naheeN ab tak,
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abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
maiN buzdil to naheeN laikin kabhee yeh aaNkh nam ho to,
maiN khud se haar jaauN aur iskaa mujh ko gham ho to,
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tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
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29th July 2008, 01:40 PM
Dheer bhaiya:
namaste!!
aapki naZm ko jab paRhaa tou usski gehrA'ii jaan ke hi lagtaa hai ki aapne uss iNsaan ke dil ko kitanaa jaanaa haii.. aapki yeh naZm dil meN Ghar kar ga'ii.. maiN ees par aapko waah waahii naheeN duuNgaa.. balkii ees ehsaas ko hum sab tak pahuNchaane ke liYe maiN aapkaa ShuKraGuzaar rahuuNgaa ..!
YuuNhii liKhate rahiYe... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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Mind Blowing Dear ... superb !!!
Dili daad kabool kijiyee ...appki is kavish per mere lakhooN salam
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dheer bhai aik aik shabd jehan ko hila gaya kitna khuub wayaa kiy hai apne uus sahasi aur swabhimani ko,par mujhe jo hila gayi wo meri khud ki kahai ki buzdili aur kayarta hai,kita kuch hai mere paas fir bhi jo nahi usko rota he dil,superb,likhte rahe dheer bhai,khush rahe,sukriya share karne ke liye....baagi
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Dheer bhaiya:
namaste!!
aapki naZm ko jab paRhaa tou usski gehrA'ii jaan ke hi lagtaa hai ki aapne uss iNsaan ke dil ko kitanaa jaanaa haii.. aapki yeh naZm dil meN Ghar kar ga'ii.. maiN ees par aapko waah waahii naheeN duuNgaa.. balkii ees ehsaas ko hum sab tak pahuNchaane ke liYe maiN aapkaa ShuKraGuzaar rahuuNgaa ..!
YuuNhii liKhate rahiYe... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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dil kee baat dil tak pahuche ..is se zyada aur kyaa baat ho saktee hai dhaval. waah-waahee aur saNkaRon daad o tahseen se baRh kar hai.
shukriyaa dhaval! apnaa khayaal rakhnaa!!
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Mind Blowing Dear ... superb !!!
Dili daad kabool kijiyee ...appki is kavish per mere lakhooN salam
ajj mere alfazoN meiN woh dum hi nahi ki kuch bayan ker paaieN
keep writing ...
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bahut bahut shukriyaa saHeb!!
aapkee himmat afzaayee ke liye tahe dil se mamnoon huN.
take care
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30th July 2008, 02:33 PM
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dheer bhai aik aik shabd jehan ko hila gaya kitna khuub wayaa kiy hai apne uus sahasi aur swabhimani ko,par mujhe jo hila gayi wo meri khud ki kahai ki buzdili aur kayarta hai,kita kuch hai mere paas fir bhi jo nahi usko rota he dil,superb,likhte rahe dheer bhai,khush rahe,sukriya share karne ke liye....baagi
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bahut bahut shukriyaa saHeb!! aapkee aamad aur nazm par pasandagee jataanaa mere liye baais e masar'rat hai.
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dear dheer.....aaj aapki likhi hue nazam padi....sach kahti hoon behad acchey ahsaas haiN...bahut gahrai hai aapki nazam meiN....dil se daad kabool kijiye with Reps ++
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30th July 2008, 10:50 PM
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tamaam dostoN ko meraa salaam!!
nazm kahnaa mere liye teRhi kheer hai (yuN to ghazal meiN bhee :tees maar khaa: naheeN huN Smiley ) .. par is baar aik apaahij naujawaan se mulaaqaat huee jiskee Hauslaa dekhte hee bantaa thaa. so aik nazm uske naam!! apne mashwaroN se nawaaziyegaa!
shukriyaa!!
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tiree daryaa dilii kaa shukriyaa sad_haa! magar ai dost!
apaahij huN to kyaa yeh hoNsalaa TooTaa naheeN ab tak,
sahaaraa tere kaandhoN kaa abhee mujhko naheeN darkaar,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
maiN buzdil to naheeN laikin kabhee yeh aaNkh nam ho to,
maiN khud se haar jaauN aur iskaa mujh ko gham ho to,
tire kaandhe ki mujhko tab zarurat hoN to aa jaanaa,
miree him'mat kee baisaakhee agar TooTe to aa jaanaa!
mujhe rone ko teraa aik kaandhaa hee bahut hogaa,
magar ik aur bhee tujh se guzaarish hai mire pyaare,
ki ik din aur apnaa besh-qeemat waqt adaa karnaa,
woh ik pal jis pe apnaa ikhtiyaar hotaa naheeN hai tab,
ki yeh saaNsoN ki Doree jab jigar se chhuTa'tii hai tab,
tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
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lajawab Dheer ji ..............
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
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dear dheer.....aaj aapki likhi hue nazam padi....sach kahti hoon behad acchey ahsaas haiN...bahut gahrai hai aapki nazam meiN....dil se daad kabool kijiye with Reps ++
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behad mamnoon huN sunita di!! ..apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa]
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tamaam dostoN ko meraa salaam!!
nazm kahnaa mere liye teRhi kheer hai (yuN to ghazal meiN bhee :tees maar khaa: naheeN huN Smiley ) .. par is baar aik apaahij naujawaan se mulaaqaat huee jiskee Hauslaa dekhte hee bantaa thaa. so aik nazm uske naam!! apne mashwaroN se nawaaziyegaa!
shukriyaa!!
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tiree daryaa dilii kaa shukriyaa sad_haa! magar ai dost!
apaahij huN to kyaa yeh hoNsalaa TooTaa naheeN ab tak,
sahaaraa tere kaandhoN kaa abhee mujhko naheeN darkaar,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
maiN buzdil to naheeN laikin kabhee yeh aaNkh nam ho to,
maiN khud se haar jaauN aur iskaa mujh ko gham ho to,
tire kaandhe ki mujhko tab zarurat hoN to aa jaanaa,
miree him'mat kee baisaakhee agar TooTe to aa jaanaa!
mujhe rone ko teraa aik kaandhaa hee bahut hogaa,
magar ik aur bhee tujh se guzaarish hai mire pyaare,
ki ik din aur apnaa besh-qeemat waqt adaa karnaa,
woh ik pal jis pe apnaa ikhtiyaar hotaa naheeN hai tab,
ki yeh saaNsoN ki Doree jab jigar se chhuTa'tii hai tab,
tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
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mujhe rone ko teraa aik kaandhaa hee bahut hogaa,
magar ik aur bhee tujh se guzaarish hai mire pyaare,
ki ik din aur apnaa besh-qeemat waqt adaa karnaa,
woh ik pal jis pe apnaa ikhtiyaar hotaa naheeN hai tab,
ki yeh saaNsoN ki Doree jab jigar se chhuTa'tii hai tab,
tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
bohat khoob dheer ji ahsasaat bohat pur asar rahe yunhi likhte rahiyega apna bohat khayal rakhiyega
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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2nd August 2008, 02:37 AM
6 taareeKh to india pahuNch raha huuN aur lagta hai aapse milna hi paDega!!
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
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2nd August 2008, 12:38 PM
dheer bhai ko raj ka adaab....bhai mere tune kamaal ke khyal pesh kiye hain or rawangi to bemasaal hai.....bhut umdaah.....raj.....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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mujhe rone ko teraa aik kaandhaa hee bahut hogaa,
magar ik aur bhee tujh se guzaarish hai mire pyaare,
ki ik din aur apnaa besh-qeemat waqt adaa karnaa,
woh ik pal jis pe apnaa ikhtiyaar hotaa naheeN hai tab,
ki yeh saaNsoN ki Doree jab jigar se chhuTa'tii hai tab,
tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
bohat khoob dheer ji ahsasaat bohat pur asar rahe yunhi likhte rahiyega apna bohat khayal rakhiyega
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bahut bahut shukriyaa mani ji!! aapkee him'mat afzaayee aaj mere saath saath us shaks ke liye bhee hai jise yeh nazm naz'r kee gayee hai. so do gunaa shukriyaa
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6 taareeKh to india pahuNch raha huuN aur lagta hai aapse milna hi paDega!!
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namaste maiksah saHeb!!
ise maiN apnee khush-naseebee samjhungaa! maiN aapko aik khat likh rahaa huN jis meN apnaa phone number bhej rahaa huN. is se mulaaqaat meiN aasaanee rahegee. shukriyaa
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dheer bhai ko raj ka adaab....bhai mere tune kamaal ke khyal pesh kiye hain or rawangi to bemasaal hai.....bhut umdaah.....raj.....
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raj saHeb ko meraa namaste!!
kaise haiN aap? baRe bhaai kee taareef mil jaayeiN to kyaa kahne .. dil garden garden ho gayaa .. apna khayaal rakhiyegaa .....
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tamaam dostoN ko meraa salaam!!
nazm kahnaa mere liye teRhi kheer hai (yuN to ghazal meiN bhee :tees maar khaa: naheeN huN Smiley ) .. par is baar aik apaahij naujawaan se mulaaqaat huee jiskee Hauslaa dekhte hee bantaa thaa. so aik nazm uske naam!! apne mashwaroN se nawaaziyegaa!
shukriyaa!!
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tiree daryaa dilii kaa shukriyaa sad_haa! magar ai dost!
apaahij huN to kyaa yeh hoNsalaa TooTaa naheeN ab tak,
sahaaraa tere kaandhoN kaa abhee mujhko naheeN darkaar,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
maiN buzdil to naheeN laikin kabhee yeh aaNkh nam ho to,
maiN khud se haar jaauN aur iskaa mujh ko gham ho to,
tire kaandhe ki mujhko tab zarurat hoN to aa jaanaa,
miree him'mat kee baisaakhee agar TooTe to aa jaanaa!
mujhe rone ko teraa aik kaandhaa hee bahut hogaa,
magar ik aur bhee tujh se guzaarish hai mire pyaare,
ki ik din aur apnaa besh-qeemat waqt adaa karnaa,
woh ik pal jis pe apnaa ikhtiyaar hotaa naheeN hai tab,
ki yeh saaNsoN ki Doree jab jigar se chhuTa'tii hai tab,
tuu apne saath us pal teen kaandhe aur le aanaa,
abhee kuchh jaan baakee hai, use jee luN phir aa jaanaa!
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Dheer sahab
ek lambe arse ke baad aapka ye kalam pad raha hoon... yakeen maniye ki is baat ka mujhebehad afsos hai ki main itne lambe samay se is mahfil se door kyun raha... bahut kuch badla hai yahan.... per aapki shayrii main jo painapan aur barikiya.n aayin hai sach dil khush ho gaya..... kaise tareef karoon mere pass shawd hii nahi hai.n...... bus dil se nikalii huyii daad hazir karta hoon.
ese hi hamesha likhte rahiyega.....
shukriyaa....
aapka dost dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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Dheer sahab
ek lambe arse ke baad aapka ye kalam pad raha hoon... yakeen maniye ki is baat ka mujhebehad afsos hai ki main itne lambe samay se is mahfil se door kyun raha... bahut kuch badla hai yahan.... per aapki shayrii main jo painapan aur barikiya.n aayin hai sach dil khush ho gaya..... kaise tareef karoon mere pass shawd hii nahi hai.n...... bus dil se nikalii huyii daad hazir karta hoon.
ese hi hamesha likhte rahiyega.....
shukriyaa....
aapka dost dilip
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namaste Dilip bhaiyaa!! kaise haiN aap?
der aayad durust aayad ... har insaan apnee zindagee ke pech o kham meiN uljhaa huaa hai aur iskaa koee ilaaj naheeN hai. so gilaa nah kareN. jo waqt mayas'sar hai usee se khush honaa paRega.
aapkee daad o tehsin ke liye tah e dil se aapkaa shukraguzaar huN. apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa!!
Dheer
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