Fusoon-e-alfaaz ..... the magic of words

[Praneeta]

Originally Posted by zarraa

Welcome Praneeta ji ... Waah !!!bahaut hi achchhee koshish ki Praneeta ji. Khoobsurat sher hai ! aap ne is jumle ko bhi bakhoobi nibhaaya hai. gunaah aur rasan-o-daar ka connection bahaut hi achchhe se kiya hai aapne.

not sure if you are looking for feedback. agar haaN to bas ek chhoti si baat. kyuNki lafz "gunaah' ka istemaal metaphorical ya rhetorical sense meiN hua hai, to mere opinion meiN, agar daar-o-rasan ka metaphorical ya symbolic roop dikhta to sher aur bhi khul sakta tha ...
e.g. tanhaayee ke rasan-o-daar / ranj-o-gham ke rasan-o-daar etc

sorry, if this was unwanted advice aur ho sakta hai mera kehna ghalat ho ya aap us se ittefaaq na rakkhein, in which case please do share your views

waise, phir se keh doon, ki sher apne aap meiN khoobsurat hai

tashreef laane ka shukriya aur aage bhi aap ki maujoodgee ki ummeed rahegi

shukriya Zarraa ji aap ke response ke liye. definitely aap ka feedback welcome hai. aap ne jo suggest kiya i agree but i actually meant that punishment is suicide thats why used only rasan-o-daar. hope i make some sense here

thanks again