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Originally Posted by neha_hasratein
Jane kyu tere pas aane se dar lagta hai,
tujhe khone ke ahsaas se dar lagta hai,
meri saaso ka teri saaso se jo rishta hai,
bas un saaso ke tut jane se dar lagta hai,
hame tere chune ke andaaz se dar lagta hai,
tere pas aakar dur jane se dar lagta hai,
In aankho me tera hi sapna basta hai,
ab to dil bhi diye ki tarah jala karta hai,
koi is diye ko kaise bhuja sakta hai,
jo khud jalkar is jahan ko roshan karta hai..........
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Neha Ji....aapki koshish toh achi hai.........ehsaason mai gehraai bhi dikhti hai.....par upar sameer ji ne aapko sher mai qaafiye ka kaise istemaal karte hai....samjhaane ki koshish ki hai....aap ispar dhiyaan dengi toh aur bhi aapki rachnaaon mai nikhaar aata chala jayega....kiyonki aapki soch aur ehsaas bahut ache hai....aap main likhne ki kaabliyat bhi bahut dikhaai deti hai.....mujhe yakin hai....aap jald seekh kar behtar shayaraa ki kataar mai aa jayengi....aisi hum kaamna kate hai....