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' Hum Tum Ko Bhoulaa Na Sake...! ' - 3rd November 2006, 07:09 PM

Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

Guftagoo ka hi jo bandh kar diyaa tumne
Ous darwaaze ko phir se khoulaa na sake

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake



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3rd November 2006, 09:36 PM

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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

Guftagoo ka hi jo bandh kar diyaa tumne
Ous darwaaze ko phir se khoulaa na sake

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake

danny ji namaskaar

aapki rachna har bar bahot hi alag aur ehsas se bhari hoti hai bahot hi achha laga is rachna ko padhke ehsas aapke pasand aaye

aur khas karke mujhe ye sher bhot hi achhey lage

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake


Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

bahot khub !!!!

dil se nikali daad kubul kijiyenga

aapka dost
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4th November 2006, 01:22 PM

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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

Guftagoo ka hi jo bandh kar diyaa tumne
Ous darwaaze ko phir se khoulaa na sake

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake

dear danny ji

jab ham kisi ko apna banane ki koshish karte hai aur nahi bana paate to woh gam milta hai jiska byaan karna bahut mushkil hai. apne yahaan apne jajbaatoin ko likha padke acha laga. lekin shayad ye dard apke andar hai ye sochke acha nahi laga.dil ko kuch khraab laga.
par likhne se gam kam hota hai.yuhi likhte rahna dost.
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danny ji namaskaar

aapki rachna har bar bahot hi alag aur ehsas se bhari hoti hai bahot hi achha laga is rachna ko padhke ehsas aapke pasand aaye

aur khas karke mujhe ye sher bhot hi achhey lage

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake


Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

bahot khub !!!!

dil se nikali daad kubul kijiyenga

aapka dost
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Shukriya, Dhaval Ji...!

Yaha kavita bhi aap ko pasand aayi so hamare liye khoushi ki baat hai...!

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dear danny ji

jab ham kisi ko apna banane ki koshish karte hai aur nahi bana paate to woh gam milta hai jiska byaan karna bahut mushkil hai. apne yahaan apne jajbaatoin ko likha padke acha laga. lekin shayad ye dard apke andar hai ye sochke acha nahi laga.dil ko kuch khraab laga.
par likhne se gam kam hota hai.yuhi likhte rahna dost.
sakhi
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Aap ke nice comments ko parh kar acha lagaa...! Par sach maaniye, ye aap ke dost ke andar ka dard nahin hai...! Hum hamesha khush hein...!

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Dear Sakhi Ji...!

Aap ke nice comments ko parh kar acha lagaa...! Par sach maaniye, ye aap ke dost ke andar ka dard nahin hai...! Hum hamesha khush hein...!

Thik se apna khayaal rakhiyega...!

dear danny ji
bahut acha laga janke ki ye apke andar ka dard nahi hai.
aap yuhi khush rahiye.
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8th November 2006, 12:50 PM

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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

Guftagoo ka hi jo bandh kar diyaa tumne
Ous darwaaze ko phir se khoulaa na sake

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake


danny ji namaskaaR...!

aaj aapko phele baar padda, sach maniye dil ko chu gaye aapki yeh gazal. shayad maine galti ki jo ab tak aapko na pad paye,par ab yeh galti nahi karungi, lag raha hai kuch acchey kalaam miss kar diye maine. any way....!
ab nahi karungi....!

yeh sher bahut pasand aaya:

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake



yu hi likhtey rahiye,

aapki dost


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8th November 2006, 11:00 PM

danny ji,
har baar ki tarah phir se ek behtareen peshkash.bahut acha lika hai.likhte rahie yunhin.


yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??

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bahut acha laga janke ki ye apke andar ka dard nahi hai.
aap yuhi khush rahiye.
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danny ji namaskaaR...!

aaj aapko phele baar padda, sach maniye dil ko chu gaye aapki yeh gazal. shayad maine galti ki jo ab tak aapko na pad paye,par ab yeh galti nahi karungi, lag raha hai kuch acchey kalaam miss kar diye maine. any way....!
ab nahi karungi....!

yeh sher bahut pasand aaya:

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake



yu hi likhtey rahiye,

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Namaskaar Sunita Ji...!

Gar hamari yaaddasht galat nahin farmaa rahi hai, yaha dusri baar hai jo aap ne hamein parhaa...!

Aap ke hausle bhare alfaaz se hum bahout khush houe...!

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Shukriya jo aap ne iss kaviya ko bhi parha aur saraaha, Akelijaan Ji...!

Saath nibhaate rahiyega aur apna khayaal bhi rakhna, ok...?



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13th November 2006, 09:33 PM

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake


Namaskar Danny Ji

Kayi din baad aapki rachna padhi...it's really beautiful.....Upar quote kiye sher bahut khoobsurat lage...aapki yeh rachna parh mughey ek apni purani rachna yaad aa gayi ...Keep up the Good work...

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Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
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Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake


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Kayi din baad aapki rachna padhi...it's really beautiful.....Upar quote kiye sher bahut khoobsurat lage...aapki yeh rachna parh mughey ek apni purani rachna yaad aa gayi ...Keep up the Good work...

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Isse bhi pasand karne ke liye shukriya, Sukanya Ji...!

Jiss purani rachna ka zikr aap ne kiya, uss ka link mil jaaye to khushi hoti...! Hum bhi aap ke kalaam ko parhne ka anand utha lete...!

Thanks in advance



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Isse bhi pasand karne ke liye shukriya, Sukanya Ji...!

Jiss purani rachna ka zikr aap ne kiya, uss ka link mil jaaye to khushi hoti...! Hum bhi aap ke kalaam ko parhne ka anand utha lete...!

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Namaskar Danny ji

Waise to bahut pehle likhi thi yeh rachna...chaliye yeh hay link....
www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=24424...pata nahin pehle kaisa likhti thi ...asha karungi aapko pasand aayegi yeh rachna...

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Hello Amnush
hi nice work hamesha ki tarha bahote hi aach likha hia. nice work pade ke aacha laga. keep up.

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Waise to bahut pehle likhi thi yeh rachna...chaliye yeh hay link....
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hi nice work hamesha ki tarha bahote hi aach likha hia. nice work pade ke aacha laga. keep up.

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Acha lagaa jaan kar ki yaha kavita bhi pasand aayi...!

Younhi hausle baDhaanaa...!

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Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
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Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
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Danny sahab....aap ki khidmat me addaab baja laate hai...barkhurdaar bahut achha likha aapne aur isme b koi shak nahi k aap ka har kalaam bahut hi badiya aur dil ko chhoota hua sa hota hai...waqt ki masrufiyat hame aap tak pahuncha nahi pati varna apke har kalaam ko ham saraahe....iske liye maafi chahenge...aur abhi hamari tahe dil se daad kabool kare...ye uper ki lines hame bhut asardaar lagi..

ab izazet de....aur apne khayaal rakhiyega....khush rahiye..



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Danny sahab....aap ki khidmat me addaab baja laate hai...barkhurdaar bahut achha likha aapne aur isme b koi shak nahi k aap ka har kalaam bahut hi badiya aur dil ko chhoota hua sa hota hai...waqt ki masrufiyat hame aap tak pahuncha nahi pati varna apke har kalaam ko ham saraahe....iske liye maafi chahenge...aur abhi hamari tahe dil se daad kabool kare...ye uper ki lines hame bhut asardaar lagi..

ab izazet de....aur apne khayaal rakhiyega....khush rahiye..
Aadaab, Saheeba Ji...!

Aap ki nazar hamare kalaam par bhi padti hai, yaha jaan kar bahut khushi houi...! Aap ki sneh bhari aalochana parh kar dil khil uthaa hamara...!

Tah-e-dil se daad kabul karte hein hum...!

Apna khayaal rakhiyega

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hi - 28th January 2007, 12:38 AM

hi amanush

hi bhoate hi aacha likha hia. hamesha ki tarha dil choolene wala aure eke toote dil ke hare kone ka dard jaise ise maie dlae diya hia bhaote hia khoob keep it up.

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Hi "Mushkil" ji

liked the way you have written the poem.



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khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii

lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii


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liked the way you have written the poem.



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bahut khoob Amanush ji
yeh bahut gehrra saach hai ... jisko kabool karana asaan nahi hota ... yehi b kisi ne sehi kaha hai ... duniya ki har ek cheez humari nahi ho sakti ... afsoos .... esi baat ka hai ... khaas hum kuch cheeze badal sake ...
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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

bahut hi khoob!!

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

yaadein kam ho sakti hain....par kabhi khtam nahin hoti

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

very nice!!

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

bahut sahin likha hain!!

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake

AAp ko padhna hamesha accha lagta hain...dannyjee......aise hi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rehna....

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yeh bahut gehrra saach hai ... jisko kabool karana asaan nahi hota ... yehi b kisi ne sehi kaha hai ... duniya ki har ek cheez humari nahi ho sakti ... afsoos .... esi baat ka hai ... khaas hum kuch cheeze badal sake ...
anyways ... yu hi aate rahe ... n take care
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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
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bahut hi khoob!!

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

yaadein kam ho sakti hain....par kabhi khtam nahin hoti

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

very nice!!

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

bahut sahin likha hain!!

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
Siwa-e-Khuda kissi ko bhi batlaa na sake

AAp ko padhna hamesha accha lagta hain...dannyjee......aise hi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rehna....

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Dil main teri chavi tujhe dikhlaa na sake
Chah kar bhi tujhe apna kehlaa na sake

Mast hawaaon ne hazaar baar pukaara
Bin dori ke patang hum ouDaa na sake

Waqt ke sang yaaddasht kam hoti gayi
Wo puraani ghazal phir dohraa na sake

Dil jeetne ke khel main hum rahe anaari
Baazi apni sahi kismat ko haraa na sake

Jab se tamaasha dekha teri beroukhi ka
Ankhon ko chain ki nind soulaa na sake

Jiss ke janam lete hi tum ne maar daala
Ous chaahat ko hum phir jeelaa na sake

Guftagoo ka hi jo bandh kar diyaa tumne
Ous darwaaze ko phir se khoulaa na sake

Mushkil hai tujhe sabab-e-judaai sunaana
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Danny bhaiyaa Namaste
kaise hai aap ?

aaj phir aapki yeh gazal padi...to esko highlight karna chaha

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Danny bhaiyaa Namaste
kaise hai aap ?

aaj phir aapki yeh gazal padi...to esko highlight karna chaha

regards
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Bahut shukriya, ChoTi Behna...!

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