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Post mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 28th September 2006, 07:17 AM

aadaab aur SSA dosto



kuch arsaa qabl maine ek qitaa post kiya tha jo ke kaafi dinoN se zehan meiN karvateiN le raha tha....usii behr aur zamiin meiN ye Ghazal kehne ki koshish ki hai.....

mulai'zaa kijiye :-



mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN
uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN


usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN


aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN


kaun sunta hai yaar duniya meiN
humse khaana kharaab ki baateN


hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

izteraab = ghabraahaT , anxiety



ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN


bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN


Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya
dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN




apnii araa se zaruur nawaazeN


khair aNdesh
maikash


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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai

maikash
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Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 28th September 2006, 08:05 AM

[QUOTE]Originally posted by maikasH


mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN
uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN


usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN

waah kya baat hai

aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN


kaun sunta hai yaaro duniya meiN
humse khaana kharaab ki baateN


hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

izteraab = ghabraahaT , anxiety



ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN


bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN

behad umda sher hai waah

Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya
dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN


janab maikash sahab

aadab

janab maine aapko jab se padna shuru kiya hai, aapli shayri main maine ek alag hi nasha paya hai.. ek ajeeb si kashish hoti hai aapki shayri main. or har sher behad umda hota hai. sabse sanjeeda baat jo mujhe nazar aati hai wo ye ki aapki gazal main ek rawangi hoti hai ek continuity hoti hai....

janab bahut hi behtreen gazal likhi hai aapne har baar ki tarah ek dam juda.......

dil se daad hazir hai janab kabool farmaiyega........

ek begana sa dost
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Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 28th September 2006, 10:14 AM

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aadaab aur SSA dosto



kuch arsaa qabl maine ek qitaa post kiya tha jo ke kaafi dinoN se zehan meiN karvateiN le raha tha....usii behr aur zamiin meiN ye Ghazal kehne ki koshish ki hai.....

mulai'zaa kijiye :-



mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN
uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN


usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN


aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN


kaun sunta hai yaar duniya meiN
humse khaana kharaab ki baateN


hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

izteraab = ghabraahaT , anxiety



ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN


bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN


Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya
dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN




apnii araa se zaruur nawaazeN


khair aNdesh
maikash

maikash ji namaskar...!

bahut umda likha hai aapne, aapke ke likhney ka tareeka sab se alag hai, aapki rachna dil ko chu gaye. aur kuch share to bahut laajwaab lagey, jaise ki :

usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN

aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN

yu hi likhtey rahiye....!

aapki dost


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28th September 2006, 11:33 AM

maikash ji """" KEM CHHO??????????""""


kaise ho janab aap?

pasand aaya bahot hi likhga hua

bas aise hi likhte rahiye janab aapko padhna achha lagta hai

aapka dost
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hi - 28th September 2006, 11:54 AM

ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN


bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN


Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya
dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN

janaab sandhu sahib sat sri akaal ji.....

appki gazal hai ya heera koi tarasha hua,
andhere main chehra nazar aane laaga raat ka......

jab kabhi chalti hai teri kalam bekhudi main,
wo waqt hota hai lafzon se misre ki mulakaat ka......

janaab jiyada to nahi kahounga bass yahi kehta hoon ki appki kalam yu hee rawa rahe or hum pyaso ki pyaas bhujati rahe.......take care........raj.......


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Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 29th September 2006, 02:50 PM

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aadaab aur SSA dosto



aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN

Maikash ji

aapke is sher ne dil pe kya qehar kiya hai batana mushkil hai ... bohat hi umda gazal ko mera salaam...

aap apna khayal rakhiye

aapka apna

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29th September 2006, 08:43 PM

pranam maikash ji.

kaise hai aap...........

aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN

kya maikash ji aap to maikhane ka divala nikalvaoge........... Unhi agar hissab ki baten aap kal par chhodne lage to koi sakhi aapko jam nahi degi sochlijiyega janaab.
Un to aapne ye line bahot achhi likhi hai ,sachchi.

bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN

Tauba tauba !! maikash ji ki gazal. Ye thhoda sa funny laga. Maffkijiye ise funny bolne ke liye, lekin jo laga bol diya. jo nahi laga vo kaise bol den hum.

hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

janaab aapne bhi apna naam ''maikash'' soch samajh ke rakha. har baar sharaab ka jikar. wah wah....

ab thhodi tariff bhi karni chahiye aapki, aapne bahot achha likha hai. mujhe to bas tarif me yahi kahana ata hai. bas mein isi kadar achhe kalaam ki tarif karti hu.

ab agar aapko kuchh bura laga to dant lijiye saath me hume gustakhi ke liye maaf bhi kar dijiyega.

ab hum ijajat chahenge ji aapse......apne is khoobsoorat gazal se iss mehafiil ko roshan karne ke liye shukriya ji.

ok ji bye bye

graze

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29th September 2006, 08:58 PM

mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN
uski baateN , gulaab ki baateN

usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN

bahut khoob janaab...


aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN

kaun sunta hai yaar duniya meiN
humse khaana kharaab ki baateN

kya baat hai...


hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

ya karo zikr unkii aaNkhoN ka
ya to jaam-e-sharaab ki baateN

whaaa... bahut khoob...


bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN

Ghazal-e-"maikash" meiN aur hoga kya
dard-o-Gham aur sharaab ki baateN

Kya baat hai.... bahut hi khoobusrat aashaar hain...

Dear Maikash bhai,

Adaab, kaise hain? Ummeeed hai sab acche se hoga....

Bahut hi khoobsurat aur asardaar ghazal likhi hai aapne... padhakr bahut hi accha laga... meri daad kubool kijiyega... isi tarah likhte rahiye... khayal rakhiyega apna...


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Re: Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 30th September 2006, 04:31 AM

[QUOTE]Originally posted by dilip200
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janab maikash sahab

aadab

janab maine aapko jab se padna shuru kiya hai, aapli shayri main maine ek alag hi nasha paya hai.. ek ajeeb si kashish hoti hai aapki shayri main. or har sher behad umda hota hai. sabse sanjeeda baat jo mujhe nazar aati hai wo ye ki aapki gazal main ek rawangi hoti hai ek continuity hoti hai....

janab bahut hi behtreen gazal likhi hai aapne har baar ki tarah ek dam juda.......

dil se daad hazir hai janab kabool farmaiyega........

ek begana sa dost
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aadaab miyaaN


aapne apna qeemati waqt kharch kiya is haqeer si Ghazal pe tabsiraa karne ke liye , bada maskhuur huuN aapka

bhai koshish to yahi rehti hai ke wazam meiN she'r kahuuN, aapko Ghazal ravaaN lagii samajhiye mujhe meri mehnat ka silaa mil gaya


aapki daad sar aaNkhoN par saahab aur izzat afza'ii ke saath saath hauNslaa badhaane ke liye mera shukriya alag se qabuul farmaaiye

ummiid hai aayiiNda bhi aapka saath milta rahega



rab raakha
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30th September 2006, 05:39 AM

sunita jee


namashkaar

ye aap jaise dosto ki murravat hai jo itna hausla badhaate haiN, aapko mere sukhan meiN nayapan nazar aaya, jaan kar achcha lagaa, koshish karta huuN ke urdu ke mushkil alfaaz baratne se parhez karuuN aur jitna ho sake wazan meiN kehne ki koshish karuuN


aapne Ghazal ke chaNd ash'aar khusuusan pasaNd farmaaye, behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka



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30th September 2006, 05:43 AM

dhaval bhai

jai shri krishna


bhai manne gujrati nathi aavde chhe...!!


mere ek bohat ache dost ka naam bhi dhaval hai, ahmedabad se hai aur aaj kal london meiN hai uska sirname barot hai, aapse baat karte hue uski yaad aa jaati hai


maiN khairiiyat se huuN aur ummiid hai ke aapke mijaaz-e-giraami bhi ba'kahir hoNge

Ghazal ki pazira'ii ke liye shukriya qabuul kijiye saahab


rab raakha
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2nd October 2006, 04:36 AM

sir, kaise hain aap? umeed hai khairiyat se hi honge.........

rahi baat kalaam ki, to yakeenan bahut hi umda kalaam hai.aur har aasaar pukhta hai khud me.bahut hi aam lafzon me bahut kuch keh raha hai ye kalaam............



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3rd October 2006, 12:30 PM

Maikash Sahib...

Aap tau jo bhi likh dein...seedhe dil pe chot hoti hai...yeh kalaam bhi saaf, saada aur khuub asardaar raha...yoon tau saare ashaar ek se ek badhkar hain...lekin ek sher ko baar baar padhne ko jee chahaa...

usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN

Waah! Bus is sher ne tau jaan hi le lee...phir se hamari mehfil sajaane ke liye bahut bahut shukriyaa...


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rajveer saahab

Sat Sri Akaal


aapko ye haqeer si Ghazal pasaNd aayi yeh mere liye khushi ki baat hai, koshish karuNga ke aa'iiNda bhi aapki ummiidoN par khara utar ke dikhaa sakuN


rab raakha

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Re: Re: mehke mehke shabaab ki baateN...(Ghazal) - 7th October 2006, 09:08 AM

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Maikash ji

aapke is sher ne dil pe kya qehar kiya hai batana mushkil hai ... bohat hi umda gazal ko mera salaam...

aap apna khayal rakhiye

aapka apna

Kunal

miyaaN aapka ye bayaan padh kar yuuN lagaa goya aap aur maiN ek hi marz ke sataaye hue haiN


aapka salaam tasleem hazrat


bohat shukriya

rab raakha
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9th October 2006, 09:01 AM

_/|\_ Sat Shri Akal Veer ji

usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN


Jinki yaad hai dil mein nishaani ke tarah.....vo bhool gaye humiN kahani ki tarah..
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_/|\_ Sat Shri Akal Veer ji

usko khona tha baat kismat ki
uska milna hai khwaab ki baateN
Sat Sri Akaal

baaqi gallaN baad wich, pehlaaN eh dasso ke tusi aine din rahe kitthe....?

maiN keha si ke mainu khabar zaruur karna jadoN UK aao taaN, tusaaN saar vi nai layi......


veer da haal chaal vi puchhnoN gaye hun te......!!!



khush raho

rab raakha
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Sat Shri Akaal _/|\_

Jis din thwadi eh bhen apne pyare veer nu phul jaaye ge, oh din meri zindagi da aakhri din hove ga. Asi UK aan da zikar thwanu email vich tay offline ve keeta se, Lakin thwada koi jawab nai aaya. Fir soochiya ke shyaad veer he apni bhen nu bhul gaya hove ga...

email zaroor karna...

Thwadi shoti bhen


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1st November 2006, 09:41 AM

Fantastic.....!!!

jitni baar padha jaye... utna man karta hai!!! Maikash sahab .. Sir jukaate hai aapki kalam k Dabaar mein!!!!
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7th November 2006, 05:49 AM

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pranam maikash ji.

kaise hai aap...........


achcha huuN jee, shukriya

aaj dil khol kar pilaa saaqi
kal kareNge hisaab ki baateN

kya maikash ji aap to maikhane ka divala nikalvaoge........... Unhi agar hissab ki baten aap kal par chhodne lage to koi sakhi aapko jam nahi degi sochlijiyega janaab.
Un to aapne ye line bahot achhi likhi hai ,sachchi.

apni apni samajh ki baat hai mohtarma

bewafaa keh rahe haiN vo humko
tauba tauba !! janaab ki baateN

Tauba tauba !! maikash ji ki gazal. Ye thhoda sa funny laga. Maffkijiye ise funny bolne ke liye, lekin jo laga bol diya. jo nahi laga vo kaise bol den hum.

funny to ye kisi bhi angle se nahiiN hai, aapko kyoN laga ye baat meri samajh se baahar hai


hum gareeboN se puuch kar dekho
aalam-e-izteraab* ki baateN

janaab aapne bhi apna naam ''maikash'' soch samajh ke rakha. har baar sharaab ka jikar. wah wah....

is she'r meiN sharaab ka zikr nahiiN hai ab iss se mere takkhallus ka kya waasta ??

ab thhodi tariff bhi karni chahiye aapki, aapne bahot achha likha hai. mujhe to bas tarif me yahi kahana ata hai. bas mein isi kadar achhe kalaam ki tarif karti hu.

badi mehrbaani hai jee, yeh khairaat bhi qabuul hai

ab agar aapko kuchh bura laga to dant lijiye saath me hume gustakhi ke liye maaf bhi kar dijiyega.

kya baat karti haiN, buraa kaahe lagega ? nahiiN lagaa, khaatir jamaa rakhiye !

ab hum ijajat chahenge ji aapse......apne is khoobsoorat gazal se iss mehafiil ko roshan karne ke liye shukriya ji.

aapka bhi bohat shukriya

ok ji bye bye

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