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abhi dil ke zakhmoN ka chaaraa nahiiN hai -
9th March 2002, 11:05 AM
abhi dil ke zakhmoN ka chaaraa nahiiN hai
tera bin ai saqi guzaaraa nahiiN hai chaaraa = ilaaj tumheN sauNp deN hum kisii aur ko itnaa badaa dil hamaaraa nahiiN hai sharaabi koii apne jaisaa kahaaN ho ?? koii itna Gham ka bhi maara nahiiN hai koii aisaa lamhaa na hogaa sanam humne tumhe jab pukaaraa nahiiN hai saNbhalnaa mujhe bhi nahiiN hai, agar tere baazuyoN ka sahaaraa nahiiN hai tumne to yuuN aaNkh bhar lee hai jaanaa goya ye khanjar tumhaaraa nahiiN hai !!! goya = jaise ke maikasH ki khaatir bhulaa deN sabhi ko itnaa bhi humko ye pyaaraa nahiiN hai maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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9th March 2002, 09:39 PM
dearest maikashji..i alwys read urs shayaries and they are mind blowing and hrt touching...
i luved this one post of yours... here is someting from me.. dil ke zakhmo ko abhi seeya nahi hai dard shayad bhada hai par itna nahi hai unhone chod diya haath par hame gila koyi nahi hai shayad ye thi kimsat hamari dil kehta hai vo bewaffa nahi hai roye ya hase jeyye ya mare ab hum sochte hai jee rahe hai aise jaise koyi tammnnnaa hi nahi hai kuch galat lkeh diya ho to mafi...this was jus a try frm tis nahcchese. luv priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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shukriya -
10th March 2002, 05:04 AM
Priya sahebaa.....aadaab
let me thank u first of all for sparing ur time and replying to the ghazal.... doosri baat ye ki iss mehfil meN ...khaaskar "iss" mehfil meiN......dostana mahaul banaye rakhne ke liye ye nihaayat hi zaroori hai ke "har" kalaam ki taariif HI ki jaaye...kyoNke tanqiid-o-taasuraat ka muntazir yahaaN koi nahiiN...... aapke kalaam meN khayaal achche haiN.....kahiiN-kahiiN lafzoN ki ravaanagi meN bhi puKhtagi hai......aur khushi ki baat ye hai k aapko iss khoobsoorat fann se itna lagaav hai.....koshish karti rahiyega.......inshah allah kaamyaab zaroro hoNgi....!! maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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Welcome -
12th March 2002, 12:46 AM
Maikash ji, kya baat hai aaj kal aap bahut dinoN ke baad dikhaayi dete ho? AaNkheN thak jaati hain aapki shaayri dhoondne mein. Aap please regular raha karen aur kabhi kabhi privately bhi contact kar liya karen.
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12th March 2002, 04:56 AM
Singhson ji.....SSA
janaab aap to gaayab hi ho gaye......!! ulta chor kotvaal ko daaNte...LOL chaliye mazaak apni jagaah.....pehle to ye bataa duuN ke aapke mehfil meN laut aane se ek raahat si mehsuus ho rahi hai.....aap yakiin kijiye...aapka ek sadii se intezaar tha.....aap chaheN to rizwan bhaii saahab se daryaaft kar sakte haiN ke maine kitni dafaa aapke baare meiN puuchaa magar koii dil ko tassalli dene vaala jawaab na milaa.....saahab aapki to koi khabar hi nahiiN thi.....!! ab to baat hoti hi rahegi....!! haNs ke bola karo,bulaaya karo aapka ghar hai aaya-jaaya karo maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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12th March 2002, 11:34 PM
has ke bolte the aayaa karte the hum kabhi....
paas the aapke, duniya se dur the hum kabhi....... aaj duniya saari paas hai aap hi to dur hai humse judayaai bhi to aapne hi maangi thi,inkaar na ho saka humse maikash ji SSA>...u wrote apna ghar aayya jayya karo lol so i thought to add a little thoughts from this nachezzz luv priya Keep Smiling  ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Adaab maikasH ji!! -
13th March 2002, 02:24 AM
Bade din baad nazar aaye..aur itni zabardast ghazal ke saath..kya kehna hai...Bahut hi acchi ghazal hai hamesha ki tarahl!!
abhi dil ke zakhmoN ka chaaraa nahiiN hai tera bin ai saqi guzaaraa nahiiN hai --wah wah tumheN sauNp deN hum kisii aur ko itnaa badaa dil hamaaraa nahiiN hai --kya baat kahi hai!!! koii aisaa lamhaa na hogaa sanam humne tumhe jab pukaaraa nahiiN hai ---wah..very touchy saNbhalnaa mujhe bhi nahiiN hai, agar tere baazuyoN ka sahaaraa nahiiN hai ---baDi pyaari baat kahi hai aapne tumne to yuuN aaNkh bhar lee hai jaanaa goya ye khanjar tumhaaraa nahiiN hai !!! -- Chalein phir......jaldi muqammal karke aap apni ye ghazal pesh karein..hume intizaar rahega K'hafiz, shumaila kahiiN zameeN to kahiiN aasmaN nahi milta!! |
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13th March 2002, 04:21 AM
Janaab Maikash ji, SSA!
Jawaab ke liye shukriya. Sirf main hi aap ki gumshudgi ka zikr nahin kar raha. Yakeen na aaye to Shumaila ji ki shikaayat bhi padh lo. Woh bhi yehi keh rahi hain ke aap bahut dinon ke baad dikhaayi diye ho. Baqi Rizwaan se bhi meri kaafi dinon baad baat hui. Kuchh masroof tha. Ab koshish karoonga ke daily mulaqat ho. Thanks. HS  |
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14th March 2002, 09:17 AM
Priya ji
aapne sawaal-jawaab ka silsila shuru kar hi diya hai to lijiye khaaksaar ka jawaab haazir hai teraa chehraa hi dikhtaa hai mujhko chaaNd-sitaaroN mein ab bhi tujhko dhooNd raha huuN galiiyoN meiN baazaaroN meiN aadaab maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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14th March 2002, 09:22 AM
Shumaila ji....
aapka badaa hi shukriya jo aapne hauslaa-afzaai ki..... aaj-kal haalaat zaraa se naazuk haiN isliye idhar kam aanaa hota hai.....lijiye aapke huqm ke mutaabiq ghazal ka aakhiri she'r aur maqta haazir hai sharaabi koii apne jaisaa kahaaN ho ?? koii itna Gham ka bhi maara nahiiN hai maikasH ki khaatir bhulaa deN sabhi ko itnaa bhi humko ye pyaaraa nahiiN hai abhi ye ghazal maine apne ustaad sahebaan ki islaah ke liye pesh nahiiN ki hai to aiiNdaa dinoN meN ho sakta hai ke kuch aur tabdiili karuN... agli ghazal jo maiN agli baar post karnne ka tamanaai huuN ....uska ek sher mulaiizaa kijiye khwaahishoN ki qaid se ab dil meraa aazaad hai tumne mooNh pheraa hai jabse ye shahr barbaad hai shukriya maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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14th March 2002, 09:28 AM
Singhson ji....
Sat Sri akaal baat darasl ye hai ki aap ke jaane ke baad mehfil meN beshumaar dostoN ka aanaa huaa....ab maslaa ye hai ke naye dostoN ko shayad "andaaz-e-maikasH" kuch bhaayaa nahiiN islsiye saahab koi kalaam hi nahiiN karta aur puraane dostoN se baat nahiiN ho paati to isiliye idhar aata to huuN magar koi ghazliyaat post karne se katraa jaata huuN.....ab kam se kam aap to haiN hi...shumaila bibi se bhi baat hoti hi rehti hai... ab aapkii taaqiid ko nazar-andaaz to maiN kar nahiiN sakta...maane...ab se hamari idhar roz haaziri lagaa karegi....... aapne apne khaadim ki nachiiz si ghazal pe apne ta'suraat pesh nahiiN kiye....ummiid hai ke aap mayous nahiiN hue hoNge rab raakhaa maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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14th March 2002, 03:15 PM
Dher lagi aane mein lakin,
shukar hai fir be, aaye to Sat Shri Akal Maikash ji _/\_ Itne din baad nazaar aaye ho? aapke bina yeh mehfil kuch adhoori se lagne lagi thee...I think we just got a bit gready being used to reading ur gazals too often... as always es bar be bouth khoob likha hai... "abhi dil ke zakhmoN ka chaaraa nahiiN hai tera bin ai saqi guzaaraa nahiiN hai" Rab kare tusi hamesha es taraN he likh day ravo... ??? |
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15th March 2002, 12:39 AM
ekanjaan sahebaa....sat sri akaal
wohi jaane pehchaane haath ( _/\_ ) ....!! aapse pehle hi kaha tha ke hum khana-badoshoN ka koii thikaana nahiiN....ab iss se ziyaada aur kya kahuN... baharhaal aapne ek "muddat" ke baad iss gariib ki hausla afzaai ki ...bohat shukriya...!! kismat ne milaaya to phir mileNgey...!! rab raakhaa jashan is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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15th March 2002, 03:57 PM
Dear Maikash ji,
Sat Sri Akaal! Sab se pehle to main aapki ghazal ke baare mein kahunga ke yeh bhi aapki bahut umda ghazlon mein se ek kai. Baaqi jo aapne likha hai ke chand naye members ki wajah se aap ne mehfil mein aana chhod diya, yeh achhi baat nahin. Har mehfil mein kuchh to aap ke mukhaalif honge hi. Unko apni galti ka ehsaas apne aap ho jaayega. Is liye please yahan aana mat chhodna. Aap jaise umda shayron ki wajah se to is mehfil mein aane ko dil chahta hai. Therefore, milte rahiye. Best of luck, HS |
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16th March 2002, 06:07 AM
Singhson ji SSA
janaab ab mujhe yaqiin ho gaya hai ke aap iss mehfil meiN baqa'i'dgi se shirkat kar rahe haiN. aap itni duur se mere gariibkhaane pe tashriif laaye aur meri hausla-afzaai bhi kii....jiske liye aapka kaise bhi shukriya adaa kiya jaaye, kam hoga....!! ab aapki baat maiN kaise Taal sakta huuN....aapse vaada raha ke jab tak aapki nigaah-e-karam hoti rahegi aapse hamari mulaqaat musalsal hoti rahegi.....!! baat darasal ye hai ki aaj kal ghazal ki baariikiiyoN ko naapne-tolne meiN lagaa huaa huuN isliye ziyaada waqt ilm haasil karne meiN kharch kar raha huuN...likhne se in dinoN zaraa sa parhez kar raha huuN...magar aap dil rakhne ke liye gaahe-b-gaahe koi ghazal-o-nazm post karta rahuuNgaa....!! thanx for ur well wishes maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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Thanx -
17th March 2002, 01:25 AM
Hamen itni izzat dene ka shukriya Maikash ji. Dar-asl baat yeh hai ke aap jaise chand shayron ki wajah se hi hum is mehfil mein aana nahi chhod sake. Yeh main hi nahin kehta, mujhe maalum hai bahu saare aur aap ke chaahne waale bhi mera saath denge. Is liye milte rahiye.
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17th March 2002, 08:50 PM
Mohtarim Singhson saahab...SSA
izzat ke to haqdaar aap haiN hi ab ismeN shukriya adaa karne ki baat to wajeeh nahiiN hai.....aapki hauslaa-afzaai mere liye baDe maane rakhtii hai....aapkaa huqm hai to ab idhar aana jaana lagaa hi rahegaa.... ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke phir se shukriye....ek aur ghazal zer-e-taamiir hai...jald hi pesh karuuNgaa.... rab raakhaa maikasH is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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