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"MERI YADON KO USNE AB KABRA ME DAFNA DI HAI..............." ek kosish .....ek ehsaas -
1st November 2006, 01:56 PM
"mere sabhi doston ko mera namaskaar....aaj main bahot dino baad "shayri-e-dard" me likh raha hu aj tak main "ishq" ke bare main likh raha tha aaj socha k kuch main bh likhu dard ke bare main , shayd main aap sab ki tarha itni achhi tarha se to dard ko nahi bayan kar paunga, mujhe pata hai par ek kosish jaroor ki hai ye sirF ek peshkas hai aur ehsaas ....ummid hai aap sab ko meri ye peshkas pasand aayengi ..aapke jawab ka intezar rahenga"
Badi hi mannato me manga tha jise maine,
Wo mannat hi meri khuda ne thukradi hai……..
Chahat is kadar thi meri zindagi me usse,
Meri chahat ko usne haste hue lautadi hai…….
Khoya rehta tha bas uske hi khwabon mein,
Khawabo ki duniya ko kisine aaj jaldadi hai,…
Mehekta tha mera pyar khusi ki mehek se,
Meri is mehek ko usne hawa me faila di hai….
dil me apne chhupaya firta tha main usko,
meri is deewangi par usne aag ab lagadi hai…..
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
yaadon me dooba rehta tha main har lamha,
meri yadon ko usne ab kabra me dafna di hai……
kya kahe ab “dhaval” kuch baki nahi kehne ko,
bas itna hi pata hai k aaj se suru meri barbadi hai…..
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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1st November 2006, 05:16 PM
dhavalji acha likha hai apne
khuda hafiz...........
khwahish--Ek safar teri Zindagi ka...
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1st November 2006, 05:38 PM
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
bahut khoob!
Aaina mujhse meri pehli si surat maange
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hi -
1st November 2006, 05:58 PM
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
dhaval tumhe raj ka namaskaar....yaar kya hua?itni udassi bhari nazam..yeh share bhut pyara hai...lakin mere chhotu ko itna dard kisne diya.....main janta hoon.....magar yaar dont worry....yeh sab chalta rehta hai.....bhut achi koshish hai pehle se bhut acha likha hai.....yu hee koshish jarri rakhna....take care.......raj......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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1st November 2006, 06:41 PM
dhaval sabse pahale sorry,
aur ek baat kahu ye sab jo likha hai kaagaz tak hi siiimit rakhna..............jivan me utaraa to apki iss dost ko bahot dard hoga.........agar sirf ehasaas hai to jaroor likhiye..........
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
ye sher bahot pyara hai dil ko chhune vala..........daad nahi dungi yaad rakhna.........
bye
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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1st November 2006, 09:48 PM
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Originally Posted by Khwahish
dhavalji acha likha hai apne
khuda hafiz...........
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khwahish ji main aapka shukraguzar hu lk aap har bar mea housla badhati hai
aur yaha aap jais dost mili mujko, bas yuhi is dost ka hamesha uhi sath dete rahiyenga
apna khayal rakhna khwahish
aapka dost
dhaval
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2nd November 2006, 12:07 AM
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mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
bahut khoob!
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wafa ji kaisi hai aap?
apko aaj yaha dekh ke bahot hi achha laga mujhe aapko meri ye peshkas pasnad aayi janke baht khusi mili mujhe halak mujhe jayda anubhav nahi hai dard ke bare likhne ka ,par fir bhi mujhse ho sake utni kossish jarur ki ha i bayan karke ki
apna khayal rakhiyenga
khus rahiye
aapka dost
dhaval
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2nd November 2006, 03:33 AM
dhavalji acha likha hai apne
take care
ur, friend
sandhya
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2nd November 2006, 11:41 AM
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Originally Posted by rajveeer
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
dhaval tumhe raj ka namaskaar....yaar kya hua?itni udassi bhari nazam..yeh share bhut pyara hai...lakin mere chhotu ko itna dard kisne diya.....main janta hoon.....magar yaar dont worry....yeh sab chalta rehta hai.....bhut achi koshish hai pehle se bhut acha likha hai.....yu hee koshish jarri rakhna....take care.......raj......
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big B PRANAAM
bas ek man kiya k kuch likhu dard bhara so likh diya aur aap to sab jante hi hai ab aur kya khau aapse
aaap yaha aaye mere liye to badi khusi ki baat hai bas aise hi apne chhotu ka sath dete rahiyenga
aur mujhe yuhi sikhate rahiyenga
apna khayal rakhiye
khus rahiye big b
aapka shaitaan
chhotu
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2nd November 2006, 02:11 PM
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai
miyaa.n dhaval
great yaar
aaj to bakai main kamal kar diya bade pyare ehsas hain yaar
keep it up
tc and bye
dilp
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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2nd November 2006, 05:56 PM
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Originally Posted by pooja4588
dhaval sabse pahale sorry,
aur ek baat kahu ye sab jo likha hai kaagaz tak hi siiimit rakhna..............jivan me utaraa to apki iss dost ko bahot dard hoga.........agar sirf ehasaas hai to jaroor likhiye..........
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
ye sher bahot pyara hai dil ko chhune vala..........daad nahi dungi yaad rakhna.........
bye
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
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pooja ji aap yaha aayi bahot hi achha laga aur is dard ko main sirf kagaz tak hi simit rakhunga aapko bura lagane ki koi zarurt hi nahi hai aur aap yaha ayi aur meri peshkas aapko pasand aayi bahot hi achha laga is daurme aapne hamesha sath dia hai is dost ka ummid hai aage bhi aap aise hi sath dete rahenge mera
anpna khayal rakhiyenga
khus rahiye
aapka dost
dhaval
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3rd November 2006, 10:14 PM
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dhavalji acha likha hai apne
take care
ur, friend
sandhya
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hi dear sandhya
kaisi hai aap?
aap har bar mera sath deti ho aur housla badhati ho ,badhot khusi hui aapko yaha dekh ke sach me mujhe bahot achhe dost mile hai yaha par
aap bas yuhi sath dete rahiyenga
aur meri peshkas ko padhti rahiyenga
khus raho
aapka dost
dhaval
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3rd November 2006, 10:17 PM
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mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai
miyaa.n dhaval
great yaar
aaj to bakai main kamal kar diya bade pyare ehsas hain yaar
keep it up
tc and bye
dilp
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mere dost dilip bahot khusi hui k aap ko meri ye rachna pasand aayi maine kosish ki hai isme k sab ek lay rahe har sher aap ne aur big b ne kaha tha usi tarha ki kosish ki hai
bas aap aaye yaha bahot achha laga, bas aise hi sath dete rahiye shaitaan aap ka peecha aise hi chhodne wala nahi ok???????????
aapka shaitaan dost
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3rd November 2006, 10:45 PM
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"mere sabhi doston ko mera namaskaar....aaj main bahot dino baad "shayri-e-dard" me likh raha hu aj tak main "ishq" ke bare main likh raha tha aaj socha k kuch main bh likhu dard ke bare main , shayd main aap sab ki tarha itni achhi tarha se to dard ko nahi bayan kar paunga, mujhe pata hai par ek kosish jaroor ki hai ye sirF ek peshkas hai aur ehsaas ....ummid hai aap sab ko meri ye peshkas pasand aayengi ..aapke jawab ka intezar rahenga"
Badi hi mannato me manga tha jise maine,
Wo mannat hi meri khuda ne thukradi hai……..
Chahat is kadar thi meri zindagi me usse,
Meri chahat ko usne haste hue lautadi hai…….
Khoya rehta tha bas uske hi khwabon mein,
Khawabo ki duniya ko kisine aaj jaldadi hai,…
Mehekta tha mera pyar khusi ki mehek se,
Meri is mehek ko usne hawa me faila di hai….
dil me apne chhupaya firta tha main usko,
meri is deewangi par usne aag ab lagadi hai…..
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
yaadon me dooba rehta tha main har lamha,
meri yadon ko usne ab kabra me dafna di hai……
kya kahe ab “dhaval” kuch baki nahi kehne ko,
bas itna hi pata hai k aaj se suru meri barbadi hai…..
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bohat khub dhaval tum pehley se bohat acha likhnay lagay ho keep writing aur jo log pyar kertay hain wohi dard ko ziada behter bayan kertay hain
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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4th November 2006, 09:59 AM
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"mere sabhi doston ko mera namaskaar....aaj main bahot dino baad "shayri-e-dard" me likh raha hu aj tak main "ishq" ke bare main likh raha tha aaj socha k kuch main bh likhu dard ke bare main , shayd main aap sab ki tarha itni achhi tarha se to dard ko nahi bayan kar paunga, mujhe pata hai par ek kosish jaroor ki hai ye sirF ek peshkas hai aur ehsaas ....ummid hai aap sab ko meri ye peshkas pasand aayengi ..aapke jawab ka intezar rahenga"
Badi hi mannato me manga tha jise maine,
Wo mannat hi meri khuda ne thukradi hai……..
Chahat is kadar thi meri zindagi me usse,
Meri chahat ko usne haste hue lautadi hai…….
Khoya rehta tha bas uske hi khwabon mein,
Khawabo ki duniya ko kisine aaj jaldadi hai,…
Mehekta tha mera pyar khusi ki mehek se,
Meri is mehek ko usne hawa me faila di hai….
dil me apne chhupaya firta tha main usko,
meri is deewangi par usne aag ab lagadi hai…..
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
yaadon me dooba rehta tha main har lamha,
meri yadon ko usne ab kabra me dafna di hai……
kya kahe ab “dhaval” kuch baki nahi kehne ko,
bas itna hi pata hai k aaj se suru meri barbadi hai…..
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hey dhaval, kaya hai yeh sab mujhe bilkul pasand nahi aaya. aur aise shayri tumharey liye nahi bani, samjay. maine phele bhi tumhey kaha tha, ab lagta hai mujhe tumharey kaan kincney ke liye aana padeyga.
vaise shayri badiya hai, kafia barkarar rakhney ke chakaar mai.n kahi kahi kuch sher thik nahi ban paye par ahsaas bahut khoobsurat hai.n
yeh sher mujhe bahut accha lagga:
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
kush raho aur aaindha se aisa nahi likhna.........!
lots of love
tumhari didi
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5th November 2006, 09:13 PM
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bohat khub dhaval tum pehley se bohat acha likhnay lagay ho keep writing aur jo log pyar kertay hain wohi dard ko ziada behter bayan kertay hain
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koi to ho ji kais hai aap?
aapko yaha dekh ke bahot hi achha laga, aur apko ais alaga itna hi kafi hai bas aise hi aap meri peshkas ko padhte rahiyenga
aur apki bat bhi sahi hi k pyaar karte hai wohi dard ko zayada betar bayan kar pate hai
apna khayal rakhiye
khus rahiye
aapka dost
dhaval
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5th November 2006, 09:19 PM
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hey dhaval, kaya hai yeh sab mujhe bilkul pasand nahi aaya. aur aise shayri tumharey liye nahi bani, samjay. maine phele bhi tumhey kaha tha, ab lagta hai mujhe tumharey kaan kincney ke liye aana padeyga.
vaise shayri badiya hai, kafia barkarar rakhney ke chakaar mai.n kahi kahi kuch sher thik nahi ban paye par ahsaas bahut khoobsurat hai.n
yeh sher mujhe bahut accha lagga:
mohhabbat na kar yun pagalon ki tarha kisise,
ye baat aaj usne mujhe pyaar se samjhadi hai……
kush raho aur aaindha se aisa nahi likhna.........!
lots of love
tumhari didi
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aapke bare me mujhe pehle se hi pata tha k aapka jawab yehi aayenga k ye dard wala likha hua aapko pasand nahi ayenga sorry
par ye sirf aise hi likhi thi aapko sirf pasand aaya bahot hi achha laga mujhe
aur main kossish karunga k kam se kam galti ho har sher me aur har sher achha ban paye
apna khayal rakhiyenga
khus rahiye
aapka chhotasa bhai aur dost
dhaval
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