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Ghazal:maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe! - 15th January 2007, 04:44 PM

Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

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Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


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15th January 2007, 05:11 PM

Assalam walekum mayank ji,

kya khoob likha hai aapne,
aapki is ghazal ka,ek alag hi andaaz hai,
padhte waqt bhi kafi achha lag raha hai,

khaas kar aapke yeh ashaar......

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa,
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!


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15th January 2007, 07:02 PM

Mayank Bhai..

Behad khoobsoorat shabdon me aapne apne ehsaas-e-bayaan kiye hain..

Jab Matla padha.. to laga.. vaah yehi sabse sundar hoga... sher padha.. to woh aur bhi sundar tha.. aur Maqta ke to kya kehne..

Mujhe poori hi ghazal behad pasand aayi..

Ek bahut hi achi ghazal pesh karne ke liye daad aur mubarakbaad dono hi kubool keejiye..

Take Care..

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16th January 2007, 08:17 AM

bahut accha lagga aapki gazal ko padna...dil se daad kabool kijiye.

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16th January 2007, 04:19 PM

mayank ji ko mera namskaaR,

mayank ji sach me aapki gazal ko paRhna bahot hi achha laga , aapne itni khoobsoorti se apne pyaare se ehsaasoN ko is meiN jo sajaya haiN dil khus ho gaya

puri gazal bahot hi badhiya aur sab se ziyadah matla bahot hji pasaNd aaya mujhe

dil se n ikli daad kubul kareN

khus raheN aur apna khayal rakheN


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17th January 2007, 06:18 PM

Munfairy jee:

w-asallam,

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! Husn-e-nazar hai aap ki jo yeH gahzal aap ko pasand aayii hai.. KoShiSh rahegii kii aage aur behtar likh sakuuN...yuuN hii aati raheN..

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Mayank Bhai..

Behad khoobsoorat shabdon me aapne apne ehsaas-e-bayaan kiye hain..

Jab Matla padha.. to laga.. vaah yehi sabse sundar hoga... sher padha.. to woh aur bhi sundar tha.. aur Maqta ke to kya kehne..

Mujhe poori hi ghazal behad pasand aayi..

Ek bahut hi achi ghazal pesh karne ke liye daad aur mubarakbaad dono hi kubool keejiye..

Take Care..

~Priya
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Kaisi ho? aap ko Ghazal pasand aaii isay aap ki husn-e-nazar hi kahuuNga.. verna ham kyaa haiN yeh to ham jaan,te hi haiN. yeh to ek chhhoti sii koShiSh hai.. aap ne merii ess koSHiSh par hausila afzaayi kii ess se hame aage likhne meiN sahulaat hogii.. ummeed hai aap aage bhii yuuN hii paRhti raheNgii.. aap kii daad aur mubaarak baad dono ko maiN tah-e-dil se qubool karta huuN aur aap ko Shukriya ada karta huuN.

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bahut accha lagga aapki gazal ko padna...dil se daad kabool kijiye.

aapki dost
Sunita jee:

Namsate:

aap ne ess koShiSh ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShiSh rahegii kii aage bhii aisa likheN jo aap ko pasand aaye.. yuuN hi bazm meiN aati raheN.. Shukriyah!

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mayank ji ko mera namskaaR,

mayank ji sach me aapki gazal ko paRhna bahot hi achha laga , aapne itni khoobsoorti se apne pyaare se ehsaasoN ko is meiN jo sajaya haiN dil khus ho gaya

puri gazal bahot hi badhiya aur sab se ziyadah matla bahot hji pasaNd aaya mujhe

dil se n ikli daad kubul kareN

khus raheN aur apna khayal rakheN


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Dear Dhaval,

itne saare pyaar bhare lafzoN se nawaaZne ke liye tah-e-dil Shukriya ada karta huuN.. Ghazal kii pasandagii ke liye ek baar phir se Shukriya... yuuN hii bazm meiN aate raheN..

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mayank bhaiya tak nacheez ghayal ka salaam pahunche,

bhaiya bas dil cheer diya aapne, pehli to aapne kaafiya hi aisa chuna hai ki, poore kalaam me bahut tehjeeb aa gayi hai...!
aur saath me sher v aise hain ki bas dil se bas ek haaye hi nikal paayi...!
waise ye do sher bahut dil fareb rahe...!

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!


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28th January 2007, 04:19 PM

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!


Namaskar Mayank ji

Kayi din baad aapki nayi rachna parhi.....it's beautiful....mere daad kabul kijeyega.......haan lamhah lamhah hi to zindagi banti hay......jisney lamhon ka mol jaan liya shayad usney zindagi ka mol jaan liya.....yuun hi likhtey rahiye....

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hi mayank ji
kese ho??

aapne bahut hi achchha likha hai..

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

mayank ji ye line mujhe behad pasand aayi..
wah mayank ji wah...

DERI SE PADHA HAI PAR AAJ SIRF AAPKI IS RACHNA NE AANKHON KO NAHI DIL KO BHI CHHUA HAI
LOG KAHTE HAIN WAH KOI ISE AAPKI KALA KAHTA HAI
HUM JANTE HAI KI KAHI AAPKA DIL AAJ FIR SE DUKHA HAI
JAB JAB BHI AAPKI KOI RACHNA AANKHO SE GUJARI HAI
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Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

***************************************

Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


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mayank bhaiya tak nacheez ghayal ka salaam pahunche,

bhaiya bas dil cheer diya aapne, pehli to aapne kaafiya hi aisa chuna hai ki, poore kalaam me bahut tehjeeb aa gayi hai...!
aur saath me sher v aise hain ki bas dil se bas ek haaye hi nikal paayi...!
waise ye do sher bahut dil fareb rahe...!

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!


bas bhaiya aage v aap yunhi likhte rahiye...! taki hum jaise nacheez kuch seekhte rahen...!

Ghaayal jee:

aap ko ess Ghazal meiN se do-ek Sher pasand kiye, jaan kar khushi huii.. HaalaNkii maiN ne koShiSh yeh kee thee kii puuri Ghazal pasand aaye... Theek hai aage shaayad koShiSh kuchh rang laaye.. waise ess zameen par likhana kuchh mushkil sa laga tha, kyoN kii bohat hi kam qaafiye haiN, jin ko istemaal karna paRta hai.. phir bhii aap ne ess koShiSh ko saraaha to dil baaGh-baaGh huaa,, yuuN hii likhate raheN..

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Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

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Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


-Mayank
hi mayank ji

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

apka ye sher bahut acha laga. ek such ko darshata hua.

yun to puri gazal hi achi lagi.
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Namaskar Mayank ji

Kayi din baad aapki nayi rachna parhi.....it's beautiful....mere daad kabul kijeyega.......haan lamhah lamhah hi to zindagi banti hay......jisney lamhon ka mol jaan liya shayad usney zindagi ka mol jaan liya.....yuun hi likhtey rahiye....

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Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

***************************************

Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


-Mayank
waah waah mayank janaab aap ko bahut din baad padhane ka yeh anubhav kaabil-e-taarif rahaa, aise hi likhte raho , khudaa aap ko aur hunarmand kare yahi dua hai

dil ki gahraayyoN se dad haazir hai aap ke is kalaam par

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Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

***************************************

Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


-Mayank

Just too Good Mayank ji.... ek ek sher sidhe me utar rahe hain... bahoot bahoot achha laga aapko padhna


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wah! bahut khoob!

umda ghazal par daad qabool kijiyega!

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
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mayank sir namaskar
kaise hai.n janab
bahut khoob gazal likhi hai aapne, or maqta!! maqta to kamal hai janab.
is sher per meri khas taur se daad kabool farmaiyega.

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

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wah wah mayank ji bahut hi achha likha hain aapne seedhe dil tak baat pahuchi hai. padhkar bahut achha laga.
aise hi likhte rahiyega


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Mayank Sahaab Adaab,

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Bohot khoob bhai..bohot khoob..yeh sher kaafi pasand aayaa... daad qubool farmaaiyye.


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kese ho??

aapne bahut hi achchha likha hai..

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

mayank ji ye line mujhe behad pasand aayi..
wah mayank ji wah...

DERI SE PADHA HAI PAR AAJ SIRF AAPKI IS RACHNA NE AANKHON KO NAHI DIL KO BHI CHHUA HAI
LOG KAHTE HAIN WAH KOI ISE AAPKI KALA KAHTA HAI
HUM JANTE HAI KI KAHI AAPKA DIL AAJ FIR SE DUKHA HAI
JAB JAB BHI AAPKI KOI RACHNA AANKHO SE GUJARI HAI
JO PADHKAR MUKARATE THE UNKA BHI SIR JHUKA HAI


ese hi likhte rahiyega
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Merul.

Merul jee:

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se SHurkiyah! DostoN ka pyaar saath meiN raha to be-Shaq maiN yuuN hi likhata rahuNga..

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hi mayank ji

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

apka ye sher bahut acha laga. ek such ko darshata hua.

yun to puri gazal hi achi lagi.
meri daad kubul karo.
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Sher aur puurii ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! husn-e-nazar hai aap ki jo aap ne ess koShish ko saraaha..

Dada qubool hai

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dil ki gahraayyoN se dad haazir hai aap ke is kalaam par

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Ghazal kii pasandagii aur hausila parzaaii ke liye tah-e-dils e Shurkiyah! huzuur husn-e-nazar hai aap kii jo aap ne hame ess laayaq samjha.. dili daad dil se qubool hai.. bazm meiN yuuN hii aate raheN..

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Shukriyah! Garima...

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! aap ka reply paRh kar khushii huii.. YuuN hii bazm meiN aati raho..

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chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?
....waah!

Dear Wafa:

Daad ke liye tah-e-dil se Shukriyah! yuuN hii aate raheN.. aap ne jo SHer pasand kiya hai woh darasal mera bhii pasandidah Sher hai.. YuuN hii aati raheN..

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mayank sir namaskar
kaise hai.n janab
bahut khoob gazal likhi hai aapne, or maqta!! maqta to kamal hai janab.
is sher per meri khas taur se daad kabool farmaiyega.

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

shukriya

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aadaab! kahaaN haiN aap aaj kal nazar hi nahiIN aate.. amashruuf haiN ya phir laparwaahi ho rahi hai..

Ghazal kii pasandagii ke liye maiN aap ka SHukr-guzaar huuN.. aap jaise sabhii dostoN ka saath raha to maiN yuuN hii likhata rahUNga,. Hamesha.. aap bhii apna Khayal rakhiye...

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Pyaare dostoN,

ek Ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai, paRhiye aur izhaar-e-khayaal zaroor farmaayeN:

***************************************

Matla arz hai:

maiN baat dil se kahta huuN yah baat merii maaniYe!
mil jaaYe gaa sab kuch waheeN dar par Khudaa ke jaaniYe!

yeh zindagee kee raah pyaare! muKhtaSar hee jaaniYe!
hai lamHah lamHah qeematee kuch mol to pehchaaniYe!

Sher:

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!

jab un ke paas aataa hooN maiN woh door mujh se jaate haiN
hai un ke dil meN baat kyaa yeh raaz kaise jaaniYe?

chehre ke peechhe haiN chhupe chehre bohat, ShakleN hazaar
duShman kee kyaa pehchaan hai aur dost kis ko jaaniYe?

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Maqta Haazir hai:

kucHh lafz^ haiN TooTe :Mayank:, eHsaas kucHh bikhre huwe
yaaroN se maiN kehtaa huuN :mujh ko jaaniye, pehchaaniYe:!


-Mayank
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aapki gazal ka har sher bahut accha lagga...lajwaab khayaal pesh kiye hai aapne. yu hi likhtey rahiye....!

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Pyaare dostoN,

gar HauSile ooNche hoN to baadal bhee Khud chhaT jaaYeN ge
kaT jaayeNgii duShwaariyaaN jo kaam dil meiN Thaaniye!


TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

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-Mayank
MayanK Sir..

aana hi pada ek purasar kavish pe apne lafzoN ko bikherne .. aur yakeen maniye in do sheroN ne ek gazab ka jaadoo chalaya dil pe ... ek taraf himmat se bhare baaju .. aur doosri taraf apne andar ke haal ko kisi ko keh dene ki khata wo bhi itne dilkash andaaz maiN .. mera salaam aapki koshish ke liye ...

aise hi likhte raho ...

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wah wah mayank ji bahut hi achha likha hain aapne seedhe dil tak baat pahuchi hai. padhkar bahut achha laga.
aise hi likhte rahiyega

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dil kii baat dil tak pahuNchi ess se zeyaadah khushii kii baat kya ho sakti hai?.. aap ko Ghazal paRh kar achchhca laga jaan kar khushi huii.. koShish karuNga kii aage bhii likh sakuuN.. aap bhii yuuN bazm meiN aati raheN.. ijjat aur hausila afzaayi ke liye Shukriyah!

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Mayank Sahaab Adaab,

TooTaa hu'aa. looTaa hu'aa, sahmaa hu'aa, bikhraa hu'aa
ham aap ko dil de chuke haiN, maaniYe nah maaniYe!

Bohot khoob bhai..bohot khoob..yeh sher kaafi pasand aayaa... daad qubool farmaaiyye.
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aadaab aur namaste:

reply karne meiN der huii, ess liye ma-azrat khwaah huuN.. pata nahiiN yeh post kahaaN chhup gaya tha.. kahiiN nazar hii nahiiN aa raha thaa.. aaj nazar aaya to sochaa kii sab se pahle yehi kaam kar luuN.. aap ne Ghazal ke Sher pasand kiye yeh ham jaise nau-maShq ke liye behad khushi kii baat hai aur maiN aap ka mamuun huuN.. aap kii daad hame dil se qubuul hai. mehfil meiN aate raheN..

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aap ne ek baar phir se khaaksar kii hausila afzaayii kee, aur Ghazal ke har Sher ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShish rahegii kii aahe bhii bazm meiN kuchh na kuchh likh kar pesh karta rahuuN.. maiN aap ka Shukrguzaar huuN dil se.. yuuN hii aati raheN..

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Sunita jee:

aap ne ek baar phir se khaaksar kii hausila afzaayii kee, aur Ghazal ke har Sher ko pasand kiya jaan kar behad khuShi huii.. koShish rahegii kii aahe bhii bazm meiN kuchh na kuchh likh kar pesh karta rahuuN.. maiN aap ka Shukrguzaar huuN dil se.. yuuN hii aati raheN..

Mayank

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aapka jawaab dene ka andaaz bahut pasand aaya....
yu mahfil ko hamesha kush-gabaar banaye rahkiye.

god bless u


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MayanK Sir..

aana hi pada ek purasar kavish pe apne lafzoN ko bikherne .. aur yakeen maniye in do sheroN ne ek gazab ka jaadoo chalaya dil pe ... ek taraf himmat se bhare baaju .. aur doosri taraf apne andar ke haal ko kisi ko keh dene ki khata wo bhi itne dilkash andaaz maiN .. mera salaam aapki koshish ke liye ...

aise hi likhte raho ...

khaaksaar

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aap kii yeh taariif to mere Ghazal se bhii bhaari lagii mujhe.. yeh mere liye bohat hausilah afzaayi hai..tah-e-dil se Shukrguzaar huuN maiN aap ka.. maiN to saaf lafzoN meiN yehii kahuuNga kii husn-e-nazar hai aap kii... jo aap ne ess tarah Ghazal ko saraaha hai.. ummeed hao yeh dilkash daad aage bhii yuuN hii miltii rahegii..take care

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aapka jawaab dene ka andaaz bahut pasand aaya....
yu mahfil ko hamesha kush-gabaar banaye rahkiye.

god bless u
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