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Ghazal: 'mohabbat.. mohabbat!' -
24th February 2004, 11:17 PM
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dil thaa woh teraa baazaar mohabbat kaa par maiN naa thaa khariidaar mohabbat kaa uff! thaa bewakoof jo dillagii naa jaanii aur kar baiThaa maiN izhaar mohabbat kaa ..barsaaye the phool jis dil meiN kal tune, aaj kaanToN se bharaa gulzaar mohabbat kaa karre daNge fassaad dil, tere naam ke.. hai sakoon meraa shikaar mohabbat kaa sune gii kab tak apne naam kii chiiKHeN? dhokebaaz pardaa aaj utaar mohabbat kaa! 'aman' kii sanam de gham, chahe zaKHm hai aaj phir bhii intezaar mohabbat kaa.. --- "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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24th February 2004, 11:27 PM
Salam,
Aaj aap kuch alag dhang se likhha hein. Lekin jo bhi likhha hein, tadap bohot mehsoos huyi. Hadhka shayad hi na samajh ayi ho lekin baas mehsoos huyi. Yunhi likhte rahiyega. I better not say much. Aur haan, tarif karne ke liye bohot hein yeaha par jo aa jaayenge. Tahe dilse shukriya ke sath sath daad bhi kabool kijiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. God bless you. Allah Hafiz. If possible, plz smile....... Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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24th February 2004, 11:35 PM
mohtarma shimul saahiba
bahot bahot shukriyaa jo merii ghazal pe kuch alfaaz baaNTe. nazar-e-karam kaa mamnuuN rahooN gaa. "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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25th February 2004, 05:49 AM
my aman,
uff ye mohabbat .mohobbat jaan bhi leti hai jeene bhi nahi deti...aur thodi si dillagi isme mil jaaye to tauba tauba...... uff! thaa bewakoof jo dillagii naa jaanii aur kar baiThaa maiN izhaar mohabbat kaa barsaaye the phool jis dil meiN kal tune, aaj kaanToN se bharaa gulzaar mohabbat kaa 'aman' kii sanam de gham, chahe zaKHm hai aaj phir bhii intezaar mohabbat kaa.. khambhakht dil, na jeene det ahai aur na hi marne deta hai....aankhain kholo to unhe dekhna chahta hai...band karke mehsus karta hai...phir chahe mohoobat me gulzar kaanton se bhara ho ya phoolon se....aakhir waqt tak usi ka intzaar karta hai... ~~aapki bhaavnayo ki kadar hai hame aman....kabhi kabhi sochti hu.ki lol...hame koyi aap jaisa karta pyaar to...zindagi luta dete uski ek muskaan ke liye.....par like they say..... ZIndagi me kisi ko mukam'mal jahhan nahi milta kisi ko zameen aur kisi aur aasma nahi milta sab apni apni kismat ki baatain hai dost........ a sher frm my side is: is tarha se zakhmi hu me, unki dillagi ke vaaro se, Ki ----> dard bhi pareshan hai......ki kaha se uthu. Luv ya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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25th February 2004, 08:00 AM
priya ji
..bahot khoob sher farmaayaa hai aapne! aur aapkii har baat se sehmat hooN, par waise -- 'gar aapko mujh-sa koii aapko chaahne waala mil jaataa, to woh bhii shyad aap jitnaa hii khush hotaa  khair, daad ke liye meraa mehjoob shukriyaa qabuul kii jiye. "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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25th February 2004, 09:50 AM
Bahut Khoob Tareeke se haal-e-dil baYaaN kiYa hai AmaN...
yun to maikhaaNe mein hai hum sab 'SharaaBi' tere naam se par hai Kirdaar mohabbat kaa Baat aur, ki Dhadke teri saansein is dil mein sirf ehsaas se hua hai ikraar mohabbat kaa aaj bhi girta hai ek paata kisi shaakh se waahi jo tera tha kabhi dildaar mohabbat kaa.. Likhte RahiYega AmaN Duaaon ke saath -mast Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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25th February 2004, 09:50 AM
Aman ji,
Waise Shimul ji ne jo kaha usse mein sehmat hoon, kuch alag dhang se likha hai aapne, aur uski (shimul ji) tarif ki baat bhi manti hoon. Par phir bhi likha aaisa hai ke kya kahe tarif karein bina reh bhi nahi sakte. Phir bhi kuch khas nahi kahenge, ke dard-e-dil ko lafzon ki baat karein to BOHAT HI KHUB LIKHA HAI....aur ehsaas ki baat karein to aisa laga jaise waha aapki jagah pe kadhe yeh sab mehsoos kar rahe ho. take care! luv, tulsika!~ 
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25th February 2004, 10:00 AM
aman dost,
patzhad ka ek sukha patta hu teri raah par bikhra pada hu ghum nahi is baat ka... tere kadmo talae kuchala ja raha hu; khushi hai is baat ki... marte bhi tera sparsh paaye ja raha hu. tum kuchh likho or ooski taarif kar paau ... yah mujse kabhi thhik se n ho paaya. |
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25th February 2004, 10:48 AM
aman saheb
aap kam kam likhte hain magar jab bhi likhte hain aap ke lehje ka khaloos her cheez per haavi hota hai. isi liye behad asr aur tuassur mehsoos hota hai aap ki is ghazal mein. meri dili duayen aur shubh kaamnayen hamesha aap ke saath hain aur darkhuast aur khuahish hai ke aap us ko mehsoos karen . kyunke mein samajhta hoon ke yeh aap ka hi ejaaz hai jo ham sab saathi aaj is forum per is tarah ek doosre ke ehsaasaat aur jazbaat ko share kerte hain. bari qadar hai mere dil mein aapki. musharrafhusain |
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25th February 2004, 02:35 PM
Aman
Kya kahoon bus ek gazal yaad aa gayee tumharey sher se pata nahi mail khati hai ya nahi bus yaad aa gayee . Na Mohabat Na dosti ke liye Waqt rukta nahi kisi ke liye dil ko apney saja na de yunhi is jamaney ki berukhi ke liye Singer Jagjeet Singh |
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25th February 2004, 03:11 PM
anu bhai
aapko beyaan kiye hue jazbaatoN kaa ehsaas huaa, to likhne kii koshish azeez rahii! dam-ba-dam hauslaa afzaaii kaa shukriyaa qabuul kii jiye! tulsika ji aapke jawaab, aur waqt dono kaa mujh par karz rahe gaa. bahot khushii huii yeh jaan kar kii aap jazbaa-e-dil mehsoos kar sakeN haiN. ek baar phir, shukriyaa! meena ji gazab kaa likhaa hai aapne meena jii. aapkaa jawaab hii taareef ke baraabar hotaa hai; is shaakir kaa shukriyaa’daa qabuul kii jiye. musharraf saahab aadaab! janaab, itnii izzat bhii naa dii jiye kii pardaa oDnaa paDe. behad shuk’r-e-ni’amat, aapko bhii duaaoN meiN shaamil rakhtaa hooN! nihaayat zer-e-baar hooN aapkaa itnii izzat, aur hausla-afzaaii jo kii! live-in-nothing aapkii koii duusrii pehechaan, yaa isii naam se pukaareN aapko? khair.. main us ghazal se waaqif nahiiN hooN, magar paDne meiN mujhe to bahot pasand aayii; lagtaa hai ‘download’ karni paDe gii. jawaab kaa bahot bahot shukriyaa..! "je tu akhiiyaaN de saamne naii rehnaa, te bibba saada dil moD de..!" kya karooN? aisa hi hooN maiN.. |
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25th February 2004, 05:21 PM
Aman Bhaiye
dil thaa woh teraa baazaar mohabbat kaa par maiN naa thaa khariidaar mohabbat kaa Behtariin likha hai!!! Taareef karne ke liye to alphaz bhi aise gayaab ho gaye jaise gadhe ke sar se singh  Laa-jawaab likha hai.. Bahut bahut sukriyaa yahaan sab se share karne ke liye.  Tc, Bye Mayank |
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Hi... -
25th February 2004, 07:24 PM
Aman..mere bhai...Darte darte ayaa huu huzuR kii mehfil mai....daaD dene kii tammna tau badii rahatii hai....parr duur se..
 chaliiye ap ko maikhane se fhursat milne lagii hai aaj kal..... apko dard ki duniya mai dekh kaR...dil gadh gadh hone laga hai...yuu hii apnna preM banaye rakhe....tussii...badii chnnGii shayri likhde hoo...apne se lagte hoo tussi hoo koon???? .......daaD kai sath izazaT..Sanju ko!muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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Adaab Muhtrhaam Amaan Sahab... |
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Adaab Muhtrhaam Amaan Sahab... -
25th February 2004, 07:49 PM
Salam Janab Bahut khoob Mahsallah se Bahut acha likha hai apne Is nacheez ki daad Kabool Farmaiye...Kudha Hafiz...
EK ANJAAN SA SHAKS... SALMAN SHAIKH... in majon se puch lena kia haal hai hamaara.... ______________________ Ashk bankaar woh mere chashm-e-tar main rehta hai.... ajeeb woh shaks hai jo pani ke ghar main rehta hai........ |
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26th February 2004, 06:32 AM
Sharaabi sahab adaab,
aap hain hee ek alag se shakhs janaab 'aman' kii sanam de gham, chahe zaKHm hai aaj phir bhii intezaar mohabbat kaa.. dil tau dil hai sanam kya kijiey... aapki nazar ek bashir badr sahib ka kalaam...shayad pasand aaye aapko... mai.n bhii shaayad buraa nahii.n hotaa vo agar bevafaa nahii.n hotaa bevafaa bevafaa nahii.n hotaa Khatm ye faasalaa nahii.n hotaa kuchh to majabuuriyaa.N rahii ho.ngii yuu.N ko_ii bevafaa nahii.n hotaa jii bahut chaahataa hai sach bole.n kyaa kare.n hausalaa nahii.n hotaa raat kaa i.ntazaar kaun kare aaj-kal din me.n kyaa nahii.n hotaa guftaguu un se roz hotii hai muddato.n saamanaa nahii.n hotaa yoonhi likhte rahieyga... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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26th February 2004, 08:44 PM
karre daNge fassaad dil, tere naam ke..
hai sakoon meraa shikaar mohabbat kaa choD de us rishte ko ek naam dekar ae humsafar, jo manzil tak na pahuche magar haseen to rahe. take care paplu it becomes more and more universal. |
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26th February 2004, 09:34 PM
hi,
bohat khoob....bohat achi nazm likhi hai aap nay...aray aap loag to professional hain...har aik baat main bohat gehrai hai.. hey..read my nazm too.....it goes like.."kaash...I wish" plz...n send comments.... plz....i have tried hard..aur mujhe experienced ki raye chahiye... shukriya bye..take care mujhe to sirf tera waada aazmana tha. |
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27th February 2004, 06:48 AM
hi aman jeeeee
kaise hai wah wah kiya baat bhot khoob. i really like wot u wrote mere khiyaal mai aapki shayri ko yah sab hi miss kar rahe the yeh mehfil kaafi berang si ho gayi thi apke jaane se. humai aapse shkayat hai aap itne din kaha rahe. ur poem is beautiful bilkul dil ko cho gayi hai aur tareef ke liye mere paas alfaaz nahi hai. ha ab kahi jaiya ga nahi k. take care romana |
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27th February 2004, 06:47 PM
Aman Bhai,
Der se aane ki gustakhi hui hai mujhse yahaan..magar is ghazal ko samjhne mein waqt laga.. Aur ik change bhi nazar aayi aapke likhne ke andaaz mein.. Is ghazal mein aapke dil mein kisi ke pyaar ke saath saath uske liye chuppa attab bhi saaf nazar aa raha hai.. Bhai..Apne dil ke jazabaat bade dhang se pesh kiye aapne.. Shukriya... |
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speechless................kuch kahuN bhi to kisko, jisne yeh gazal likhi hai wo to pad hi nahi paayega. aap aaj bhi SDC ki bazm mein haiN apni poetry ke saath. .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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