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!kaafileN jab bhii kabhii yaadoN ke guzre! -
19th October 2007, 09:24 AM
aadaab ar^z !
Eid aur Navraatri kii aap sabhii ko DheroN mubaarakbaad! yaaraan e mehfil ko Dheer kaa aik aur kalaam naz'r hai! apnii besh'qimtii raa'i see navaaziyegaa! shukriya! ghazal kuchh yuN hai.. ================================================== ================ kaafileN jab bhii kabhii yaadoN ke guzre! raah me.n tab saiNka.Do afsaane bikhre! raat se zakhmoN ne phir yaarii nibhaayii! raat aayii aur ye kambakh't ubhare! ab kisii ko khaak pahchaanaa kareNge! aik chehraa uske piichhe laakh chehre! jinke dil me.n ham kabhii rah naa sake the! woh hamaarii hii ghazal me.n aake Thahre! ham bhalaa gahnoN se unko kyaa sajaaye! aik chuTkii bhar hi kaajal se jo nikhre! ish'q kii Dorii me.n ashqoN ko piro ke! jab gale me.n haar ye Daalaa to saNwre! 'dheer' piikar chup raho to hii bhalaa hai! daf'n seene me.n hazaaroN raaz gahre! |
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19th October 2007, 10:01 AM
baDe BHaiya ...
kaise haiN aap?..aaj subHa-subHa jab yahaaN aaYa to naagahaaN meri naZar aapki taazaah Ghazal par paRii..aur huZuur Ghazal to Bahot Khuub kahi hay aapne..har Sher dil per dastak de gaYe..Ghazal ki ibtidaa aur iNkizaa dono hi mujHe be-Had pasaNd aaYi..kisii bhee aik Sher ko chuNnaa mere liye baRaa muShkil hay..har Sher laa-jawaab hay..yeH nafees Ghazal ees dil meiN haMeShaa ziNdaa raheNgii..Khaaksaar ke dil sey niklii hu'ii daad-o-tahseen ko qabUl keejiYeNgaa..! apnaa Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN.. duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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19th October 2007, 03:11 PM
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namaste Dhaval! kaise hoN. ab kyaa chal rahaa hai paDhaayi kaa?? kahii aur admission liyaa ki nahii??? ghazal ki pasandagii ko jis tarah se tumne zaahir kiyaa hai, mujhe behad khushii huii! shukriyaa dost! apnaa khayaal rakhnaa! |
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21st October 2007, 08:50 PM
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wah dheer ji bohat khoob tehreer paish ki aapne ye ashaar khasker bohat achay lagay........... jinke dil me.n ham kabhii rah naa sake the! woh hamaarii hii ghazal me.n aake Thahre! ham bhalaa gahnoN se unko kyaa sajaaye! aik chuTkii bhar hi kaajal se jo nikhre! 'dheer' piikar chup raho to hii bhalaa hai! daf'n seene me.n hazaaroN raaz gahre bohat khoob dheer jiyunhi likhte rahiye apna khayal rakhiyega  apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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21st October 2007, 10:15 PM
Dheer Sahab,
Is nacheez ka salaam kubool ho... Bohot waqt aaj ana hua hai mehfil mein, Umeed karta hun ke aapke zyada kalaam nahi chode honge maine... Apki yeh gazal bhi har ek gazal ki tareh ek yaad aur ek paigaam deti hai... Main to aaj tak apne khayalon ko itni khoobsurti se nahi piro paya.... behar haal koshish jaari hai... Apko Meri aur se in umdah gazal par daad haazir hai kubool ho... Duaon ke saath ijazat... Abrar...  Hum to pattharon se mohabbat ka hunar rakhte hain, Tum to phir bhi moom ho "Abrar" ke gale lag kar pighal jaoge... |
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22nd October 2007, 11:27 AM
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dear dheer.........behad khoobsurat gazal aur us se bhi jayada khoobsurat ahsaas....bahut accha laga padkar........aur highlighted sher to dil meiN bas hi gaye....yu hi likhtey raho kush raho aapki diii .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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22nd October 2007, 11:34 AM
Dheer bhai kese ho aap??
BHaii aapko bhi navratri ki dher sari mubarkaa....... Dheer bhai is nouv din ki dhamal ke baad aaj waqt nikal ke aa paya hu dosto se milne, is khushi bhare avsar pe aapki ghazal !!! kamal ho gaya bhaiii.. Ab aapki ghazal ki baat karu to ... kya kahu bhai mere pas alfaaz nahi hai aapki ghazal ke liye har baar ki tarah dil ko chhune wale alfaazoN se rachna ko sajaya hai aapne.. har alfaaz mein wo dard saf nazar aata hai jo aapne bayan kiya hai..bhaiii bahut kam log hote hai jo ye kar pate hai warna koi lakh koshish kyu na karle ye hasil nahi kar pate hai... jinke dil me.n ham kabhii rah naa sake the! woh hamaarii hii ghazal me.n aake Thahre! dheer bhaiii is pankti pe daad hazir hai... kabuliyega aur yuhi mehfil ko sajate rahiyega aapka dost Merul  Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe, Tab dil se me naraz tha, Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du, Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha. Merul~~~~~~~~~~> |
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22nd October 2007, 06:33 PM
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24th October 2007, 12:51 PM
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ummiid karta huN aap maze me hongii! hamesha ki tarah ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye shukriyaa adaa kartaa huN. par lagta hai ki ab shukriyaa laf'z kaafii nahii hai! kuchh aur lafz talaashanaa hogaa! apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! |
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24th October 2007, 12:53 PM
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kaise haiN aap? maiN samajh sakta huN ki masrufiyat ke aalam me shayri kabhii kabaar chhuT jaatii hai! koii baat nahii, merii bhii is beech zyaadaa tehreereN nahii aayi mehfil me.n! qalaam ko pasand karne ke liye tah e dil se shukriyaa ada kartaa huN! apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! |
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24th October 2007, 12:54 PM
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24th October 2007, 01:10 PM
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ghazal ko hamesha ki tarah pasand karne ke liye dhanyavaad dost!! apnaa khayaal rakhnaa! |
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24th October 2007, 01:12 PM
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aap to kuchh nah kah ke bhii bahut kuchh kah gaye! aapkaa yahii andaaz to dil me utar jaataa hai! apkaa anuj! Dheer |
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24th October 2007, 02:05 PM
Deer ji bahut achaa likhtey ho aap. Keep it up. How old r u. Ur poetry is very mature. Umeed hai aap gazal ko Waseem barelvi, Nida fazli, Ahmad faraz ke baad bhi zindaa rakhogey. Keep writing.....
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26th October 2007, 09:44 AM
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merii himmat afzaayii ke liye bahut bahut shukriyaa. koshish jaarii rahegii aur insha'allah aap jaise ghazal ke chaahne waalo kaa sath mil jaaye to ghazal go shayri aur gaaykii donoN hii zindaa rahegii! waise um'r ke 25 saawan dekh liye hai abhii tak apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! Dheer |
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27th October 2007, 03:47 PM
kaafileN jab bhii kabhii yaadoN ke guzre! raah me.n tab saiNka.Do afsaane bikhre! raat se zakhmoN ne phir yaarii nibhaayii! raat aayii aur ye kambakh't ubhare! ab kisii ko khaak pahchaanaa kareNge! aik chehraa uske piichhe laakh chehre! jinke dil me.n ham kabhii rah naa sake the! woh hamaarii hii ghazal me.n aake Thahre! ham bhalaa gahnoN se unko kyaa sajaaye! aik chuTkii bhar hi kaajal se jo nikhre! ish'q kii Dorii me.n ashqoN ko piro ke! jab gale me.n haar ye Daalaa to saNwre! 'dheer' piikar chup raho to hii bhalaa hai! daf'n seene me.n hazaaroN raaz gahre! ...fir se aapke kalam se ek behtereen ghazal.........YuN to yeh ghazal humne pehle hi padh li thi..par pata nahin...kyun reh gaya reply dena........ aur yeh highlighted ashar to bas chu gaye dil ke..............aapka likha to hamesha hi pasand aata hain.....yun hi mehfil ki ronak badhate rehna..................... mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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29th October 2007, 09:45 AM
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bahut bahut shukriyaa Mausam saHibaa! paDhne ki rasiid haaNsil ho na hoN, ye hii bohat hai ki aap mere kisii qalaam ko paDhnaa bhooltii nahii! yahii aapkaa ba.Dappan hai! apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! |
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6th November 2007, 10:40 PM
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wajhe? Behud mutacir kun hei apka kalam hazrat , behud umda kehte hien aap na sirf apke khayalaat ki wusat bakamal hei , aap lafzon mein khub rang dete hien apne jazbon apne tajurbon ko , aise umda andaz mein ke parh ke lutf ajata hei kya ghazab ke ashaar ,uff wah, pehle do ashaar to hum ne baarhaa parhe hazrat , bauhat umda buahat hee khub , gehne wala bhi sher apka ghazab hei sahab kamal hie Apko mazeed parhne ki mutamani , Maham Azmi |
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ye nah sochiye ki ab talak kyoN na aaye, ye dekhiye ki aaye to kyaa khoob aaye! aik hii din me.n aapne mere itne saare kalaamoN pe apnii maujudagii kaa ahsaas karaa ke mujhe jo iz'zat bakshii hai, uske liye maiN aapkaa mamnoon rahunga! aur ye koshish rahegii ki kabhii mere kalaam se aapkoo niraashaa haath nah lage! apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! Dheer |
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8th November 2007, 11:11 PM
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dheer ji i have written this ghazal so perfectly, it directly touch the heart of the reader. especially these two shares are really mindblowing dheer ji raat se zakhmoN ne phir yaarii nibhaayii! raat aayii aur ye kambakh't ubhare! ab kisii ko khaak pahchaanaa kareNge! aik chehraa uske piichhe laakh chehre! keep it up dheer jee u r jwel of this family regards manu |
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8th November 2007, 11:17 PM
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hi DHEER JI, kamaal ki ghazal likhi hai aapne.....bahut khub.....dili daad kabul farmaye.......  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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8th November 2007, 11:21 PM
kaafileN jab bhii kabhii yaadoN ke guzre!
raah me.n tab saiNka.Do afsaane bikhre! raat se zakhmoN ne phir yaarii nibhaayii! raat aayii aur ye kambakh't ubhare! Bahut khoob aaghaaz hai dost... ab kisii ko khaak pahchaanaa kareNge! aik chehraa uske piichhe laakh chehre! jinke dil me.n ham kabhii rah naa sake the! woh hamaarii hii ghazal me.n aake Thahre! Waaah... khoobsurat aashaar... ham bhalaa gahnoN se unko kyaa sajaaye! aik chuTkii bhar hi kaajal se jo nikhre! ish'q kii Dorii me.n ashqoN ko piro ke! jab gale me.n haar ye Daalaa to saNwre! Kyaa baat hai... 'dheer' piikar chup raho to hii bhalaa hai! daf'n seene me.n hazaaroN raaz gahre! Well expressed... Dear Dheer, Ek baar fir tumhe padhkar bahut hi accha laga... khoosburat bayaani hai... dil se daad kubool karna... yun hi likhte rehna dost... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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12th November 2007, 10:45 AM
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aapkii muhab'bat hai!! baakii maiN to kuchh bhii nahii!! faqat khaaknasheeN. apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa! |
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12th November 2007, 10:48 AM
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aapkii daad sir aankhoN pe!! Dheer |
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12th November 2007, 10:54 AM
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kaise haiN aap?? aapko diwali ki shubhkaanaaye!! aapkii daad ke liye shuklriyaa bhaai! sunaa hai delhi me jald hi log milne waale hai,, hope to see u soon! shukriyaa Pulkit bhaai!! |
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