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rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar(GAZAL)
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rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar(GAZAL) - 9th May 2009, 08:26 PM

sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........


un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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pretty good - 9th May 2009, 10:27 PM

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10th May 2009, 06:53 PM

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar


BOHAT KHOOB RAJVEER JI.................




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11th May 2009, 05:11 PM

Raj Bhai Aadab....

Aapke Avatar ko dekhaker to na chahate hue bhi Aadab karna padenga

Chaliye aapki Gazal per chalte hai.
Bhai aapki Gazal to bahut hi umda hai,
Ahsaas kafi dilfareb lage aur andaze bayan me to aap mahir hai hi...

Thodi bahut spelling mistake hai baki tecnical ka mujhse jyada aap jante hai...

waise pure sher achche hai, har sher umda laga..

Kisi ek sher ki tarif kar baki sheron ki ahmiyat kam nahi karna chahunga...

Is dilfareb peshkash per Dil se daad kabool kijiye...

Duaon ke sath khush rahiye aur likhate rahiye...

Teri ek azizi per zamane se hui dushmani...
Aye dost ab kisi ek dushman ki tu baat na kar


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11th May 2009, 05:17 PM

bahot achhi ghazal hai Raj jee
har ek sher lajwaab

daad dilse

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12th May 2009, 11:37 AM

raj ji
bhaut achi gazal pesh ki hai....
bahut din baad pada hai apko..
daad kubul kare
apna khyaal rakhna
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bahut hi khoob Rajveer ji.. hume aap ki punjabi gazal ka bhi intezaar hai.. umeed hai hum jaldi read kar sakeNge..
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Namaskaar Rajveer Ji
aapke andaaz aaj bhi pasand aaye.....yunhi likhtey rahein

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rajveerji,

aapki yeh ghazal bahut achchi rahi.



thanks for sharing
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inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii

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un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
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17th May 2009, 07:48 AM

HI Rajveer ji

hamesha ki tarah bahut khoob likha hai aapne ...

yu hi mehfil sajate rahe..

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Adaab Rajveer ji,
Bahut din baad mai yaha aayi,aur sab se pahle aap ki gazal parhi,
bahut achha laga. Aapka naya avtaar bhi bahut achha hai.Aapki gazlon me hamesha kitna dard chhupa rahta hai.Iss dard ko mahsoos karke mera bhi mann kiya kuchh kahne ko:

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

Tinka-tinka baaho mein aaye,magar ek bhi saath na diya
rehne do ham hawaao se tinko ki baat na kar...

--------------------------------------------------

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ham toot kar baras gaye,magar usse hamara ehsaas bhi na huwa,
rehne do ham ghataawo se pyaaso ki baat na kar...

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Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar di jisne mere intzaar mein,
ham ussi ke kadmo mein rahte hai,ab to sazao ki baat na kar...

----------------------------------------------------

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Jugnu aate hai,aur phir chale jaate hai,
ham baagho se intzaar e raato ki baat na kar...

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Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

Usne dil ke zakhmo par likha hai hamara naam,
ham bhi to ghaayal hai,magar us se hamari zakhmo ki baat na kar

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‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

Ham ussi ke paas baithe hai,jisko hamara intzaar hai,
sirf haath barhaane ki baat hai,ab aur intzaar ki baat na kar...

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Reshma,


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18th May 2009, 05:48 PM

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Adaab Rajveer ji,
Bahut din baad mai yaha aayi,aur sab se pahle aap ki gazal parhi,
bahut achha laga. Aapka naya avtaar bhi bahut achha hai.Aapki gazlon me hamesha kitna dard chhupa rahta hai.Iss dard ko mahsoos karke mera bhi mann kiya kuchh kahne ko:

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

Tinka-tinka baaho mein aaye,magar ek bhi saath na diya
rehne do ham hawaao se tinko ki baat na kar...

--------------------------------------------------

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ham toot kar baras gaye,magar usse hamara ehsaas bhi na huwa,
rehne do ham ghataawo se pyaaso ki baat na kar...

------------------------------------------------------

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar di jisne mere intzaar mein,
ham ussi ke kadmo mein rahte hai,ab to sazao ki baat na kar...

----------------------------------------------------

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Jugnu aate hai,aur phir chale jaate hai,
ham baagho se intzaar e raato ki baat na kar...

---------------------------------------------------

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

Usne dil ke zakhmo par likha hai hamara naam,
ham bhi to ghaayal hai,magar us se hamari zakhmo ki baat na kar

----------------------------------------------------------

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

Ham ussi ke paas baithe hai,jisko hamara intzaar hai,
sirf haath barhaane ki baat hai,ab aur intzaar ki baat na kar...

------------------------------------------------------

Reshma,


Bohat khoob Reshma jee,....kya khoobsurat jawaab diya hai aapne, har sher ka,...jitni khoobsurat ghazal hai, utna hi khoobsurat jawaab......behad accha laga mujhe aapka ye andaaz-e-bayaan........

pehli baar aapko padh rahi hoon,aur acchi lagi aapki ye post....likhti rahiye.....bazm me shirkat karti rahiye....



Rajveer jee....Mubarak ho........aapki khoobsurat ghazal ka jawaab aaya hai..............looks like some hidden secrets...........jus' kidding.........






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Bohat khoob Reshma jee,....kya khoobsurat jawaab diya hai aapne, har sher ka,...jitni khoobsurat ghazal hai, utna hi khoobsurat jawaab......behad accha laga mujhe aapka ye andaaz-e-bayaan........

pehli baar aapko padh rahi hoon,aur acchi lagi aapki ye post....likhti rahiye.....bazm me shirkat karti rahiye....



Rajveer jee....Mubarak ho........aapki khoobsurat ghazal ka jawaab aaya hai..............looks like some hidden secrets...........jus' kidding.........

Namaste Zainy ji,
Aap kaise hai? Aapki post ka mai intne dino ke baad reply kar rahi hu,kyu ki ma kaam me bahut busy rahti hu. Raj ji ki shayri ka jawaab nahi,mera likha to us ke saamne kuch bhi nahi. Lekin aapko itna pasand aaya,ye aapki hi khaasiyat hai,aap ka bahut-bahut shukriya Zainy ji,

Aapko merea bahut saara pyaar,
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sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........


har baar ki tarah lajawab gazal hai

daad kabool kigiyega

shukriyaa

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sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........

bahot khoob likha hai rajveer ji...mera urdu me haath jara tang hai ,phir bhi achhi lagi aapki ye Nazm....


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sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........


namaskaar Rajveer jii
bahut dino aaj aapki es poetry par nazar gaye.....bahut hi khoob likha hai aapne, vaise to aapka likha har lafz khoob hota hai par aaj bahut deir baad aapko pada to aur jayada accha laga....sabhi sher khaas lage.....aur EK Dharkan ne jo jawaab diye haiN woh bhi hume khoob pasand aaye.

aate raha kijiye, bazm mein aapki poetry ki kami mahsoos hoti hai.

kush rahiye
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sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

Raj ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........
Rajveer jii,

Bahut umda Ghazal likhi hai aapne, har ek sheyr apne aap me kamaal hai....
Bahut achha laga padh kar...

Aage bhi aapki GhazaloN ka intzaar rahega...

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'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar


BOHAT KHOOB RAJVEER JI.................
zainy ji, bhut dino baad aapka shukria adda kar raha hoon ye gazal ek dam se aage nikal gayii thii to aaj achanak is par nigah gayii to shukria kar raha hoon...Raj....


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sabhi dosto.n ko Raj ka adaab or namaskaar......dosto ek bhut pehle ki likhi huii gazal lekar hazir hoon....main isko ko jyo ka tyo pesh kiya hai jaise likhi thii jab mujhe gazal ki itni jaankaari nahi thii....to lijiye pesh hai...

rehne de ham tinko se hawa ki baat na kar
ham ishq ke maaron se wafa ki baat na kar

sehra mein basta hoon pyaas hai mera naseeb
mujhse tu baarishon ki, ghata ki baat na kar

Ik umr guzaar dii jisne kisi ke intzaar mein
Usko khauf-e-firaq na de saza ki baat na kar

Jugnu hoon mujhe taarikhiyan aati hain raas
Rehne de mujhse baag-e-sabha ki baat na kar

Mere dil ke zakhamon pe likha hai inka naam
mujhse haseeno ke naaz-o-ada ki baat na kar

‘Raj’ ko jeena hai abhi or uske intzaar mein
tu abhi mujhse waqt-e-kaza ki baat na kar……..

aapki raye ka muntzir........Raj........
raajveer bhai
radhe radhe

bahut khoob kya lajawaab baat kahi hai aapne apne makte me gopiyaan apni sakhiyon se yahi kahti thi bahut khoob dil se daad hai sahab yakeenan lajawaab
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Mere khayaal se Rajweer bhai is ghazal ko dobara lekar bhaithe...........aur ab tak jo aapne seekha hai is ek saal me uske hisab se dobara editing kare........bohat si kamiya rahi ghazal me aur aapne khud hi kaha hai ke aapne yeh Ghazal tab likhi thi jab aapko itni ghazal ki samajh nahi thi.

Aap hi ka kalaam hai jab chahe use polish kare koi bandish nahi hai.........main yeh isiliye keh raha hu qke mujhe khayaal bohat pasand aaye bas bayaani kamzor thi.


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