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qatl-e-Amritsar (Jallianwala baug massacre) - Marsiyaa - 1st August 2014, 03:41 PM

dosto.n jallianwalla baug massacre ke shahido.n ke naam mai.n ne yeh marsiyaa likha hai jo ahl-e-shayri-e-dard ko pesh karna chaahunga...

aap sabhii bazm daaro.n kii iis pe salaah kaa intezaar rahegaa...

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baam-e-falak me.n noor naye din ke aane ka
josh-o-Kharosh tha sharar-e-ja.ng* la.Daane ka
tha mauqaa aalam-e-huu* me.n jazba dikhaane ka
do nau-jawaan veero.n ko riiha karaane ka

leke sadaa-e-haq thii rakhii ijtiima kii shaam
kisko pataa tha wo hii banegii aduu kii daam*

*[ sharar-e-jung = spark of war; aalam-e-huu = world of mist/fog; daam = trap ]

bekhud sipaah-e-taish jo pandrah hazaar the
laDne ko ja.ng-e-fazl baDe beqaraar the
jallianwaale baag me.n sab gham-gusaar the
begaano.n ke jo zulm se siina-figaar* the

zinhaar!* waqt zulmii banaa maut ka safiir
maasoomo.n me.n na aam the yaa thaa koii kabiir

*[ siina-figaar = troubled; zinhaar! = beware!; kabiir = great ]

har shakhs dayaar-e-maut me.n tha khud hi ek misaal
har ek zabaa.n se niklii thii naaraao.n me.n ubaal*
yaa.n thii shuroo hi jung-e-ahimsaa-e-KHuub-majaal
maqqaar sipaahio.n ne chalaayii farebii chaal

barse hi jaa rahii thii jahaa.n goliyaa.n hazaar
ku.nve.n me.n gir rahe the kuchh zinda bane laachaar

*[ ubaal = anger ]

aisii kahii.n na dekhne miltii hai qatl-e-aam
marte hue bhii lete the maadar watan ka naam
aise shahiid bhii the jo bante na the ghulaam
marne ke waqt rakhte the chehre pe ibtisaam*

kaise uthaauu.n aa.nkhe.n jo maatam me.n nam huii
maafee ka arzmand hoo.n jo sahv-e-qalam huii

*[ ibtisaam = smile; sahv-e-qalam = slip of pen, oversight ]



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1st August 2014, 06:18 PM

Waah.....aadeil sahib....kyaa qaabil e taarif marsiya huya hai........daad...Ka nazraana qabool kariye
   
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1st August 2014, 08:59 PM

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Waah.....aadeil sahib....kyaa qaabil e taarif marsiya huya hai........daad...Ka nazraana qabool kariye
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2nd August 2014, 12:20 PM

Aadeil bhai !!! Rongte kharhe kar dene waala qalaam kaha aap ne!! Is se gham dard gussa soz aur fakhr ye sabhi ehsaas mehsoos ho jaate hain ek saath !! Gale laga ke aap ko daad de raha hooN !!!


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Outstanding.........excellent ground for ur ghazal......by far this is ur best ghazal
jitni tareef ki jae kam hai......u hv excellently penned down the most horrifying n gruesome massacre in history....amazing
Naaz,
meri iis pehli aur marsiya likhne kii adnaa si koshish ko itna saraahne ke liye, I am extremely thankful...



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Aadeil bhai !!! Rongte kharhe kar dene waala qalaam kaha aap ne!! Is se gham dard gussa soz aur fakhr ye sabhi ehsaas mehsoos ho jaate hain ek saath !! Gale laga ke aap ko daad de raha hooN !!!
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6th August 2014, 11:37 AM

Aadil bhai,

Ehsasaat aur jazbaatooN se bhapoor composition...!

DherooN daad qabool kijiye,,

Likhte rahiye,,

DuaooN ke saath,,


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Aadil bhai,

Ehsasaat aur jazbaatooN se bhapoor composition...!

DherooN daad qabool kijiye,,

Likhte rahiye,,

DuaooN ke saath,,
Hassanbhai,
aapka behad shukr guzaar hooN iis daad aur hausla afzaaee ke liye...

duago.. Adil



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Aadil jee...its one of ur best creation......hats off to u....



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Aadil jee...its one of ur best creation......hats off to u....
Arvindji,
aapke iis pyar aur hausla afzaaee ke liye hamesha shukr guzaar rahunga

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Aadeil bhai..........kuch nahi hai kehne ko...ni-shabad !

aapki soch ko aapke ehsaasoN ko salaam.

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Aadeil bhai..........kuch nahi hai kehne ko...ni-shabad !

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aapkii iis qadr muhabbat ne hameN bhii niH-shabd kar diya hai......

aapka behad shukr guzaar hooN.............



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