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*~Ab agar aur sitam honge....~* -
7th September 2014, 12:14 PM
Ab agar aur sitam hoNge to mar jaaeNge, khaa-ma-khaa ham se hunarmand guzar jaaeNge. wo jo kahte hain zamaane me maseehaa khud ko, mere zakhmoN ko jo dekhenge muqar jaaeNge. Aaj ke daur me apnoN se ummeedeN rakh kar, ham sare aam nigaahoN se utar jaaeNge. tere dar se bhi sakhaawat jo na mil paaegii, tere maNgte mere mahboob kidhar jaaeNge. ashq bahte hain to bah jaane do rukhsaaroN pe, aapke gham ke shaguufe to nikhar jaaeNge. ek nazar uth gayee jo aapki jaanib meree, aap khushboo se hawaaoN me bikhar jaaenge. ham hain wo raah ke chal deN to ufaq tak jaaeN, ek tum tak jo chalenge to thahar jaaenge. wo jo ghazloN me teraa naam likhaa karte they, kisne socha thaa miyaaN Shaad bhi Dar jaaenge.. ShaaD..... |
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7th September 2014, 12:34 PM
Kisne socha tha MiyaN Shaad zamane se darr jayeinge ..
 Bhai ye kya haal ban gaya tumhara shayri.mein ... .vo.kehte the kal shab sambhalna sambhalna, Khudhi.larkharaye sawere sawere. Shaid bhai aapka ye andaaz kuch.naya aur nirala laga. Per aapki puri ghazal bahut achi lagi .Dil se daad kabul karein regds sanjay sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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7th September 2014, 12:49 PM
wo jo kahte hain zamaane me
maseehaa khud ko, mere zakhmoN ko jo dekhenge muqar jaaeNge. Waah shaad miyaan maja aa gaya...,.kya baat hai ...bahut dilfareb kalaam likha hai.....ek ek aashaar jaise dhadkano ko aur dhadka gaya....reps.udhaar rahe.. Aur ye sher to jaise purane jhakmon ko hawa de gaya... एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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7th September 2014, 09:29 PM
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अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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7th September 2014, 11:41 PM
wah wah wah !!! meyaari aashaar ke motiyon se saji huwee ek naayab o nafees ghazal kahi hai Shaad bhai aap ne. Har sher pe hi naheen, har misre pe daad, har lafz pe waah !!!
aur neeche quoted aashaar aise lage ki jaise mere dil ke andar se aap ki aawaaz aa rahi ho !! inhone kis qadar man ko mohit kar liya ye bayaan hi naheen kar pa raha hoon, to bas unhein neeche phir se dohra raha hoon. wo jo kahte hain zamaane me maseehaa khud ko, mere zakhmoN ko jo dekhenge muqar jaaeNge. tere dar se bhi sakhaawat jo na mil paaegii, tere maNgte mere mahboob kidhar jaaeNge. ek nazar uth gayee jo aapki jaanib meree, aap khushboo se hawaaoN me bikhar jaaenge. ham hain wo raah ke chal deN to ufaq tak jaaeN, ek tum tak jo chalenge to thahar jaaenge. abhi na jaane kitni baar aur ye ghazal pardhi jaayegi aur mehsoos kari jayegi. aap ko meri jaanib se dheron dheron duaein !! mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha |
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Muhabbat ki khatir, zamane se ladna Zamane ki khatir, muhabbat bhulana shaad bhai poori ghazal hi lajawaab hai , dheroN daad qabool fermaaieN , or mere betuki baatoN ka bura mat maaniye ga , ghazal achi lagi to apnaiyat si meHsoos huwi to chand betuki baatien keh dii ijjazat dijiye zor e qalam aur zyada |
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8th September 2014, 08:30 AM
Masha Allah bohat khoob shaad sahab. ..
Sabhi ashaar laajawaab hain Yuhi likhte rahiye. . Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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8th September 2014, 10:29 AM
Shoaibhai,
uljhan ye hai ki aapkii iis ghazal pe daad kahaaN se shuruu karuuN aur kahaaN pe ruk jaauuN...... Ab agar aur sitam hoNge to mar jaaeNge, khaa-ma-khaa ham se hunarmand guzar jaaeNge. laajavaab matlaa..... khayaal-aNgez...... wo jo kahte hain zamaane me maseehaa khud ko, mere zakhmoN ko jo dekhenge muqar jaaeNge. Aaj ke daur me apnoN se ummeedeN rakh kar, ham sare aam nigaahoN se utar jaaeNge. tere dar se bhi sakhaawat jo na mil paaegii, tere maNgte mere mahboob kidhar jaaeNge. ek hairat-angez sach..... aur kya khub surat bayaanaat..... ashq bahte hain to bah jaane do rukhsaaroN pe, aapke gham ke shaguufe to nikhar jaaeNge. ek nazar uth gayee jo aapki jaanib meree, aap khushboo se hawaaoN me bikhar jaaenge. behad khubsurat ashaar... nuktachinii aur aag se pur....... ham hain wo raah ke chal deN to ufaq tak jaaeN, ek tum tak jo chalenge to thahar jaaenge. superb word play.... and superb relation of philosophical and practical pragmatism.... wo jo ghazloN me teraa naam likhaa karte they, kisne socha thaa miyaaN Shaad bhi Dar jaaenge waaaaahhhh!! kamaal hai, bhai...................... iis ghazal pe dherON dheroN daad...................... duaaoN ke saath.. Adil ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता 
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8th September 2014, 02:25 PM
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Shaad bhai.....bahut la-jawaab likha hai aapne....dil se daad hazir hai. duaoN ke saath .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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8th September 2014, 04:45 PM
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Sanjay saahab awwal to aapka behad shukrguzaar hoon main jo aapne bazm me aana gawaara samjhaa aur mere adnaa alfaazon ko apni pyaari baaton se nawaaz diyaa..... aur waaahhhh sir jee kya khoob sher share kiyaa hai.... bahot hi khoob..... duaaon me yunhi yaaad rakhiyega... Apna khayaal raakkhen Shaad.... |
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8th September 2014, 10:36 PM
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Ab agar aur sitam hoNge to mar jaaeNge, khaa-ma-khaa ham be-hunarmand guzar jaaeNge. Oopar kay shayr ko zaraa ghaur se padhiyegaa... ghustaakhee muaaf bhaee.. aapki ayk say aalaa ayk payshkashayn (last few and now this one) ...make us say the above modified shayr... i.e. ab aur sitam..ya'nee qayaamat ghazlayn aap paysh karogay to ham mar he jaayayngay nashay wa saroor say... MashaAllah har ik shayr la-saanee la jawaab haye.. dilee mobarakbaad mayray bhaee... dhayron daad aapki nazar!!! REPS+++ Ahmad |
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9th September 2014, 01:36 PM
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Aru bhai waaahhhhhh kyaa andaaz hai tareef ka bhai.. dil khush kar diyaa aapne... yoon lagaa likhna kaaamyaab ho gaya meraa jo aapne ise itne anand se padha samjha aur saraaha...... aage bhi aapke saath aur sneh ka intzaar rahegaa... aate rahiyega Shaad.... |
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9th September 2014, 05:04 PM
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Reps added. Isi tarah likhte rahiye, khush rahiye. Sarika |
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9th September 2014, 11:26 PM
Hi Shaad
tumhari rachna parh ek geet ke bol gunnane ka je chaah raha hay.loki hanjuan che parh lainde naa (naam)aisey leye aapan rona chad ta keep writing dair se aati huun par tumhara likha parhti zaroor huun. |
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10th September 2014, 11:08 AM
wo jo ghazloN me teraa naam likhaa karte they,
kisne socha thaa miyaaN Shaad bhi Dar jaaenge.. Shaad mere bhaai... waaaahhh! qatl bhi karte ho aur haath meiN talwaar bhi nahi.. yeH fun bhi kisi kisi ko aata hai.... kia likha hai bhai.... hur lafz se jese lahu tapak raha hai... dard hi dard jhalak raha hai... DherooN daad iss khaas kalaam ke liye.... reps already added! Likhte rehna.. DuaooN ke saath,, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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10th September 2014, 11:09 AM
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jab jab aap hamaari bazm me tashreef laatiii hain yaqeen maaniye dil ki gahraaiyon se aapka ehsaannmand ho jaata hoon main.... aap jis tarah se hame daad de jaati hhain hamaare liye wo kisii eenaam se kam nahii hai..... aap doston ko hamaara likhaaa pasand aata hai yahii khushnaseebi hai hamaarii.... aage bhi aapka intzaaar rahegaa..... aatii rahiyega aur apna khayaal rakhiye Shaad.... |
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10th September 2014, 11:18 AM
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Shaad ji behad umdaah,behah purkaif kalaam aapka.....kahin kahin to bas ruk ke dobaara padhne aur uske ehsaas me ghum hone ko ji kar gaya......chu gaye aap mujhe......bahut bahut mubarakbaad aapko.... Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab') |
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10th September 2014, 11:11 PM
aadaab Shaad miyaaN,
phir se kamaal kar diya bhyee! deewaan kab chhap'wa riye ho miyaaN? kasam se tumhaari GhazleiN rooh taq jaati haiN, daad Tikaa lijiye aur mubarakbaad bhi rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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13th September 2014, 10:01 AM
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aapki beintehaan daad aur muhabbat ke liye tahe dil se mashkoor hoon zarraa bhai.... aapka saath hi hai jo likhne ka hauslaa detaa hai.... aage bhi aapke aamad ka intzaar rahega.... shukriyaa tahe dil se aapka... Shaad... |
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13th September 2014, 10:05 AM
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Mujeeb bhai jis andaaz se aapne mere is adna se kaam ki lafz lafz tareef ki hhai.... main aapkii inaayaton se ehsaanmand ho gaya hoon.... aur aapko jitna shukriya adaa kar sakun kam hi hoga.... duaaon me yaad rakhiyega bhai... Shaad..... |
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13th September 2014, 08:33 PM
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13th September 2014, 09:07 PM
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bahot bahot shukriyaa aapka aadil bhai pasand karne ke liye.... aapne jis tarah se muhabbat lutaai hai uske liye main aapka karzdaar hoon.... tashreef laate rahen bhai... khush rahen Shaad.... |
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13th September 2014, 09:08 PM
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15th September 2014, 05:57 PM
Ghazal par mubaarake.n bhai................
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Ahmad bhai tak Shaad ka salaam pahoche...... bhai main kyaa kahun aaapke is andaaz ne mere andar kai diye roshan kar diye hain.... aapki is darjaa muhabaat ne mujhe karzdaar kar diyaa hai mere bhai.... aapke sher ko padhaa to apnii hansii nahi rok paaya.... kyaa likhaa hai aapne haahahaha.... aisaa kuch hii nahi hai bhai.... khaaksaar ko khaak me hi rahne deN aasmaan par na biThaaeN.... uchaai se bahot darr lagta hai bhai.... bas aapki muhabaat jo iske peeche mujhe nazar aayee hai main uske liye aaka tahe dil se shukrguzaar hoon.... shukriyaa Shaad...... |
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17th September 2014, 11:38 AM
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Sarika ji... sabse pahle to main aapka bazm me istaqbaal karta hoon...... baad iske ye kahnaa chahungaa ke aapki daad mere liye bahot khaas hai aur hamesha hi mujhe aap doston ka apni post par intzaar rahtaa hai.... isliye kosshish hotii hai ke acche se accha likh sakun taaki aap sab ko ye alfaaz pasand aa saken..... aage bhi intzaar rahega aapka... khush rahiye Shaad.... |
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Sukanya dee... aaap aayeeen to yaqeen maniye mmerii bazm mhak uthii hai..... yoon lagta hai ke har suu roshni hi roshnii hai... ye sab aapki duaaon ka natejaaa hai..... aapko ye kavitaa pasand aa sakii ye meri khushnaseebi hai.... aagee bhi aapka intzzar rahega... apna khyaaal rakhiye Shaad... |
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18th September 2014, 03:33 PM
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bhai aapki daad aur duaaon ke iye tahe dil se mashkoor hoon aapka..... bahot bahot shukriyaa jo aap bazm me tashreeef aaye aur hame apni duaaon se nawaazaa... aaate rahiyega bhai aur apna khayaal rakhiye.. shukriyaa Shaad..... |
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18th September 2014, 03:47 PM
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aap aaye mahfil me nayeeee jaan aa gayee huzoor..... apki pazeeraai aur purkhuloos daad ke liye mamnoon hoon mere bhai...... aapki duaaon ka hamesha se talabgaar rahunga.... aur bhai rahi deewaan ki baat to insha allaah bahot jald chapwaa lenge bhai.. bas aap duaa karna..... apna khayaal rakhiye ..... shukriyaa Shaad... |
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19th September 2014, 08:42 PM
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