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Ghazal: Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa... - 18th September 2011, 11:53 AM

aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

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aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


Pradhyuman - Bismil


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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212

aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


Pradhyuman - Bismil

yaaaaaaaaaaaar

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bahut kuch kahnaa tha .... par ek dam jana pad raha hai..... bahut khoob ho sake to sunaa dena phone
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ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa


Waah ! Pradhyuman Ji ! Laaaaaaaaaaajawaab Sher Aadaa Hue HaiN !!!!

BehtreeNNNNNNNNN Ghazal Huii ... Janaab !

Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad .... !




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
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yaaaaaaaaaaaar

katl..............

bahut kuch kahnaa tha .... par ek dam jana pad raha hai..... bahut khoob ho sake to sunaa dena phone
shukriyaa vikaas bhai..

aapko ghazal sunaani thi phone par..magar phir socha kahaan phone karke aapko disturb karun..aap jab online aayenge tab baat karta hun..

aapka dost,
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woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


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radhe radhe

bahut sundar .... badiya ghazal banaai hai ... dil se daad ....

likhte rahiye ... duaaon ke saath ....


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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

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aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa

Pradhyuman - Bismil

Aadaab Bismil Ji….!
Shayad Aaj Pehli Dafa Aap Ko Parha Hai…. Or Parhna Acha Laga….Boht Boht Khoob Rahi Aap Ki Ye Ghazal.

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa

Ye 2 Ashaar Boht Pasand Aaye…. Boht Rawani Me Hain Or Maf'hoom Bhi Acha Hai….

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

Bismil Ji… Is Sab Ke Sath Sath… Mujhy Is Sher Ka dusra Misra Apni Behr Se Hat'ta Nazar Aa Raha Hai…
Is Me Balance Nahi Lag Raha…. Parhnay Me Bhi Rawani Nahi Aa Rahi….
Agr Ho Sakay ToIs Pr Dobara Ghor Farma Lijiye Ga….

Aap Ko Meri Taraf Se Is Khubsurat Kalaam Pr Mubarakbaad…… Qabool Farmayen…




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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212

aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa

Pradhyuman - Bismil

waah waah kiya abaat hai bhai bahot khoob
yaar is dushwaar bahr me achhy achhy log ghazal kahtey kaanp jaatey hain yahee wajah hai ki aaj kal ki ghazlen is bahr me kam miltee hain khud aaj tak main ne kabhi is bahr me ghazal na kahee hai ,,,, is se badaa kamaal ye hai ki aap ne bahr se insaaf bhi kiyaa achhy mazoo laaye achhaa nibhaayaa bahot bahot khoob
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mittal_pali ji bahot bahot shukriya ghazal pasand karne ke liye..god bless

Naresh ji aap ko pasand tab aata hai jab ehsaas bayaan karne mein kaamyaab rehta hun..isliye bahot khushi hoti hai aap ke comments dekh kar..aapke saath ki aage bhi umeed rahegi..aapki daad dil se kubool hai..khush rahiye..god bless

ishq_ik_ibaadat ji: radhe radhe..bahot bahot shukriyaa..aapki daad dil se kubool hai sahaab..god bless

ahamad bhai: pehle to inn maumooli ashaaroeN ko padhne aur saraahne ke liye bahot bahot shukriya..jis misre ki aap baat kar rahe hain woh mujhe bhi khatak raha tha..aapne sahi farmaaaya..issme balance nahi hai..use dobaara likha hai...aapki raey chahunga..haalaaki iss soorat meiN misre ka matlab change ho jaata hai

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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212

aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


Pradhyuman - Bismil
bahot khub Pradhyuman sahab
daad qabul farmayen

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pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
main ab to woh chehraa nahi hun keh jo aainaa rahaa


Sir Ye Sher Bilkul Theak Laga Or Matlab Bhi Ba-Aasani Samajh Aa Raha Hai.. Aap Ka Mashkoor Hun Ke Aap Ne Is Na-Cheeez Ki Raaye Ko Tawajjo Di.... Khush Rahen...




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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

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aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa

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Bahut khoob, Pradhyuman Ji...! Iss baar bhi aap ki shaayri ke teer ne jigar ko nishaana banaa diyaa hai...! Har ek sher lajawaab...!

Mehfil ki raunak baDhaate rahiyega aur apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...?

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Amanush ji shukriya...

sir yeh to aapka badappan hai jo aap aisa keh rahe hain..aap bhi apna khyaal rakhiyega ok?

god bless u

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Hey Rohin,

thank you for the appreciation..sorry for the delay in replying back.. take care...there is no may be...if you can't learn how to write shayri (by going through my work) you can definetely learn how not to write shayri lol

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4th November 2011, 09:28 PM

good one Pradhyuman,
this one was beautiful


do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

and this one too

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


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good one Pradhyuman,
this one was beautiful


do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

and this one too

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa
thanks mayoos for d appreciation..


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waah waah kiya abaat hai bhai bahot khoob
yaar is dushwaar bahr me achhy achhy log ghazal kahtey kaanp jaatey hain yahee wajah hai ki aaj kal ki ghazlen is bahr me kam miltee hain khud aaj tak main ne kabhi is bahr me ghazal na kahee hai ,,,, is se badaa kamaal ye hai ki aap ne bahr se insaaf bhi kiyaa achhy mazoo laaye achhaa nibhaayaa bahot bahot khoob
daad hi daad
masood bhai aadaab,

bahot bahot shukriya..abhi nazar padhi aapki comment par..bhai aap jo bhi likhte ho poetry lagta hai..aap ko kuch napasand ho aur wo zaahir kiya to woh bhi padhna acha hi lagta hai..kamaal hai...taarefoeN ke pool baandhna to koi aapse seekhe..

aur haan aap to chalti phirti urdu ki dictionary ho..aapke comments mein hi kuch nayaa seekh leta hun

god bless u

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman - Bismil


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aadaab dosto,

phir ek baar aap ke saamne apni nayi ghazal rakh rahaa hun..iss baar behr ka bhi dhyaan rakha hai...to kahin galti dikhe to zaroor bata dijiyega..

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aapki raaey ka intezaar rahega..

woh aap meiN mashgool tha maiN soch mein dooba rahaa
kya waqt tha mehboob tha kya ishq ka jalwaa rahaa

ro lenge teri yaad meiN aansu ki kyaa keemat rahi
ehsaas bhi nahin tujhe dariyaa kahin behtaa rahaa

do roz ki hai zindagi har roz ka phir maajraa
jaisa tha kal waisa hi hun poocha hi kyun kaisaa rahaa

pehchaan hai meri mujhe tasweer de na jao tum
ab maiN woh chehraa nahi ab to bas aainaa rahaa

yun hi nahi bismil tujhe ahabaab ne ghaafil kahaa
Kis baat se naraaz tha kis baat ko kehtaa rahaa


Pradhyuman - Bismil

behad khuubsurat ghazal hui bismil saahab... kya baateN kahi hain, ek se badhkar ek... waaahhhhhh

dusre sher me saani misra behar se shayad hatt raha hai.. ek baar dekh len... shukriyaa...

likhte rahiye...

Shaad....


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bahut umda ghazal kahi hai bilmil saaheb, khayal bhi ahche the, maza aaya padh kar, par doosre sher meN saani beh'r se baahar ho raha nahiN lafz pe, zara uspe gaur farmaaiyega...!! yuNhi likhte rahiye aur bazm ki raunak badhaate rahiye...



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