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Jhootay Khuwaab Sajaaye Bhudha Sa Aadmi..!! (Bhudhe Qulli Ki Aap-beeti) -
7th August 2014, 01:38 AM
Adaab! Hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard!
Aik puraani 'koshish', jo pehle pesh ki thi,
aik bhudhe 'QULLI' ki aap-beeti, ik kadwi haQeeqat,
lekin roman Urdu ki wajah se hazireen ko mushkil hui,
ab behtari ke saath pesh kar raha hooN:-
sir pe sandooQ rakhe bhudha sa aadmi
ghareebi ka bhoj uthaye bhudha sa aadmi
dikhnay meiN lagta hai naheef, lekin!
mano'N wazN le jaaye bhudha sa aadmi
naheef: kamzoor, vigourless
koi bhi taras nahi khaata phir bhi!!
zabt ka daman thaame bhudha sa aadmi
dhundh.li aankhon meiN halki si hai chamak
jhootay khuwaab sajaaye bhudha sa aadmi
kabhi us ke Qadam lad,kha,raate nahi, hSn!
jawano ko pechay chhoday bhudha sa aadmi
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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7th August 2014, 11:58 AM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Adaab! Hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard!
Aik puraani 'koshish', jo pehle pesh ki thi,
aik bhudhe 'QULLI' ki aap-beeti, ik kadwi haQeeqat,
lekin roman Urdu ki wajah se hazireen ko mushkil hui,
ab behtari ke saath pesh kar raha hooN:-
sir pe sandooQ rakhe bhudha sa aadmi
ghareebi ka bhoj uthaye bhudha sa aadmi
dikhnay meiN lagta hai naheef, lekin!
mano'N wazN le jaaye bhudha sa aadmi
naheef: kamzoor, vigourless
koi bhi taras nahi khaata phir bhi!!
zabt ka daman thaame bhudha sa aadmi
dhundh.li aankhon meiN halki si hai chamak
jhootay khuwaab sajaaye bhudha sa aadmi
kabhi us ke Qadam lad,kha,raate nahi, hSn!
jawano ko pechay chhoday bhudha sa aadmi
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Bohat khoob hassan sahab......dehron daad
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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7th August 2014, 12:05 PM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Adaab! Hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard!
Aik puraani 'koshish', jo pehle pesh ki thi,
aik bhudhe 'QULLI' ki aap-beeti, ik kadwi haQeeqat,
lekin roman Urdu ki wajah se hazireen ko mushkil hui,
ab behtari ke saath pesh kar raha hooN:-
sir pe sandooQ rakhe bhudha sa aadmi
ghareebi ka bhoj uthaye bhudha sa aadmi
dikhnay meiN lagta hai naheef, lekin!
mano'N wazN le jaaye bhudha sa aadmi
naheef: kamzoor, vigourless
koi bhi taras nahi khaata phir bhi!!
zabt ka daman thaame bhudha sa aadmi
dhundh.li aankhon meiN halki si hai chamak
jhootay khuwaab sajaaye bhudha sa aadmi
kabhi us ke Qadam lad,kha,raate nahi, hSn!
jawano ko pechay chhoday bhudha sa aadmi
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achchi ghazal bani hai Hassan. reality se bharpur...keep it up
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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7th August 2014, 12:15 PM
Hassanbhai!!!!
waaah... kya laajawaab qalaam buna hai.... pur haqiqat aur pur zor ashaar se bhari hai ye tehriir....
dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad...
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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7th August 2014, 02:28 PM
Bahot Khub Hasan Bahi.................Best Creation..........................!! Dil se Deron Daad...........................!!!!
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7th August 2014, 04:35 PM
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Bohat khoob hassan sahab......dehron daad
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Ananth jiii,,
Ehsasaat ko pasand karne k liye behad manooN hooN!
Milte rahiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th August 2014, 02:33 AM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
achchi ghazal bani hai Hassan. reality se bharpur...keep it up
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Pari,
ManooN-o-mashkoor hooN is qadar pazeraayi ke liye!
Umeed hai aagay bhi aise hi saath milta rahe ga,
DuaooN ke saath,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th August 2014, 11:02 PM
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Dear i want to add reps but aur spread krn padega
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it's okay dear! aap ka saath hi hamari 'rep' hai........!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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8th August 2014, 11:16 PM
moHteram janaab Hassan saHb !
appki yeh ghazal peRh to aisy laga jaisy zindagi ki talkhioN ka nochoR hoN , aisy bahut saary buRhy insaan haiN yahaN UAE mai jinki saari umar guzar jaati hai kamaany mai , or unki aulaad ko zara bhi sharm nahi aati ussy ujaaRny mai , jawaani mai kamaaty haiN apni aulaad ke liye takeh aulaad buRhaapy ka sahaara bany or buRhaapy mai kamaana peRta hai keh khud ko zinda rakh sakieN kiyoN keh wohi aulaad kehti hai , appne kiya kiya hai hamary liye
khair ...
apki yeh tehreer qabil e tareef hai , daad qabool fermaaiye
Allah hum sako apne waldaiN ka sahaara banany ki taufeeq ataa fermaae
Aameen
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10th August 2014, 01:08 PM
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Hassanbhai!!!!
waaah... kya laajawaab qalaam buna hai.... pur haqiqat aur pur zor ashaar se bhari hai ye tehriir....
dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad...
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Adil bhai,
Is qadar pazeraayi aur mohabbat ke liye manooN hooN bhai!
Aise hi milte rahiye ga,
DuaaoN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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13th August 2014, 02:26 AM
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Bahot Khub Hasan Bahi.................Best Creation..........................!! Dil se Deron Daad...........................!!!!
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Sudhir jii,,
Thanks a lot for liking my composition!
Regards,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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14th August 2014, 08:09 PM
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Originally Posted by Mujeeb
moHteram janaab Hassan saHb !
appki yeh ghazal peRh to aisy laga jaisy zindagi ki talkhioN ka nochoR hoN , aisy bahut saary buRhy insaan haiN yahaN UAE mai jinki saari umar guzar jaati hai kamaany mai , or unki aulaad ko zara bhi sharm nahi aati ussy ujaaRny mai , jawaani mai kamaaty haiN apni aulaad ke liye takeh aulaad buRhaapy ka sahaara bany or buRhaapy mai kamaana peRta hai keh khud ko zinda rakh sakieN kiyoN keh wohi aulaad kehti hai , appne kiya kiya hai hamary liye
khair ...
apki yeh tehreer qabil e tareef hai , daad qabool fermaaiye
Allah hum sako apne waldaiN ka sahaara banany ki taufeeq ataa fermaae
Aameen
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Mujeeb saheb!
Aap ki baat solaa aanay sach hai...
Allah hum sab ko apne waldaiN ka sahaara ban'ne ki taufeeQ atta farmaye (Ameen)..
Milte rahiye,,
DuaooN ke saathh,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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14th August 2014, 09:37 PM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Adaab! Hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard!
Aik puraani 'koshish', jo pehle pesh ki thi,
aik bhudhe 'QULLI' ki aap-beeti, ik kadwi haQeeqat,
lekin roman Urdu ki wajah se hazireen ko mushkil hui,
ab behtari ke saath pesh kar raha hooN:-
sir pe sandooQ rakhe bhudha sa aadmi
ghareebi ka bhoj uthaye bhudha sa aadmi
dikhnay meiN lagta hai naheef, lekin!
mano'N wazN le jaaye bhudha sa aadmi
naheef: kamzoor, vigourless
koi bhi taras nahi khaata phir bhi!!
zabt ka daman thaame bhudha sa aadmi
dhundh.li aankhon meiN halki si hai chamak
jhootay khuwaab sajaaye bhudha sa aadmi
kabhi us ke Qadam lad,kha,raate nahi, hSn!
jawano ko pechay chhoday bhudha sa aadmi
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bahot khoob hassan saahab.... kyaa baat hai......... bahot acchee manzarkashi hai..... aur zindgaee ki haqeeqat..... likhte rahen
Shaad...
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14th August 2014, 11:44 PM
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Adaab! Hazireen-e-meHfil-e-dard!
Aik puraani 'koshish', jo pehle pesh ki thi,
aik bhudhe 'QULLI' ki aap-beeti, ik kadwi haQeeqat,
lekin roman Urdu ki wajah se hazireen ko mushkil hui,
ab behtari ke saath pesh kar raha hooN:-
sir pe sandooQ rakhe bhudha sa aadmi
ghareebi ka bhoj uthaye bhudha sa aadmi
dikhnay meiN lagta hai naheef, lekin!
mano'N wazN le jaaye bhudha sa aadmi
naheef: kamzoor, vigourless
koi bhi taras nahi khaata phir bhi!!
zabt ka daman thaame bhudha sa aadmi
dhundh.li aankhon meiN halki si hai chamak
jhootay khuwaab sajaaye bhudha sa aadmi
kabhi us ke Qadam lad,kha,raate nahi, hSn!
jawano ko pechay chhoday bhudha sa aadmi
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ek basnaseeb talkh haqeeqat ka jigardoz asardaar bayaan kiya Hassan bhai aap ne. behad umdah qalaam hai !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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16th August 2014, 09:27 PM
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bahot khoob hassan saahab.... kyaa baat hai......... bahot acchee manzarkashi hai..... aur zindgaee ki haqeeqat..... likhte rahen
Shaad...
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Shaad bhai!
MohabbatoN se nawaazne ka bohat shukriyaaH!
Milte rahiye,,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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18th August 2014, 12:33 AM
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ek basnaseeb talkh haqeeqat ka jigardoz asardaar bayaan kiya Hassan bhai aap ne. behad umdah qalaam hai !!
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Zarraa saheb,
Khaak lafzoN ko iss qadar pazeeraayi dene ke liye behad mashkoor hooN!
Milte rahiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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