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Kya khoob saaz-e-bayaan hua hai dost, kya kahifiyat bayaan kar gaye par bhai hidayaat yeh bhi thi ki lafz kisi ek sher mein hona laazmi hai. Agar aap gaur-talab kar paaye to inaayat hogi..Shukriyaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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bahut khoob nibhaya aapne diye huye alfaaz ko....behatreen kalaam...... Likhte rahein..... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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aap ne is dafa koi lafz dene ke bajaaye ghazal likhne ky liye koi kaifiyat (condition) dii hy ... us per ghazal likhni hy ... aur example sher ki kafiyat per kuch likhna hy ... chaleN correction is ghazal meiN .... :- maiN jab bhi sanwar ke baahir nikalta hooN un se mulaqaat ke liye zaroor jaata hooN un ke aaankhoN ke samandar ko maiN! dil meiN sama ke chupa ke rakhta hooN saaz saare ke saare be-saaz hue jate haiN! koyal si awaaz un ki jab bhi sunta hooN… waqt-e-rukhsat kaifiyat-e-dil mat pooocho! bin paani machli ki manind machalta hooN kaifiyat-e-dil : condition of heart manind : alike shab-e-hijr meiN pal pal tadapta ‘parStaar’ 'ki aag hi nahi rehta, dhuaaN bhi hota hooN' tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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HSN bhai..............bahut khoobsurat likha hai aapne.....daad hazir hai .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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Doston mahfil ko aapkI ghazalon ka intzaar hai....
Aapse guzarish gai...aaiye aur bazm ko aage badaiye.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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Lafz thoda peecheeda tha aur isliye is baar ghazal tayaar hone mein thoda waqt gaya...lijiye aapki nazar kuch alfaaz kar raha hoon batayiegaa kaise lage
KHalish-o-soz-e-dil-figaar* haiN itne kya hoga kaifiyat-e-dil sunaane se *bruise zabaan-e-gul mein bhi kitne khaar chipte hai Gham milta hai kisi na kisi bahaane se firaaq-e-yaar ab kaunsii khalish dega guzar gaya hoon yun zindagi bitaane se savaal-e-vasl** mere raqiib achaa hai qurbate.N hoti nahi faasle mitaane se **question of reunion Guzaarish 'mast' nigaahon ko kaabu karlo dhadkane sunn ho chuki hai ab zamaane se खलिश-ओ-सोज़-ए-दिल-फ़िगार हैं इतने क्या होगा कैफियत-ए-दिल सुनाने से ज़बान-ए-गुल में भी कितने खार छिपते है ग़म मिलता है किसी न किसी बहाने से फ़िराक-ए-यार अब कौनसी खलिश देगा गुज़र गया हूँ यूँ ज़िन्दगी बिताने से सवाल-ए-वस्ल मेरे रक़ीब अच्छा है क़ुर्बतें होती नहीं फासले मिटाने से गुज़ारिश 'मस्त' निगाहों को काबू करलो धड़कने सुंन हो चुकी है अब ज़माने से Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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15th May 2015, 09:31 AM
bahot khoob anu bhai........ kamaal hi huaa hai bas abki baar...................
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Mast Bhai....bahut accha likhe hai aap..............!
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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salamat rahen ......... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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simply superb............................ tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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15th May 2015, 04:03 PM
diye gaye lafz per aik couplet mulaahiza farmaayeN dostoN.. :-
kefiyat kia bayaaN ho dil-e-beqaraar ki! ishQ laahiq hua hai aise jese marz-e-laa-ilaaj... laahiq : attached marz-e-laa-ilaaj : incurable disease tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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16th May 2015, 03:37 PM
Sabko Namaskaar !!!!!!
Ek koshish.....jara dekhen.... Kaifiyat-e-jaan, allah re saaqi ki nazar ! Maut hairaan, nasha hai to kise hai !! Wo jo bas khwaab me hi apna pata deti hai ! Uski khwaahish se gila hai to kise hai !! Ek kamzarf sahi dil me use aane do ! Khauf duniya ka mujhe hai na use hai !! Kuch ishaare bhari mahfil me kar ke laut gaye ! Tumne bataya nahi aakhiri salaam kise hai !! Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab') |
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Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab') |
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Magar wo apni hi fitrat se hardam haar jaata hai !! (Pankaj Mishra 'Nawaab') |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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likhte raheinn... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Aap sab ne itnI khoobsoorat ghazalein pesh ki hai..kI main kuch likhne ki himmat hee nahi kar pa rahi...bas kuch alfaaz hain dil ki kalam se...ummeed hai pasand aayenge sabhi ko....
Hai zara zara khafa sa tu hai zara zara sa to pyaar bhi.. Tujhe roothna bhi to aaye na hai kamaal tu mere yaar bhi. Ye jo kaifiyat tere dil ki hai teri aankhon se ye bayaan ho. Mujhe raaz deti hai ye bata ki tu jaan kare hai nisaar bhi. Tera dil bahal hi jayega tujhe doston ki kami nahi.. main jo door tujhse chali gayi mujhe aayega na qaraar bhi. jo sata rahe ho mujhe sanam nahi meri tumko hai aarzu Mere baad tujhko satayenge yahi mahfilen ye dayaar bhi. Hame paas aur bhi layenge ye jo chaar din hain judai ke Tu madhu ke dil me sada rahe chahe fasle ho hazaar bhi. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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Tareef karne ke liye lafz shayad tatoolne padenge....yunhi mehfil mein umdaa ghazalon ki baarish karte rahiYeGaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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Aapko pasand aaya to yakeenan achcha hee hoga...varna sach kahoon..kashmakash me thi ki post karoon ya nahi.... behad shukriya aapka....sath dete rahein.... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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21st May 2015, 02:37 PM
Chaliye bazm ko aage badhaate hai aur hamara agla lafz aasaan sa hai par ismein kai rang samaye hai, umeed hai aap sab apni ghazlon se is lafz ko lekar zindagi bayaan kar paayenge.
'Mausam' Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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filhal ghazal to nahi albatta diye gaye lafz per aik sher arz hy :- zindagi se aik hi shikwa raha "Parastaar"! jitne mausam milay sabhi be-rang milay... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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kuch ashaar lekar hazir hone ki koshish karoongi... sabhi doston se guzarish hai..apne khyaal hamse share karein... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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21st May 2015, 07:49 PM
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Mast sahab ke huqm ki tameel karte huee ye sher bazm ko nazar kar raha hoon.... lafz Mausam ko dhyaan me rakhte hue....
koi mausam tumhaariii yaad kaa aisaa nahii jaataa, jis din hamaarii aankh se baarish nahee hotee........!! Shaad..... |
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22nd May 2015, 09:50 AM
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22nd May 2015, 10:16 AM
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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22nd May 2015, 10:58 AM
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22nd May 2015, 11:03 AM
Waaah waah...bahut khoob doston......
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd May 2015, 11:05 AM
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22nd May 2015, 04:42 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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