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dikhaayee na deta, sunaayee na deta -
16th August 2011, 08:09 PM
dard ki mehfil ko mera salaam....
ek gair murdaf ghazal ko anjaam dene ki koshish ki hai... behar: 122 122 122 122 bataayega zuroor ki koshish kaisi rahi aur galati ko bhi nazar aNdaaz mat kijiyega...aapki rae ka muntazir.... dikhaayee na deta, sunaayee na deta vo ulfat ki baateN, vo mausam suhaane bharam nikle saare khushi ke khazaane kaha kis ne kya kya, nahiN yaad ab to na ilzaam dena, haiN qisse puraane thi hasrat badi ke ho ik ghar bhi apna haiN qismat meN apni faqat ye viraane dikhaayee na deta, sunaaye na deta sitamgar ke jaane kahaN haiN thikaane juda mujhse hai to, khafa bhi to hoga tasavvur meN rehta hai dil jo jalaane hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane uthaayee qalam 'mast' hai kis liye ab likhe jo taraane, kise haiN sunaane Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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17th August 2011, 04:53 AM
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aadaab waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah sahab chupey rustam nikley kamaal kighazal laaye hain aap kaafee arsa baad aap ko parha alagta ahai ki khaas mehnat ki gayee hai is ghazal pe aor kamaal hai ki kamaal darjey ki fikr aayee hai chaonkaaney waale ashaar se gundhee is ghazal pe hazaar daad |
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17th August 2011, 08:14 AM
vo ulfat ki baateN, vo mausam suhaane
bharam nikle saare khushi ke khazaane dikhaayee na deta, sunaaye na deta sitamgar ke jaane kahaN haiN thikaane hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane Bahut Sundar ... Bahut Umdaa ... Vikram Sahab !  Behad Tarannum ... Shaandaar Bayaani Aur Adaayegi Ne Ghazal Ko Aur Bhi Khoobsurat Banaa Diyaa ... Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad Qubuul KareN ... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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24th October 2011, 02:24 PM
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24th October 2011, 02:25 PM
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24th October 2011, 07:39 PM
excellent mast,
hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं |
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25th October 2011, 12:21 AM
Waah ! Vikram ji kya dahakti huwee ghazal kahi hai. Soz e gham ke sholon ko padhne waale ke haath mein rakh diya ho jaise. Daad qabool farmayein.
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1st November 2011, 11:49 AM
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1st November 2011, 11:58 AM
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mere kalam ko padhne aur pasaNd karne ka bahut bahut shukriya.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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1st November 2011, 12:24 PM
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2nd November 2011, 11:26 AM
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haaN aap sahi keh rahe haiN aaj kal waqt ki taNgi chal rahi hai...yada kada hi aa pata huN...lekin dil meN hamesha rehta hai ki sdc pe chala jaye.... tareef ka bahut bahut shukriya janaab....aapka ise gaane ko dil kiya to mere liye isse achhi baat aur kya ho sakti hai...bahut bahut shukriya bhai... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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2nd November 2011, 01:26 PM
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simply wow... juda mujhse hai to, khafa bhi to hoga tasavvur meN rehta hai dil jo jalaane hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane |
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2nd November 2011, 01:35 PM
Vikram bhaa'ii:
namaste! aapka andaaz-e-bayaan mujhe hameShaa se hi pasand aataa rahaa haii.. dil-kaSh koShiSh ke liye dil se DheroN saarii daad!! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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2nd November 2011, 06:27 PM
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Dher saare daad qabul kareiN Ashirvaad ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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3rd November 2011, 09:51 AM
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3rd November 2011, 09:54 AM
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kaise haiN aap..? mera andaaz-e-byaan pasaNd karna aapka badappan hai..varna maiN kisi layaq nahi huN.... aapki daad sar-maathe bhai...bahut bahut shukriya.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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3rd November 2011, 09:57 AM
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Behad khoob sahab - aapki is nazm ne kafi puraane tarz zinda kar diye.. Yunhi likhte rahiYeGaa.. -aapka apna Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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3rd November 2011, 11:32 AM
hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa
bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane kyaa sher hai vikram bhayee bahut khoob... bahut pasand aayaa .... adaygi... khyaal.... sab betreen ... |
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3rd November 2011, 09:15 PM
Ghazal ho to aysee ho, ke perhne waala kho jaaye,
Ghayr mumkin jo lagta ho, aysaa wo kaam ho jaaye! Vikramjethi Sahab ye toota_phoota shayr aapki nazar, yehi dil mein aaya jo ye nihaayati ustaadana kalaam nazr say guzra! Daad paysh_e_qidmat hai! Thanks Ahmad |
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3rd November 2011, 09:58 PM
Vikram saheb aadaab,namaste aur SSA
kya khoob Ghazal kahi hai bhai, kya kehne! in motiyoN ke daanoN ko maala meiN perone meiN jo mehnat aapne ki hai voh saaf zaahir hai, meri mubarakbaad qabuul kijiye rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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3rd November 2011, 11:36 PM
vo ulfat ki baateN, vo mausam suhaane
bharam nikle saare khushi ke khazaane kaha kis ne kya kya, nahiN yaad ab to na ilzaam dena, haiN qisse puraane bahot umda..waqai.. thi hasrat badi ke ho ik ghar bhi apna haiN qismat meN apni faqat ye viraane acha hai dikhaayee na deta, sunaaye na deta sitamgar ke jaane kahaN haiN thikaane hmm.. juda mujhse hai to, khafa bhi to hoga tasavvur meN rehta hai dil jo jalaane yeh sher khula nahi mujhpar.. rabt nazar nahi aa raha donoeN misro meiN ..yeh meri kam ilmi hi hai shayad. hai ik aaina bhi, mere ghar meN aisa bulaata hai mujhko mujhi se milaane haasil-e-ghazal..waah..yeh "aaina" shabd par sher bahot sooratoeN mein padh chuke hai..unme se mujhe bahot kam sher pasand aaye hai..lekin aapka yeh sher bahot pasand aaya.. uski wajah yeh hai "bulaata hai mujhko" uthaayee qalam 'mast' hai kis liye ab likhe jo taraane, kise haiN sunaane acha hai.. vikram bhai..daad hi daad...bahot lyrical ghazal hai..definetely one of your best creation so far.. god bless aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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6th November 2011, 05:03 PM
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6th November 2011, 05:05 PM
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6th November 2011, 05:07 PM
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6th November 2011, 05:13 PM
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is parivaar meN aapka istaqbaal karta huN, khushaamdeed.... janaab aapka sher koi toota phoota sher nahi hai, ye to mere dil ke bahut kareeb hai...lekin yaqeen maaniye maiN is sher ke layaq bilkul nahi huN...balki bahut hi kam ilm huN...lekin talabgaar zaroor huN... aapni itni tareef kar di ki maiN waqai meN sharmindagi mehsoos kar raha huN...bahut bahut shukriya saheb... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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9th November 2011, 04:20 PM
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kaise haiN aap? kya kahuN janaab, pehli baat to ye ki maiN aap ka bahut bada fan huN... dusari baat ye ki aapse tareef mil gayee aur kuchh bhi nahi chaahiye is na cheez ko...aap ne sach meN rula diya...bahut bahut shukriya janaab...bahut bahut shukriya... mukhlis, vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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13th November 2011, 06:35 PM
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jo sher aap par khul nahiN paaya...vo aapki kam ilmi nahi janaab, vo meri peshkash ki kami samjheN...baharhaal, usme ye kehne ki koshish ki thi ki jo mere dil meN rehta hai vo mujhse door rah kar mujhse yaqeenan khafa hoga kyuNki jis tarha duuri se mera dil jalta hai uska bhi jalta hoga.... daad ke liye bahut bahut shukriya saheb... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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12th August 2023, 08:42 PM
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aadaab, aaj ek arse ke baad yahan ka rukh kiya to lava ki peechhe to jannat chhod aaya hu, aaya that to haazri dena lazim that...bahut shukriya aap sabka... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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