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Koshish ki hai................... - 28th May 2010, 12:11 PM

Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................

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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai

Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai

Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai

Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai

Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai

Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai

Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai


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Bohat Bohat Bohat he behtarni likha hai apne, Is tarah likhte rahiyega mustakbil apka hai us roshan kariye apni kalam se....

Keep up the good work your friend..


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Frnds,
fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................

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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai

Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai

Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai

Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai

Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai

Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai

Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai

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ahsaas achhe hain par pahle sher yaani matle ko kuchh is tarah bhi likh sakte the mujhe aisa lagta hai jaroori nahi ki mai sahi hoon

"Apne jazbaaton ko samjhaane ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baaton se lubhaane ki koshish ki hai"

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28th May 2010, 01:12 PM

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Bohat Bohat Bohat he behtarni likha hai apne, Is tarah likhte rahiyega mustakbil apka hai us roshan kariye apni kalam se....

Keep up the good work your friend..
Mujhe padhne ka aur ehsaaso ko smjhne ka bahut bahut Shukriya Tausif ji........


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kavitaa jee
radhe radhe

ahsaas achhe hain par pahle sher yaani matle ko kuchh is tarah bhi likh sakte the mujhe aisa lagta hai jaroori nahi ki mai sahi hoon

"Apne jazbaaton ko samjhaane ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baaton se lubhaane ki koshish ki hai"

duaon ke saath
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dis se dhanyawad aapka jo aapne mujhe padha aur saraha......waise pahle sher ko kai trah se likha ja skta tha...... aapne jo btaaya wo b khoobsurut ehsaas hai.....isi trah mera sath dete rahe.......


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28th May 2010, 04:18 PM

haan bahut hi acha likha hai, koshish hi ek ummid hai jo hame apni manjil dila pati hai.

khush rahiye hamsha duaon ke sath

vese ek baat kahu dil se mat lagana, per font size thodi kam kardo na to padhne walon aur bhi acha mehshoosh hoga.


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haan bahut hi acha likha hai, koshish hi ek ummid hai jo hame apni manjil dila pati hai.

khush rahiye hamsha duaon ke sath

vese ek baat kahu dil se mat lagana, per font size thodi kam kardo na to padhne walon aur bhi acha mehshoosh hoga.


ha ha ha ..... sahi kaha dinesh ji,,,, font size kam hi karna tha....wo jayada ho gya....ab kya karu.....????

kher aage se dhyan dungi,,,,,,,,,
dil se shukriya mujhe padhne ka...... !!!


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its ok, vese me kuch hu to nahi me bhi apki tarah ek member hu, per apne likha tha ki meri kamiya ko igonre mat karna. to muje laga ki apki gazal ki font size thodi jyada hai to keh diya. vese app gazal bahut achi likhte ho.


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its ok, vese me kuch hu to nahi me bhi apki tarah ek member hu, per apne likha tha ki meri kamiya ko igonre mat karna. to muje laga ki apki gazal ki font size thodi jyada hai to keh diya. vese app gazal bahut achi likhte ho.
Dhanyawad Dinesh ji....................


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28th May 2010, 05:12 PM

kavita ji namskaar........
Bahut hi achhi koshish,
yuN hi likhte raheN.


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kavita ji namskaar........
Bahut hi achhi koshish,
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Thanks a lot... Rajeev ji......
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28th May 2010, 07:27 PM

Nice..........Keep Trying.......I mean Koshish karti rahe.


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Kavita Ji.....aap ki yeh peshkash ... mujhe pasand aai....yunhi aur behtar koshish ke saath likhte rahen....khush rahen....

apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....




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kavita jee...

aapki ghazal ke ehsaas bahut seedhey or saaf hain..
jo dil pe asar karne me kamyaab rahe..

jaise ki abhi shuruaat hai to ghazal me nikhaar wakt ke sath hi aayega..
par ye koshish bhi bahut khoob rahi..

mujhe ghazal likhne ka koi tajurba nahi hai isliye hum jyada nhi keh sakenge

likhti rahiye aise hi

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Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai

Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai

Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai

Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai

Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai

Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai

Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai

kavita ji,

aapki koshish achhi lagi, daad qubuul kijiyega....
jaise ki aapne kaha hai ki aapki khamiyoN ko nazaraNdaaz na kiya jaye i'sliye aapko kehna chahta hooN ki jo shabd "j" ya "z" se shuru hote haiN uNke talafuz samjhne ki koshish kijiye, jaise ki aapne likha hai "jajbaato", jabki sahi hota hai...."jazbaatoN"....

aapka dost,
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Nice..........Keep Trying.......I mean Koshish karti rahe.


Dhanyawad Ghayel ji,,,,
Bilkul koshish jaari rahegi.............


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Kavita Ji.....aap ki yeh peshkash ... mujhe pasand aai....yunhi aur behtar koshish ke saath likhte rahen....khush rahen....

apna khayal rakhen...
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kavita jee...

aapki ghazal ke ehsaas bahut seedhey or saaf hain..
jo dil pe asar karne me kamyaab rahe..

jaise ki abhi shuruaat hai to ghazal me nikhaar wakt ke sath hi aayega..
par ye koshish bhi bahut khoob rahi..

mujhe ghazal likhne ka koi tajurba nahi hai isliye hum jyada nhi keh sakenge

likhti rahiye aise hi

bhagwan aapki kalam ko rawaangi de
aakash

Shukriya Aakash ji,
bilkul sahi farmaaya aapne ki gazal me nikhaar wakt ke sath hi aayega....koshish jaari rahegi.....isi trah sath dete rahe............


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Apne dard ko kalam se likhkar
Apne ehsaaso ko jtaane ki koshish ki hai

Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
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apka.

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koshish jaari rahegi...aapki duaoo ki sath chaiye.....!!!!

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Kavita jee,

Kasie hain aap? Shayad aaj aapko phelii baar padha hain... aur lagta hain meine aapki likhi hu ghazal's padh naa sakii per ab koshish karugii un sab ko padh sakugii ...


Ghazal bahut pasand aayii har sher dil ke kareeb rahe hain ...

likhtey rahe ... aur mehfil ko saajatey rahe..

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Kasie hain aap? Shayad aaj aapko phelii baar padha hain... aur lagta hain meine aapki likhi hu ghazal's padh naa sakii per ab koshish karugii un sab ko padh sakugii ...


Ghazal bahut pasand aayii har sher dil ke kareeb rahe hain ...

likhtey rahe ... aur mehfil ko saajatey rahe..

Take care

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mai abhi new hu is SDC parviar me.... maine abhi tak 2-3 gazal hi likhi hai....jayada nahi....... aapka shukriya jo aapne mujhe padha aur pasand kiya.........

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fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................

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Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai

Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai

Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai

Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai

Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Bahut achhi koshish kari hai aapne.
Kaafi achhi lagi pad kar. yun hi likhte rahiyega...



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Bahut achhi koshish kari hai aapne.
Kaafi achhi lagi pad kar. yun hi likhte rahiyega...

Jasdeep ji,

Aapka tehdil se shukriya........Aapki duaao k sath yun he likhne ki koshish jaari rahegi.....



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fir se ek koshish ke sath pesh hai meri ye koshish.......
plz meri kamiyo ko ignore mt karna.....mujhe aur behtar likhne me meri help jarur karna.....aapke comments mujhe likhne k liye prerit karte hai.......................

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Nahi jaante duniya kya smjhegi ise
Humne to mohbbat nibhane ki koshish ki hai

Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
Dard ko likhkar mitaane ki koshish ki hai

Tu mujhse door hai chaahe jitna bhi
Har waqt tere paas aane ki koshish ki hai

Nafrat se bhare tere be-dard dil me
Humne pyar badhaane ki koshish ki hai

Apne jajbaato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Aaj apni baato ko likhne ki koshish ki hai
Namaskaar Kavita jee,
kaisi ho?
Ab jyada kya,hume.N to bilkul knowledge nahi.N hai ghazal ke technical area ki.lekin ehsaaso.N ki jitni knowledge hai.............. uske hisab se bahut bahut bahut khoob likha hai........
Mujhe bhi thoDi training de dijiye apni tarah accha achha likhne ki....
aur kya kahu?
Khush Rahiye,
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Namaskaar Kavita jee,
kaisi ho?
Ab jyada kya,hume.N to bilkul knowledge nahi.N hai ghazal ke technical area ki.lekin ehsaaso.N ki jitni knowledge hai.............. uske hisab se bahut bahut bahut khoob likha hai........
Mujhe bhi thoDi training de dijiye apni tarah accha achha likhne ki....
aur kya kahu?
Khush Rahiye,
Bahut si duao.N ke sath,
Aapki Dost
ritu
Ritu ji,,,,,

Mai khud aap sabse hi seekhi hu...... jo dil me aaya wo likh diya..... choti moti galtiya ki....dosto ne smjhaaya aur maine sudhar laane ki koshish ki hai bs....aapka shukriya jo aapko meri ye koshish pasand aai......

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Dard ko seene me chupana hai mushkil
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Yeh sher bohat pasand aaya mujhe kavita jii..

ghazal meiN thodi bohat technical faults haiN...I am sure ahista ahista aap inhe sudhar lengi......

yuhi likhti rahiye...................





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Yeh sher bohat pasand aaya mujhe kavita jii..

ghazal meiN thodi bohat technical faults haiN...I am sure ahista ahista aap inhe sudhar lengi......

yuhi likhti rahiye...................
Shukriya Zainy ji,,,,
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