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Ghazal: ab Zindagee meiN meri koee KhwaahiSheN baaQee nahiiN...! |
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Ghazal: ab Zindagee meiN meri koee KhwaahiSheN baaQee nahiiN...! -
11th January 2013, 11:35 PM
Mere Pyaare dostoN: Namaskaar aur Aadaab !! maiN haaZir huuN bazm meiN apnii aik taazaah Ghazal ko lekar... Ghazal meiN pehlii baar maiN apnaa aik alag hi taKhallus istemaal karne jaa rahaa huuN... "JOSH".. naye taKhallus ke saath yeh merii pehli Ghazal haii to mujhe baDii KhuShii bhee ho rahiiN haii... ees ke liye maiN tah-e-dil se "maikasH" bhaiyaa ka ShukraGuzaar huuN... mere liye KhuShkismatee kee baat hai kee "JOSH" taKhallus unhone diyaa !! warnaah maiN to soch meiN hi thaa  ... maikasH bhaiyaa aapko pareShaaN kartaa rehtaa huuN mwaafi merii pehli Ghazal naye taKhallus ke saath aapke naam !! koShiSh karuungaa aage aur bhee mehnat karuuN... dostoN ummid kartaa huuN aapka jo pyaar aur saath milaa hai aage bhee yuuNhi miltaa rahengaa... aur aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayegee.. mulA'iizaa farmaa'iiyeN...!************************************** beh'r hai:2212 / 2212 / 2212 / 2212 ************************************** ab Zindagee meiN meri koee KhwaahiSheN baaQee nahiiN jiss ke liye thee KhwaahiSheN wo lauT ke aayee nahiiN Ye pyaar kyaa haii cheez ees meiN bhalaa kyaa baat haii? maiN faasalaa raKhtaa huN ke ees sey mi’ree yaaree nahiiN Ke dosatoN ne thaa kahaa tuu pyaar karnaa naa kabhee Jab vaar ye kartaa hai to jaataa kabhee Khaalee nahiiN wo chaahatee hongee mujhe Khud se bhi zyaadaaH haii yaqeeN Shaayad tabhee ussne mi’ree kasmeN kabhee Khaayee nahiiN maiN huuN safar wo jiss meiN saaye bhee nahiiN aate naZar Khud humsafar huuN Khud hi kaa meraa ko’ee saathee nahiiN Ye Zindagee ik raaz haii meeThaa bhi haii kaDwaa bhi haii dil se jiyo to baat kya!! par dil hi to raaZee nahiiN Uljhaa nahiiN haaraa nahiiN Shikwaa nahiiN taNhaa nahiiN maiN “JOSH” huuN maayoos ho kar Zindagee kaaTee nahiiN haii joSh meiN to joSh kee baateN nah kar ey! “JOSH” tuu Shaayar hai tuu Shaayar hi reh daryaa hai tuu maajhee nahiiN ************************************** |
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12th January 2013, 02:27 AM
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Aadab Dhaval Bhai, Kaise haiN Aap? Aap ko padhna hamesha hi accha lagta hai... Naya taKhallus mubarak ho... Neeche ke chand ashaar dil ke kareeb rahe... Ye Zindagee ik raaz haii meeThaa bhi haii kaDwaa bhi haii dil se jiyo to baat kya!! par dil hi to raaZee nahiiN wo chaahatee hongee mujhe Khud se bhi zyaadaaH haii yaqeeN Shaayad tabhee ussne mi’ree kasmeN kabhee Khaayee nahiiN haii joSh meiN to joSh kee baateN nah kar ey! “JOSH” tuu Shaayar hai tuu Shaayar hi reh daryaa hai tuu maajhee nahiiN Dili daad kubool kare... Duaon ke saath Ijazat, Abrar.  Hum to pattharon se mohabbat ka hunar rakhte hain, Tum to phir bhi moom ho "Abrar" ke gale lag kar pighal jaoge... |
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12th January 2013, 07:01 AM
bahot acche khayaal
khoobsurat ghazal .................................................. ........ |
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12th January 2013, 01:07 PM
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waahhh dhaval bhai... chaa gaye... kamaal kii ghazal lekar aaye hain aap is baar.... Uljhaa nahiiN haaraa nahiiN Shikwaa nahiiN taNhaa nahiiN maiN “JOSH” huuN maayoos ho kar Zindagee kaaTee nahiiN is sher ki jitni tareef ki jaae wo kam hai... bahot acchi koshish ke liye daad haazir hai bhai.... likhte raho... khush raho... Shaad... |
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12th January 2013, 06:52 PM
Dhaval miyaaN namaste
bhai kamaal ki Ghazal hui hai, bohat hi khoob, Sameer bhai ki baat se maiN bhi sehmat huuN "chaa gaye" ustaad ho gaye ho miyaaN  Ghazal par dilii mubarakbaad haazir hai aur taKhallus ka credit mujhe nahiiN jaata, aapki mohabbat hai jo aisa samajhte haiNek aalaa Ghazal mujh nachiiz ke naam karne aur aapke khuloos ka iNtehaayi shukurguzaar alag se huuN aapki agli Ghazal ka besabr'ii se iNtezaar rahega Jai Shree Krishna maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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12th January 2013, 09:42 PM
Josh ji namaskaar
aapki tazza tareeN gazal padi behad acchi lagi...vakai bahut JOSH meiN likhi hai tabhi to gazal ka har sher aik se badkar aik hai...dil se mubarakbaad hazir hai kabool karo ji....par mere chottu ko kahiN kho mat dena...muje apna chottu bahut aziz hai...JOSH ka suwagat hai dil se god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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13th January 2013, 12:00 PM
Jite rahiye dhaval bhai ..
Nihaytii khoohsoorat ghazal kahi aapne .. maza aa gaya parh ke ... kucu ashaar to ghazab ka andaaz samete hue the Ke dosatoN ne thaa kahaa tuu pyaar karnaa naa kabhee Jab vaar ye kartaa hai to jaataa kabhee Khaalee nahiiN wo chaahatee hongee mujhe Khud se bhi zyaadaaH haii yaqeeN Shaayad tabhee ussne mi’ree kasmeN kabhee Khaayee nahiiN Ye Zindagee ik raaz haii meeThaa bhi haii kaDwaa bhi haii dil se jiyo to baat kya!! par dil hi to raaZee nahiiN Uljhaa nahiiN haaraa nahiiN Shikwaa nahiiN taNhaa nahiiN maiN “JOSH” huuN maayoos ho kar Zindagee kaaTee nahiiN haii joSh meiN to joSh kee baateN nah kar ey! “JOSH” tuu Shaayar hai tuu Shaayar hi reh daryaa hai tuu maajhee nahiiN Kya kahne ..naye josh aur naye andaaz ko humara sallaam.. inshaallah aur achha likhiye Bahut achhe kallam par daad humaari jaanib se bhi qubool farmaaeiN Apna khyaal rakhiye Khush rahiye Shaayar hai tuu Shaayar hi reh daryaa hai tuu maajhee nahiiN |
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13th January 2013, 01:13 PM
laajawaab ghazal ...............................................
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17th January 2013, 06:35 PM
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namaste! aapki daad sar'aaNKhoN par mere bhaii... yuuNhi saath dete rahiye aage bhee khuSh rahiye...apnaa khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 06:39 PM
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namaste! ShuKriyaah Ghazal ko pasaNd karne ke liye KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKhen duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 07:04 PM
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namaste! aap sab kaa saath miltaa hai khushii hotee hai.... aage bhee saath dete rahiyengaa.. KhuSh rahiye,,,, apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 09:45 PM
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maikasH bhaiyaa: Pranaam... SSA Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liiye maiN aapka tah-e-dil se ShuKraGuzaar huuN... aur taKhallus ke liye bhee merii aapse yahee darKhaast haii ki aap yuuNhi saath raheN... aage aur bhee mehnat zaaree rahegee merii... apnaa khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheNJai shree kriShnaa..! duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 09:48 PM
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Pranaam ab aap JOSH JI keh kar merii KhiNchaaii kar raheN haii... taKhallus nayaa hai maiN to wahii ka wahii huuN pooraanaa  aur mujhe to dil meiN jaGah milii hai to Kho jaane ka Dar kaisaa ?? aapkaa aaShirwad saath raheN hameShaa yahee chaahataa huuN... Ghazal pasaNd aayii aapko jaan kar bahot hi KhuShii huii mujheKhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 09:52 PM
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namaste! Ghazal ke baare meiN aapse bahot kuChh seeKhne ko milaa... aapne jo baat seeKhaaii wo dil ko Chhu gayii aur ek dam saheeh baat kahii thee aapne... maiN koShiSh karuungaa aage aur bhee behtar tareeQe se liKh sakuuN... aap aise hi saath dete rahiyengaa ees safar meiN... aapki daad dil se QabUl haii ! KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 09:53 PM
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namaste! Shukriyaah aapne apnaa Qeemtee waQt merii Ghazal ko diyaa... paDhte raheN aage bhee KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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17th January 2013, 11:34 PM
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Naya takhallus mubarak ho..... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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18th January 2013, 02:28 PM
Dear dhaval,
aaj aapki es ghazal ko padhaker bahut hi khushi huyi.. beshak ek achchhe shayr ke gun aap mein aa gaye hain. aapne jo baate likhi apani sher ke madhyam se bahut hi kabile tarif hain. her ek sher apane aap mein lajvaab hai. kis kis sher ki tarif karu aur kis ko chhodu... so badhayi aapke 'josh' ke liye.. shubhkamnao sahit apaka Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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6th February 2013, 06:07 PM
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namaste!ShuKriyaah aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayiiN... saath dete rahiye aage aur bhee mehnat zaaree rahengii KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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Pranaam aapkaa merii Ghazal par aanaa mere liye bahot hi KhuShii kee baat haii... mujhe aaj bhee yaad hai ki jab maiN nayaa nayaa thaa ees pariwaar meiN tab aapka ek PM aayaa thaa .. jiss mein kis tarah liKheN usski jaankaaree thee.. kyuuNki uss waQt mujhe kuChh bhee ilm nahiiN thaa... Shayri lafz kyaa hotaa hai wo maiN jaantaa nahiiN thaa.. aapko merii Ghazal pasaNd aayiiN bahot achChhaa lagaa... saath dete rahiyengaa aage bhee KhuSh rahiye... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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21st November 2014, 11:42 PM
ab Zindagee meiN meri koee KhwaahiSheN baaQee nahiiN
jiss ke liye thee KhwaahiSheN wo lauT ke aayee nahiiN Ke dosatoN ne thaa kahaa tuu pyaar karnaa naa kabhee Jab vaar ye kartaa hai to jaataa kabhee Khaalee nahiiN Uljhaa nahiiN haaraa nahiiN Shikwaa nahiiN taNhaa nahiiN maiN “JOSH” huuN maayoos ho kar Zindagee kaaTee nahiiN very nice chotu bohat improvement agaye hai ab to ye ashaar bht ache lage khush raho yunhi likhte raho apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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24th November 2014, 08:54 PM
Maani didi
Salaam Aapko meri koshish par dekh kar bahot hi khushi huii....baa yuunhi aage bhee padhte rahiyega Khush rahiye....apnaa khayaal rakhen Duaaon ke saath ijaazat Aapka Dhaval |
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11th December 2014, 09:52 PM
walaikum chotu khush raho aur yunhi likhte raho
apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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12th December 2014, 01:05 PM
Wah re mere chhotu kyaa addaa hai kyaa byaanii hai..tum to ustaad ho gye ho bhai...sach much chhaa gye ho...bhut der se reply kar raha hoo.n so muaaf kar dena lakin bhut behtreen...Raj..
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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19th December 2014, 11:11 PM
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Pranaam Aapko meri koshish par dekh kar hamesha hi khushi hoti haii..bas saath dete rahiye aage bhi Aapka Chhotu |
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