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Love Vo Dil Dukhanse Se Baaz Aate Nahi - 18th April 2009, 01:58 PM
Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

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18th April 2009, 02:55 PM
pari dear..

aapki taareef karne ke liye mere pas shabad hi nhi hain...

ab kya kahun main..itna acha likhti ho...

humein bhi kuch tips do dear...

kya khoob likha hai tumne...
padhke bahut hi acha laga...

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

aise hi likhti raho...

khuda tumhe buri najar se bachaaye...

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Post 18th April 2009, 04:11 PM
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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi

Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi
So super dear, Kafi dardile ahsas hai dil ki gahrai se likhe lagte hai, yunhi likhti raho.
Mehfile sajati raho. Kafi achche sher hai Har sher dil ke gum ka izhar karta hai.

Likhti raho

Khoosh raho.


Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi
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bhut khoob praneeta ji.............................

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18th April 2009, 06:07 PM
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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi


Hey Pari,


Bahut badiya dear... aap ke yeh 2 sher hume bahut pasnd aaye..
aage bhi yuh hi likhate rahiye.. Khuda aap ki Qalam pe yu meharbaan ho..

god bless u



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hume chhod kar woh kisi aur ko aapnaye

Bas yahi gunaah tha hummara ishQ mein ke
Hum unhe Mohabbat mein jhkam nahi de paye..


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Love thnx 4 ur friendship - 20th April 2009, 02:07 PM
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pari dear..

aapki taareef karne ke liye mere pas shabad hi nhi hain...

ab kya kahun main..itna acha likhti ho...

humein bhi kuch tips do dear...

kya khoob likha hai tumne...
padhke bahut hi acha laga...

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

aise hi likhti raho...

khuda tumhe buri najar se bachaaye...

apna khayal rakhna..
shukriya vicky....aap saath hai toh sab asaan hai
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Love dil se shukriya - 20th April 2009, 02:08 PM
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So super dear, Kafi dardile ahsas hai dil ki gahrai se likhe lagte hai, yunhi likhti raho.
Mehfile sajati raho. Kafi achche sher hai Har sher dil ke gum ka izhar karta hai.

Likhti raho

Khoosh raho.


Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard

Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi
dil khush hua yeh jaan kar ki aap ko yeh pasand aaya....yuhi saath banaye rakhiyen
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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi
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Hey Pari,


Bahut badiya dear... aap ke yeh 2 sher hume bahut pasnd aaye..
aage bhi yuh hi likhate rahiye.. Khuda aap ki Qalam pe yu meharbaan ho..

god bless u



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Bas yahi gunaah tha hummara ishQ mein ke
Hum unhe Mohabbat mein jhkam nahi de paye..


shukriya Omi ji....aap ne apna waqt nikaal kar meri poetry ko padhi aur reply bhi kiya
thnx a lot
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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

bahot khoob praneeta ji....mujhe aapke jazbaat pasand aaye..unhi likhte rahiye..khush rahiye...yeh lines behad pasand aayi:

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

wah...kya baat hai...

god bless
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bahot khoob praneeta ji....mujhe aapke jazbaat pasand aaye..unhi likhte rahiye..khush rahiye...yeh lines behad pasand aayi:

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

wah...kya baat hai...

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tumhari ghazal mein dard saaf nazar aarahi hai
god tumhe har dard se door rakhe ....
younhi likhte raho

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Dear Parneeta........bahut accha likha hai tumne, vaise to sabhi sher acche lage, par yeh 2 sher khaas lage:

Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

bahut khoob.......!

mujhe yakeen hai tum es se kahin jayada behtar likh sakti ho....mujhe us din ka intzzar hai aur jaanti hoon tumhe bhi hai woh din jaldi hi aayega aisa mujhe yakeeN hai.

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Hi Parneeta ji

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Dear Parneeta........bahut accha likha hai tumne, vaise to sabhi sher acche lage, par yeh 2 sher khaas lage:

Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

bahut khoob.......!

mujhe yakeen hai tum es se kahin jayada behtar likh sakti ho....mujhe us din ka intzzar hai aur jaanti hoon tumhe bhi hai woh din jaldi hi aayega aisa mujhe yakeeN hai.

pyar aur duao.n ke saath
diii
shukriya dii aap ne mere poetry par comment kiya
mujhe besabri se ussi din ka intezaar hai
aap ka saath raha toh beshak vo din jald hi aayega
thnx 4 replying to this post
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Aap ki yeh dard se bharpoor ghazal phar ka dil bhi ghamgeen ho gaya...

Boht hi zaberdast ..............

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Wow ... its awesome!!!!!!

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hi Mands dear

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pari,
ghazal to apki bohat achi hai but....
is ghazal mein kuch ilfaz edit nahin hain jinki wajah se ghazal bhi adhuri hai, khud jab parho gi dobara to apko andaza ho jayega,
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Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
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Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi
Praneeta jii,

Bahut khoob likha hai aur khaas taur pe,

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

bahut pasand aaya....

Aise hi likhti rahiye...

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Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi
Praneeta Ji....aapne is Ghazal mai Zindgi ka saara dard Utaar diya....aisa laga mujhe padhkar......par main chaahata hu.....in lafzo jaisa aapke jeevan mai kabhi na ho...aap hamesha khush rahe....

Ghazal ki rachna aapne bahut khub ki hai......har ashaar dil ko rula ke jaa raha hai....very nice creation........superB........

har ashaar ko dil se daad....hazeer hai....

aise hi likhte rahiey...
khush rahiye.....
apna khayal rakhiyega....
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Bohat acche

Har sher naya sa lagta hai .. andaaz pasand aaya mujhe.. maqte maiN koi dum nahi hai .. na alfaazi na khyaali... baaki ghazal khoob hui hai .. mujhe jo quote kiya .. bohat pasand aaya ...

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Bohat khoobsurat peshkash Pareenita jee, dad kabool kare.

Mere khayaal se makhte me koi meharbaa.N ki jagah kaiee meharbaa.N hona

chahiye.

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Aap ki yeh dard se bharpoor ghazal phar ka dil bhi ghamgeen ho gaya...

Boht hi zaberdast ..............

Shukriya dost

Ghazal mein gham toh bhapoor hai par asha hai ki issay padh kar aap udaas nahi hue honge.
Darasal ghamon par likh kar main apna gham kam karne ki koshish karti hun aur jo kuch hadh tak kam hoti bhi hai
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ghazal to apki bohat achi hai but....
is ghazal mein kuch ilfaz edit nahin hain jinki wajah se ghazal bhi adhuri hai, khud jab parho gi dobara to apko andaza ho jayega,
but complete hoti to ziada maza aata parhne mein
tc.
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Praneeta jii,

Bahut khoob likha hai aur khaas taur pe,

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

bahut pasand aaya....

Aise hi likhti rahiye...

Take care,
Vikram
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