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Payaar Ka Bhavishya (little Bro Diggaj Ki Farmahish Par) -
26th March 2006, 10:02 AM
aaj fir se main isaq mai haazir hoon
mere sweet bro diggaj ne kaha didi aap dard ki shajaadi ho kuch isaq mai likho aur ek topic diya ( pyaar ka bhwishya ) par kuch bhi nahi likh paayi pichle kaee dino kafi udasi mai niakale aaj kuch likhne ki koshish kar rahi hoon dekhe n aur bataye ki mere sweet diggau ki farmahish puri kar paayi ki nahi Kuch samaa madhosh tha , aur hawa me josh tha Fiza me mogre ki khushbu bikhari aankhon ki guftagun kuchh aur nikhari pyaar ka faila tha jaadu ,tumko paane ki justzoo Saath ke ehasaas ki siharan, kampata hua ye badan Jaane aankhen kyu band thi, saanese bhi kuchh mand thi Tere badan ki garmi se ,meri man mai pighlan thi kaan mai tum kaho kuch gun gunakar, umangon ki jaga do fir se ek lahar wo surilee taan aao chhere aaj fir hum aaj fir gaaye nayi taal par mera man jaise bhanware ne kaha hai phoolo se saawan ne kaha hai jhulon se dharkanon se dharkano ka sangam ho jab payalon ki chham chham baj rahi ho tab sapano ka wo aashiyana banaye hum koi phool na murjhaye wo gulistan sajaye n hum pyaar ki wadiyon me haath thaame tumhara kal raat maine har ek pal is khuwab me gujara bus yahi sapna hai ye khuwab mera poora ho koi ek pal na aaye zindgi me jo adhura ho kuchh is tarah gujar jaye pyar ka Safar ek duje mai khoye rahe n din bhar , raat bhar tum jaan lo mujhe na rahe koi rahshya hai khwahish ,aisa ho pyaar ka bhavishya shrdh 
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26th March 2006, 10:08 AM
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 »~:¤.·º`·.»WARDA«.·´º·.¤:~« *(¸.·'´(¸.·'´*¤*`'·.¸)`'·.¸)* I'm a wanderer...on the roads of life, marveling at the different plants and flowers on the way....some hurt, yet some love... ~*~Ek Nanny Si Jaan...Chotta Sa Bacha...Thas Me!~*~ |
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26th March 2006, 10:11 AM
wahhh shradhu,
pyaar ki wadiyon me haath thaame tumhara kal raat maine har ek pal is khuwab me gujara bus yahi sapna hai ye khuwab mera poora ho koi ek pal na aaye zindgi me jo adhura ho kuchh is tarah gujar jaye pyar ka Safar ek duje mai khoye rahe n din bhar , raat bhar tum jaan lo mujhe na rahe koi rahshya hai khwahish ,aisa ho pyaar ka bhavishya Bahut khoob... achha laga isse parh ke, beautiful expression. arre udaas na raho, aaise hi pyaara pyaara achha sa likhti raho aur khush raho, ok? take care! |
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26th March 2006, 11:09 AM
shrdh didi sach mein buhut hi pyara likha hai aapne padh kar buhut acha laga mujhe aapka andaaz buhut acha laga yoon hi likhti rahiyega
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Ju PaL mIlE uSs PaL kO jEe lO sHaYaD kAl Ho Na Ho...... love is seeing yourself in someone's eyes and finding yourself in somebody's heart!!!!!(*-*) (¨`·.·´¨) Always `·.¸(¨`·.·´¨) Keep (¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´ Smiling! `·.¸.·´ ITS STATE OF MIND..... |
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Re: Payaar Ka Bhavishya (little Bro Diggaj Ki Farmahish Par) -
26th March 2006, 11:59 AM
Main kuch naa keh paunga
Tarif k liye sabad kaha se lau ab...itna acha hai k bata nahi sakta... main to janta hi tha aap acha likhengi isliye ab dusro ko padhne dijiye Apka Diggaj Quote:
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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26th March 2006, 01:19 PM
bahut khoob soorat baat kahee hai sharddha tum ne bahut komal se khwab bahut komal se rishte bahut sundar see kalpna
sara hunar tumhara is kavita main dikhata hai tumhara man jab likhta hai bahut sundar likhta hai Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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26th March 2006, 01:29 PM
diggaj mujhe pata tha tum pyar ka bhavisya talash rahe hp par tumahree talash main tumhre sath nahe chala. ab parho
pyar kee talash main tumahre sath nahee chala kis disha jayoon koyee sira nahee mila meree rah aur trhee tumhree raah aur kisee aur disha main tha duniya ka kafila kis disha jayoon koyee sira nahee mila pyar ke pawan ghayal hain rooh se khoon ris raha hai pyar ahankar ke paton main bekasoor pis raha hai ahankar hai abhiman hai aur kabhee kabhee apman hai ye hee bas aj pyar ka vartman hai is vartman se kaun sa bhawishy ayega ye pyar yahan se kis rah jayega main janata to zaroor batata main janta to geet banata par abhee kuch nahee kahata main maun hoon nahee janata pyar kya hai bhavisya kya hai main kaun hoon abhee kuch nahee kahata main maun hoon Anil kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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Re: diggaj ke liye -
26th March 2006, 01:36 PM
Bhai bilkul sahi
Shrddha di ne jo kaha wo maine socha tha aur aapne ne kaha wo main aaj keh raha hu Shukriyah anil bhai aur shrddha di apka Diggaj Quote:
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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Re: Payaar Ka Bhavishya (little Bro Diggaj Ki Farmahish Par) -
26th March 2006, 05:02 PM
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koi ek pal na aaye zindgi me jo adhura ho aameen apka sapna jarur such ho yahi dua hai. acha likha hai apne . yuhi bas isq mein likhte rahna aur khush rahna. sakhi with love शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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27th March 2006, 06:32 AM
Shrdha ji
Nicely written.. aap apni koshish mein kamyab ho gayi hain... aur isse saaf jahir hota hai... insaan apne andar kyun kitne hi dard na chipa kar betha ho... pyaar uske dil mein sada rehta hai... and ur poetry is so innocent so romantic.. very well written... Take Care Rohin |
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bahot khub -
27th March 2006, 09:40 AM
DEAR SHARADHA
BAS AISE HI MUSUKARA KAR KHWAB BUNTI TAHO HUM SAB KI DUA HAI KI PYAAR KA BHAWISHYA KAMYAB AUR UJALA RAHEIN. |
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27th March 2006, 09:59 AM
hi shradhhu
hmmmmmmmmm...................... bahut din baad shayri-e-ishq mai nazar aayi ho....... Koi khaash baat hai to hame bhi bataao................ Kuchh hamaari farmaayish pe bhi likh diya karo.......... Achha hai tumhare pyaar ka bhavishya................. Nice 1 yaar......... May god bless and keep ur future of love always bright take care............ wid regards........ ur manu................. |
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27th March 2006, 10:58 AM
Hi Diggaj ji,
How r u Diggaj ji !! Thanks for making this request with Shraddha. I was also willing to say same thing to Shraddha, but ye soch kar choop ho jata tha ki being an all rounder is really a difficult task, kyunki jahan tak mujhe pata hai, veer rush, vatsalya rash, vigrah rash, saundrya rash, in sabo ke kawi alag-alag rahe hai. Or har ek ki pakar kisi khas “rash”/section me hi rahi hai, chahey wo Dinkar ho ya Nirala !!! lekin aapney Shraddha ji se ye request ki, or unhoney itna sundar likha, apne ahley prayas me hi, and it all happens because of you ( ur request )Diggaj. Humey Shraddha ji ka ek naya chehra , ek nayi soch dekhney ko mila aaj aapki wajah se. so, thansk again Diggaj ji !! Thanks, Rohit here Hi Shraddha, It’s really nice!! I really get surprised to see that you are also having command on this segment of poetry. Aaj tumhare is naue thoughts ko dekh kar bahut hi achchh laga. It’s really different. Or apney pahley prayas me hi itna sunder likhna, waqai kaafi sarahniye hai Shraddha. Lekin abhi v thodi si kami hai, sabdo mey, thoughts me wo pakad nahi hai, jo pahley ki rachnow me hua karti thi, lekin haan agar difference ki baat Karen to ye bahut hi kam hai, tum 100% to nahi lekin uskey bahut karib 80-85% tak safal rahi ho. Or apney pahley praya me hi es height ko pa lena apne aap mey more than 100% hai Shraddha ji !! Ek baat or jo mujhe es kavita me lagi wo ye ki, ki iska pehla pacch, matlab 1st paragraph thoda sa kamjor hai, hala ki aapney baaten saari kahi hai, thoughts v bahut hi achchhe the, lekin ek sabdo ki pakad, unka combination jo kahte hai na, waha per thodi si kami rah gayi hai, ye thoda descriptive sa ho gaya hai( or mera manana hai ki agar apni baton ko kam se kam sabdo mey, concise way me kaha jay to wo thoda jayada impressive hota hai, I might be wrong shraddha.), ekin agar wahi eska 2nd paragraph dekehen, to bus ismey aapki wahi pahley wali jhalak, pakad dikhti hai :-> sapano ka wo aashiyana banaye hum koi phool na murjhaye wo gulistan sajayen hum, pyaar ki wadiyon me haath thaame tumhara kal raat maine har ek pal is khuwab me gujara. bus yahi sapna hai ye khuwab mera poora ho koi ek pal na aaye zindgi me jo adhura ho. kuchh is tarah gujar jaye pyar ka Safar ek duje mai khoye rahen din bhar , raat bhar ( din-bhar, raat bhar ki jagah sayad “har pal” use karte to …..…) its a real beauty !!!! Lekin fri v , agar over all dekha jaye , to its gr8 Shraddha ji. Bahut khoob !!!! Diggaj ji has asked for an Experiment and i don’t have any hesitation to say that you are very close to the 100% success!! Its my personal opinion yaar, as u know that I m not poet/shyare by profession, I m from IT sector, so I might be having little understanding abt it, and so I be wrong !! but yes, it’s a good , really good …. Ek baar pada hai..bar-bar padney ki ichchha hai……..Ha…….ha………Ha…………………. Likhte Rahiye Shraddha ji…. Thanks Diggaj !! Thanks Shraddha !! Rohit Here |
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27th March 2006, 02:02 PM
shardh apki shayri pad ke sarir main jaan aya gayi
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27th March 2006, 02:15 PM
dd apne bahut acha likha hai
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27th March 2006, 07:14 PM
sweets...
bahut khoob pyar ka bhavishya bahut hi badhiya likha aapne/.. ~*~ EK SHAYAR Anjaan~*~ 
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27th March 2006, 07:22 PM
hi shrdha di
bahut hi pyaari khubsurat si poem hai i like it bahut achha likha hai aapney isi tarah likhti rahiyega bye tc |
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27th March 2006, 07:22 PM
wow kya baat hai yaha log milkar bhi likhte hai accha laga yeh dekhkar
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18th April 2006, 09:35 AM
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aap aayi bahar aayi ,tumhe dekh kar mukaan chayi aati raha karo hum bhi tumhe apni post par dekh kar chane ke jhadh par chadh jate hai heheehehhe kidding love shrdh
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18th April 2006, 09:38 AM
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aapko yaha dekhkar bhaut kushi hui umeed hai aap aise hi kabhi kabhi housla badhati rahengi love shrdh
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achha jeeeeeeee sachhi hahahahaha shrdh
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18th April 2006, 09:42 AM
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aap shuru se hi saath rahe hain isi tarah aage bhi aapki ray milti rahegi umeed mai shrdh
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18th April 2006, 10:24 AM
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aapko yaha dekhkar dil ko kitni kushi hui ye hum bata nahi sakte kaisi hain aap? bahut dino mai aati ho aisa kyu aati raha karo sab missing sa rahata hai love u shrdh
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18th April 2006, 10:27 AM
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bus inhi khwabon ke sahare duniya chal rahi hai aur hum kuch pal muskra lete hai aap aayi achhha laga aati rahiyega shrdh
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18th April 2006, 10:39 AM
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aap aayi achha laga jaankar ki aapko pasand aayi meri ye chhoti si koshish keep coming shrdh
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