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Kismat Bhi Kahaani hai...! -
7th August 2010, 12:30 AM
आदाब...
एक नयी ग़ज़ल बज़्म के नज़र कर रहा हूँ , बहर-ए-हजाज मुसम्मन अखरब मे उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से ज़रूर नवाजेंगे... इसी बहर मैं एक मशहूर गीत है,.. साथ गुनगुना के देखिएगा शायद अच्छा लगे...
टूटे हुए ख्वाबों ने, हमको ये सिखाया है...
दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
बहर गिनती मे :- 221 1222 221 1222
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क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
अब टूट चुके मेरे, अरमां वो मोहब्बत के,..
उम्मीद न महफ़िल से, तन्हाई भी डसती है ,...
टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
हासिल थे 'सिफ़र' हमको, अपनों से मिले रिश्ते,...
साहिल पे जो अब डूबी, वो प्यार की कश्ती है ...
वादे तो किये थे हम, अब साथ सदा होंगे..
किस्मत भी कहानी है, हर मोड़ पे फंसती है...
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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- 07-08-2010
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In Roman:-
Aadaab….
Ek nayi ghazal bazm ke nazar kar raha huN, behar-e-hajaz musamman akhrab mai.. umeed hai aap apni aara se zaroor nawazeNge… isi behr mai ek mashoor geet hai .. sath gunguna ke dekhiyega shayad aaccha lage...
Toote hue khwaboN ne, humko ye sikhaya hai..
dil ne jise paaya tha, aaNkhoN ne gaNwaaya hai...
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Kya ishq ki hasti hai, kyuN aaNkheN barasti hai…
Ye shaam bhi tumse hi, milne ko tarasti hai…
Ab toot chuke mere, armaaN wo mohabbat ke..
Ummeed na mehfil se, tanhaai bhi dasti hai..
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Haasil the ‘sifar’ humko, apno se mile rishte..
Saahil pe jo ab doobi, wo pyaar ki kashti hai..
Waade to kiye the, hum saath sada hoNge..
Kismet bhi kahaani hai, har maud pe faNsti hai…
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Kunaal (Sifar):- 07-08-2010
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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7th August 2010, 12:49 AM
Hi Saathi ... bahot pyaara likha hai aap ne ... har ehsaas ne dil chhoo liya .. aap ka likha hammesha hi dil ke kareeb raha hai .. ye bhi aese hi hai ..
Waise aap ek raaz ki baat bataane ki taqleef uthaaye to .. aap ki badi maherbaani hogi ....heheheheh
Aap itane pyaare aur gahere shabd dil ke kis kaune se nikaal ke laate hai ... zarraa hume bhi bataaiye ... ??
Aur ye lijiye .. ye kya baat ho gayi ..Saathi ..ek to aap ki ummid par khare bhi utare ...aur aap ko apni Araa se nawaaze bhi sahi ... aur upar se uss gaane par ise gun-gunaa ke dekhe bhi sahi ..
Saathi ab ye saare kaam hum hi karenge to aap kya karenge ?? ... chaliye chaliye ab achchhe waale Saathi baniye ... aap ko padhanaa to i love it naa .. to ye kaam to hum kar hi lenge ... ab aap manaa bhi kare to bhi kar denge ..
Par gun-gunaane ka kaam aap kijiye theek hai .... ab itanaa kaam to aap kar hi sakate hai humaare liye ..ofcourse with no excuses..please..hehehhe .
Bahot pyaara likha hai aap ne ... hammesha yunhi likhate rahiye ..
Bhagwaan Ji aap ko har khushi de,
Aapki: Saathi
Jay Ambe
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Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani......
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Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai,
Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai,
Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi,
Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi.
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7th August 2010, 02:26 AM
kunaal jee,
ab toh main thak gayi hu tareef kar kar ke ..lol... ab toh reps hi dugiiii .wohi sehi rahega hai naa!!!.... ab itna aacha likhogey ... mujhe aana toh padhega hi naa ..lol...
likhtey rahe aur hamesha khush rahe ....
duaaon ke saath ijjaazaat !!!
take care
mandeep
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7th August 2010, 02:51 AM
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Awesome..........Kunal Ji !
Aur bhi sabhi Ashaar bahut khoob lage mujhe....dil se daad hazir hai...
very nice creation....
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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7th August 2010, 10:34 AM
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Originally Posted by KunaaL
आदाब...
एक नयी ग़ज़ल बज़्म के नज़र कर रहा हूँ , बहर-ए-हजाज मुसम्मन अखरब मे उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से ज़रूर नवाजेंगे... इसी बहर मैं एक मशहूर गीत है,.. साथ गुनगुना के देखिएगा शायद अच्छा लगे...
टूटे हुए ख्वाबों ने, हमको ये सिखाया है...
दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
बहर गिनती मे :- 221 1222 221 1222
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क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
अब टूट चुके मेरे, अरमां वो मोहब्बत के,..
उम्मीद न महफ़िल से, तन्हाई भी डसती है ,...
टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
हासिल थे 'सिफ़र' हमको, अपनों से मिले रिश्ते,...
साहिल पे जो अब डूबी, वो प्यार की कश्ती है ...
वादे तो किये थे हम, अब साथ सदा होंगे..
किस्मत भी कहानी है, हर मोड़ पे फंसती है...
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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- 07-08-2010
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In Roman:-
Aadaab….
Ek nayi ghazal bazm ke nazar kar raha huN, behar-e-hajaz musamman akhrab mai.. umeed hai aap apni aara se zaroor nawazeNge… isi behr mai ek mashoor geet hai .. sath gunguna ke dekhiyega shayad aaccha lage...
Toote hue khwaboN ne, humko ye sikhaya hai..
dil ne jise paaya tha, aaNkhoN ne gaNwaaya hai...
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Kya ishq ki hasti hai, kyuN aaNkheN barasti hai…
Ye shaam bhi tumse hi, milne ko tarasti hai…
Ab toot chuke mere, armaaN wo mohabbat ke..
Ummeed na mehfil se, tanhaai bhi dasti hai..
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Haasil the ‘sifar’ humko, apno se mile rishte..
Saahil pe jo ab doobi, wo pyaar ki kashti hai..
Waade to kiye the, hum saath sada hoNge..
Kismet bhi kahaani hai, har maud pe faNsti hai…
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Kunaal (Sifar):- 07-08-2010
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Lvly creation.....Kunaal Ji
Dil se daad haazir hai...........
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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7th August 2010, 10:52 AM
kunaal bhai
radhe radhe
bahut khub sabhi ashar ek badhkar ek hai dil se daad yun hi likhte rahen aur is ashar ke liye alag se spl daad
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
email: rkm179@gmail.com
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7th August 2010, 11:31 AM
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Aadaab Kunaal Ji
Janaab kya sacchi baat keh di aapne is kalaam men bahut khoob, ishq mei.n milne wale dard ki kya khoob bayani ki hai dil ke paar utar gaya aapka likha labhi kabhi kisi cheez ki tareef ko alfaz nahi milte yeh kalaam bhi esa hi hai....bahut bahut mubarakbaad....keep writing
Quote:
Originally Posted by KunaaL
आदाब...
एक नयी ग़ज़ल बज़्म के नज़र कर रहा हूँ , बहर-ए-हजाज मुसम्मन अखरब मे उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से ज़रूर नवाजेंगे... इसी बहर मैं एक मशहूर गीत है,.. साथ गुनगुना के देखिएगा शायद अच्छा लगे...
टूटे हुए ख्वाबों ने, हमको ये सिखाया है...
दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
बहर गिनती मे :- 221 1222 221 1222
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क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
अब टूट चुके मेरे, अरमां वो मोहब्बत के,..
उम्मीद न महफ़िल से, तन्हाई भी डसती है ,...
टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
हासिल थे 'सिफ़र' हमको, अपनों से मिले रिश्ते,...
साहिल पे जो अब डूबी, वो प्यार की कश्ती है ...
वादे तो किये थे हम, अब साथ सदा होंगे..
किस्मत भी कहानी है, हर मोड़ पे फंसती है...
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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- 07-08-2010
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In Roman:-
Aadaab….
Ek nayi ghazal bazm ke nazar kar raha huN, behar-e-hajaz musamman akhrab mai.. umeed hai aap apni aara se zaroor nawazeNge… isi behr mai ek mashoor geet hai .. sath gunguna ke dekhiyega shayad aaccha lage...
Toote hue khwaboN ne, humko ye sikhaya hai..
dil ne jise paaya tha, aaNkhoN ne gaNwaaya hai...
Behr in Digit:- 221 1222 221 1222
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Kya ishq ki hasti hai, kyuN aaNkheN barasti hai…
Ye shaam bhi tumse hi, milne ko tarasti hai…
Ab toot chuke mere, armaaN wo mohabbat ke..
Ummeed na mehfil se, tanhaai bhi dasti hai..
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Haasil the ‘sifar’ humko, apno se mile rishte..
Saahil pe jo ab doobi, wo pyaar ki kashti hai..
Waade to kiye the, hum saath sada hoNge..
Kismet bhi kahaani hai, har maud pe faNsti hai…
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Kunaal (Sifar):- 07-08-2010
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"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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7th August 2010, 02:28 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by KunaaL
आदाब...
एक नयी ग़ज़ल बज़्म के नज़र कर रहा हूँ , बहर-ए-हजाज मुसम्मन अखरब मे उम्मीद है आप अपनी आरा से ज़रूर नवाजेंगे... इसी बहर मैं एक मशहूर गीत है,.. साथ गुनगुना के देखिएगा शायद अच्छा लगे...
टूटे हुए ख्वाबों ने, हमको ये सिखाया है...
दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
बहर गिनती मे :- 221 1222 221 1222
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क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
अब टूट चुके मेरे, अरमां वो मोहब्बत के,..
उम्मीद न महफ़िल से, तन्हाई भी डसती है ,...
टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
हासिल थे 'सिफ़र' हमको, अपनों से मिले रिश्ते,...
साहिल पे जो अब डूबी, वो प्यार की कश्ती है ...
वादे तो किये थे हम, अब साथ सदा होंगे..
किस्मत भी कहानी है, हर मोड़ पे फंसती है...
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कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- 07-08-2010
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In Roman:-
Aadaab….
Ek nayi ghazal bazm ke nazar kar raha huN, behar-e-hajaz musamman akhrab mai.. umeed hai aap apni aara se zaroor nawazeNge… isi behr mai ek mashoor geet hai .. sath gunguna ke dekhiyega shayad aaccha lage...
Toote hue khwaboN ne, humko ye sikhaya hai..
dil ne jise paaya tha, aaNkhoN ne gaNwaaya hai...
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Kya ishq ki hasti hai, kyuN aaNkheN barasti hai…
Ye shaam bhi tumse hi, milne ko tarasti hai…
Ab toot chuke mere, armaaN wo mohabbat ke..
Ummeed na mehfil se, tanhaai bhi dasti hai..
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Haasil the ‘sifar’ humko, apno se mile rishte..
Saahil pe jo ab doobi, wo pyaar ki kashti hai..
Waade to kiye the, hum saath sada hoNge..
Kismet bhi kahaani hai, har maud pe faNsti hai…
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Kunaal (Sifar):- 07-08-2010
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7th August 2010, 03:07 PM
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Originally Posted by KunaaL
Aadaab….
Ek nayi ghazal bazm ke nazar kar raha huN, behar-e-hajaz musamman akhrab mai.. umeed hai aap apni aara se zaroor nawazeNge… isi behr mai ek mashoor geet hai .. sath gunguna ke dekhiyega shayad aaccha lage...
Toote hue khwaboN ne, humko ye sikhaya hai..
dil ne jise paaya tha, aaNkhoN ne gaNwaaya hai...
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Kya ishq ki hasti hai, kyuN aaNkheN barasti hai…
Ye shaam bhi tumse hi, milne ko tarasti hai…
Ab toot chuke mere, armaaN wo mohabbat ke..
Ummeed na mehfil se, tanhaai bhi dasti hai..
Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Haasil the ‘sifar’ humko, apno se mile rishte..
Saahil pe jo ab doobi, wo pyaar ki kashti hai..
Waade to kiye the, hum saath sada hoNge..
Kismet bhi kahaani hai, har maud pe faNsti hai…
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Kunaal (Sifar):- 07-08-2010
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Master piece!!..something beyond words can describe.........
Kunaal sahab, bas qayamat hai aapki ghazal, her sher dil ki gehraayiyoN ko chuu raha hai,
badii dil fareb ghazal likhi hai !
chand alfaaz dil meiN ghar kar gaye !
kuch ashaar to jaise nashtar ki maanind siine meiN utar gaye !
dil se daad hazir hai janaab,
itna hi kahungi,is dard ki duniya se baahar nikal aayiye
Khush raha kijiye............
DuaoN ke saath
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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8th August 2010, 12:27 PM
टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
kya baat h kunaal ji..
this one is outstanding...
keep writin..
take care..
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8th August 2010, 04:59 PM
Ab itni saari baatoN ke jawaab mujhse to diye nahi jaate .. aur ye waqt hi batayega ki maiN kya kar paunga aur kya nahi .. phir bhi apne dil main jazbe ko jawaaN rakhuNga ye waada hai ... ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye aur apni haaziri yahan lagaane ke ka behad shukriya .. aap aayi mausam khushnuma ho gaya...
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8th August 2010, 05:00 PM
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kunaal jee,
ab toh main thak gayi hu tareef kar kar ke ..lol... ab toh reps hi dugiiii .wohi sehi rahega hai naa!!!.... ab itna aacha likhogey ... mujhe aana toh padhega hi naa ..lol...
likhtey rahe aur hamesha khush rahe ....
duaaon ke saath ijjaazaat !!!
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Tum aao na aao .. mujhe tumhare sath ka ehsaas humesha rehta hai .. aur tumhe pasand aa gaya hai to samajh hi lo ki mujhe kitni khushi hai .. tum bas padh lo meri kavish mere liye kaafi hai ...shukriya saath dene ke liye ...
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8th August 2010, 05:51 PM
janab e mann kunal saheb aadab ,,
wah kahen ya aah kahen kya kahen .. bhai kya kahene hain apki ghazal ke .. ajib kaifiyath taari hai isko padke subhan allah kya hi rawan dawan ghazal kahi hai apne .. eak nahi hazarah dad apki is murassa ghazal pe qubool karen .. allah apko hamesha khush rakhe ..
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8th August 2010, 06:07 PM
Kunaal bhaa'ii:
namaste!
har aik Sher laa-jawaab lage.n ! ehsaaso.n ki bayaanii bhee umdaa'h rahii.n.. mujhe Khaas kar ke yeh Sher bahot hi pasand aayaa.. ees par alag se daad..!
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उम्मीद न महफ़िल से, तन्हाई भी डसती है
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yuuNhi liKhate rahe.n aage bhee.. dil se daad !
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
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दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
ke saath gungunake deklha bahut maza aya. age se mai bhi ye farmula istemaal kar ke dekhunga. bahut achhi koshish hai, you'n hi likhte rahie , khush rahie. Dil se Silver daad kabool kare'n huzoor.
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10th August 2010, 10:40 AM
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Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
Awesome..........Kunal Ji !
Aur bhi sabhi Ashaar bahut khoob lage mujhe....dil se daad hazir hai...
very nice creation....
duaaon ke saath....
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aapki daad teh dil se kabool hai humeN ...
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10th August 2010, 10:42 AM
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Lvly creation.....Kunaal Ji
Dil se daad haazir hai...........
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tumhare liye ek gaana hai mere paas .. kisi bohat ajeez ko sunaata tha maiN .. kyuNki situation yahi hoti thi ..
Ye dhuaaN dhuaan sa rehne do ..
mujhe dil ki baat kehne do ...
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11th August 2010, 12:22 PM
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kunaal bhai
radhe radhe
bahut khub sabhi ashar ek badhkar ek hai dil se daad yun hi likhte rahen aur is ashar ke liye alag se spl daad
वो बात ही करते है, बस चाँद सितारों की..
इस इश्क के सौदे मे, ये जान भी सस्ती है,..
duaon ke saath
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RaadheY...
aapke aapne aur aapki prashansha ka main apne dil ki gehraiyoN se swagat karta huN ...
aap aaye uska dhanyawad
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11th August 2010, 12:25 PM
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Wo baat hi karte hai, bas chaand sitraaroN ki…
Is ishq ke saude mai, ye jaan bhi sasti hai..
Aadaab Kunaal Ji
Janaab kya sacchi baat keh di aapne is kalaam men bahut khoob, ishq mei.n milne wale dard ki kya khoob bayani ki hai dil ke paar utar gaya aapka likha labhi kabhi kisi cheez ki tareef ko alfaz nahi milte yeh kalaam bhi esa hi hai....bahut bahut mubarakbaad....keep writing
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Kaasif Bhai ...
aap aaye itni tareef ki ... ab main sirf nazreN bhar ke aapka isteqbal hi kar sakta huN .. aapke aane ka behad shukrya .. aap aage bhi sath hi chalte nazar aayeNge .. yahi umeed hai mujhe.. khuda aapko khushiyaN ata farmaaye..
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11th August 2010, 12:26 PM
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aapkiye gazal bahut hi achchi lagi
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apna khyaal rakhiye bohat acche se ...
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11th August 2010, 12:36 PM
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Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
ji its too real.......................nice.
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12th August 2010, 05:16 AM
Kunal sahab ek achi dilkash ghazal ke liyN aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai qubool keejiye, bhut acha likhte haiN aap, khuda kare zor e qalam aur ziyada
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12th August 2010, 10:02 AM
Namaste Kunaal SaHeb,
aapkee ghazal nazar_nawaaz huee. abhee zaraa jaldi meN huN so tafsili tabsara udhaar rahaa. beh'r_haal sar_saree nigah meN qafiye meN kuchh uljhan mehsoos huee hai. aap nazr e saanee kar leejiyegaa,
क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
matle kee pabandi ne aagey aane wale qafiyo ko tang kar diyaa hai.
'tarastee', aur 'barastee' ke istemaal se haqafiya alfaaz meN '--rastee' ke istemaal zarooree ho gayaa hai, magar ise aagey ke sheroN meN qaayam rakhna jaan paDtaa hai.
kyoN na aap matle meN hee kuchh rad'do-badal kar de taake agle sheroN ko badalne kee zarurat nah paDe.
khayaal karne waalee baat yeh hai keh usoolan ghalat hone ke baaw_jud aajkal yeh aam ho gayaa hai. so yeh raddo-badal pooree tarah aapkee zaatee raai (marzee) se juDaa hai.
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8th October 2010, 09:18 PM
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Master piece!!..something beyond words can describe.........
Kunaal sahab, bas qayamat hai aapki ghazal, her sher dil ki gehraayiyoN ko chuu raha hai,
badii dil fareb ghazal likhi hai !
chand alfaaz dil meiN ghar kar gaye !
kuch ashaar to jaise nashtar ki maanind siine meiN utar gaye !
dil se daad hazir hai janaab,
itna hi kahungi,is dard ki duniya se baahar nikal aayiye
Khush raha kijiye............
DuaoN ke saath
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Shukriya mohatarma...
humaare khaak alfaaz aapke dil tak jaa sake.. isse jyada aur kya chaiye ... aapki taareef ne dil ko manmoon kar diya .. mujhe bhead khushi hai aapko yahan dekh ke ...
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
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8th October 2010, 09:19 PM
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टकरा के निकल जाते, हम दर्द की राहों से ...
पर बीच मे आती क्यूँ, यादों की वो बस्ती है ...
kya baat h kunaal ji..
this one is outstanding...
keep writin..
take care..
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Shipra jee ..
Bohat bohat shukriya .. aapki tareef ka behad shukraguzaar huN .. umeed hai aage bhi yun hi sath milta rahega ...
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9th October 2010, 10:31 AM
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janab e mann kunal saheb aadab ,,
wah kahen ya aah kahen kya kahen .. bhai kya kahene hain apki ghazal ke .. ajib kaifiyath taari hai isko padke subhan allah kya hi rawan dawan ghazal kahi hai apne .. eak nahi hazarah dad apki is murassa ghazal pe qubool karen .. allah apko hamesha khush rakhe ..
dua go
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Qadeer saahab ..
aapka aana hi humari ghazal ke liye ek inaam jaisa hai .. aapki tareef ka main teh dil se shukra guzaarhuN .. aapka sath aage bhi rahega aise hi umeed hai ...
Kunaal
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9th October 2010, 10:33 AM
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Kunaal bhaa'ii:
namaste!
har aik Sher laa-jawaab lage.n ! ehsaaso.n ki bayaanii bhee umdaa'h rahii.n.. mujhe Khaas kar ke yeh Sher bahot hi pasand aayaa.. ees par alag se daad..!
yuuNhi liKhate rahe.n aage bhee.. dil se daad !
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
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Dhaval bhai ..
Ye aapka badakpan hai ki hum khaak bando k koshish pe nazar-e-inaayat karte ho ... baaki sab aapki nazar ki khoobsoorati hai jo khaak mai bhi khaas dhundh lete haiN ..
Shukriya aane ke liye
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9th October 2010, 10:36 AM
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Aapki is azeem peshkaari ko , maine,
टूटे हुए ख्वाबों ने, हमको ये सिखाया है...
दिल ने जिसे पाया था, आँखों ने गंवाया है ...
ke saath gungunake deklha bahut maza aya. age se mai bhi ye farmula istemaal kar ke dekhunga. bahut achhi koshish hai, you'n hi likhte rahie , khush rahie. Dil se Silver daad kabool kare'n huzoor.
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Aapko accha laga .. aur kya chaiye .. aur aazmaaiye aazmaaiye.. aur seekhiye .. yahi waqt hai .. shayri har taraf shabaab pe hai .. mujhe khushi hogi aapko padhne mai...
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
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9th October 2010, 12:01 PM
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Namaste Kunaal SaHeb,
aapkee ghazal nazar_nawaaz huee. abhee zaraa jaldi meN huN so tafsili tabsara udhaar rahaa. beh'r_haal sar_saree nigah meN qafiye meN kuchh uljhan mehsoos huee hai. aap nazr e saanee kar leejiyegaa,
क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
matle kee pabandi ne aagey aane wale qafiyo ko tang kar diyaa hai.
'tarastee', aur 'barastee' ke istemaal se haqafiya alfaaz meN '--rastee' ke istemaal zarooree ho gayaa hai, magar ise aagey ke sheroN meN qaayam rakhna jaan paDtaa hai.
kyoN na aap matle meN hee kuchh rad'do-badal kar de taake agle sheroN ko badalne kee zarurat nah paDe.
khayaal karne waalee baat yeh hai keh usoolan ghalat hone ke baaw_jud aajkal yeh aam ho gayaa hai. so yeh raddo-badal pooree tarah aapkee zaatee raai (marzee) se juDaa hai.
khairandesh
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dheer sahab aadab ,,
Kaise hai.N app ?
apke tabsire ne thuda sa uljhan me daal diya hai .........kya kafiya ko is tarhan girana jayez nahi ... ye faqat meri kam ilmi hai gustaqi kattai nahi ap khayal na karen ... chacha ghalib ki kai aisi ghazle.N nazar se guzri jinme ap aisi surat dekh sakte hain ...
Ah ko chahiye ik Umr asar hone tak
Kaun jeeta hai tere zulf ke sar hone tak
Kafiye ki bandish "SAR" hai shayad
Humne maana ke tagaful na karoge lekin
Khaak ho jayenge hum tumko Khabar hone tak
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chacha ghalib ki aur bhi kaai ghazlen hain jinme aisi suraten dekhne ko milti hain .. ...
bus ki dushwaar hai har kaam Asaa.N hona
Aadmi ko bhi muyassar nahi Insaa.N hona
Girya chahe hai Kharabi Mere Kaashane ki
Dar-o-deewar se tapke hai Baybaa.N hona
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umid hai ap meri is uljhan ko door kar denge ... Waise aaj kal kahan hai.N app apni maujodgi ka ahesas dilate rahen bazm ko ... Mai bhi filhal india aya howa hon to masrofiyat bar gaai hai.N ....Aj ye ghazal nazar se guzri to apka tabsira parh na naseeb howa ...zahen ke goshe me khuch sawal ubhre to puch lena hi munaseeb samjha gareeb ne ...umid hai app rahenumai farham kar sikhne ka mauqa denge ...allah apko khush rakhe ..
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Takra ke nikal jaate, hum dard ki raahoN se..
Par beech mai aati kyuN, yaadoN ki wo basti hai…
ji its too real.......................nice.[/QUOTE]
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aapko accha laga .. aapke sath ki umeed rahegi ...
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Kunal sahab ek achi dilkash ghazal ke liyN aapki khidmat mai daad hazir hai qubool keejiye, bhut acha likhte haiN aap, khuda kare zor e qalam aur ziyada
aslam
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Noor saahab aapne is aashiyaane main aake yahan bhi boor bhar diya hai ... aapki tareef ka shukriya ... aur ye jaan ke khushi hui .. ki apko humara likhja pasand aata hai...
Kunaal
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9th October 2010, 01:15 PM
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Namaste Kunaal SaHeb,
aapkee ghazal nazar_nawaaz huee. abhee zaraa jaldi meN huN so tafsili tabsara udhaar rahaa. beh'r_haal sar_saree nigah meN qafiye meN kuchh uljhan mehsoos huee hai. aap nazr e saanee kar leejiyegaa,
क्या इश्क की हस्ती है, क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है ...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
matle kee pabandi ne aagey aane wale qafiyo ko tang kar diyaa hai.
'tarastee', aur 'barastee' ke istemaal se haqafiya alfaaz meN '--rastee' ke istemaal zarooree ho gayaa hai, magar ise aagey ke sheroN meN qaayam rakhna jaan paDtaa hai.
kyoN na aap matle meN hee kuchh rad'do-badal kar de taake agle sheroN ko badalne kee zarurat nah paDe.
khayaal karne waalee baat yeh hai keh usoolan ghalat hone ke baaw_jud aajkal yeh aam ho gayaa hai. so yeh raddo-badal pooree tarah aapkee zaatee raai (marzee) se juDaa hai.
khairandesh
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Namaste dheer bhai...
Aapka khat dekh ke mujhe bhi beinteha khushi hui hai ... khair aapke aane ka intzaar tha aur hum aage bhi karenge ...
aapne kaafiye ki taraf nishaan dehi kee hai .. jisse main poori tarah se ittefaaq rakta huN .. yaqeen jaaniye kahin dil main khyaal to tha .. par phir bhi mujhe laga ki shayad koi ghalti nahi hai ... par aapka kehna Shaayadsahi hai ... matle main istemaal kiye gaye kaafiye hi aage badhaaye jane chaiye ...
kyunki behr repeated hai .. is liye aap matle ko kuch yun le lijiye ..
क्यूँ आँखें बरसती है, क्या इश्क की हस्ती है,...
ये शाम भी तुमसे ही, मिलने को तरसती है...
waise mujhe bhi zaati taur pe lagta hai .. ki is khaami ko chalaaya jaa sakta hai .. kyuNki maine bhi kayi jagahoN pe iska istemaal hote hue dekha hai .. kyuNki mere ilm ke hisaab se .. kafiya commen sounding words pe based hota hai .. warna radeef aur kaafiye main koi antar nahi bachega ... phir bhi mera ilm ho sakta hai kam reh jaaye .. isi liye jyada kehna theek nahi samajhta mai ... jaisa aapne izhaar bhi kiya hai ... ki aapne bhi ye chalan dekha hai .. to isko nakaara bhi nahi jaa sakta .. isi liye .. aapko jaise theek lage rakh liijiye .. ghaltiyoN ke liye mazrat khwah huN .. jinka aage maiN khyaal rakhuNga ...
aapka intzaar rahega
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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9th October 2010, 01:56 PM
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Originally Posted by abdulqadeert
dheer sahab aadab ,,
Kaise hai.N app ?
apke tabsire ne thuda sa uljhan me daal diya hai .........kya kafiya ko is tarhan girana jayez nahi ... ye faqat meri kam ilmi hai gustaqi kattai nahi ap khayal na karen ... chacha ghalib ki kai aisi ghazle.N nazar se guzri jinme ap aisi surat dekh sakte hain ...
Ah ko chahiye ik Umr asar hone tak
Kaun jeeta hai tere zulf ke sar hone tak
Kafiye ki bandish "SAR" hai shayad
Humne maana ke tagaful na karoge lekin
Khaak ho jayenge hum tumko Khabar hone tak
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chacha ghalib ki aur bhi kaai ghazlen hain jinme aisi suraten dekhne ko milti hain .. ...
bus ki dushwaar hai har kaam Asaa.N hona
Aadmi ko bhi muyassar nahi Insaa.N hona
Girya chahe hai Kharabi Mere Kaashane ki
Dar-o-deewar se tapke hai Baybaa.N hona
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umid hai ap meri is uljhan ko door kar denge ... Waise aaj kal kahan hai.N app apni maujodgi ka ahesas dilate rahen bazm ko ... Mai bhi filhal india aya howa hon to masrofiyat bar gaai hai.N ....Aj ye ghazal nazar se guzri to apka tabsira parh na naseeb howa ...zahen ke goshe me khuch sawal ubhre to puch lena hi munaseeb samjha gareeb ne ...umid hai app rahenumai farham kar sikhne ka mauqa denge ...allah apko khush rakhe ..
khadim o Khairandesh
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Qadeer SAheb!
taslimaat!
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khairandesh
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9th October 2010, 03:32 PM
Wah mere bhai wah kya khoob rahi yeh peshkash.......is kalam me yeh tay kar paana mushkil hai ke kaunsa sher sabse zyda pasandeeda raha..........isiliye nahi ke har sher zabardast hai....balki isiliye ke is kalam ki rawangi itni khoobsurat hai ke dil hi nahi hua ke kisi sher ko is kalam se juda karke yeh kaha jaye ke yeh bada khoob raha.
Yeh meri apni atpati si soch hai.........agar meri batein aapki naraazgi ka sabab bani ho to dekh lege darte hai kya hahahahahahaha.
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11th October 2010, 04:23 PM
kuch mere dosto ne kaha mujhe ki dheer sahab ne jo chipkaya hai vo applicable nahi nazar aata...aur mujhse kaha ki mai mere khayaalaat saamne rakhu...ab sabko alag alag jawaab dunga to type karte karte meri ungli fracture ho jayegi...isliye yahi par mere nazaryaat pesh karta hu unke liye jinhone guzaarish ki hai.....
dheer sahab ne jo link chaspaa kiya hai...mere hisaab se vo linked to hai hi...
kyuki is mudde ka jawaab sirf ek hi baat se nikal sakta hai aur vo hai 'harf e rawi'* ki pahchaan........
is ghazal ke hisaab se hi baat karta hu....
dheer sahab ke link ne is baat ka jawaab dene se inkaar kar diya hai kahte huye ke jab pata chalega bata denge...so jo mai kah raha hu mera interpretation hai..
qafiya hai saamne...
barasti
tarasti ........matla
dasti.. basti.. sasti ..kashti..faNsti
ab masla ye ki harf e rawi kaunsa?
last takhtaa liye harf 'ta'+harkat*
ab saari ghazal me ye unchanged hai........jab takthe (syllable) ka koi hissa badla nahi to ise qafiya kaise mana jaye?....aisa lagta hai, bina independent meaning wala , radeef ka extension hai.....
ab isi logic ko extend karen to 'ti' ka preeeding takhtaa, (qafiya ke operative takhte) ka candidate ban jata hai...
so vo hai...
ras...ras..das..bas..kash..fa(N)s......
ab agar dheer sahab ki baat maani jaaye aur ..... matle me qayam...'ras ras' ko repeat kare to vo bhi radeef jaisa ho jayega !!! aur qafiye ki talaash ek takhta preceed kar jayegi !!!
so ab agar kasti waka sher ko khariz kar diya jaaye to harf e rawi ban jayega ='sa'
ab is takhte me 2 harf hai(consonants)
ek harfe e rawi ='sa' aur dusra harf badalta hua jisse qaafiya qayam huaa...
isliye mera khayaal hai ki dheer sahab ki daleel bilkul aaraam se kabuul nahi hogi......aur qadeer sahab ne jo ghalib sahab ki gazlo ki misaal di hai ...shayad isi logic ko prove karti hain....aur ye logic maine apply kiya hai yehi maan kar ki ghalib sahab galat nahi ho sakte...
agar mai galat hu to mujhe zarur bataya jaaye.......
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harf e rawi = qafiya ek hi syllable se qayam hota hai....us syllable ka last letter ek sa hona chaiye jisse harf e rawi kahte hai ( generalised...exceptions scope me nahi)
harkat = vo matraayen jo consonant ko vovel ki sound deti hai....
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12th October 2010, 03:54 PM
last takhtaa liye harf
ek baat mai bhi add karna chahta huN ....
jaise zid bhayee ne last takhe ('ta'+harkat* with harkat ) ko kafiye ke liye sahi mana hai
par maine bahut jagah kafiye ko sirf harkat pe hi based dekha hai likee
khudaa
udaa
kyaa
isme
... aur ye bhi suna hai ki , agar matle mai kafiyaa
lafz+harkat ke saath ho to .. sare sher mai aise hi follow karna padta hai ..
aap bhi batayeN , isme kuch aur dhyaan dene wali baat hai.....
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